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48794 No. 48794
Figured I'd move this over here.

So the idea is a team of superheroines who used to be active, but then got married and had kids, but are now getting back into the game as a team. Will most likely end up being lewd.

>Star-Striker (Beverly "Bev" Banks)
>Diva (Candy LaBelle)
>Mend (Anne-Marie Stephens)
>Sigrun (Sirgun Odinsdotter)
>Kaiju (Kim Ujifusa)
>Tropica (Carmen Diego Delacruz)
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>> No. 48795
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The story

~15 years ago, there was an all-girl superhero team called Superteens. However, the girls grew up, got married and retired from superheroing. Now all the former Superteens are 30+, most are married and have kids. The recent resurgence of supercrime (and some old supervillains, too) has led the women to the idea of getting back together in a new iteration of Superteens.

By day, they're normal loving wives and mothers, with normal families and jobs. By night, they don their old Superteen costumes, and become... Supermoms!
>> No. 48796
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The team

Star-Striker (Beverly "Bev" Banks)
short brown hair, average height, average breasts & hips

The level-headed leader of the team. No powers, but superior hand-to-hand combatant and acrobat, and master tactician.
Has a working-at-home husband and two kids. Neither know about her secret life, though the husband has his doubts.
Her civilian job is a high-ranking manager at the Multi International Licensing Finances company, the CEO of which is their old archnemesis (neither know about each other's identities, though).
>> No. 48797
Mend (Anne-Marie Stephens)
red hair, ponytail, short height, big breasts, freckles

Initially, the latest addition to the Superteens team, and the youngest one of the bunch. Her power is powerful healing kisses.
Has a husband (bike repair shop manager) and twin kids. Her husband is secretly their former teenage nemesis Shadow Boy. After his defeat by the hands of Superteens (soon after his 18th birthday), SB seemingly disappeared from the face of Earth. What happened is, he and Mend (who was 2-3 years older than him) started dating and soon married. Nobody knows Donald Berstein's secret identity except his wife and other Supermoms.
She has no civilian job – she's a stay-at-home housewife. She likes it, though; especially baking cookies.
>> No. 48798
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Damn, forgot pic

Sigrun Odinsdotter ("-")
long blond hair (or braid), tall height, thin, somewhat muscled

She's a valkyrie.
She's single, lives in a mansion (paid by the infinite Treasury of Asgard) with her adopted (and endlessly pampered) teenage son, and his young French nanny, Olivia Les Bien. The poor girl is so overworked by Sigrun, she has no time for boyfriends!
Sigrun's daily job is teaching. She sometimes gets into funny situations due to misunderstanding of mortals' customs.
>> No. 48799
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Diva (Candy LaBelle)
black skin, dark curly hair, huge ass

Jive-talkin' mama with a voice that can be used to form solid constructs.
Divorced, raising a rebellious teenage daughter. The daughter found out her identity, but Candy doesn't know about that.
Candy doesn't work, she is living very well off of the royalties from her numerous smash hits back in the day.
>> No. 48800
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Kaiju (Kim Ujifusa)
Asian, black hair in a bun, short height, petite build

She has size-changing powers.
Lives with her conservative husband and husband's parents, and two kids: a little daughter and a nerdy teenage son, who is dating Diva's daughter. The son has some suspicions about her double life, due to Diva's daughter's intel
Her job is lead scientist in one of the laboratories at the MILF company.
>> No. 48801
>>48798
>>48799
It should be noted that the pics here do not correspond with the characters described. Both of those pics are for >>48797
>> No. 48802
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Tropica (Carmen Diego Tropicana Delacruz)
tan skin, long wavy auburn hair, hourglass figure

She has plant growth abilities.
Has a stay-at-home unemployed husband, and a lot (5?) kids of various ages and genders.
Works as a florist and aromatherapist.
>> No. 48803
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Ah yes, the pics already posted are:
>Kaiju, Mend, Star-Striker
>Star-Striker
>Star-Striker
>Mend
>Mend
>Kaiju
>Kaiju

This post's pic is Mend.

Personalities (alpha version):
>Star-Striker
level-headed, energetic, leadership abilities, idea generator
>Mend
cheerful, nurturing, somewhat innocent
>Sigrun
haughty, self-centered, likes to look perfect and acts like it
>Diva
sassy ghetto black woman who need no man
>Kaiju
shy, reserved conservative Asian woman, very intelligent
>Tropica
cougar'ish, always flirting and seductive (don't put much weight into it, though)
>> No. 48804
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Pic is also Mend

Villains (alpha version):

>Sinister Sorceress Seductra
A sultry MILF witch then, she appears to have reformed after her final defeat. Now an elderly lady, she's a conservative politician (maybe the town's mayor?). But did she actually reform, or was it all another clever ruse?..

>Leonard Drakethorpe (aka Lord Darkthorne)
CEO of the Multi International License Financing company where Star-Striker works as a manager. Neither knows the other's identity.

>Donald Berstein (Shadow Boy)
Their former mysterious and brooding teenage nemesis, he seemed to have completely disappeared off the face of Earth.

>Victoria Timberlake
Star-Striker's husband's ex-wife. She was a bitchy preppy girl and Beverly's main rival at school. After Beverly married her husband, the two women finally met after long years of having no contact, and became best friends, to Beverly's husband's horror.
>> No. 48805
Let's get this debate out of the way now.

This is going to contain hella incest, right?
>> No. 48806
Can we rename sigrgidg or whatever the fuck? We don't have to use ALL the ideas presented in the first post. What about Alice?
>> No. 48807
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Pic is I dunno who.

Unfinished ideas:
- Maybe Tropica (or another Supermom) is secretly an alien
- Maybe one Supermom's husband's dad/mom is one of their old supervillains, and she only learns about it now
- Maybe there's also a former male partner of Superteens, who was a handsome guy / James Bond type back at the day, and all girls were in love with him. Now they've moved on, but he didn't. He resembles Larry Laffer a bit.
>> No. 48808
>>48805
Actually, no incest was proposed for >300 replies in the original thread. A lot of other lewdness, though...
>>48806
C'mon, she's a Nordic valkyrie

And btw, no one in their families knows about their secret lives. The exceptions: Diva's daughter (without Diva knowing), Mend's husband (ex-SB), and Star-Striker's husband and Kaiju's son have their suspicions.
>> No. 48809
SFW adventure ideas:

>Toymaster
Their kids' toys have started acting strange. Turns out it's one of their old villains, the Toymaster, is back in business. He has built an army of robots, so it's no easy task for the Supermoms!

>In-laws from Hell
One of the Supermoms' husband (dunno whose) is revealed to be a retired minor demon. His inlaws come to visit.

>Potluck Dinner of Champions
The Supermoms team up to take on their most challenging adventure yet! Making dishes for a potluck dinner for all the superheroes in the world

>Beach Episode
Obligatory. No plot yet, but:
>Star-Striker
average bikini with an American flag pattern
>Sigrun
white bandeau bikini
>Diva
yellow bikini with boyshorts bottom
>Mend
flower-patterned side-tie bikini
>Kaiju
conservative one-piece
>Tropica
micro-bikini
>Olivia Les Bien
topless
>> No. 48812
>>48808
Oh damn. I was considering doing concept art of the ladies, but I'm only here for the incest.
>> No. 48814
>>48805
I'd back this 110% if there is.
>> No. 48815
alright, i'm doing a comic script for this. it'll be sixteen pages (probably). no sex or outright lewdness. and no damn incest. you want your fanservice, you have to be subtle about it.
>> No. 48816
>>48815
Oh, well... fuck it then. I hope you have fun with it, but I'm probably not going to participate in this thing's development now.
>> No. 48817
The universes

In the original thread, there was a sort of agreement that the main ("canon") universe for Supermoms would be SFW, where they're prim and proper mothers and wives, and all their adventures are, while ecchi, innocent and light-hearted.

And then there'd be NSFW doujins, taking place in a sort of parallel universe, where Supermoms somewhat frequently engage in lewd acts (e.g., >>48810 >>48811 >>48813).

That way, it's equally fun to write stories about uncorrupted heroines, and to corrupt them!

>>48816
You misunderstood. Garuda's writing a script for the main (SFW) universe. If you're not interested in that, feel free to contribute to the NSFW doujins!
>> No. 48818
>>48809
NSFW Toymaster affects the Supermoms' "toys" instead.
>> No. 48819
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Made a new /pco/ thread for lewd ideas/art: https://plus4chan.org/b/pco/res/151110.html
>> No. 48820
Deleted the NSFW adventure ideas from this thread. They have their own thread now in /pco/. This thread from now on is entirely for the main (SFW) part of the project.

I personally will try to contribute to both
>> No. 48822
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Ideas for SFW adventures, based on real life mom problems and common situations

>in-laws
There are already 2 ideas based on this: In-Laws From Hell and Supervillain-In-Law. There's definitely a common ground to work with. However, who would be the mom with the demon/supervillain in-law(s)?
Maybe it'd be Mend, since her husband is a former teen supervillain, maybe his folks are supervillains, too. She has to be especially careful about her identity during their visit, and pretend to be a totally ordinary woman (or maybe even simulate some evil tendencies so that her in-laws are happy with their son's choice). Thankfully, her husband helps her get through this ordeal. Hijinks ensue

>body getting out of shape
A common problem, showcased in The Incredibles. However, I dunno how exactly it could fit our cast of hot-looking voluptuous MILFs? Then again, Elastigirl was already drawn hot, but nevertheless managed to get the point across.

>rebellious teen kids
A lot of opportunities for plots.Though how to make it superheroic? Maybe the mom has problems dealing with her, e.g., daughter, and it affects how effectively she fights villains (her thoughts are always elsewhere, she doubts herself as a mother, etc)? Or maybe a villain wants to enlist the son/daughter into his organization?

>bullies bully their kids at school
Maybe they're secretly members of an evil superbullying organization? And the moms are the ones to teach them a lesson
>> No. 48823
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>>48822
>husband has problems at work or a difficult project, and mom has to support him
Maybe a husband's work project secretly attracted the attention of villains, and the moms have to secretly protect it without letting the husband know

>high school reunion
Maybe, superhero organization reunion in their case. Not their specific Superteens team, but a major superhero organization which Superteens were part of. Maybe some kind of superhero academy? Of course, some of the former superhero teens became supervillains later and now desire revenge, fights ensue etc.

>an old flame is back in town
Here's maybe where not-Larry Laffer comes into play. He was the hot guy all of the Superteens dreamed about. He probably even date some (or all?) of them, and of course broke their hearts and left them after a few weeks like the playboy he was. Now the Supermoms get to see what a repulsive human being he is – and was. He's not a bad man, though, and he becomes their ally in this episode in a fight with some villain.

>it's Father's Day, and Star-Striker decides to take a day off work, cook a dinner for her househusband and do all other household chores for a change
As she can't actually cook, she enlists the help of all her friends (Supermoms + Vicky) who lend her a hand. However, the Supermoms need to be careful not to let Vicky (or the husband) learn their secret(s) as they use their powers to help Beverly with her chores. And what's more, an invasion of mutant sentient cooking ingredients happens just at that time, and the Supermoms have to stop it, too!
>> No. 48825
A couple of neighbor-related ideas:

What about some annoying neighbors? That could be fun. Especially if one S-mom's neighbor is a conspiracy nut whose main hobby is searching for superheroes in an attempt to reveal them (think, mutant-haters from X-Men using the reasoning behind the Superhuman Registration Act from Civil War)

Neighbors could be fun. E.g., Sigrun could have some annoying (not mean, but obliviously annoying) neighbors who are the only thing on Earth and beyond that she can't ever defeat – because of their unique mix of stupidity and naivete. And that makes her even angrier.
>> No. 48826
Another idea

Supervillain parents whose rebellious teenage son wants to be a civil worker or something. Doesn't have superpowers or anything really iconic but he just wants to do good rather than be inundated with the gadgets and 'potential supervillain backstories' his parents supply him with.

He may become friends with some of the Supermoms' kids who'll help him find his own way

It could be an issue about a special Secret PTA Conference, where all members are superheroes/supervillains/etc. They set aside their differences to discuss common parenting problems. E.g., a grim-and-gritty Punisher-esque single dad could ask for advice about dealing with his cheerful and friendly kid daughter who prefers princesses and ponies to brutal justice. Our Supermoms also visit this conference, with parenting problems of their own.
>> No. 48827
And another food for thought: What about the Supermoms' family members? Let's flesh out their husbands, kids and other relatives.

What we know so far:
>Star-Striker
Has a working-from-home husband, who's usually one who does most of the chores. I imagine him as a rather charismatic guy, fun and outgoing, though a little light-headed, and it's obvious that most major decisions fall on Beverly's shoulders (who is the more leader-like and level-headed of the two). They're both very supportive of each other.
They have two(?) kids, but I dunno anything about them. Garuda, iirc, mentioned a teenage daughter in one of his posts

>Diva
Has a rebellious teenage daughter who dates Kaiju's son. She secretly knows about Diva's double life.

>Mend
Her husband, Donald Berstein, is secretly the former Shadow Boy. A lot has already been said about him in this thread. Maybe his parents are also supervillains.
They have twin kids (little is known about them atm).

>Sigrun
Has an adopted teen son (little is known about him). She pampers him a lot, and probably wants to make a true warrior out of him (an unlikely task).
There's also her son's French nanny, Olivia, who seems to be best friends with her older boss, despite Sigrun's blatant exploitation of the poor girl.

>Kaiju
There's her husband, his conservative parents, and her nerdy teenage son (who dates Diva's daughter). All of them need more fleshing out.

>Tropica
She has an unemployed husband, and five kids. Though I dunno – maybe the husband isn't unemployed, and is instead employed at her florist shop? Or maybe they're co-owners? In any case, Tropica's family also needs a lot of fleshing out.

Also, some of the moms could have their own parents, brothers/sisters etc.
>> No. 48828
So how exactly do you plan on getting more drawfags interested in this idea of yours?
>> No. 48829
Some character ideas:

>Hot Flash: a villainess in her 50s, who got her powers as a result of untested, experimental menopause medication. Has control over heat and can turn herself into a living flame, as well as multiply in her flame form. She looks good for her age and is well aware of it, which makes her extremely cocky and arrogant.

>social worker who is on a mission to discover the secret identities of the Supermoms, as he/she believes that their heroics endanger their children. While he/she has good intentions, his/her bosses are secretly bad guys who want the identities of the Supermoms so they can kidnap their children for insidious reasons.

>>48826
>superhuman PTA
I like this idea, like there's one night a month they all get into costume and meet on neutral ground (the specific location of the neutral ground could be humorous in of itself) and swap horror stories/advice. And to make it more absurd, some of the heroes and villains actually carpool or something to get there together. Maybe there's some character who runs these functions, who is extremely over-powered, to ensure that no "shop talk" goes on and it's just parents talking about their family lives. Maybe an otherworldly alien with unimaginable powers who chooses not to get involved with Earth affairs, except to create support groups for superheroes and supervillains. I have no idea what an appropriate name would be, though. Maybe The Genesis Being, where it's implied they're responsible for all life on earth, and as the "parent" of everybody they want to bring the heroes and villains together to better all of them as parents?

Another story idea:
>A giant radioactive monster, very similar to Godzilla or similar monsters, attacks the city. The Supermoms are powerless to stop it, and it knocks them around with ease. All except Kaiju, who it totally ignores in a hilarious subversion of her Japanese heritage. This gives Kaiju time to figure out a plan to stop it.
Maybe the plan involves shrinking it so it's palm-sized, and one of the Supermoms takes it in as a pet?
>> No. 48830
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Someone's drawing of Sigurn in her civilian clothes. Would she have a separate civilian identity?

Maybe she could wear glasses while in her civilian clothes or something.

I also had an idea for Donald's (Shadow Boy's) parents. They could be retired supervillains, living off of investments made with their ill-gotten gains. They know that their daughter-in-law is a superhero and while they still make jabs and jokes about their son reforming and marrying a hero, they support them. They also like to rub it in Mend's face that they totally got away with all the crimes they did and nobody can do anything about it anymore. Maybe they're the "fun" kind of grandparents.
>> No. 48831
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>>48830
Colored with glasses.
>> No. 48832
>>48822
>body getting out of shape
Perhaps Mend has gotten a little chubby from all the delicious treats she cooks, and when she dons her old costume for the first time in years, it doesn't quite cover the same area it used to? It would explain why she has so much underboob in >>48799
>> No. 48834
I noticed that Sigrun's powers seem to be absent, so I came up with some:

>unbreakable enchanted spear that can pierce through virtually anything. Sigrun also uses it as a parrying staff. Sigrun can summon it to her at any time, and it just materializes in her hand.
>superhuman strength and durability
Any more, or is that sufficient?
>> No. 48835
>>48827
>Star-Striker's kids
Betsy Ross Banks, 14. Cheerleader at the high school she goes to. Idolizes Star-Striker, and doesn't even realize her hero is her own mother. Currently is trying to get her mother to teach her how to drive, but Bev is hesitant. Betsy excels at athletics, and dreams of being a superhero when she grows up, a dream Bev is staunchly (and hypocritically) against. Typical bubbly blonde. She dyes her hair; naturally it's brown, just like her mom. Thanks to her fangirl goggles, she cannot see the sometimes obvious hints that her overbearing mother is in fact the superheroine she idolizes.

Benjamin Franklin Banks, 12. A thorn in Betsy's heel. He is every annoying little brother to ever exist. He frequently makes fun of Betsy for her superhero aspirations. However, Benjamin is a little genius, already taking classes at Betsy's level. While Betsy inherited her mother's natural athleticism, Benjamin inherited her smarts. Bev has to be extra careful around Benjamin as there is legitimate risk he might uncover her secret, and this boy stinks at keeping secrets.

>Diva's kid
Shaundra LaBelle, 16. Dates Marcus, Kaiju's son. Shaundra found out her mom's secret several years ago when she was looking for hidden Christmas presents one early December, stumbling across her mom's costume in the crawlspace. Shaundra hasn't told her mom she knows of her double life as Diva, opting instead to hold onto that little secret for later. Shaundra is bitter that she never knew her father, and that her mother has made seemingly no effort to contact him for Shaundra's sake. Sometimes, Shaundra will drop a hint to Candy that she knows her secret, but when pressed, will just give her mother the silent treatment, leading Candy to chalk it up to Shaundra being annoying for annoying's sake. Shaundra sports a 'fro and wears rebellious, punk-style clothing. She and her mom often get into fights over the most trivial of things. Part of Shaundra's disdain for her mother comes from the fact that despite "being basically an adult," her mom still hasn't revealed her secret to her. Is also angry at her mom for not buying her a car, even when her mom is rich from her singing career and can totally afford it. Works at the local shopping mall.

>Mend's kids
Harold and Jack Stephens, 9 years old. Twins. They both inherited their mother's hair color and freckles. These two rambunctious little scamps are full of energy and are often seen in Anne-Marie's house running around. Donald does a good job of keeping them from bugging their mom while she's working, be it at in the kitchen or at her "job." They don't know either of their parent's secrets, and Donald and Anne-Marie have vowed not to tell either of them until they're 18. They're both a bit chubby thanks to Anne-Marie's cooking, but are full of energy and love playing outside.

>Sigrun's kid
Alexander, 15 years old. This kid is spoiled rotten. He thinks it's weird that his adopted mother makes him study Norse mythology and practice with old Viking weapons on the weekends, but he doesn't mind since she buys him anything he wants. He already owns two cars and only just got his learner's permit. He knows there's something different about his "mother" compared to the other mothers he knows, but he can't quite put his finger on it. Sigrun keeps him distracted with every toy, every video game he could desire. Will Alexander ever face harsh reality, or will he be pampered all his life?

>Tropica's kids
Miguel (7), Carlos (10), Anna (11), Yolanda (12), and Maria (14). Not much is known about Carmen Delacruz's children, except they all love soccer and speak in rapid-fire Spanish, even when they know the person they're speaking to doesn't understand what they're saying. Yolanda loves helping her mother out in her plant shop, while the rest just enjoy bugging their stay-at-home father, who does his best to keep up with them. I'm thinking the father's name is Juan.

>Kaiju's kids
Megumi Ujifusa, 5 years old. Just a little Japanese-American girl. She loves sentai, and will cry if she misses her show (even if it was DVR'd).

Keiichi Ujifusa, 16 years old. Wears glasses and is a super nerd. Shy. Dates Shaundra LaBelle. He doesn't know what Shaundra sees in him, but he's happy to have a girlfriend nonetheless. His father does not approve of who he dates, as she is rebellious and not Japanese. Keiichi believes his mother may be more than meets the eye, if what Shaundra tells him about her mother (who is good friends with his) is true, but is too shy to bring it up with Kim directly.
>> No. 48836
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Someone said that Sigrun's costume would be basically this, but with a huge cape and only one braid.

>my additions
Like, from the cleavage down, actual armor. Perhaps bare arms, with leather greaves, and chainmail leggings with an ornate leather piece dangling over her crotch, and high heels just for the cheesecake factor?
>> No. 48837
thinking i'm going to make Mend Scottish. or Irish. not sure. thoughts?

script going well, though. introducing characters successively.
>> No. 48839
>>48829
Wow, all solid ideas! Great job!
>>48830
Sigrun's civilian identity is a teacher (maybe history teacher, as she must know a lot about wars of all times?), who's still not quite familiar with Earth's peacetime customs
As for SB's parents... an interesting direction for sure, though I kinda like the "has to hide it during the in-laws visit" plot too... Hey, maybe at the end of the latter plot, it turns out they knew all along? And basically they don't hate SB or Mend for it, just use it for countless playful jabs etc. They may be (retired) supervillains, but they're not bad people (maybe they're the "Doctor Doom" kind of supervillains – understandable and somewhat likeable, just using questionable means, not the "total monster" kind).
>>48832
I dunno, I thought Mend would be the one who wouldn't hate her chubby looks since they look fine on her... Wait. That's how it usually happens, right? She looks fine, and everybody tells her so, but she's too self-conscious to listen to them. Might be a plot for an episode!
>>48834
Those are fine, however I'd be wary with the spear, since the project is based on cartoon aesthetics, so piercing enemies is probably too gory for this universe. Maybe a blunt weapon? Or just her fists?
Also, Sigrun is also a supernaturally better melee combatant than most humans. And perhaps, as a valkyrie, she has a natural "spider-sense" that tells her where a battle takes place? In peaceful life, it may show her where crimes are happening – and maybe even things like family quarrels? Maybe useful plot-wise.
>>48835
[cont. in next post]
>>48836
Looks and sounds cool! Definitely should have the "ornate leather thing dangling above her crotch". It should be cheesecakey, but not just a stereotypical Red Sonja metal bikini, it should resemble actual (if unusually minimalistic) armor
>>48837
Garuda, I like, like, 99% of your suggestions, but this one I don't like. "She's redheaded thus she must be Scottish/Irish" is so cliche! Besides, it'll give Supermoms a United Nations vibe, like they did intentionally gather members of various nationalities etc. (e.g., like the Planeteers, or the JLI, etc). Or then again, maybe that's what they did back then, 15 years ago, when they formed Superteens?.. Still don't like the Scottish/Irish thing, tho. Maybe keep her as "generic American", and turn Beverly into, e.g., Italian? What do you think?
>> No. 48840
>>48835
[cont.]
Wow, that's extensive! And so many great ideas, to boot!
>Beverly's kids
That's just perfect, nothing to add here!
>Shaundra
I liked how you fleshed out her story, too.
>Shaundra dates Marcus, Kaiju's son
Did you mean, Keiichi?
>Shaundra sports a 'fro and wears rebellious, punk-style clothing.
Sassy black women in punk-style clothing! How did you know my fetish? ...Hm, an episode must have Candy dress into such clothes for whatever reason (trying to understand Shaundra, perhaps, or bond with her?), so that I could fap away without expecting a visit from Chris Hanssen lol
>Donald does a good job of keeping them from bugging their mom while she's working, be it at in the kitchen or at her "job."
I thought Donald had a job at the bike repair shop?
>Sigrun's son
Yeah, he turned out great, too.
>He knows there's something different about his "mother" compared to the other mothers he knows, but he can't quite put his finger on it.
Heh, we can even make an X-Man'esque allusion here. His mother's secret may be both that she is secretly a valkyrie superhero, or that she's perhaps a bit too friendly with a certain member of the hired help...
>Tropica's family
Sounds quite fine. For some of my 2 cents about Tropica and her family, see next post
>He doesn't know what Shaundra sees in him, but he's happy to have a girlfriend nonetheless.
Would be funny if Shaundra is shown to think just the same exact thoughts about Keiichi.
>His father
Now probably the character who needs fleshing out the most!

All in all, a great job you have done!
>> No. 48841
[cont.]
Ideas about Tropica and her husband

I was thinking about Tropica, and what her character could be like.
I'd suggest she should be a somewhat stereotypical spicy Latina (but a bit of stereotypes is okay, since we're operating under cartoon aesthetics). She'd be basically:
>sexy and well-aware of her sexiness, always maintaining her looks, dressing in sexy (not slutty!) clothes, always playfully trying to flirt with everyone (she's not putting any serious thought in it, tho, as her husband is the one she loves)
>very jealous of her husband (she's never aware of the ironic double standard between her flirty behavior and her jealousy)
>quick on the tongue, has always a witty and stingy repartee for everyone (including supervillains)
>loves to argue, especially with her husband
>very energetic in general

Another man would be pummelled into the ground by such an energetic wife, but not Juan. He and Carmen are birds of a feather, as he's very strong-willed and never shy to stand ground on his decisions. That often leads him and Carmen to argue, and their arguments can get so heated, Sigrun can hear them without resorting to her super-battle-location sense. He's also very jealous of Tropica. However, all those facts never diminish their strong and hot passion and caring for each other, which hasn't waned even a bit since their marriage – as their ever growing number of children seems to attest.
>> No. 48842
okay, i used a script-writing program to do this, and it does NOT translate well into a Pastebin, so i'm just going to Dropbox the file as-is. you'll probably have to download Celtx from its website to view it in all its formatted and making-sense glory. it's free and fine, don't worry.

this one has Scottish Mend, but that's a two-second fix. it's just two seconds i'm too lazy to put in right now.

i used the established names throughout, and made them up to suit where i needed to. and as a caveat, i have NO idea how to write a stoic, shy bunch of people like the Japanese, so if that bit sounds really cliche, that's because it is. sixteen pages, mostly in a two-by-three panel format (except for a few stretch panels), ends with Mend dropping the bomb that she's still fighting crime. this was mostly focused on introducing the characters and their families. except for Sigrun's family, which i just remembered i forgot to include.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/7oohzfufrip9wz2/supermoms.celtx
>> No. 48843
>>48840
>Did you mean, Keiichi?
I was originally going to give him a non-Japanese name but decided against it and forgot to edit that part of my post.

>>48839
>I thought Mend would be the one who wouldn't hate her chubby looks
I didn't say she hated it. I just said her old costume wouldn't quite fit her the same way anymore.

As for Sigrun's weapon, I just wanted to give her something Norse to complete the gimmick, but I suppose she wouldn't necessarily need one.


Additional thoughts about Sigrun: if she's going to have a civilian identity, shouldn't she have a civilian name as well?
>> No. 48844
>>48843

i figured she wouldn't have one. gods don't demean themselves with secret identities anymore.
>> No. 48846
>>48844
So, nobody would figure out she's a superhero despite having the same name?

Maybe everyone just calls her "Sig" for short and nobody calls her "Sigrun" unless she's in costume.
>> No. 48847
>>48842
Nice! I liked it a lot!

BUT, I have to provide criticism. Here are my two cents:

>Perhaps Junichi should also make a comment about how Shaundra is not Japanese, owing to his more conservative upbringing?

>I don't love Scottish Mend, but I don't hate it either. If we were to put it up to a vote whether or not to make her Scottish, I would simply stay neutral. Not really a criticism, I know.

>It's not explicitly stated that Candy hangs up the phone between pages 5 and 6. Maybe in the first panel of page 6 she could be putting her phone down, just to illustrate that the conversation with Bev is over without making it seem like a jarring jump forward in time.

>Perhaps a line from Betsy in which she idolizes Star-Striker, which also makes it obvious she doesn't know that Star-Striker and her mother are one in the same? Also, I think Bev should call Betsy by her full name (including middle) instead of just "Betsy Banks."

>When Bev is thinking about the gang's children, Sigrun's adopted son seems to be absent for some reason. Like, maybe add, "And even SIG'S got a son. Adopted, of course." Which would have a nice double meaning. Did she adopt because she's from Asgard, or because she doesn't want to be with a man?

An idea for the next script (chronologically, story-wise): Bev tries to talk Anne-Marie out of being a superhero again, some of the group (Kim and perhaps Carmen) join her, but Sigrun and Candy start to warm up to the idea of donning their costumes again. The get-together ends on kind of a sour note and everybody goes their separate ways. Then, some superpowered threat attacks the city, and watching the coverage on TV, Beverly tries to convince herself to not get involved, but then she sees Mend show up, followed by Diva and Sigrun. When those three end up getting beat up pretty badly, and no other superheroes seem to be arriving to help, Bev has no choice but to hero up and help them out. And it turns out Carmen and Kim had the same idea she did, and the team is back!

I may start writing a little something but then again I might not. I'm pretty unreliable when it comes to scriptwriting, and it doesn't help that I suck at it.
>> No. 48848
>>48847
Addendum, I didn't think of these until just now:

>Perhaps the room that Candy is in as she talks to Beverly on the phone could have posters of her from her singing career, gold records, etc. on the wall, to drive that aspect of her character home.

>Maybe Sigrun says something to the tune of "it's not mead but it'll do" in reference to the wine. She is an Asgardian after all, and we all know how much the Asgardians love mead.

>Perhaps instead of "oh, hush," Carmen could say "Silencio!" on page 8 in a nod to her heritage and general spiciness.

>Is the rest of Bev's family still in the house when the girls are all together? If they were in, what if they heard the girls talking about their superheroics?

>If Mend was already back fighting crime, wouldn't the other girls have found out about it by now? She doesn't seem like the type of hero to be very "off the radar." Perhaps she just brings up that she is seriously getting ready to be a hero again?
>> No. 48849
Working on a script that's a follow-up to >>48842 now. No telling when it'll be done, though.
>> No. 48850
>>48842
I've just read the script, and I must say it's very good! It's funny, and the characters sound believable! And cute; I never thought that I'd characterize MILF characters as "cute" but they are. Sigrun is mai new waifu :3

Seriously, good job!
Some commentary:
>Betsy's room
Shouldn't there also be some kind of, I dunno, posters of male singers or actors, too? As of now, her 100% dedication to Star-Striker sounds like she has something in common with Sigrun, if you know what I mean lol
>better lazy than dead
Kinda dark, isn't it? It sounds as if Teen Queens disbanded because of some grisly death. Do you have one planned? If not, this sudden dark remark is very misleading. If you want to show she worries about her daughter too much, maybe try phrasing it a bit differently
>Yolanda
So Yolanda knows her mother's secret? Dunno... Doesn't that kind of upset the whole balance?
All in all, for some reason the dialogue between Carmen and Yolanda felt a bit bland compared to the rest (but it's still good, as the rest are very good!). May be just me
>Anne-Marie
Just wanted to say, my aversion to making her Scottish/Irish is just my opinion, man. If other Anons choose to make her Scottish/Irish, so be it.
>Junichi
He turned out a very colorful character, bravo. One of my favorites here!
>small-chested woman picking a dress with cleavage
Unrealistic!
>Kim and Carmen
I like their interactions, very funny
>Lurch
Ha!
>couple of final pages where Beverly talks to herself
I dunno, these also felt a bit rushed. Again, may be me

All in all, a great beginning!
>> No. 48851
>>48847
>>48848
I like your suggestions, too.
Yeah, I got the same question about Beverly's family, too

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So, guy, when do you think we should make a new thread on /co/ to gather new interest, and maybe ideas/art?
>> No. 48852
So, will the team be, in-universe, called the Supermoms?
>> No. 48853
>>48850
All of Carmen's family know about her powers. She's the only one who doesn't care about keeping her other life a secret from her family.
>> No. 48854
>>48852
Why not? It'd help avoid an unnecessary "Watchmen"/"Minutemen" type of confusion

>>48853
I dunno, I'm against it. The main idea of the concept is that moms have a secret life nobody knows about. There are exceptions, like Mend's husband (who was a supervillain and thus has a secret of his own), or Diva's daughter (who found out her mom's identity on her own, and keeps this a secret from Diva). Having all of the Delacruz family know Carmen's secret just breaks the balance entirely – for me, at least
>> No. 48855
>>48854
Maybe Yolanda knows but only because her mom trusts her, what with her being such a good help around the shop and all.
>> No. 48856
>>48855

i think that would work. i'll rewrite it in a bit.

as far as some of the criticisms: Junichi's disapproval of a non-Japanese girl was supposed to be tacit, but i can make it more obvious.

Betsy having non-Star-Striker stuff in her room was also supposed to be tacit. i just wanted the Star-Striker stuff to be most prominent. the picture of her goes in the center of the wall, not the picture of One Direction.

the final few pages feel rushed because they are.

i completely forgot to include Sigrun's family, but i'll put them in next time. i get the feeling that the other girls will end up resenting Sigrun somewhat because she still looks so much like the other girls, but then they'll talk to her son and he'll explain that she's having a hard time adapting to human life yadda yadda yadda, sympathy shot.

i thought it would be cute for Carmen's family to know about her powers (growing enormous vines in the back yard for the kids to slide down, making enormous dandelions, etc.), but i totally get that it's kind of confusing for her to randomly be known. i think Yolanda should know, if nothing else, because Carmen is actually really bad with plants without her powers, will be a tweest later on, and she's mature enough to work at the shop, she's mature enough to know.

Scottish Mend is whatever. yes or no, no real difference. i'm fine with getting rid of it. i included it because i'm Scottish. hell, maybe i should make her Texan.
>> No. 48857
>>48849 here, working on the script for "issue 2" or whatever it's going to be, a continuation of the script already posted. I had two ideas:

>When Anne-Marie reveals that she's going to go back to heroics, this piques the curiosity of the rest of the girls and they all decide to try and get the team back together for real, or as much as they can with their busy home lives. An old enemy returns and they band together to stop him, being rechristened the Supermoms.

or

>When Anne-Marie reveals that she's going to go back to heroics, some of the girls immediately support her, and some do not. Kim and Bev are staunchly against it. Carmen is against it as well, but not has hard as Kim or Bev. Candy is all for it (even beginning to contemplate a return to superheroics herself), and Sigrun supports Anne-Marie as well. Anne-Marie reveals that she talked it over with her husband and he thought she should go for it, and Bev and Carmen give her their approval, since what they were really worried about was how she was going to balance her home life with her hero life. Kim still disapproves, because as far as she's concerned, that stage of their lives is over and they need to support their families now. Later that night, Bev entertains the idea of donning the costume once more, but decides against it. The next day, however, an old enemy of the Teen Queens suddenly returns (the idea I was thinking of is they got out of prison and immediately returned to supercrime, complete with an army of henchmen). Bev watches his attack on the city unfolding on the news while she's in a coffee shop, vowing not to get involved as there are other superheroes that can handle it. Mend is the first on the scene, helping wounded citizens (her combat skills are still very rusty so she's not so great at beating up the bad guys just yet). When she is attacked by the villain, suddenly Diva and Sigrun show up to kick some butt. At first they seem to be holding their own, and Bev relaxes as she thinks she won't have to do anything drastic, but suddenly the tide turns and Bev has no choice but to help her friends. At the same time, Carmen and Kim are watching the battle play out on TV (Carmen in her flower shop and Kim in the breakroom at work (or something). Kim is still reluctant to revisit that period of her life, but Carmen and Bev jump into action, throwing on their old costumes and going to help their friends. The tide turns again, in the heroines' favor, until some giant robots show up to wreck the party. The former Teen Queens are outmatched, until...Kaiju appears! The giant woman engages the robots and helps our heroines trounce the bad guy! A news reporter shows up on scene to hopefully interview these heroines. Through the course of the interview, Bev lets it slip that the Teen Queens retired, had families, did the whole "real life" thing, but now they're back, baby! The reporter christens the team the "Supermoms" and our tale ends with Betsy celebrating the return of her idol and Shaundra even more angry that her mother has returned to superheroics, something she still hasn't told her daughter about. Perhaps even another old enemy of the Teen Queens sees this, and begins to plot a revenge years in the making...

I chose the latter because it's obviously the better narrative. It's harder to write, but it's clearly going to give the superior story. Right now, I'm at a stage in the script where I'm about to get to the return of the old foe, which will probably be the hardest for me to write because I suck at action scenes.
>> No. 48858
>>48857

i'll fix any action scenes that you can't do. just leave those panels blank, marked as ACTION SCENE.
>> No. 48859
>>48857
So, the former foe I was thinking of is:

>Professor Insidious: real name Mandrake P. Oxford, a former pioneer in the field of robotics, who turned to evil, constructing an army of robot soldiers, big and small, to conquer the world. The Teen Queens stopped his evil machinations, and he has spent the past 17 years in prison. However, he has been released early and desires revenge against the heroines who put him behind bars in the first place.
>> No. 48861
>>48855
I agree with this suggestion.
>>48856
>Betsy having non-Star-Striker stuff in her room was also supposed to be tacit.
Ah, now I see, thanks for the clarification.
>Carmen is actually really bad with plants without her powers
Nice, I like this twist
>i included it because i'm Scottish
Oh wait wait wait, now I totally agree on making her Scottish. We're here creating MILFs of our dreams, why not do what we want! After all, like, half of my contributions to her design are based on an ex of mine who's a similarly cute young MILF. So yeah, you have my sword, bro
>>48857
I like the second story! Wow, this project is really shaping up nicely
>>48859
A solid concept

Btw, guys, what are your thoughts about the cheesecake aspect of this comic? Will there be more specific cheesecake elements in the story (e.g., like Kaiju's backshot with the tattoo – forgot to mention that I liked it!; dressing/undressing scenes, sexy poses, corny attacks like e.g. a butt bump, etc.) or should the cheesecake be mostly in the art? What do you think?
>> No. 48862
>>48861
Well, in the script I'm working on, there will be an upskirt of Kaiju when she's giant-size (drawn from the perspective of a regular-size character looking up as she towers over them), and Diva rooting around a crawlspace for her costume with her ass sticking out.
>> No. 48863
>>48862
Noice
Just don't forget the other girls, too

Btw, let's brainstorm ideas for their costume design, especially design clarity and potential for fanservice. Design clarity-wise, I feel that Star-Striker's and Kaiju's superhero costumes that I drew are too detailed and need to be redesigned into something more simple. What do you guys think?
As for potential for fanservice, let's see. Mend has the underboob. Kaiju may have pantyshots (btw, what kind of panties would a conservative Asian middle-aged woman wear? Or maybe that'd be a gag where in every scene she's in costume she'll get a pantyshot, and every time the panties are different? Could be fun). Diva can have a cleavage/window on her ass (too radical? or blaxploitation enough?), or maybe a whale tail, I dunno. Sigrun could wear her minimalistic armor over a naked body, so when some parts lift during battle (e.g., her leather thing that covers her pubic area) only a clever view angle keeps it SFW. What about Beverly and Tropica? Any ideas?
>> No. 48864
>>48863
>what kind of panties would a conservative Asian middle-aged woman wear?
Striped pantsu.
>Diva can have a cleavage/window on her ass
Maybe in the NSFW universe. I think that's a bit too lewd for the SFW universe, though.
>> No. 48865
>>48863

Diva needs shoulder pads. ass window, maybe not, but certainly something that shows off her hips.

Tropica's costume is literally made of vines, like Bayonetta's.
>> No. 48866
>>48865
What about Tropica's mask? Maybe it's flower petals around her eyes?
>> No. 48867
>>48864
Striped pantsu; that's a fun subversion, since I've usually seen those on animu schoolgirls, would be fun to see those on a MILF
But what do you think about the "different panties" gag?
>Maybe in the NSFW universe. I think that's a bit too lewd for the SFW universe, though.
Fair enough. Maybe really whale-tailish low-riding pants then?
>> No. 48868
>>48865
>Diva needs shoulder pads
Okay; but why? I'm afraid I don't get the reference here
>Tropica's costume is literally made of vines, like Bayonetta's.
That has a lot of potential, but may be a real bitch to draw lol
>>48866
I like that
>> No. 48869
Would anyone object to Kim's costume coming out of her tattoo? It can be part of her powers, explaining why it stays the same size relative to her no matter how big or small she gets.
>> No. 48870
>>48869
That's a great idea technically, but I've got some concerns:
>How can a schoolgirl uniform come out of a tattoo? (visually)
>It means the artists would have to draw the tattoo in, like, every second shot, and those hieroglyphs have got over9000 lines in them (I wikipedia'd it)
>> No. 48871
>>48870
Ribbons of light come out from her back and wrap themselves around her body. When the light dies down, it's her costume.

It can cover the tattoo, so you wouldn't have to worry about drawing it all the time.
>> No. 48873
Work on the second script is going well, I'm just getting to the action scenes and it's a bit easier than I anticipated...for now.

It's going to be a hell of a lot longer than 16 pages, though. The narrative I'm going for isn't one that can be rushed. Hopefully I'll have it finished by tomorrow.
>> No. 48874
Just a heads up, I gave Diva the ability to fly as well. I figured we needed a member of this team who could fly, and I felt it fit best with her vs. anyone else.

I'm really liking the way this script is shaping up.
>> No. 48876
>>48870

i think the tattoo stays the same size, even when her body changes. so she's a hundred feet tall or whatever, but she's still got this little pin-prick of ink on her back that looks like a single pore or something.

>>48868

pointy shoulder pads. it's an Eighties thing. it's a soul music thing.
>> No. 48879
>>48871
Hm, a Sailormoonesque naked transformation scene? Me gusta
>>48874
>Just a heads up, I gave Diva the ability to fly as well.
Well, okay, but... why Diva? Wouldn't it make more sense for Sigrun (as she's a supernatural being)? Or will that make Sigrun OP?
>>48876
>tattoo
Hm, may work, I think we should leave this to the drawfags
>pointy shoulder pads. it's an Eighties thing. it's a soul music thing.
Ah, I see. Do you have any notable examples?
>> No. 48880
Oh, btw, just had a cheesecake-related idea. DISCLAIMER: I know I'm gonna get tarred and feathered for this, since I know too well that no artist likes to change their finished work. But hear me out:

How about inserting a shower scene into the script? E.g. when Beverly is talking on the phone to other Supermoms, after her scene with Betsy. A lot of women like to talk when taking a bath, so it's not strange. We may show her talking while walking into a bathroom, filling the tub, undressing (tasteful panel composition in work here) and entering the tub. The rest of this talk could go while she's in the tub, with soap censoring all the naughty parts etc.

What do you think?
>> No. 48881
Story idea:

A rift between universes open and out come...the Superdads! From an alternate universe, the Superdads are the identical counterparts to the Supermoms...well, except they're guys. These beefcake heroes must team up with our heroines to defeat an insidious villain from their universe and send them back to their own earth.

This can also be an NSFW story as well.

>>48879
Yeah, I thought flight would make Sigrun disproportionately powerful in relation to the rest of the group, and it just felt right to give Diva flight opposed to anybody else.
>> No. 48882
>>48881
Ahaha, I like it, it's a nice nod to a common comic book plot! Would be interesting to see how the Superdads and their families look like! Btw, another episode could have Anti-Supermoms who are their evil analogues (and with dominatrix-type skimpy costumes, of course)

>This can also be an NSFW story as well.
Hunky superpowered alpha male Superdads seducing Supermoms from their ordinary, down-to-earth husbands
How lewd :3
And then Supermoms could find out that basically your own clone with the same negative traits and bad habits as you is an insufferable partner, and that their normal husbands understand and complete them much better (both in life and in sex), so they return back. Free moral lessons in your porn comics!
>> No. 48883
Maybe Star-Striker should be also able to fly?
Reasons:
>as of now, she's severely underpowered, compared to the rest of her teammates
>the cape is totally impractical for an non-superpowered ground fighter
>> No. 48884
Thinking back to my decision to make Diva able to fly, I think it was kind of shitty that I just made a unilateral decision like that in what's supposed to be a group effort.

How about, instead of flight, she can surf around on solid sound that she creates, kind of like how Iceman gets around with his ice?

Also, I had an idea that, for things that require delicacy and finesse, Diva could go "shhhh..." and that would create a very skinny strand of solid sound, enabling her to do things like pick locks, tinker with tiny things, etc. Like, for example, when Candy is searching for her costume and Shaundra is being too nosy, she locks Shaundra in her own bedroom and uses a bit of solid sound to jam up the lock so her daughter can't get out and "discover" her secret (of course Candy does not know that Shaundra already knows).

>>48883
I don't know about that. I think the team needs one down-to-earth character, and Star-Striker should be it.

She does know more about combat than anybody else in the team, even Sigrun (whose idea of combat is "punch stuff really hard"), and she's a more capable leader and better at tactics. I think, with those traits, she can stand with her teammates. I mean, look at Mend. All she can do is heal people.
>> No. 48885
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48885
Kaiju in one of her battle poses.
Tried somewhat different proportions, and a simplified costume for Kaiju.

Btw, idea for a funny cheesecakesque scene regarding Kaiju. The aforementioned first battle of the Supermoms is shown on national television. When Kaiju turns big, and her pantyshot is shown (as stated by the scriptanon above), it could be a page-sized big panel, interspersed by smaller panels where we could see different TV viewers' reaction. In particular, one frame shows Junichi shielding Keiichi's and Megumi's eyes with his hands, and several, on contrast, showing horny male viewers (e.g., a couple of horny teens, a group of loud black men, several middle-aged men in a bar), on the contrary, peeling their eyes at it.

>>48884
>Thinking back to my decision to make Diva able to fly, I think it was kind of shitty that I just made a unilateral decision like that in what's supposed to be a group effort.
It's okay, you explained your reasoning, after all.
>How about, instead of flight, she can surf around on solid sound that she creates, kind of like how Iceman gets around with his ice?
Now this is even cooler, I'd suggest you switch to this. Those soundwaves she surfs on could even be represented by note lines (you know, several parallel lines with notes – don't know how they're called officially). Cheesy, yes, but pretty cartoonish.
>Also, I had an idea that, for things that require delicacy and finesse, Diva could go "shhhh..." and that would create a very skinny strand of solid sound, enabling her to do things like pick locks, tinker with tiny things, etc.
Good idea. I'd just suggest that she uses not just any sound, but melodic/musical sound. She's a singer, after all! Rap, too, of course.
>I don't know about that. I think the team needs one down-to-earth character, and Star-Striker should be it.
I see your reasoning. But what about the cape? Should she lose it then?
>I mean, look at Mend. All she can do is heal people.
Maybe we need to give her some, at least, semi-offensive powers, what do you think?
>> No. 48886
>>48885
I like the idea with all the people watching TV reacting to Kaiju's pantyshot, and I was originally not going to include Kim's family in that scene, but now I think I have to, just for the humor factor of it. Maybe Junichi could have a stereotypical anime reaction while he's covering Megumi and Keiichi's faces, like a spontaneous nosebleed or something?

There is one scene I have planned involving a character's family member that I'm really excited to write (I've just barely started the action and the whole team isn't assembled yet in where I'm at right now) that I think will be pretty cool.

I also had an idea for Kaiju, and it's nothing that I'm putting in the script I'm currently working on, but an idea for the future: perhaps she can change to any size, not just giant-sized. She can get really tiny as well. And, to avoid drawing the tattoo all the time, it can be absorbed into her body when she's in costume, like it IS the costume, or is a vessel for the costume of some sort.

One question I have, for future reference: is Kim's Kaiju tattoo magical, or science-based?

And about Kaiju's costume design: I like the look and color scheme better in general in >>48885 but I prefer the mask/facepaint? design from >>48802

Maybe we could meld those two, keeping to the color scheme and neck-down of the most recent design, with the old design's mask/facepaint?

As for Tropica's costume, here's what I was thinking:
>her mask is flower petals around her eyes
>bare feet
>vines wrapping around both her legs up to her knees (or just below them), then snaking out and combining around her waist like a belt, with a miniskirt (emphasis on the "mini") maybe made of cool-looking leaves or grass or something
>the vine continues in one solid piece up her side, wrapping around her chest to cover her boobs (just the NSFW bits), then snaking up her back and resting just above her shoulder. She can use this vine as a striking,tripping weapon if need be, and it can extend for quite a bit without compromising her decency.
>Bare arms? Or maybe something there?

It's a costume she can make herself, using only her powers, in seconds.
>> No. 48887
>>48885
>But what about the cape? Should she lose it then?
No way! It looks good, and this may seem stupid, but to me, the cape screams "leader."

However, I think her costume does need a slight redesign. The white, plain thong really sticks out to me as "boring" compared to the rest of her costume.
>> No. 48888
Just had a crazy idea for Diva re: her method of transportation.

>using her voice, Diva forms a bar out of solid sound, upon which notes appear in front of her, and she hops from note to note to move forward, up, down, any direction

I think it would look really visually impressive.

Now, I think given her powers, Diva's lungs should have an endless capacity, but she can become exhausted if she keeps it up for too long. A nice side-effect of her limitless lungs is that she doesn't technically need to breathe and can last underwater theoretically infinitely, should a situation in which going underwater is necessary arise.
>> No. 48890
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48890
Tropica, giving an interview after a Supermom victory, to a rather flustered reporter.
May be even a scene in the comic, after their first victory!

>Oh my, so you say you stood right here filming the battle? How brave! I just love brave men like you--
>Ms. Tropicana, ahem, excuse me, b-but could we get on with our interview?
>So professional! I like it~

>>48886
>Maybe Junichi could have a stereotypical anime reaction while he's covering Megumi and Keiichi's faces, like a spontaneous nosebleed or something?
Hm, maybe, but it should be a very stoic and restricted nosebleed lol
>perhaps she can change to any size, not just giant-sized.
I support this, would give her more variety story-wise
>And, to avoid drawing the tattoo all the time, it can be absorbed into her body when she's in costume
Maybe the tattoo will just be covered by the costume?
>One question I have, for future reference: is Kim's Kaiju tattoo magical, or science-based?
Could be both, but if we're going with animu tropes, maybe magic fits better
>Maybe we could meld those two, keeping to the color scheme and neck-down of the most recent design, with the old design's mask/facepaint?
Thanks for the input! I was afraid the kabuki-style mask was too strange-looking. Okay, I'll put it back.
>>48887
Yeah, Star-Striker's costume design definitely needs some tweaking.
>>48888
All solid ideas. I support them.
>> No. 48891
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>>48890
And Tropica in civvies, with a young male customer.

>Oh dear, young man, what a great choice in flowers! Have you bought them for some girl? Looks like you're a man who knows how to please a woman...
>Mo-o-o-om!!! Stop it! That's my boyfriend!
>> No. 48892
>>48890
I like what you did with Tropica's costume! Way better than the dumpy miniskirt idea I had! I also like the luchador mask as a nod to her heritage.

Now, any ideas for Diva? We have some good ideas for Sigrun so far, but nothing that isn't lewd for Diva.
>> No. 48893
>>48892
Thanks!
>I also like the luchador mask as a nod to her heritage.
That was actually the idea – to based each Supermom's costume around a different style (an existing type of mass culture hero + other mass culture elements). So, Star-Striker is a typical American cape comics superhero, Kaiju is a mahou shoujo (with a kabuki-style mask since Japanese designers love including such traditional elements in animu character design), Tropica is a luchadora (mixed with the flirtiness and voluptuousness of female characters in Latin American comics). Diva should be blaxploitation (afro, boob window, yellow bell-bottom pants, someone mentioned shoulder pads) – I'll try to see if it's actually drawable. Sigrun would be fantasy.
I honestly have no idea about Mend! When I drew her costume (>>48799), I had no thoughts about it (I just wanted to draw the girl), so it turned out simple but bland. What style could we go with her?
>> No. 48894
>>48893
The underboob definitely needs to stay. Perhaps something that reflects her healing powers? I don't know, I like it pretty well as is, although maybe the mask needs to be changed, but into what I don't know.
>> No. 48895
I finally finished the second script, and I actually did it on time for once! It's rough as fuck, I'm super shitty in coming up with creative sound effects, and I didn't write Mend as Scottish (someone who knows how to write that style of dialogue, PLEASE change it because I have no idea what I'm doing there), but the deed is done! And it only took 41 pages!

I took a lot of suggestions offered in this thread and incorporated them into this script, and there is one scene in particular that I just can't get over how great it already is (try to guess which one it is!); I only hope it's not actually shit and I'm blind to my own deficiencies.

I would do a quick proofread for typos and spelling errors, but it's late and I have to get up early tomorrow morning, so I'll do that tomorrow when I get home.

Please, guys, PLEASE read this, and tell me what you think. I crave your criticism.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/koniw0vgwurknf0/supermoms2.celtx
>> No. 48898
>>48895
Already thought of one thing I should have put in there:

>Beverly makes a remark about how her costume doesn't quite fit her the way it used to

Also, I had an idea about Diva's costume. Maybe in her civilian identity, she doesn't have an afro, her afro in costume being a wig, maybe attached to her mask, with a pick sticking out of it at all times. Also, booty shorts. That's all I got.
>> No. 48901
>>48895
Re-reading it, I realized I made a crucial error, where I renamed a character halfway through the script and, when going back to change their name, missed several places. I also helped myself to a few minor changes here and there.

DO NOT READ THAT VERSION. READ THIS ONE.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/koniw0vgwurknf0/supermoms2.celtx
>> No. 48902
>>48895
>>48901
Turns out, since I didn't name the file differently, it shows up as exactly the same, so I didn't even need to post again. Oh well.

So, for a follow-up to the Supermoms becoming a team again, I'm thinking:
>Shaundra is furious with her mother over her returning to superheroics, but is being extremely vague about it, so Candy just thinks Shaundra's still mad that she doesn't have a car. Shaundra then reveals her mother's secret to Keiichi, but he doesn't 100% believe her, asking her for evidence. This could lead to a long-term subplot of sorts where Shaundra keeps trying to procure solid evidence that her mother is a costumed crimefighter.
>Junichi is glad that the Supermoms are here to protect Sapphire City, but he thinks that Kaiju woman is a bit too provocative. He sure is glad he's not HER husband!
>Yolanda figures out that Carmen is Tropica (which isn't hard since Yolanda was already privy to her mother's powers), and Carmen has to reiterate to her daughter that it needs to stay their little secret.
>Betsy has finally met her idol, Star-Striker, and it has only left her wanting more. Beverly is no longer to change the subject to get Betsy to stop talking about wanting to be a superhero, and things start to get heated between them, but the two end up bonding over working out in the gym after Betsy begs Beverly to give her a ride. Beverly's got to stay in fighting form too, you know! Beverly is still staunchly against Betsy becoming a superhero. Picture a number of conversations having underlying humor based on Betsy not knowing Bev's secret.
>Donald tries to teach Anne-Marie combat moves, but all he knows are bad guy tactics from his days as a villain
>Sigrun's adopted son Alexander is none the wiser, kept distracted by Sigrun's pampering, but his overbearing, doting nanny is concerned about our heroine! Does she know? Or is it...something else? Or...BOTH???

Anyone have anything to add?
>> No. 48903
Very nice! I liked it, it's an interesting and fun read. A good conclusion to the exerpt posted earlier.

As for commentary, note that these are just my personal opinions.
I started writing it after I read the first version, so maybe you already changed some things I mention here; if so, disregard.

>scene at Beverly's house
Felt a little drawn out, tbh. Maybe it'd be best to shorten it a bit, to the most essential scenes and dialogue bits.
>He can take care of the boys while I'm out.
Again, strikes me as weird. Is Donald a househusband like Steve? I thought he had a job
>All I needed was you girls' approval! Thank you all so much!
In contrast to the lengthy scene, Mend's exit looks a bit abrupt. "Bye girls, I visited your reunion only to get your approval, now that I got it I have to run!" Maybe a caption saying that a couple hours more has passed (talking about the good old days, giving Mend advice etc), before they start to leave?
>The wins is flowing.
Heh, yeah, despite some small rough bits pointed out in this commentary, the wins is surely flowing in this script.
>Close-up of Beverly's face. As she looks at her old costume, she can't help but smirk.
Beverly: Hurm. (sorry, couldn't resist)
>Maybe I'll pack the costume and throw it in my trunk.
Why? I don't get her reasoning here. As a suggestion, maybe she wants to get it to the cleaners or smth like that?
>...but I have RESPONSIBILITIES now. And besides, supercrime's basically NONEXISTENT these days anyway!
Maybe break this text a bit differently. On the previous page: "But I have RESPONSIBILITIES now. And besides..."; on this page: "...supercrime's basically NONEXISTENT these days!"
>Seventeen years...
Maybe show him looking at the "Early Release" paper with a sad and pensive look on his face, as he says these words?
>I have just the THING to bring them back... Back...to their DOOM!!!
Maybe add words like "revenge" or "they're gonna pay" into his dialogue somewhere, to drive the point home that he wants to fight them again not just because he likes to fight them (a la Obelix who always seeks some Romans to fight), but because he wants revenge for putting him in jail.
>Beverly is (almost) dressed in her business attire
Maybe the first panel shows her striding out of her room while buttoning up her shirt (her lacy bra is shown underneath)? For the cheesecake factor, you know. And the next panel, she's going down to the kitchen to Steve and Ben.
>Honey, ainren't you FORGETTING somethg?
Wait. Steve is a caring househusband who knows his wife is overworked and currently late to work. Why didn't he take care of Betsy himself? This part is kinda jarring. Maybe, as he's somewhat lightheaded (Bev is the responsible and level-headed one in this family), have _her_ remember that? E.g., like this:
Panel 1. Bev storms out of her room, buttoning up her shirt (maybe thinking something like "If I'm late to my executive meeting today, I'm doomed" as a humorous echo to Prof's last words?)
Panel 2. She's quickly descending the stairs, sees Steve and Ben at the table.
Panel 3. Bev grabs a toast. "Steve! Where's she?" Steve: "Eh? Who?"
Panel 4. Angry Bev "Our daughter!" Ben: "Hah! That doofus is late, as usual!"
Panel 5. Bev rolls her eyes at her family's ineptitude, goes back to get Betsy
etc etc.
>Betsy is flexing one arm and we can see some muscle definition already.
I know some people on /co/ who would definitely like that.
>BEVERLY (O.P.) HEY! Give that back, you geek! It's VINTAGE!
Shouldn't it be BETSY (O.P.)?
>And I'LL be seeing YOU tonight, hun.
Dunno, but sounds a bit too horny for this scene. May be just me.
>Pupils! Sit in thine assigned seats
So wait, everyone's kids except Betsy are late? That statistic seems kinda strange to me. Maybe drop the Sigrun scene, and just keep showing everyone's kids getting ready for school? Or change Sigrun scene to her arriving early to class and either chatting with some other teacher, or getting ready for class, or thinking some thoughts?
>Panel 3 (with Candy and Shaundra)
The description is at least 2 panels. Smth like this: Panel 3a: Shaundra getting to leave "Mom I'm leaving for school" "Not that you would care", Candy lying watching TV. Panel 3b: Shaundra rolling her eyes, Candy (O.P.) "Have a nice time, sweetie! I'll be here when you get back!" Shaundra "Yeah"
>Carmen/Yolanda scene
The whole scene is very strange to me. Why is Yolanda acting like a little kid? Why are other kids ordered in a row? Why does her husband act like a spineless doormat? That's all just feels weird to me, sorry.
Maybe (just a suggestion) smth like this: Carmen and Juan arguing about who will talk to Yolanda ("Talk with your daughter!" "No you talk with your daughter!") and persuade her to go to school, then Yolanda arrives and joins the shouting match, showing that she inherited both her mother's and father's genes. Still, Carmen wins the argument using both her iron strength of character and her quick wit.
>complete with an apron that reads "Kiss The Cook"
UNF
And a nice nod to her powers!
>Donald, tries to corral them.
Would be fun if every time Donald appears, some visual stereotypes associated with such "mysterious brooding prettyboy" archetype would play out. E.g., shown as a dark silhouette before his face is shown, hair flowing in the (often non-existent) wind, sarcastic one-liners, maybe even some playful villain-talk towards his wife (and her equally playful hero-talk towards him) etc. It could start right in the 1st issue, before it will be revealed that Donald is secretly SB.
>EXT: A nondescript warehouse, out by the docks.
Maybe you could insert a page of Sigrun beginning the lesson here. Among her pupils are Betsy, and maybe also Shaundra, Keiichi and Yolanda, too.
>Buzz Edison
Maybe it would be fun if Prof. thought everybody will instantly recognize him. But the citizens, including Buzz Edison, don't know who he is (the peak of his career was 17 years ago). When he learns of it (maybe he's also watching the TV broadcast in his cockpit), it makes him even more furious, and even more hungry for revenge against the Teen Queens.
>Sigrun is standing before a classroom full of students
Shouldn't Sigrun says smth along the lines of "By the All-Seeing Eye of Odin!", to complete the parallel?
And maybe (maybe) cut the rest of Sigrun's scene – so it would look like a series of panels going "Oh my God!"–"!Dios mio!"–"Aww HELL naw!"–"Oh no..."–"By the Braided Beard of Beowulf!"–"You've got to be kidding."
>Anne-Marie is struggling to put her costume on. She's gained a bit of weight since the last time she wore it, and is having a bit of a hard time putting it on.
I'd suggest to leave the "put some weight since then" thing to Beverly. Mend has already put her costume on several times, so she would already know that. And in any case, this story is more about Bev and her problems with revisiting her past.

[cont.]
>> No. 48904
>>48903
[cont.]

>Suddenly, Anne-Marie, in her Mend costume, comes out of nowhere, scaring Beverly.
Just an idea. Maybe we could give Mend flight, too? Firstly, it'd give her at least some defense (and more usefulness in a battle). And second, in this scene she could suddenly descend from the skies. That would make a nice meaningful contrast – Beverly on the ground in her civvies, signifying her ordinary mundane life, and Mend descending from the sky in her superhero costume, signifying the fantastic superhero life.
>Beverly is in disbelief that her friend is back in costume, and also mildly put off by how...differently Anne-Marie's costume fits her now.
Er... how do you imagine all that spectrum of emotions drawn in one panel?
>Bev/Mend/Sigrun arguing
Would be funny if they punched/kicked/soundwaved robots during the argument from time to time, without even taking their attention away from the argument.
>The robots are closing in on Anne-Marie. She only now notices them and is scared out of her wits.
I'd suggest this should be a situation where all 3 (Mend, Sigrun and Diva) are in trouble. Or else, it looks like Star-Striker is only useful when Mend is in troulbe and the others are busy.
>Out of nowhere, Beverly, fully decked out in her Star-Striker costume
Here you could put a scene of Bev changing into her Star-Striker costume for the first time in a long while, complete with thoughts about being out of form and putting on too much weight etc.
>CAROLINE
Heh, is suddenly changing his gender Buzz Edison's secret superpower?
>As of yet, there have been NO reported superhero-
Btw, we still have no explanation as to why no other superheroes showed up. Maybe superheroes, like supervillains, have also been in decline recently? Maybe Buzz could mention this
>Carmen's "dressing" scene
What about this: maybe intersperse panels of Carmen "dressing" with panels of Kim driving home? Would make a nice contrast between Carmen's giddyness to start again, and Kim's reluctance.
>BUZZ (O.P.) Tropica!
Maybe show the vine hovering right above Buzz and his cameraman, with both man staring at Tropica slackjawed. And in the next frame, Tropica could wink at them playfully. Could be a nice foreshadowing for the later flirt scene.
>All of the girls are happy to see her, and she is happy to see them.
She should definitely hug someone energetically. Maybe even a flustered Sigrun
>Kim's entire body is overtaken by the light now as she poses, arms outstretched.
A nude transformation scene in the middle of the street? Noice!
Seriously though, you managed to capture that animu feel very well
>Carmen goes down, unconscious, a dart sticking out of her neck.
*butt
>MEND! (not much of a match for me, I'll admit...)
I don't think he should reiterate the point of Mend's melee uselessness one more time
>A very tasteful upskirt shot of Kim
Uh-huh, of course, ve-e-ery tasteful
>A stuck-up looking conservative woman harrumphing.
Looks too similar to the old woman. Maybe a middle-aged couple (think Homer and Marge Simpson); the husband gawking, the wife disapproving?
>Give up?
Needs a pun in the end. And maybe some puns during the battle (from both sides), as well.
>Tropica and Anne-Marie are doign something cute and funny in the background
Hm? What do you have in mind, for example?
>The SUPERMOMS!!!
It would be realistic that a name coined by a journalist out of the blue, wouldn't be easily accepted. It'll help end the issue on a funny moment. E.g., like this:
BUZZ: But...they're not exactly teens anymore, are they?
BEV (thinking): Hm? He's right, I guess...
BUZZ: If this reporter may be so bold, perhaps they need a new name...
BEV (thinking): That's true! I wonder, what it could be?
BUZZ: This humble reporter suggests to call them...
BEV (thinking): The Power Women? The Wonder Ladies?
(new page)
BUZZ: ...THE SUPERMOMS!!!
BEV (thought panel in the lower part of the page): Wait, what?

All in all, great work!
>> No. 48905
>>48902
>This could lead to a long-term subplot of sorts where Shaundra keeps trying to procure solid evidence that her mother is a costumed crimefighter.
Could be interesting. May even at some point interfere with some Supermoms' operation, and Shaundra, feeling guilty, tries to make up for this (while keeping it secret, of course).
>He sure is glad he's not HER husband!
Heh, I love Junichi.
>Picture a number of conversations having underlying humor based on Betsy not knowing Bev's secret.
Another source of humor may be that even when Star-Striker fucks something up, Betsy hails this as a brilliant tactical move, much to Beverly's dismay.
>Donald tries to teach Anne-Marie combat moves, but all he knows are bad guy tactics from his days as a villain
Could be funny. Especially if it's not some dishonorable scum moves, but rather pompous camp villain moves (the ones, e.g., Darth Vader or Dr.Doom would use).
>but his overbearing, doting nanny is concerned about our heroine!
Btw, maybe Sigrun hires Olivia in the next episode? Before, she was homeschooling Alexander herself, but now she knows she has to spend more time away from home so she has to hire a nanny. That's why she wasn't shown in issue 1!

As for ideas, I've got a thought: maybe have a mom (Mend, maybe) have a little baby? Megumi is a small kid, and I mean a toddler. Could be cute + give more plot opportunities. What do you think?

And an idea for a part of a further episode: Supermoms have to deal with their newfound fans. Could be some fun moments. E.g.:
>Betsy conquering the position of President of Sapphire City's Official Star-Striker Fanclub by cunning intrigue and blatant threats (she's the head cheerleader, she's keen in these things)
>Keiichi becoming fan of Diva, which makes Shaundra angry (may be the reason she decides to tell him Candy's secret)
>Kaiju believing her fans to be reserved and intelligent people similar to her and her family, but discovering they mostly consist of the opposite (horny teens, or rowdy bikers, or the aforementioned loud black men, or all of the above), much to her dismay.
>Tropica, on the contrary, terrorizing her fans with her flirting of mass destruction.
And the villain in this issue may be a disgruntled fan who, e.g., is mad that the Teen Queens didn't answer his letter 15 years ago, or some shit like that
>> No. 48906
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>Oh no, villains, you di'nt!

I don't know how ghetto black MILFs usually dress, so no civvies for Diva.
>> No. 48907
>>48903
Working on making some changes. The scene with Carmen and her family is legit really, REALLY tough for me. I made it better than it was, but it's still not good. I just can't figure out how to make it work, to get Carmen's spiciness and wit across, while at the same time not totally burying the spiciness and wit of her husband and her daughter.

Thanks for the review! I'll upload the updated draft later tonight, probably.
>> No. 48908
>>48906
Very nice! I like it! All that's left is Sigrun's costume, and we'll have the complete team!
>> No. 48909
I had an idea for Mend, because I'm really not a fan of how useless she is in combat.

>by placing both fists together, Mend can create a shield bubble that can protect anyone within its radius. She can theoretically make them of any size, but most of the time it's only enough for a maximum of six people to fit inside.

Maybe in a future story, she discovers she can actually project her shield bubble like a projectile, giving her offensive capability? She's too sweet to really be offensive, but eventually, as a Supermom, she figures it out.
>> No. 48910
>>48905
I think Sigrun should have Oliva from the beginning. She does live in a giant mansion after all, and why would an Asgardian warrior lower herself to tasks like cleaning and cooking?
>> No. 48911
Made a bunch of changes. I still need to figure out how to write the scene where Carmen is interacting with her family. It's better than it was in the first draft, but I still don't like it. Any help would be greatly appreciated.

Dropbox link remains the same, but the file is revised. >>48901

Also, it is now 43 pages long due to changes.
>> No. 48912
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>You won't get away with it, villain~
Tried simplifying Mend's costume a bit, and show her chubbiness a bit more prominently. Her costume has now reached hentai levels of unrealistic nipple coverage lol Should I tone it down maybe?

>>48908
Thanks!
>>48909
A good idea. This power could help her heal people without worrying about villains interrupting her.
Dunno about the offensive bubble tho, I kinda like the idea of a totally defensive hero in a superhero team.
>>48910
I think there are different people hired to do cooking, cleaning, gardening etc. Olivia is only a nanny. Maybe Alexander had a nanny before, but now Sigrun needs a person who could stay with Alexander for longer times, and on quick notice. So she fires the previous nanny, and finds Olivia. I just wanna their first meeting to be shown on panel
>>48907
>>48911
Okay, downloaded it; I'll read it a bit later, though, ok?
>> No. 48913
>>48912
We could always do a flashback to when Sigrun met Olivia.

Also, I'm pretty sure Danny is supposed to be shorter than Anne-Marie, for the /ss/ vibes.
>> No. 48914
>>48913
I thought he's just very young looking for his age?
>> No. 48915
>Olivia Les Bien
I JUST GOT IT
>> No. 48920
An idea I had for some of the kids:

>Betsy, Maria, Shaundra, Keiichi and Alexander all go to the same high school
>Betsy and Maria are freshmen, Shaundra and Keiichi are juniors, Alexander is a sophomore
>Betsy is in a class taught by Sigrun
>all of Alexander's friends are not the kind of dudes you would expect a spoiled mama's boy to hang out with (stoners?)
>Alexander's friends think his mom is hella weird (but hot)
>Alexander receives preferential disciplinary treatment and everybody thinks it's because his mom is a teacher, but it's really because his mom and the female principal are VERY good friends
>Shaundra and Keiichi always eat lunch together
>Shaundra has truancy problems
>Betsy is a cheerleader
>Maria is on the girls' soccer team
>Betsy is struggling in Sigrun's mythology class and needs to do well or she's off the cheerleading squad

Any other ideas?
>> No. 48924
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After reading the scripts, mai new waifu :3
This is the maskless version (her civilian identity wears glasses, so it's possible); the masked version follows in the next post.

Had another idea. How about a "dark"/"goth" girl?
She's be ~5-7 years younger than the Supermoms (~27-30 years), with a baby (from my earlier idea), dunno about her husband (if she has one; maybe she lives with the babydaddy as a boyfriend without marrying him?). She's British (maybe half-Iranian/Romani/name-exotic-nationality), lives and operates in Britain and maybe Europe. 15 years ago, she was supposed to join the Teen Queens in a few years, but then they suddenly disbanded. She held a little grudge for that, but was able to successfully operate the whole time as a solo heroine. Her powers are mystical/magical (what they are exactly, I dunno yet), she's basically a mage/witch. Her costume could be gothy with a nod to Vertigo heroes (especially, Dream and Death from Sandman). Her character is rather cynical, but well-meaning. She could meet the Supermoms in a future issue where they learn of her fate, and despite holding a small grudge against them, she helps them with their mission (not forgetting to use every opportunity for sarcastic commentary and jabs), but at the end she refuses to join the Supermoms, instead choosing the position of their sometime ally in Europe.
What do you think about her?

>>48920
I like all of them, except:
>but it's really because his mom and the female principal are VERY good friends
This just sounds like an assumption that lesbians/bisexuals chase after every vagina that crosses their path, and it's silly.
Instead, Sigrun strikes me as a rather cold individual, very introverted, who shuts herself from most people (especially, romantically). She may, e.g., comment about how beautiful someone looks etc., since those reactions happen subconsciously, and she can't always hide them. But checking out some hot babes is one thing, having relationships with half the Sapphire City's women is another. A relationship requires human interaction, and it's not something Sigrun is great at. It says a lot about Olivia that she managed to crack that shell.
>> No. 48925
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>>48924
The masked version. It parallels the other heroines' costumes (and is a subtle nod to Norse helmets), but as I said, she doesn't necessarily need a mask, so I dunno.

I'll also doodle a Sigrun in civvies, maybe
>> No. 48927
>>48924
I prefer maskless. I feel that one member of the team shouldn't wear a mask, and Sigrun should be it.

As for the principal thing, I feel that. Perhaps the only person Sigrun's only really "open" to is Olivia, which could be explored down the line. Instead, Alexander could get preferential treatment because his mother is a teacher, despite Sigrun's objections. He thinks he's off the hook, but his mother is not as forgiving as the principal!
>> No. 48928
>>48920
More ideas:
>Shaundra is in danger of failing and must enlist her boyfriend, Keiichi, to tutor her. Kim shrinks down to ant size and secretly monitors them just to make sure there's no funny business going on, but then has to contend with a very testy spider, all while trying to stay out of sight of her son and his girlfriend.
>Sigrun and Beverly want to teach Anne-Marie how to fight, so the three of them go to Sigrun's mansion, where Bev and Anne-Marie meet Olivia for the first time, leading to a flashback of how Sigrun first hired Olivia.
For that one, what I'm thinking is that Sigrun homeschooled Alexander until he was a teenager, but then he wanted to go to a regular school and hang out with people his age. Sigrun then hired Olivia as a nanny and maid to help keep up with Alexander as she became a teacher herself.
>Yolanda convinces Carmen to not use her powers in her shop for one day, which turns out disastrous when it is revealed Carmen is actually very, VERY terrible with plants without her powers. Yolanda however has an affinity for plants and helps her mom through it.
What I'm thinking for that one is that Yolanda actually (sort of) inherited her mother's powers. While Carmen can control plants, Yolanda can talk to them. This would be a long-term thing, where for a long time it would be played off as Yolanda just using a figure of speech "you've just gotta listen to the plants, mom," before way down the line being revealed that she can actually talk to them. Maybe? I don't know.
>Beverly finds a makeshift superhero costume in Betsy's room. When she confronts Betsy about this, Betsy says she wants to be Star-Striker's sidekick. Later, Betsy tracks down Star-Striker and attempts to help her, using the makeshift sidekick costume, but almost gets really hurt and the bad guy gets away because of her, leading Star-Striker to give Betsy a major talking to. Beverly doesn't like hurting her daughter's feelings, but she has to nip this in the bud. When Betsy tells her mother about her interaction with Star-Striker, she interpreted Star-Striker's hurtful words as "just work harder, kiddo, and you'll be a proper sidekick in no time," much to Beverly's chagrin. While Betsy's superheroic attempts have been taken care of for now, the fire under her is only stronger.
>The girls all have another get-together and Donald shows up with Anne-Marie, leading to them all reminiscing (in flashback form) about the Teen Queens' dealings with Donald when he was Shadow Boy, and his and Anne-Marie's romance. Perhaps, in a fight the Teen Queens had against Shadow Boy, he inadvertently got pretty hurt, and Mend went to heal him out of compassion, both instantly becoming aware of insane chemistry between them. Something like that.
>Donald's parents, former supervillains, come to visit. They don't know Anne-Marie's secret, nor do they know she knows Donald's secret, nor do they know that she knows that they used to be supervillains. They're supposedly in town to visit their son and daughter-in-law (who does her best to try and act cutely evil around them), but really, it's for one last score. Anne-Marie has to foil their plans without alerting her teammates, because Donald doesn't want his parents to go to jail or get beat up at this stage in their lives, so she resorts to what she knows best: killing them with kindness and getting to their hearts through their stomachs.
>Carmen has parent-teacher conferences for every single one of her kids and ends up flirting with each of the 5 teachers she has to meet with.
>Beverly realizing just how smart her son is as Ben very nearly discovers her identity multiple times. This could be something that plays out one near-reveal at a time over several issues.
>Shaundra saves up enough money from her job at the local mall to get a car. The very first time she takes it anywhere, it is destroyed as Diva battles a supervillain. Even though Diva herself did not destroy the car, Shaundra is still pissed off at her mom beyond belief, and Candy can't figure out why. Basically it's more of the Shaundra/Candy dynamic where Shaundra knows Candy's secret but won't say it outright and Candy doesn't know that Shaundra knows, and doesn't get the hints.

What do you guys think of these?

Also, in the script posted, I just kind of ad-libbed Donald's powers (shadow manipulation) based off of his former villain name. Is that cool?

I'm also trying to think of some good storylines involving the villains described in >>48804 but I'm drawing a blank. Anyone?
>> No. 48930
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Siggy in her civvies.
Sure that's not quite within regulations, but Sigrun isn't the kind of women who follows regulations, and no one has the heart to reprimand her. Besides, she's the best mythology teacher in the whole tri-state area, so the school's administration is interested in keeping her, no matter what

Finally got to read the redone script, here's some commentary:

>I have to admit, it WOULD be fun to get back in costume and fight crime again...
>...but first, I'd have to get it tailored. I'm not the young woman I once was...
>Besides, it's not like I'd ever actually have to USE it!
Still some weird logic. She wants to get back in costume and fight crime, but doesn't have to use it? Lolwut
Maybe rephrase it as she just wants to see how it looks on her, not fight crime in it. She's a wealthy woman, so she can afford to retailor a costume just to satisfy one whim. However, she's a rather level-headed woman who doesn't usually follow her whims; so it's also hint for the reader that she actually subconsciously isn't that much against superheroing...
>Supercrime's basically NONEXISTENT these days anyway!
It would pack more punch if you put "..."'s in the beginning of this line and at the end of the previous one
>I have just the THING to bring them back...
>My REVENGE will bring them back...back...to their DOOM!
Maybe rephrase this a bit? E.g., into "I'll have my REVENGE! I've just the THING to bring them back..." "...back... to their DOOM!"
>As Beverly is buttoning up her blouse, we can see she is wearing a lacy, almost-risque blouse.
Yum.
With an expensive dark-colored bra underneath, of course
>Ben...
>Ben...
>What? It's TRUE...
This bit of dialogue should be in a separate panel. And maybe change the "..."'s into exclamation marks?
>Très chanceux for you, Alexander, YOUR wonderful MÈRE does!
Maybe make it less a generic compliment, and more of an argument towards Alexander? With some double meaning as a bonus. E.g., "Being physically fit you will surely attract attention of ze ladies, Alexander! Just like your mere..."
>Carmen-Juan-Yolanda bit
I like how it turned out! A very energetic bit!
>Donald's menacing arrival and Donald's shadow powers
I like both. Good job!
>Anne-Marie leans to the side so Donald can kiss her on the cheek.
>Donald leans forward to give Anne-Marie a quick kiss, and she leans toward him cheek-first to receive it.
That kiss-hungry Donald! I understand him completely
Seriously, though, you should probably leave just the second kiss
>I'll miss you!
I think this line may be culled, since this bit of dialogue is too cluttered. And maybe combine both of Donald's lines
>I, thine teacher, MS. ODINSDOTTER, shall venture forth and learn more about this apparent THREAT!
Dunno if this line is really necessary. The "PUPILS! Remain in yon seats!" line already showed that she cares about her students, and her strong-willed character.
>Panel 4. Anne-Marie is pulling her costume on.
Come on! Just one panel??? jk
This could be one panel where she desperately tries to pull the top down enough to cover her boobs, to no avail.
>Suddenly, Anne-Marie, in her Mend costume, comes out of nowhere, scaring Beverly.
I have an idea – maybe Mend can levitate while in her bubbles? That could look cute, and give her some versatility. And in this scene, she could appear levitating in a bubble – would make a nice contrast with the ground-bound Beverly.
>Well, it was a tight FIT, and it doesn't cover all it USED to, but I had to make do on such SHORT NOTICE. I guess I've FILLED OUT a bit, heh.
There's still a contradiction. She told the girls she's already been fighting crime in this costume. But in this issue she's shocked that the costume doesn't quite fit. Maybe at the meetup she tells the girls she's *thinking* of fighting crime again, but didn't actually do it before the events of this issue. What do you think?
>Beverly changing into costume
Heh, noice. I'll try to (re)design Star-Striker's costume soon.
>Beverly struggles to fasten her Star-Striker bikini.
Bikini top, maybe?
>Kim-Carmen parallel scenes
Maybe in her panels, Kim could be thinking something disapproving? Or talking to Junichi on the phone?
>Mmm, I LOVE our audience!
Heh, nice. Maybe something less blatant this time, more playful like "My my, looks like we have an AUDIENCE!" *winks and blows kiss* Would also be a parallel to the next page that opens with an audience of Kim and her family watching TV
>Normally, I'd have a witty one-liner to throw at you, but I'm kind of rusty, so...
>Give up?
Hahah, nice!
>We see Anne-Marie healing Beverly of her wounds with her healing kiss.
Unf

All in all, it shaped up very nicely! (just like our Supermoms, heheh)
Sorry if I missed any undiscussed changes you did

>More ideas
I like those.
As a thought, maybe most of those could be made into small episodes, centered on each specific Supermom. Like, we could have issues with a single, big plot featuring all Supermoms, and then an issue with several small stories about each Supermom. An anthology, if you will. It could include the following stories:
>Kim spying on Keiichi and Shaundra (maybe when she fights the _mutated_ spiders or is tied up by them, she misses the actual "funny business" going on between the two lovebirds (kissing etc, no sex of course, they're underage)
>Carmen doesn't use her powers in the shop. Maybe something superheroic happens, too (like, a villain, I dunno really)
>Betsy wants to be a sidekick (Could start with a funny scene: "Mom, I decided I don't want to become a superhero anymore!" "Whew, that's great, I knew you'd listen to reason, etc." "I want to be a sidekick!" *facepalm*)
>Anne-Marie's in-laws come to visit.
>How Sigrun met Olivia (maybe with some Sigrun-centered superhero plot going on in the present)
>Something Candy something
My "Supermoms meet their fans" idea could also be a short story, but featuring all of the Supermoms.
What do you think?

>Carmen has parent-teacher conferences for every single one of her kids and ends up flirting with each of the 5 teachers she has to meet with.
Dunno, the plot feels kinda unwieldy. Maybe if she manages to flirt with the 5 of them at the same time?
>> No. 48931
>>48930
P.S.:
>Something Candy something
Should be "Diva's fight wrecks Shaundra's car". Sorry, forgot about this idea initially
>> No. 48932
>>48930
>Maybe at the meetup she tells the girls she's *thinking* of fighting crime again, but didn't actually do it before the events of this issue
Yeah, I suggested that earlier, but I don't know if the guy who wrote the first script made the changes, but I'm just working based on those changes having been made. I did change a bit of dialogue in the opening of my script so it's more obvious that she hasn't actually done any superheroics yet.
>Kim-Carmen parallel scenes
For those, it's two things.
1. I kind of want a boring, monotonous vibe to the Kim scenes to better contract it with the Carmen scenes.
2. I can't think of enough dialogue to fill up all of Kim's scenes, and the panels are all going to be smaller on those two pages than normal what with the 8 panels per page for that sequence, so I can't really fit any significant dialogue in there anyway.

Made some changes to the script, same download link but updated version, hopefully it's a bit better. Someone who is better at writing Scottish dialogue please change Anne-Marie's lines because I have no idea how to do that and have it come across well.
>> No. 48933
>>48930
I like the "Supermoms meet their fans" idea. What about Sigrun and Anne-Marie's fans? What would they be like?

Another idea I had:
Our heroines face their toughest foe yet, and the only one who can save them is...Mend? The Supermoms face the elderly villain known only as Granny, an evil witch with vast magical powers over food! Granny's evil, sentient army of foodstuffs have our heroines on the ropes, and it's up to Anne-Marie and her baking skills to save the day! It ends with Anne-Marie getting ahold of Granny's spellbook and modifying the recipes to make good food minions to combat Granny's evil food minions, like healthy alternatives or something. Or perhaps Granny's evil food is the healthy stuff and the food Anne-Marie makes is unhealthy?

I'm trying to think of clever food-based minions for Granny but I'm drawing a blank. Any suggestions?
>> No. 48936
>The script
It's even better now!
One point I'd revise is:
>Alexander, think of all the lovely jeune filles being physically fit will attract, just like your mère!
It sounds kinda incest-y as it's phrased now. When I suggested, I meant "you'll attract women, just like your mom does" – it can be understood as a clumsy attempt at saying "you'll attract women, just like your mom attracts men", or it may mean something else entirely...

>Mend
Ah, now I understand. Thanks for the clarification

>Kim-Carmen
Hm, I dunno, it kinda feels superfluous... Maybe cut the Kim parts altogether, after all? Or if we keep the copypasted panels, maybe Kim would be the only one who changes her pose and facial expression, to show that she's very worried and desperately thinking about something?

>Granny
I like this plot, especially the "villain uses healthy food, hero uses unhealthy food" subversion! The name "Granny" is kinda bland, maybe something more pompous e.g. "Granola Granny"? As for minions, those could also be based on healthy food (e.g., "Tofu Toughguy" or "Herbal Hitman" etc). Or maybe have the minions be actual mutated or genetic engineered healthy food! Btw, the plot could require all the Supermoms helping Mend (who takes the lead for this mission) in her baking. Thus we would learn that Kim cooks pretty well (however, traditional Japanese food isn't very unhealthy), Carmen could cook Spicy Latin food (however, they can't find much spices in Mend's house), Candy creates huge sandwiches with lots of different filling, while poor Beverly has to remember her badly neglected cooking skills (having a househusband does it to you), but she's not as bad as Sigrun, who always had servants to do that kind of thing.

Btw,
>Carmen has parent-teacher conferences for every single one of her kids and ends up flirting with each of the 5 teachers she has to meet with.
This might actually work as (part of) a NSFW doujin plot. We have that side to our project, too, remember?

>I like the "Supermoms meet their fans" idea. What about Sigrun and Anne-Marie's fans? What would they be like?
Thanks!
I don't think every Supermom should have easily identifiable fans – only when it can be a basis for jokes and funny situations (I'll be glad if you could help think of more of them).
Each Supermom has their own fanclub, plus maybe there's a general Supermoms fanclub as well (not too sure of that, tho; maybe there's just a SupermomCon where all six fanclubs meet, and where the issue will take place).
The only visually distinct fanclub is Kaiju's, inexplicably (well, actually the reason are her frequent pantyshots on national TV, but no one's brave enough to tell her that) full of horny teens / ghetto black men / biker thugs / guido douches etc. (btw, should it be all of those, or a single group?). Kaiju's stressed and embarrassed reaction to that could become a running gag of sorts. E.g., in a further issue she could get an invitation to a concert from her fans, she puts on her classiest evening gown, expecting classical music maybe – only to find out it's the presentation of a hip hop album tribute to her by a local rapper crew. Etc, etc. Junichi could also "help" matters by vocally decrying the fandom and their actions.
Sigrun could get different fans, but among them some conservative folks. They would laud Sigrun as "a fine example of an all-American woman" who upholds "all-American family values" etc etc, much to her chagrin. She'll finally snap and tell them that while she respects the country, she's not even American (she's Valhallan on leave on Earth). But even she doesn't have the gall to tell those fine but misguided folks that she's not Christian (she's Norse pagan, of course), and as for "traditional family values"... She won't mind hanging around some of the "concerned mothers" from her fanclub, though
Diva's fanclub would get more girls/women (much to Sigrun's dismay), due to them admiring her double success as a superhero and as a singer. But there would be some boys, too, notably Keiichi – which leads to many angering situations for Shaundra.
Star-Striker – dunno (except Betsy strongarming her way into the President position, and organizing many Star-Striker-related events etc).
Tropica – dunno; she would shamelessly flirt will all of her male fans, though (the legal ones, of course; though she could make comments like "come back in a few years" to especially cute teenage boys, too) – which may even scare some of them. She doesn't understand Kaiju's problem, and would try to hit on some of her most insolent fans (scaring them away humorously).
Mend – despite being the less useful attack-wise, she surprisingly gets the biggest and most active fanclub of all Supermoms, due to her charming personality, the help she offers civilians, and her cute looks, too. It may be even a gag that in any civilian place the Supermoms go after that (e.g., a hospital, a police station, a research lab, even a prison among convicts) they would find at least one faithful Mend fan. Many of her fans most of all remember the fight where she defeated Shadow Boy (and some fans actively hate him for being Mend's nemesis), which makes her rather embarrassed (however, Donald himself takes it with humor).
>> No. 48937
>>48936
>Diva's fanclub would get more girls/women (much to Sigrun's dismay), due to them admiring her double success as a superhero and as a singer
They wouldn't know she's a singer. Candy is the one who's the singer, not Diva. At least, that was my understanding.

As for Star-Striker's fanclub, I think the focus should be on Betsy. Other than her intense fangirlism, the Star-Striker club is the most normal of them all. Betsy tries to lead it astray with her insane leadership, though.

Maybe "Granny Granola" for the health food villain? While Anne-Marie doesn't have many spices in her house, Carmen quickly grows some peppers for them to use. Nice little use of Carmen's powers to help her team out.

>Olivia's line
How does this sound: "Alexander, being physically fit will make you very attractive to the fairer sex, just look at your mère!" While "the fairer sex" always means women, it could be interpreted as Olivia thinking it means "the opposite sex."

I got rid of Kim's scenes interspersed with Carmen's transformation scene. I always thought that would seem kind of superfluous, and I think Carmen's transformation is something that deserves a page all to itself. The script is updated, although there are hardly any changes, just what I already listed.
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>Okay, Jenkins, I want this report done in two hours. If you fail, even Star-Striker won't help you!

>I'm also trying to think of some good storylines involving the villains described in >>48804 but I'm drawing a blank. Anyone?
>Sinister Sorceress Seductra
How about a plot where ex-Seductra tries to rally the people against the Supermoms on the basis of their costumes being too lewd. Some of the Supermoms feel guilty and try to redesign their costumes, the others (e.g., Tropica or Sigrun) say "fuck it", etc etc. However, later they learn that she is Seductra, and this campaign is part of some evil plan for defeating the Supermoms. They defeat her, and decide to keep their old, if somewhat skimpy, costumes as a sign of their defiance. Dunno really how this plot would play out, but it would explain why the Supermoms choose to keep their not-quite-fitting costumes after issue 1. Maybe Seductra learned that these costumes were imbued by some cosmic power on Teen Queens' last mission, and if they make new costumes they would lose that power?
>Leonard Drakethorpe (aka Lord Darkthorne)
He's Beverly's boss; neither knows each other's secret. Plots may be based around that, with Supermoms trying to stop LD's evil scheme while SS tries to keep it secret from her boss, and LD trying to keep it secret from Beverly. Or maybe, Supermoms actually contact Leonard and discuss their plans with him, not knowing he's Lord Darkthorne. LD would use that to his advantage, but he still doesn't know Beverly is SS, and that could prove helpful to the Supermoms.
There could also be an added twist, that Leonard could have an unrequited crush on Beverly. He wouldn't be shy to let Bev know about it, semi-constantly trying to seduce her – not in a "creepy loser" way, but in a "suave older gentleman" way. She isn't interested, however, as she loves her husband. She doesn't tell on him, since he's a pretty decent guy (to her, at least), and she respects him for building the company from the ground-up and doing a lot for its success.
>Victoria Timberlake
Well, an idea for a plot is explained in the post you quote. Maybe a side-story in an episode, and after that she could become a semi-recurring support character
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>>48938
>Okay, honey, I need you in our bed in five minutes! If you fail, even Star-Striker won't help you!
or in the NSFW world,
>Okay, Mr.Drakethorpe, just this one time! And if you fail to make me cum at least five times, even Star-Striker won't help you!

>They wouldn't know she's a singer. Candy is the one who's the singer, not Diva.
Oops. I dun goof'd.
>As for Star-Striker's fanclub, I think the focus should be on Betsy. Other than her intense fangirlism, the Star-Striker club is the most normal of them all. Betsy tries to lead it astray with her insane leadership, though.
Agreed.
>Maybe "Granny Granola" for the health food villain?
Sounds good
>While Anne-Marie doesn't have many spices in her house, Carmen quickly grows some peppers for them to use. Nice little use of Carmen's powers to help her team out.
Hot spices and sweet cookies! By your powers combined...
>"Alexander, being physically fit will make you very attractive to the fairer sex, just look at your mère!"
Sounds good! Maybe have "Just look at your mère..." as a separate sentence, to attract the readers' attention to it
>I got rid of Kim's scenes interspersed with Carmen's transformation scene.
Agreed with your choice.
>> No. 48941
>>48938
I think the character of Victoria Timberlake definitely needs to be fleshed out. Here's what I'm thinking:

>owns and operates a beauty salon
>always impeccably well-dressed and well-groomed, looks ten years younger than she actually is
>she and Steve divorced when they were younger and she was less mature, and she regrets it, but is happy for Beverly to have found herself such a catch
>she and Bev frequently swap stories about Steve, much to his embarrassment

But that's all I got. I have no ideas for stories involving her.
>> No. 48942
>>48941
I like all this

Maybe the story would be Bev actually meeting Steve's ex-wife for the first time, and finding out she's Vicky, her old enemy in school. They haven't seen each other since school, and all things considered, they hit off with a rocky start. But something villainous happens, Bev can't put SS's costume on in front of Vicky, so the two women have to, e.g., escape the villain's lair together. Due to all these common experiences, they know each other better, and bond. The other Supermoms have to fight the villain and save the day this time. After it all ends, Steve with horror learns that Bev and Vicky have become bffs
>> No. 48947
i'm rewriting and editing part two. there's about four issues' worth of stuff here, so i'll probably split it up and flesh it out if needed.

and since it wouldn't make sense for there to be only a handful of female supers, i'm going to make up a few males.

>Gunner Graves (-); mild Batman ripoff; super-strength, -toughness, -speed
>Kid Devil (Rico Tejas); cross between Ghost Rider and Rey Mysterio; magical lucha mask, blessed by Aztec gods
>Flying V (Topher Baylass); can convert sound into kinetic force; carries a guitar as his channeling medium (has gone through about twelve guitars; used to call himself SG til that one broke)
>Eisenschwarz (Hans Freleng); black armor grows naturally out of his flesh and auto-adjusts to optimally protect against any attack; one of the strongest beings alive
>Eagle and Raven (Lucas Row and Antony Buzetti); both have the gift of prophecy and martial arts ability due to witnessing a resurrection event of Eagle and Raven gods while exploring an ancient temple; Eagle is a supreme martial artist, while Raven is a supreme prophet; powers increase in the presence of the other, though they can no longer stand being around each other--Raven slept with Eagle's wife

only Gunner Graves is being mentioned.
>> No. 48948
>>48947
>i'm rewriting and editing part two.
Great! What would it be about?

>and since it wouldn't make sense for there to be only a handful of female supers, i'm going to make up a few males.
Hmm, I really dunno... what's the point in these?
I mean, they sound cool by themselves, I'd read a separate series about a hero with a badass name like Gunner Graves, – but what's their point in Supermoms? I thought, superhero activity has ended in Sapphire City after supervillain activity was eliminated? Or were these heroes who existed 15 years ago, when supercrime was rampant and there were a lot of superheroes?
And btw, it'd be cool if the Teen Queens / Supermoms were Sapphire City's main superhero protectors. Why should it be always men? I for one welcome our skimpily dressed female overlords!
And anyway. What's the point of these male heroes story-wise? Our story is about Supermoms, so secondary characters are usually defined in their relation to primary ones. And don't forget that Supermoms is a humorous and somewhat silly story (just look at the plot suggestions, the villains, etc) – but I don't get that feeling from your male hero suggestions. As of now, sorry but these sound like some random heroes from a random story, not Supermom characters.

Sorry for the tl;dr, and sorry if this critique sounded too harsh; you know I love (we all love) your writing to bits, so if something irks me like that it's a notable exception.
>> No. 48949
>>48948
Btw, trying to think of male superhero ideas myself. Feel free to disregard them, of course, or if you like them they could be easily conflated with your names-and-powers list (I'll mostly try to think of personalities and story-wise roles).

>Male No.1
>15 years ago he was the dreamiest male hero in Sapphire City, and all Teen Queens had crushes on him. 15 years later, he was hit hard by supercrime (and superheroing) disappearance, not managing to build a decent life for himself outside superheroing. Now middle-aged, beer-bellied, balding and going through a midlife crisis, he's a sad sight to behold. He still believes he's a God's gift to women, and in this arrogance tries to hit on all Supermoms at the same time, with disastrous results. After their adventure together, he learns some humility, and the Supermoms accept him as an ally and even a friend, offering him a helping hand in getting back on his feet. Maybe Tropica and Mend even conspire to find him a nice woman and set up a series of blind dates with humorous (due to Male No.1's faults) results

>Male No.2
>A middle-aged (a bit older than Supermoms) guy, who has the "just a job" attitude towards superheroing. He acts like a blue-collar worker, enjoying sports discussions and coffee in the break room, joining the tri-state labor union of superheroes and sidekicks where he battles for things like 15% tax cuts and paid holidays, is pretty laid-back and kinda lazy. He's a nice guy, all in all, just maybe not too enthusiastic – hey, he just has a family to feed

>Male No.3
>The only young person to enter superheroing after 15 years of silence. This very young man (or even a teenager?) was motivated by Supermoms' televised fights. He's a wide-eyed young idealist, pretty naive and clueless, but very enthusiastic towards superheroing. Male No.2 usually makes friendly jokes about this kind of attitude, but even he admits that Male No.3 is a valuable addition to SC's superhero roster. Supermoms (primarily Star-Striker, being the responsible person she is) sometimes take the guy under their wing, to make him less clueless and teach him the ropes. Possible later love interest for Betsy

>Males No.4 and No.5
>Gay guys in love with each other. They're open about it, which for some reason prompts mixed reactions from Sigrun. Nobody knows why, maybe she doesn't like gay people?..
>Dunno if actively pressing the gay theme (not in hints like Sigrun, but openly) fits the project's CN'ish style? If yes, we could devise actual personalities for the couple, if not, disregard them

>Male No.6 (Jimmy Christmas)
>15 years ago, he was an urban street thug turned to superheroing using the powers of Black Kung Fu. Nowadays, James Z. Christmas is a successful manager in the same company as Bev (they know each other and are on somewhat friendly terms). When superheroing waned, Jimmy revealed his identity and built a successful career. He wasn't a very popular hero back then, so his past doesn't interfere much with his current life. His only problem, is the weird affinity to silly stereotypical jive slang he just can't rid of no matter what he tries...

>Male(?) No.7
>A weird pale shape resembling a man who sometimes appears out of nowhere during crucial moments, often in improbable places, and offers cryptic advice. Is he a ghost? An alien? A dimensional traveler? A mutant? A time traveller? Nobody knows. Too bad his advice is too cryptic for anyone to understand so he doesn't really help anyone.

>Male (somewhat) No.8
>An alien with a completely alien physiology and psychology. Possibly an embassador from the only friendly space-faring alien civilization. If needed, will flesh him out later
>> No. 48950
>>48949
And btw, had ideas about the Teen Queens' personalities and looks back then. I'll probably soon draw them to have a visual image supporting these ideas

>Star-Striker
Still the leader, but much more energetic (today she's more of a calm, reserved leader). She resembled Betsy both in looks and in attitude more than she would herself admit.
Her looks were pretty much the same, except for long hair and a less curvy body.

>Diva
A sassy no-nonsense girl, somewhat snarky. Not as lazy and laid-back as she is now.
She wasn't as rubenesque as she is now, but she already had a rather admirable booty. Btw, I'm thinking of changing the afro into another ridiculous hairdo, I'll maybe draw what I mean later.

>Tropica
Just as energetic as she is now, however her energy was then equally divided between arguing, chasing after boys, and endless jokes and pranks – the latter was what she was most known about. inb4 rule63 Carlos
She didn't have that seductive appearance back then, looking more like Latina brat with dem eyebrows

>Kaiju
She was as shy as she is now, but less of a "has a strict conservative moral center" shy, and rather "not quite sure of herself" shy. She was the bookworm of the bunch.
Being near-sighter, she wore glasses – now she wears contact lenses.

>Sigrun
The awkward one. Having just arrived from Valhalla, and having been raised in a sheltered environment, she had little to no social skills to speak of. Very socially inept and introverted, she was a pretty difficult person to be around. However, the Teen Queens offered their friendship and support, and Sigrun would always stand for her friends.
Being very tall and thin, but not as statuesque as nowadays, it added to the general awkwardness of her appearance. She wore twin braids as opposed to one braid today.

>Mend
The cheerful tomboy. As kind-hearted and cheery as she is today, but more boyish.
Short somewhat unkempt hair, gap tooth, abundant freckles, a toned body. Yep, tomboys sometimes do fill out nicely later in life, I know from experience As for her costume, back then the top part ended below her (small) breasts, and the bottom part covered more of her hips.
>> No. 48951
>>48949
P.S.: Oh, and of course, the Punisher-like grimdark antihero, who's a lone father of a small daughter who's into ponies, barbies and princesses

>>48950
Btw, Sigrun didn't wear glasses back then. She doesn't have any sight problems, she just wears glasses because she thinks they fit her civilian style.
>> No. 48953
>>48947
I don't know about all of these characters. It feels like featuring them heavily would take the focus away from the titular heroines.

I'd be fine with a sporadic team-up, but the sole focus should be the Supermoms themselves as they go on adventures and fight bad guys.
>> No. 48954
Btw, I just realized how improbable is the fact that Sigrun manages to maintain her secret identity. See for yourself:
>There's a mysterious heroine in Sapphire City called Sig Rune. Who could it be? Surely not the teacher Sigrun Odinsdottir, who is most probably the only person called "Sigrun" in the whole city, or even the whole state.
>But maybe it's a coincidence. Just like the fact that Sig Rune is a valkyrie from Valhalla, while Sigrun Odinsdottir the best mythology expert in the tri-state area, and probably one of the few Scandinavians (if not the only one) in the whole city.
>However, we still can't prove anything. Just look at Sig Rune's appearance! Surely, there are a lot of exceptionally tall, ideally built, beautiful 30-something women with very long blonde hair in Sapphire City!
>Oh, and how does Sigrun Odinsdottir look, you ask me? Exactly the same, just with a slightly different hairstyle and Supermanesque glasses.
Seriously, the sheer fact that no one in the whole city (and beyond) has put two and two together, is a miracle worthy of myth!
This could be made into a running gag, methinks, with Sig Rune stretching the probability even further with her actions (going into Sigrun Odinsdottir's mansion because "she's there to get some clues from the hired help", Sigrun donating money to Sig Rune's account because "she just happens to be her son's favorite heroine, right Alexander?" etc etc)
>> No. 48955
>>48954
I think a playful parody of comic book logic could be used around Sigrun's secret identity.

Also, I just realized that the Supermoms don't have an HQ/secret base. Should they? I feel they could only get away with so many "girls' nights" at Beverly's house while her family is away, and all those servants at Sigrun's house could be a liability.
>> No. 48956
>>48954
P.S.: Would be fun if every other Supermom at some point gets some one to at least suspect something fishy about her – but not Sig Rune. Never Sig Rune.
E.g., a paranoid superhero hunter (I remember we discussed a character like that!) could confide to Sigrun his suspicions about another Supermom, which would be based on tiny details and long-reaching conclusions, while he states that "you're probably the only person I'm sure is not a superhero", etc
>> No. 48957
>>48956
I like it!

I also like the paranoid superhero hunter idea. Perhaps a private eye comes to town, one who's ousted numerous superheroes and supervillains alike through the course of his career in a misguided attempt to make people feel safer. When he heard the Teen Queens were now the Supermoms, he figured it would be easy pickings. After all, how many moms are there in Sapphire City? The girls have to use their wits and cunning to trick this no-good detective and throw him off the trail! Perhaps they could engage in some costume swapping to trick him?
>> No. 48958
>>48955
>Also, I just realized that the Supermoms don't have an HQ/secret base. Should they?
They probably need a gathering place, since they're a team after all. A solo hero could operate from her home, but with a team you have to coordinate actions etc.
It probably needs to be something mom-related (to go along with the project's style of humor), but what? I'm drawing a blank here.

Or maybe they don't have a HQ, and instead go to "girls' nights out" to a bar/club (they may choose different bars/clubs each time; one time it may be a posh restaurant, the other time a male strip club heh heh), and discuss their matters there. Mend's bubble, imbued by Sig Rune's Valhallan magic, ensures that no one notices them drawing battle plans or discussing superhero things.
The only question is, do they change into costumes before going there, or do they do it right there inside the magical bubble? The second option is pretty kinky, but maybe it's a bit too kinky and could get repetitive after a while. Maybe they usually already go there in costume (the magical bubbles ensure that no one pays them any more attention than you'd pay some random civilian ladies) – but one time they're in a hurry and have to change right inside their bubble (bonus points if it's a posh restaurant this time, or a seedy biker club full of uncouth men blissfully unaware of MILFs stripping right under their noses. Dunno, what do you think?
>> No. 48959
>>48958
I think you're onto something. I don't know about long-term (I'm a secret lair guy - so sue me), but I wouldn't mind them meeting in a totally public place with magic making those around them none the wiser.
>> No. 48961
>>48957
That really sounds like a fun plot. Maybe after his first fail, he settles in the town, desperate to demask the Supermoms once and for all, and thus becomes a semi-recurrent annoyance?

>>48959
Or maybe it's not a bubble, but rather some magic/hitech gizmos that make them temporarily inconspicuous (not invisible mind you, just making others not pay any attention to them). That way, the "undressing while in a biker pub" scene could have a lot of visual funny/sexy gags (e.g., moms moving around the room between people, putting garments on tables or even people (e.g., a no-nonsense burly biker used as a temporary hanger for a mom's clothes), sitting on some shady cardplayers' table pulling on long boots, Candy not forgetting to steal a swig of liquor from the bar, etc.

>(I'm a secret lair guy - so sue me)
Me too! But I just can't imagine what it could be. It needs to be something funny and clever
>> No. 48962
>>48961
Maybe their secret base is hidden somewhere, where the owner of the property doesn't even suspect it. An idea I had is they set up shop in a secret basement of Vicky Timberlake's salon, with Vicky none the wiser. That would necessitate her becoming a regular character, of course.
>> No. 48963
>>48962
Dunno, that sounds too much like squatting.
And anyway, the whole concept is based on using things normal moms do, and upping them to eleven. I don't think squatting in their friend's house without them knowing is something common among middle-aged family women (if they were SuperCollegeStonerBros, on the other hand, it would fit quite nicely)
>> No. 48964
>>48962
>>48963
Just had an idea – how about they use some kind of club (in the "activity class" sense, not in the "dance bar" sense) as a front for their secret HQ? Real-life moms often visit such clubs. Could be e.g. a yoga class, or some kind of crafting club, I dunno, would like to hear suggestions on that matter. Anyway. One of the moms (Mend, maybe, as the initiator of the reunion, or Bev as the leader, or another one to give her a bigger role) could pose as the club's "instructor" (or they could create a non-existant identity for the "instructor"). Could lead to some funny moments when Vicky desperately tries to join the club, and the moms have to find some excuses to deny her.

The episode in the biker's bar (fun, but potentially dangerous) would be what prompts the Supermoms to search for a permanent solution.
>> No. 48965
>>48964
I was actually thinking yoga or pilates myself. Maybe Sigrun puts up the money for a space to pose as the facade, and they have a secret lair underneath., or perhaps , using the magic of technology, they can, at the touch of a button, transform a seemingly-normal yoga workshop into a superteam secret base.
>> No. 48966
>>48965
I think the latter would be better, because there could be a cool sequence as it transforms into a superhero base.
>> No. 48967
>>48965
>>48966
Agreed, the latter will be cooler. It could look like something out of James Bond or Nick Fury's SHIELD, with hitech gadgets and gizmos transforming out of seemingly mundane things
Btw, yoga or a similar physical class really seems to be a good front for superhero activity: that way no questions would be raised among clueless family members as to why the moms return home all tired and sweaty mmm, sweaty MILFs~
>> No. 48968
>>48967
So, Sigrun gets them the space since she's rich...

Kim and Beverly would be in charge of transforming it into a superhero lair, right? They're the smart ones in the group.

I also have an idea for the (fake) instructor of the "yoga class" all the girls join. When they need someone to play the role of "yoga instructor" to dissuade suspicion, they get Sigrun in a wig to do it, where Sigrun has to try and not act Asgardian, and in typical Sigrun secret identity fashion, it absurdly works somehow.
>> No. 48969
>>48928
Playing off of the "Betsy wants to be Star-Striker's sidekick" idea in this post, what if that way of thinking is set up by Betsy and Star-Striker meeting again, and Betsy helps Star-Striker out, leading Star-Striker to begrudgingly thank Betsy (knowing full well it's only going to fuel her fire even more), leading Betsy to want to be Star-Striker's sidekick? Perhaps Betsy yells for Star-Striker to move just in time to dodge a villain's attack or something.
>> No. 48971
>>48968
>Kim and Beverly would be in charge of transforming it into a superhero lair, right? They're the smart ones in the group.
Kim is the "smart" smart one. Bev is the "leadership and tactics" smart. So it would mostly be Kim.
Maybe 15 years ago, one of them (Kim or maybe Sigrun) managed to salvage most of the hitech equipment from their old Teen Queens lair? Then Kim just has to retrofit existing equipment into a pilates class disguise.
Btw, I actually think pilates may be a better front than yoga, because yoga is afaik a bit more relaxing.

>they get Sigrun in a wig to do it, where Sigrun has to try and not act Asgardian, and in typical Sigrun secret identity fashion, it absurdly works somehow.
Ahaha, that's funny
Note that they don't actually know she has disguise plot armor, they just pick her at random, or because it's her idea

>>48969
I agree with this idea. We should probably insert this bit in the next episode, what do you think guys? That way, Betsy could start wanting to become SS's sidekick to the 3rd issue or even at the end of the 2nd
But maybe SS doesn't actually understand she fueled Betsy's fire this one time (it was the heat of the battle, after all, she wasn't paying much attention) – so that Betsy's wish to become sidekick will come as a shock for her. Maybe it'll even be a good way to finish the issue – what do you think?
>> No. 48973
There should be a scene where Star-Striker is jealous of Tropica that her teenage daughter (Yolanda) knows her secret but doesn't want to be superhero or a sidekick
>> No. 48977
I'm thinking of the name for the front to the Supermoms' secret lair should be something kind of obvious, like "Secret Base Yoga & Pilates" or something like that, for humorous effect.

>>48973
I don't think anyone besides Carmen knows that Yolanda knows Carmen's secret.
>> No. 48982
>>48977
>"Secret Base Yoga & Pilates"
I like the idea, though maybe the name needs to be tweaked a bit, since "secret base" may mean a villain's or a government organization's secret base as well. Maybe smth like "Superheroine Yoga & Pilates"? Or just "Super Yoga & Pilates"... I dunno, let's juggle ideas.

>I don't think anyone besides Carmen knows that Yolanda knows Carmen's secret.
I guess Carmen would choose to tell other Supermoms about that (and asked them to keep it secret, of course). In a dire situation, information like that could be very useful and important
>> No. 48985
>>48982
Maybe there could be a page or so in the next issue where they talk about keeping their identities secret from their families, and Carmen feels obligated to bring up that Yolanda's known her secret for years now. Just a quick little thing.

As for the name, I like "Super Yoga & Pilates," with "Super" on the signage being significantly larger than the rest of the words.

Other secret identity things I came up with:

>running gag where Olivia never figures out Sigrun's secret despite Sigrun being REALLY obvious about it (Sig Rune walks into a room with nobody else in it and Sigrun walks out, etc.)
>Steve suspiciously notices that Star-Striker appears in a lot of places that his wife also was
>Shaundra drops tons of not-so-subtle hints that she knows her mom's secret but Candy just doesn't get it
>throughout Betsy's interactions with Star-Striker, Star-Striker says different things that elicit responses similar to "that sounds like something my MOM would say" "you sound like my MOM" "who do you think you are, my MOTHER?" etc.
>> No. 48986
>>48985
>after Shaundra tells Keiichi her mom's secret, Keiichi suddenly becomes super respectful and polite around Candy
>> No. 48989
>>48985
I agree with all of those.

>Steve suspiciously notices that Star-Striker appears in a lot of places that his wife also was
However I really dunno about this one. Steve seems a somewhat lightheaded and carefree guy, so him being suddenly very astute and attentive would be kinda strange... Maybe he, on the contrary, notices that constantly, but each time tells himself "Nah, it's probably nothing" or even creates himself a believable explanation of what should've happened.

And maybe, it could actually be Olivia who starts getting suspicious about Sigrun? Given that everyone else in the world is totally oblivious to it, this would give the reader one more sign that Olivia is really a special person in Sigrun's life.

As an aside, how about Beverly suddenly finding herself jealous at Star-Striker when her husband watches news about SS or recounts SS's latest exploits? Of course, Steve strikes me as a totally faithful and devoted guy, so it's all in her head. Still she can't help but feel that way, and at the same time acknowledges just how ridiculous this feeling is, towards your own alter ego. She may even voice her jealousy sometimes.

>>48986
I actually don't think Shaundra should tell Keiichi her mom's secret, or if she finally does he doesn't believe it a bit. And he probably already is polite and respectful towards her anyway, him being a well-brought up boy and her being the mother of his girlfriend.
>> No. 48997
>>48989
>Beverly suddenly finding herself jealous at Star-Striker
I like this, but it has to be handled a specific way. We can't have Steve be TOO into Star-Striker, or else it isn't all in Beverly's head. It would have to be real subtle behavior on his part, like for example Bev and Steve are just lounging around at home watching TV, something boring is on, neither of them is paying much attention, then the news comes on and it's about Star-Striker saving the day. Naturally, this more exciting thing gets Steve's attention, but Beverly sees it as her alter ego stealing her husband from her.

Maybe way down the line, a situation arises where Star-Striker and Steve are face to face and Star-Striker inadvertently makes some innuendo, to which Steve replies "no thanks, I'm very happily married to a fantastic woman" and that makes Bev's heart melt, and at least for a while she stops being jealous of herself.

>it could actually be Olivia who starts getting suspicious about Sigrun
I like this. The gags involving Sigrun's plot armor could be used on other characters, while Olivia suspects something from day one. Perhaps we keep Sig Rune and Olivia separate for a long time, maybe even tease them meeting, and then the first time they're face to face Olivia immediately recognizes Sigrun.

>I actually don't think Shaundra should tell Keiichi her mom's secret
I think it should be a thing where she really thinks it over long and hard, like there are multiple opportunities for her to tell him but she chooses not to after much internal deliberation, until they reach a point in their relationship where she can do so. OR, given her brash nature, she could accidentally let it slip in a bout of anger at her mother over something after trying so hard to not tell anyone for so long.
>> No. 48999
https://www.dropbox.com/s/aour48t1yiouyya/supermoms%202%20edit.celtx

Supermoms 2 edit is done. there are a few things i could still probably fix, but they're whatever. small things.

i don't think Sigrun should have ANY secret identity, but that's just me. i mean, Thor doesn't go around with a secret identity. he's just Thor. Hercules is just Hercules. she's a Valkyrie, for Pete's sake. too proud to hide, and too weird to do it effectively.

maybe her home is protected by some crazy Odinic magic or something, so she doesn't have to worry about Olivia or Alexander. and besides, she's not exactly a featherweight, let's remember.
>> No. 49001
>>48999
I think Sigrun should have a secret identity, as part of her living amongst humans, you know? She doesn't NEED to have a son, she doesn't NEED a job, but she does, because she's living amongst humans and wants to act like them. Think of it as like a learning adventure for her. Maybe in the past, when she was a Teen Queen, Sigrun didn't have a secret identity (maybe she was saying her real name to the first civilian to witness her power and they misinterpreted it as "Sig Rune" so that's how her name isn'y publicly known), but when the Teen Queens broke up to pursue normal life, she decided to give that a shot too.

Also, good humor can be derived from her secret identity plot armor.
>> No. 49002
>>48997
>Steve's behavior
Yeah, that's actually what I meant. You phrased it a lot better

>"no thanks, I'm very happily married to a fantastic woman"
I like this situation, so cute. Maybe the issue could end with Bev arriving home and being suddenly very tender towards Steve, who's surprised why, but of course doesn't complain hehe

>>48999
>Supermoms 2 edit is done.
I'm hype. I'll read it soon

>i don't think Sigrun should have ANY secret identity, but that's just me. i mean, Thor doesn't go around with a secret identity. he's just Thor.
Well, I mostly thought of her as a Wonder Woman analogue. WW is a proud amazon, but at the same time maintains a secret identity... just for the heck of it.
The main reason why I like Sigrun having a secret identity more, are the humorous possibilities. The project is humorous; and having this plot point could be used to generate endless gags and funny situations out of it. As well as an ironic jab at the concept of superhero secret identities in general (think of it as Identity Crisis, just with humor instead of rape)

>>49001
>she doesn't NEED a job, but she does
This. Remember that Sigrun has always been the awkward one, starting from her teen years. On the outside, she's that eternally beautiful proud godlike warrior maiden. But on the inside, she's still very insecure and wants to be accepted into human society, wants to lead a somewhat normal human life. Thus her need for a mundane job – and for a secret identity. She's a powerful mythical being, but she's not the person who can handle the stress of living 24/7 as a publicly known superhero.

>Maybe in the past, when she was a Teen Queen, Sigrun didn't have a secret identity (maybe she was saying her real name to the first civilian to witness her power and they misinterpreted it as "Sig Rune" so that's how her name isn'y publicly known)
I think that she did have the "Sig Rune" superhero name back then, but the origin you describe fits well. Maybe have a predecessor of Buzz Edison (a suspiciously similar reporter called, e.g., Yuri Tesla) ask for her superhero name, the awkward teen valkyrie (who wasn't ready for a question like that) stutters "S-sig... run", which he interpretes as "Sig Rune", and the name sticks (a parallel to how Buzz nonchalantly coined the "Supermoms" name). It could be on her first mission with the Teen Queens; and since then, she decided to use this name and have a secret identity.
>> No. 49003
>>48999
>Chocolate Frosted Sugar bombs
Ha! That's actually EXACTLY the cereal I was thinking of when I wrote the initial nameless description of Ben's cereal, but I didn't want to namedrop anything at the time.
>> No. 49004
>>48999
>i mean, Thor doesn't go around with a secret identity. he's just Thor.
Nowadays. Because comic writers started hating secret identities at some point for whatever reason.
>> No. 49005
>>48999
Really not a fan of secret identity-less Sigrun. We need to get a consensus on that because it seems to be the biggest issue right now.

>And I think I might've made a few NEW ones.
It took me a little bit to get what Bev was saying here, and I think it's a bit confusing for the average reader. I think "And I haven't EITHER" or something along those lines would be more clear.

>Betsy's interaction with Star-Striker
I think a line from Betsy like "she TALKED TO ME!!!" would work wonders for that scene.

Overall, very good!
>> No. 49006
https://www.dropbox.com/s/aour48t1yiouyya/supermoms%202%20edit.celtx

Supermoms 2 edit is done. there are a few things i could still probably fix, but they're whatever. small things.

i don't think Sigrun should have ANY secret identity, but that's just me. i mean, Thor doesn't go around with a secret identity. he's just Thor. Hercules is just Hercules. she's a Valkyrie, for Pete's sake. too proud to hide, and too weird to do it effectively.

maybe her home is protected by some crazy Odinic magic or something, so she doesn't have to worry about Olivia or Alexander. and besides, she's not exactly a featherweight, let's remember.
>> No. 49007
>>49006
Garuda, read your edit, it’s very good! I liked most of your changes and additions, they enhace the flow and feel of the story! Great job!

A little critique, if I may, though:
>11.2
As I said earlier, it’s not 1 panel, it’s 2. Too much action and replies for 1 panel.
>20.2
Dunno, I liked the annoyed “You’ve got to be kidding me” better than the terrified “Oh, God”
>20.6
>25.6
That’s why I earlier supported the idea of Supermoms being the only superheroes in SC. If there are a lot of superheroes already, why do they need to come out of retirement? But if there were no supervillains in the past 10-15 years, there was no need for superheroes. Now they started to appear again, spearheaded by Prof. Insidious – and that’s why the Teen Queens have to come out of retirement. Maybe some heroes (including males) start to appear *after* Supermoms return
>34.3 etc.
Actually (as was discussed earlier), I’m now more inclined to the opinion that these Kim panels are superfluous here. Especially, so many similar ones.
>36.2
Why does Candy say that? Especially when Tropica says the same thing just a page later?
>37.2
She couldn’t have “missed him”. Buzz is a young guy, younger than the Supermoms (~25-30 y.o.?). When the Teen Queens were active, he was a preteen boy.
In the previous edit, Tropica just saw a cute reporter looking at her, and instinctively flirted with him. I liked the “Looks like we’ve got an audience” line, btw
Or maybe, you could make it as if Carmen knows Buzz from his TV reports she watched in the years after her retirement. Then she could say smth along the lines of “Hey, aren’t you that reporter guy from Channel 6? I always thought you’re a cutie” *blows kiss*
>45.2
I dunno, I kinda liked in the previous edit when Prof.Insidious listed the Supermoms he defeated and suddenly found out he forgot about the sixth one. It was pretty funny!
>46
Why did you get rid of most of the spectators? Imo, the Junichi panel worked better when it followed a longer line of other spectator panels.
>46.5
A nice joke, but makes the reader ponder a lot of unnecessary questions. What, is an accidental shot of tasteful underwear on an adult woman “2lewd” for afternoon TV, so that they cancel an urgent report on a massive catastrophe in the middle of the city? It’s like if a channel stopped the 9/11 live feed because some onlooker said “Oh, fuck”
>52.3
Don’t like the gratuitous Spanish here. And too wordy, too, maybe. She’s flirting with him, not giving him a heartfelt speech
>55.2
The change between Bev trying to speak, and her posing with a fake smile is too abrupt, visual-wise. Maybe, in panel 2, she’s standing and smiling, while in her inner monologue she thinks of name ideas?
>55.3
Hm, dunno, this line sounds a bit tired and whiny to me – not in Beverly’s character. Maybe change it to smth more energetic like the annoyed “Oh, GOD” or the ironic “…Is he serious?” or just the phlegmatic “…”, or even “@^#$%”
>> No. 49008
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49008
Star-Striker in costume. Dunno, maybe a bit too busy

Btw, forgot to mention: Would be great if there were more humor in the Sigrun-Alexander-Olivia scene. And Sigrun seemed too cold to poor Olivia
>> No. 49009
Btw, trying my hand at the "Supermoms meet the fans" sub-episode right now.

I'm not as experienced at writing as Garuda and the other guy, so expect a lot of amateur writing lol
>> No. 49010
>>49008
Not a fan of the pouches on her arm and leg, but otherwise I like it. This is just me speaking here, but I wouldn't mind her boots being a bit higher, maybe up to her mid-thigh.
>> No. 49012
Yeah, maybe the arm/leg pouches are too much.

As for the boots, I wanted them to have "flaps" (dunno how those are called) like her gloves, and that just doesn't work with thighhigh boots. However, maybe I'll try to do that with flapless gloves/boots.
>> No. 49022
>>49006
The problem I have with Sigrun having a public identity is, if her identity has been known all this time, why would she have ever bothered retiring in the first place? People would just go up to her and say "Sigrun, we need your help!"

I think the idea of her hanging up her warrior ways to live on Earth under a human identity is more plausible and raises fewer questions.

>>49008
I don't know about the belt pouches. I like the idea of Star-Striker having a belt, but, I dunno, maybe something that screams "Star-Striker" more than just a bunch of pouches. Maybe if there was an insignia in the middle?
>> No. 49031
Ideas for the third script:

First there will be fallout from the previous issue:
>Betsy is full-on training to become a superhero, and Bev can't get away with simply changing the subject anymore
>Yolanda recognizes her mother from the powers she exhibited, Carmen is happy she has such a smart daughter, Yolanda is still keeping her secret safe
>Alexander doesn't really care about the return of legendary superheroine Sig Rune, much to his mother's dismay (she doesn't reveal her secret to him). Oliva thinks there is something very familiar about this back-in-action wonder woman, however...
>Donald is very supportive of Anne-Marie, and the two agree to not tell their boys until they're eighteen
>Shaundra is mad at her mother but Candy doesn't know why
>Junichi thinks Kaiju is a bit too provocative for his tastes, much to his wife's embarrassment

Then, the girls get together at Bev's house while the rest of her family is out (basically it's another girls' night):
>they discuss being a team again, Beverly thinks she was a bit rusty and vows to hit the gym and start seriously training
>Kim, after some prodding, admits that she really enjoys being back in the game. She isn't a fan of having to keep her secret from her family, but she understands it is to keep them safe
>the girls discuss their secrets and who knows. Carmen reveals that her daughter, Yolanda knows. She revealed her secret to Yolanda a few years ago when Yolanda was proving herself an indispensable help in the shop. The rest of the Supermoms are leery at first but when Carmen tells them the only secret Yolanda knows is hers, they settle down
>Steve, Ben and Betsy come home early, forcing the girls to cut their visit short. Here, Bev realizes the Supermoms can't just meet at somebody's house anymore. Sigrun mentions she has some Asgardian trinket that may be of some help (this will lead into the "magic thing that makes them inconspicuous" bit of gags before they settle down in their permanent base)

This is where I completely ran out of ideas. Help?

I also had an idea for a little spot where Anne-Marie comes home after a long day of superheroics, and Donald gives her one of his patented backrubs where he uses his shadow powers to massage her with warm, soft darkness.
>> No. 49040
So do you plan on making a thread about this on /co/ sometime in the future to raise awareness?
>> No. 49042
>>49040
Once we get a group picture of the team and final drafts for the first two scripts, yes.
>> No. 49046
>>49042

just pointing out, we've got about three scripts in one if we divvy up the second one appropriately.
>> No. 49047
Made a few changes to the second script. It's mostly the same, with a few spelling errors changed, a bit of the dialogue cleaned up, Sigrun's secret identity restored, and changes from >>49031

https://www.dropbox.com/s/7glutl63dd4ftwg/supermoms%202%20edit%202.celtx

I think all we need now is to finalize Star-Striker's costume, and we're all set to make a post on /co/ about Supermoms and hopefully advance the project!

I also wouldn't mind solo pics of Mend's costume update from >>48912 and Tropica by herself, so a good group pic can be cobbled together.
>> No. 49048
>>49046
A good idea, but I have no idea where to even start on chopping that monster up. I suspect there'd have to be a few rewrites at key points in order to make it more seamless.
>> No. 49056
Some ideas:

After being single for so long, Candy decides it's time for her to enter the dating world once more. However, she decides to enter it as Candy LaBelle AND the superheroine known as Diva, dating two different guys under her two different personas as a result. To her, it's not cheating because "Candy" and "Diva" are different people. While one of her identities stays in a stable relationship, the other goes through boys like a revolving door. Which does which? I can't decide.

The Supermoms all have sitdown one-on-one interviews with Buzz Edison for TV. I picture some funny shenanigans, like Tropica endlessly flirting with a very uncomfortable Buzz, Diva using the airtime to publicly announce she is looking for a man, Kaiju having to respond to allegations of public lewdness with all her panty flashing during battle, Star-Striker having to deal with an overzealous fan (guess who!!!) who crashes the studio set to ask for an autograph, etc.

An idea for a villain: The Headmaster. The new principal of Sapphire City Magnet School is actually a supervillain. He uses a mind control machine to turn all the kids, and teachers, of Sapphire City Magnet School, into his puppets, to take over the city. Sigrun is not immune to this, and the Supermoms have to free her of the Headmaster's insidious mind control before they can hope to defeat him. This will include the Supermoms fighting with their mind-controlled kids that go to that school. I was thinking of a spot where, a mind-controlled Betsy rips Star-Striker's mask off, and upon realizing she's Betsy's own mother, breaks free of the mind control. She then helps the Supermoms defeat the Headmaster. Unfortunately for Betsy, Kim reworks the mind control machine to erase the memories of that day from all the students' and teachers' (except Sigrun) minds, leaving Betsy blissfully unaware of the shocking secret she had uncovered.
>> No. 49057
okay, maybe Sigrun's inherent magic protects her secret identity. that's how people don't connect the WOMAN named Sigrun Odinsdottir who talks like she's fresh out of Beowulf and the SUPERHEROINE named Sigrun Odinsdottir who talks like she's fresh out of Beowulf. i just don't like calling her "SIG RUNE".

i'll throw in a scene in I3 of her contemplating the CLOAK OF LOKE or the VEIL OF NOTT or whatever in her house and have her muse about how as long as she doesn't tell anyone she's the heroine or let them see her transform, they won't figure it out--unless they, too, possess magic (cue magical villain).

villain idea: LOU GARY RUTH, a Louisiana bayou werewolf, shapeshifter, and warlock. also, a distant, distant cousin of Olivia's. the name is, if you aren't familiar with Cajun lore, a reference to the Rougarou, a middle-ground between a witch, a werewolf, and a demon who goes after disobedient kids and bad Catholics.

a showdown between Sigrun and Lou Gary Ruth would also carry the "which is stronger, Christian or Norse mythology?" undertones.
>> No. 49059
>>49057
I don't see what's wrong with the name "Sig Rune." Remember how Sigrun was awkward in the early days? Her name could have been coined when she first showed up, and a reporter asked her name. She replied, awkwardly, "Sig...run..." which was interpreted by the reporter as Sig Rune, and it stuck despite her best efforts to change it. It could be used as a whole throwback to her awkward early days as a superhero.
>> No. 49060
alright, i'm still writing this, but i came up with this really cute spot and i just had to share it with you.

KIM has come over the CANDY'S house for various reasons, and the conversation drifts to their children's relationship.

>CANDY: "Oh, Keiichi's such a NICE boy."
>CANDY: "Shaundra TALKS about him, you wouldn't believe."
>KIM: "I know. They are very..."
>CANDY: "Yeah."
>CANDY: "He's way out of his league."
>KIM: "Yes. Yes he IS."
>> No. 49061
also, i'm making a minor joke about the SIGRUN/SIG RUNE thing. the reporter heard it as SIG RUNE and it stuck, despite her best efforts to correct them. she, personally, loathes the name, but can't get rid of it.
>> No. 49062
Doodleanon/Pervertanon here.
I'm a bit busy these days, but I haven't bailed.

I'm planning to draw a big group picture of the Supermoms, with some tweaks to their costumes and general appearance (Star-Striker's costume tweaked, a different hairstyle for Diva, return of Kabuki mask for Kaiju, more different bodyshapes, etc). Maybe, if I have time, I'll even draw a corresponding group picture of the Teen Queens.

Also, as I said earlier, I'm writing a script for an episode called "Prepare to meet your... fans!". I'm not a great writer, so you'll be the judge if it's any good. I tried to incorporate all ideas about Supermoms' first meetup with their fans. It's more of a gag/filler episode – however, there will be a villain battle of sorts. Chronologically, it takes place somewhere at the start of Supermoms' new career, but not necessarily right after Script 2; some time may have passed.

I don't really like NTR Diva. I mean, as a Pervertanon, I'd like me some NTR in the doujin/NSFW part of the project, but I'd hate to see it in the SFW canon. Mostly because in porn some NTR is fun if done well, but in SFW works it usually just leads to endless gutwrenching drama.

I also don't know if I like Peter-Parkering SS's secret identity to Betsy.

As for Headmaster, that's an interesting idea for a villain. Maybe it could start with them not knowing "The Head Master" is actually the school's headmaster? Could be used for some fun dialogue

I don't think there needs to be an in-universe explanation of Sigrun's secret identity plot armor. It's much funnier when it's just inexplicably a huge idiot ball for everyone – except Olivia.

Lou Gary Ruth – mite b cool. Is it a woman or a man?

Btw, an idea: How about in a future episode (after all the start-of-career dust has been settled), the Supermoms meet a European analogue? A team of European MILFs.
>We could design some more hot MILFs
>We could finally fulfill the suggestions about British/Jewish/Italian/Indian (could be also from the UK)/Russian/etc MILFs
>A whole lot of Murka/Yurop jokes
Maybe it's a friendly superhero contest of some sort? This rival team could also consist of 6 MILFs, with different powers but correspondent roles. What do you think?
>> No. 49063
>>49062
Maybe just Diva hits the dating scene, while Candy stays single?

>I don't think there needs to be an in-universe explanation of Sigrun's secret identity plot armor
This. It's why I prefer Sigrun to have a legit secret identity rather than no secret identity with magical identity protection.

>I also don't know if I like Peter-Parkering SS's secret identity to Betsy.
I feel that. I still would like to do a spot where, when Star-Striker has to fight a mind-controlled Betsy, she sees just how much of a chip off the old block Betsy is, who shockingly holds her own, albeit briefly. Same with Alexander and Sig Rune, although Sig would be more pleased that her battle training actually got through to her son. Of course, Betsy would be no match for her mother's expertly honed fighting skills, and Alexander would be no match for his mother's super-strength. It goes without saying that nobody gets hurt here, of course.
>> No. 49072
>>49062
The problem I see with a European Supermoms team is that the original Supermoms are kind of from all over, with Kim being Japanese, Sigrun being Asgardian, Carmen being latine, and Anne-Marie being Scottish.

I did however come up with a great British Star-Striker analogue:
>Union Jill
That name's too clever to waste.
>> No. 49074
>>49063
>Maybe just Diva hits the dating scene, while Candy stays single?
Yeah, it could work

>>49072
>The problem I see with a European Supermoms team is that the original Supermoms are kind of from all over, with Kim being Japanese, Sigrun being Asgardian, Carmen being latine, and Anne-Marie being Scottish.
I'd disagree.
Kim represents the Asian American community, Carmen represents the Latino community in USA. Sigrun is the last of a long line of Valhallan emissaries to North America, the first one having arrived there with Eric the Red's expedition. The only problem is the Scottish Mend, but then again, it shows America as the melting pot it is.
As for Europe, it could be a chance to show MILFs from different nations, with different characters and appearance, mite b fun. Plus, some European MILFs could be, e.g., Indian/Pakistani/Roma/Arabian/etc

>Union Jill
A good name!
I'd suggest not to make her a flag-waving Captain Britain analogue, tho. More like Jenny Sparks or John Constantine maybe
>> No. 49075
>>49074
Random ideas:
>Fraulein: stereotypical German with a big bosom, has healing powers just like Mend's, except her healing comes from her hands (or breasts unless that's too lewd)
>Lady Raj: hailing from India, Lady Raj has 6 arms and is a grandmistress of Far East martial arts
>Perhaps some Asgardian, a childhood rival of Sigrun?
>Size-changing Eastern European woman as an analogue to Kim, heavy drinker who can put even Diva under the table
>Señorita Tierra, a fiery Spainard who can control the earth

Any good?
>> No. 49076
okay, also doing solo issue of Sigrun dealing with Lou Gary Ruth. he needs Olivia's blood to break a curse, and he needs all of it. but due to Rougarou magic, he can't just kill her, he needs permission from those she serves.

he's a spooky bastard, but he's actually got a good reason for doing what he's doing.
>> No. 49081
Here's a villain idea:
>Former enemy of the Teen Queens (and Star-Striker in particular), Ms. Evil, has returned to her dastardly ways. Ms. Evil was most well known for her armies of henchmen and high-tech gadgets. Ms. Evil disappeared right around the same time the Teen Queens first retired, and nobody has seen her since...until now. In addition to being a bit older and more voluptuous, Ms. Evil has also changed her name to Mrs. Evil, indicating she has in fact married, but there doesn't appear to be a Mr. Evil. However, she has adopted a teenaged sidekick known only as Evil Boy, who is inexperienced but eager. This is all our heroines know.

What our heroines don't know is that Evil Boy is actually Mrs. Evil's 14-year old son, taking up the family business under the tutelage of his insidious mother. Mrs. Evil wants to keep this a secret, however, and will frequently cut her son off before he reveals the true bond they share. You can guess what they're doing in the NSFW universe. Mrs. Evil's son goes to Sapphire City Magnet School and is a love interest of - you guessed it - Betsy Banks. Mrs. Evil is that kind of villain that is in it for the sport, and lauds the fact that not a single innocent civilian has ever been hurt due to her villainy.

I also had an idea that maybe Mrs. Evil is actually someone Beverly works with, and neither knows the others' identity.
>> No. 49083
Working on a Star-Striker solo story right now. It happens shortly after the events of the second script, and shows a bit how a lot of the old heroes and villains have come out of the woodwork, as well as some new ones. It also delves a bit into Bev's home life.
>> No. 49084
>>49076
Wait, is Olivia Cajun rather than French American? That's hot

I feel that the Lou Gary story needs a (preferably humorous) mom-related angle, or else it would just be a random (if interesting) superhero story that just happens to feature Sigrun and Olivia. But atm I can't figure just what this angle could be – any ideas?

>>49075
Nice ideas, but I'd not make them such tightly close parallels for the Supermoms' powers. More like, they have a similar roster (6 MILFs) and a somewhat similar power balance (e.g., like Avengers-JLA or Avengers-FF), but they may have completely different powers. And I'd definitely not make Sigrun v.2 and Tropica v.2, too redundant.

The Indian mom shouldn't be from India – it's a European team, after all! She's probably British.

As a suggestion, seeing as the Supermoms are based around common American superhero comics tropes (Kaiju is based on Japanese tropes, but that could be justified by the Manga Invasion of the 80s), why not base the Euromilfs around common European comics tropes? Could be much funnier, imo, than just random MILFs with powers.

E.g.:
>Union Jill (Bala Woodsworth), UK. Team leader. Indian by nationality, widow (Woodsworth is her late husband's surname), a bit older than the average Supermom. Has seemingly no powers to speak of, even martial arts or such. However, her late husband, an archelolgist-occultist, has left her a mansion filled with strange artifacts that can, e.g., summon monsters, see monsters, turn her face into monsters, you get the drift. She doesn't know how to operate them or what half of them do, which could lead to fun moments. Is somewhat cynical, has a tendency for stereotypical British slang and swearing. Is known to break the 4th wall sometimes. Her day job is dance instructor. She has a delinquent antiauthoritarian teenage son.
>La Cowboy du Space (Claire Q'yuo'nxt), Belgium. Literally, a space cowboy. Hailing from an unknown galaxy/dimension, Claire is dressed in a weird oriental-looking dress, has tribal(?) marks on her face that conceal her identity, and flies an alien pterodactyl. It is not known what does she do on Earth, as there are no other space cowboys (or space cows, for that matter) here. She is a pacifist and doesn't like fighting herself, but can shoot her space pistols which have different fantastic effects (which can help the team or incapacitate enemies), and helps the team in other ways (e.g., transport someone via pterodactyl etc). She is a journalist by day, he personality is very energetic and she makes quick decisions (sometimes too quick), is going through her 3rd divorce, is raising two daughters, and likes to relieve stress on topless beaches.
>Karnage (Donna Eleuteri). Mysterious voluptuous avenger, clad in a black catsuit. Some time ago, she was responsible for a brutal vendetta against various mafia clans (not described, but mentioned). However, lately, she kinda mellowed out. Maybe it's due to the fact that her boyfriend (they haven't married, but their relationship is pretty stable) is the intrepid police inspector who vowed to capture Karnage (he doesn't know that Karnage is his girlfriend); his lawful ways may have rubbed on her after time. By day, she's an author of light fantasy books for young girls. She has no superpowers, but is assassin-like in her ability for acrobatics, parkour, martial arts and stealth.
>Turkish Dynamite (sorry, I can't into Turkish names), Turkey. Interpol secret agent with various strange and unexplained superpowers: she has the ability to defeat throngs of enemies with weak and badly timed kicks, can make rocks explode with her bare hands and feet, can jump several feet into the air, and even can karate chop a guy in half. Her identity is known to her Interpol superiors, who coordinate her moves. She has a husband and kids, works as a fashion designer (used to works as a fashion model when she was younger). Don't know about her character yet, maybe the stoic/no-nonsense/silent one (though it may be too similar to Sigrun?).
>Baroness Rita von Schwarzstein ("-"), Darkovia. This is the only heroine that doesn't have a secret identity – she's really the baroness of a small European country called Darkovia, situated on the border between Poland and Portugal. Instead, the governmentally controlled Darkovian media censor any information about their countess' superheroic adventures (as it's seen not befitting a member of the ruling dynasty), so none of her countrymen (even her family!) are in the know. Her husband is the Baron who rules the country while his wife lives a life of luxury and leisure, spending her days (as he thinks) doing nothing. So basically, she just turned to adventuring out of boredom. She's spoiled and haughty (much more than Sigrun, who is a warrior and a faithful friend). She knows very powerful dark magic, so naturally she's one of the main offensive players in this team.
>Red Turbine (Valentina Kuzmichyova), Belarus. Former Soviet superheroine, prepared for a life of striking fear into the hearts of American capitalists, she was a young girl (~18?) when the USSR broke down. Left out of job (superheroing was an official, paid government job in the Soviet Union), and having worked as a mercenary for a bit, she finally found a new employer in the small former Soviet republic of Belarus. Being the only Belarussian superhero, she's treated with much respect and adoration in her new country. Her secret identity is protected by the Belarusian secret police. She's very much an ideological communist, but at the same time, a laid-back gal, well-known for her drinking binges which don't seem to impede her superheroing prowess much. Her main feature is a mechanical suit with a vast number of useful powers (including an orbit jump, making its original wearer, the first Red Turbine, the first person in space). It was made in the late 1950s, but still works perf... well, as perfectly as it has always worked, anyway.
The last 2 girls are obviously based not on European tropes, but rather on recurring types from American comics.
>> No. 49085
>>49084
I hope Olivia's not Cajun, because I sure haven't been writing her dialogue in that way. I'd prefer to think she is 100% authentic French and Sigrun specifically imported her.

>Turkish Dynamite
I love it! Maybe something other than "Dynamite" though.

>she was a young girl (~18?) when the USSR broke down
Now we're moving into cougar territory, and I like it! I'd prefer Serbia over Belarus, but that's just me. I like Serbia.

I don't know about Union Jill's powers, though. Magical items that have unknown effects? Seems a bit irresponsible for a seasoned superhero.
>> No. 49086
https://www.dropbox.com/s/xt94l1lo8hg37aw/fans.celtx
Here's the unfinished "Prepare to meet your... fans!" episode. It's ~75% done. There will be scene change after this to late night, where some fun and some danger will take place, and then a short epilogue. Probably.
I tried to use most of the ideas posted in this thread, but if you have an idea you think would fit, or maybe a scene should play out differently, feel free to offer your suggestions!
As I mentioned, I'm not a seasoned writer, so feel free to point out all the bad writing/pacing there is. Additonally, English is not my first language, so there might be even more stupid and simple mistakes there. I welcome all (constructive) criticism!
One thing I definitely need more help with: James T. Christmas' jive talk. It's, like, his psychological impediment: when he's agitated, he talks in weird blaxploitation jive talk. But I can't really write it.

>>49084
Btw. How about the Euromoms started not as teens, but as young women (~18-19, right before the Supermoms disbanded), and just kept superheroing all those years. That may offer a major psychological difference between the two teams: while Supermoms view their new career as a sort of second youth, the Euromoms are always subconsciously comparing themselves with how they were when they started, and basically just feeling turning old. Maybe their encounter with the Supermoms offers them a new perspective?

Appearance ideas:
>UJ. Older (in her 40-s), dark-skinned, a "mature" body (not fat/chubby like Diva and Mend, but rather heavyset, and with prominent curves – but not "90-60-90" curvy like Tropica). Dunno about her hairdo – maybe very short-cut? "Costume" should consist of some simple and punkish shit, like e.g. a T-shirt, a pair of cut jeans shorts, fishnets and army boots, all (or most) branded with the British flag of course.
>LCDS. Thin, somewhat pointy features, a longish nose and chin (but it all looks cute on her). Small breasts. Hair of some unnatural color, maybe? As for hairstyle, dunno, maybe "Seccotine" or "Amelie"? Also, doesn't shave her armpits
>K. Voluptuous like Tropica, but shorter, and maybe a bit more chubby. Argh, I dunno how to differentiate her from those girls! Dark curly hair, a bronze tan (tan, not skin color). Her costume is a dark full-body catsuit, maybe with skulls drawn in strategical places.
>TD. Dunno much about her appearance yet. Her costume should be probably based on a belly-dancing outfit, but leather coats and 60s bikinis should also be featured somehow... Dunno.
>BVS. Her costume should have a "goth girl"/"dark witch" look. Maybe make it a "dark" version of her royal dress? To the point of changing hair color from blonde (normal life) to black (superhero life). Basically, in her royal dress she looks like a stereotypical princess / fairy / good queen. The dark costume definitely needs a corset and cleavage. She's the youngest of all Euromoms.
>RT. Straw blonde, rather short-ish haircut. A friendly and open face. She was 18 when the USSR broke down, so she would be 41 this year. Or maybe fuck it, and just have her pick up a legacy of her, e.g., mother? Then she may be younger. I dunno. Short, and maybe a bit stocky. The armor should be painted all red (though the paint may be peeling off in most places) with hammers&sickles, stars etc drawn all over it. It should have a clunky, Metal Slug-style design.

>>49085
>I hope Olivia's not Cajun
Oh, okay. But why's her relative a Cajun, then?
>I love it! Maybe something other than "Dynamite" though.
Thanks! It's a bad pun on "Turkish Delight"
>I'd prefer Serbia over Belarus, but that's just me. I like Serbia.
I wanted a communist country, and there's not many of them left. The only European one seems to be Belarus. Serbia's not communist nowadays, afaik
>I don't know about Union Jill's powers, though. Magical items that have unknown effects? Seems a bit irresponsible for a seasoned superhero.
Sod off, you bloody wanker! jk – That's what Union Jill would say to such (well-placed, I admit) criticism, while finishing her second pack of cigarettes. She's not much of a responsible type.
But most (emphasis on "most") of those artifacts have been catalogued and even somewhat researched by her late husband. It's just a case of finding the artifact and the notes in the chaos reigning in the rooms of the oversized mansion (maybe, castle?) which looks like an episode of "Hoarders" on steroids. So, after she finds something that may be useful, she searches for the corresponding notes, and either finds them and prays they're enough for making the trinket work, or just boldly goes unprepared. So yeah, not a very cautious person. She cooks one hell of a curry, though.

>>49081
Beverly's job becomes more and more crowded by the minute lol
Anyway, I like the general Mrs. Evil idea (though maybe, a less blatant name?), and the titillation of her dynamic with her son (they remind me of Black Cat and Kitten). Though, I'd rather leave it at titillation level, even in the NSFW universe (I'd like to keep our NSFW sex scenes of legal age) (incest is okay tho) Or maybe make him 18? The mom-son dynamic is still there, as is the obvious age gap. As for Betsy, it's rather common for girls her age to have a crush on an older boy. Doesn't mean he has to reciprocate, after all (which would give Betty some drama, and some character development, and some motivation maybe – until, years later, they may meet anew and something beautiful may blossom out of it)
>> No. 49087
>>49086
I wasn't really planning on having anything overt in Mrs. Evil/Evil Boy's relationship. Also, him being 14 makes the lack of competency and lack of experience more believable. The dynamic I'm going for is "he's her son, and he keeps forgetting no one is supposed to know, so she always cuts him off" where he's bad at keeping her secret identity in the heat of battle. The majority (if not all) of the /ss/ vibes should be kept to the NSFW universe. In the SFW universe, it's going to be a totally humorous dynamic.

I'll be reading that script and posting a review later.
>> No. 49088
>>49085

she's not. she and LGR are the last descendants of a family that originated in France. some of them stayed behind, some of them went to America. LGR needs Olivia's blood to fuel a spell that will release their family's souls from the clutches of one of the nine circle lords of Hell. he's like a black-side-of-grey Cajun version of Constantine.
>> No. 49089
>>49086
Preliminary thoughts: dialogue definitely needs to be cleaned up a lot, your ESL definitely shines through there.

>11.6
Instead of having a caption here, you could just have a sound effect for the door being stuck, and then the character swears.

It's late, so I'll come up with a more detailed post tomorrow.
>> No. 49090
>>49089
>dialogue definitely needs to be cleaned up a lot, your ESL definitely shines through there.
Yeah, I expected as much. Thanks for your help! Would be glad to read your critique.
>Instead of having a caption here, you could just have a sound effect for the door being stuck, and then the character swears.
Fair enough; but how would I show that a) that's the toilet stall's door he struck (and not smth else) b) that he struck it because it's broken?
Btw, maybe it'd be good to make 11.5 a beat panel (no dialogue)?
>> No. 49094
Supermoms 3 done. sixteen pages again, basic grid. not sure about this one. definitely a holding pattern, but whatever. i guess it's fitting for where we are right now. i'm going to take a break from writing these for a while and work on some of my other projects, but when we're ready to make the thread on /co/, i'll be there.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/4aob6w4y1d8745q/supermoms%203.celtx
>> No. 49097
>>49094
I think you got Betsy's age wrong there. She's only 14. 14 year olds can't get learner's permits.
>> No. 49101
>>49094
I felt the Anne-Marie and Donald segment went on too long compared to all the other girls' segments. Don't the rest of the girls know about Donald's past?

Maybe clean up the Carmen/Donald scene a bit. The way it's written now, it seems like Yolanda sees Donald using his powers. I wouldn't necessarily mind Yolanda knowing about all of the main cast's secrets and powers, but maybe it's something she figures out on her own over time.

As I said earlier, Betsy is a bit too young to be even really thinking about cars, unless we want to change her age or something. She could still ask about one, keeping with her unrealistic dreams, such as her superhero aspirations. Maybe, when Betsy and Beverly are in the gym, throw in a line where Betsy wonders what Star-Striker's workouts are like, when her mother is showing her exactly that?

>2.1
I think the "Hi, Andre" line is unnecessary here, especially singe Bev is signing a piece of paper and not actually interacting with anyone.

Again, not a big fan of some magic doodad being the reason Sigrun's identity is kept secret. I'd much more prefer just plot armor played up for comedic effect. Maybe a line about how, although she didn't like the name Sig Rune, Sigrun appreciates it as it allows her to have a secret identity and a "normal" "human" life? I did like the dialogue between Sigrun and Alexander where she tries to get him excited about the Supermoms, namely her, and his apathy annoys her.

So, is Sigrun banished from Asgard or something? Because that's the vibe I'm getting here. I feel like she would have adjusted to living on earth after over 15 years.

In Candy and Kim's scene, it seems like they just jump right to Diva dating with no provocation. I guess Candy's mention of the guy who made the song is supposed to bring it up, but that just doesn't really bridge the gap. Maybe Candy could just casually bring up that she, as Diva, is looking to hit the dating scene again?

As for Shaundra's dad, I feel like we should come up with who he is and why he's not around before we start to explicitly bring him up in scripts. As a wrestling fan, I've watched a LOT of storylines where there's this mystery guy, and they clearly don't know who it actually will end up being at the beginning, so the angle starts playing out on TV with no clearly defined endgame, which is really obvious and definitely hurts the overall impact, and I don;t want that to happen in Supermoms. Instead of talking about her dad, maybe Shaundra could talk about how she thinks her mom thinks she's stupid, but "I know a LOT more than she THINKS I do," alluding to the fact that Shaundra knows her mom's secret.

>14.5
This exchange needs work. Maybe Anne-Marie says she doesn't want the boys following her example, and Donald chimes in with something about how they shouldn't follow HIS example either. The way it's written right now it seems Anne-Marie only doesn't want them to become supervillains.

Overall, I liked it!
>> No. 49103
>>49094
Very nice! I like it.
Not much else to say, really, besides what other anons already said.

>Sigrun
I agree that having Sigrun's plot armor unexplained is much funnier than introducing some specific magic reason. I don't get a "banished from Asgard" feeling here, however

>7.4
>If she got it, make him want it
That made me confused. Why would Kim want to make Junichi want Kaiju? If anything, Kim wants to make him want Kim!

>Page 9
Kinda uneventful. The girls sit in headphones for a page, then Kim frowns, that's it? Maybe it's better to have the song playing, so we could at least see the lyrics? Or maybe they see a video clip? Dunno. Sorry if I'm too harsh, but is this scene even necessary?

>Shaundra and Keiichi
Loved the dynamics between the two. But I don't think we need to ever mention Shaundra's dad, really. He just... isn't here. Let's leave it at that. Again, like with Sigrun's plot armor, no mentions and no explanations work better.

>the Donald scene
I agree that Yolanda should only know Carmen's secret identity, and none of the other's. Especially Donald's – I don't even know if other Supermoms actually know that Donald is Shadow Boy!

>14.1
>two Beverly work out scenes in one issue
>still no shower scene ;_;
>just saiyan

>14.5
Maybe change Anne-Marie's words to "And not MINE" or smth?

>16.8
This whole issue has got a much more sentimental and quiet mood, I have to say. That's good! But maybe we need to distinguish those types of stories: "action" stories and "personal life" stories? I remember old Spectacular Spider-Man (iirc) issues I read, where it would have an "action" story about Spidey fighting some supervillains, and then some short "personal life" stories about JJJ or Black Cat. Maybe we could do smth similar: an issue could include an "action" story and a "personal life" story? That way, the quieter and less action-y "personal life" stories would provide a much needed counterpoint to the "action" stories, and vice versa. What do you think?
>> No. 49104
>>49103
What I'm thinking, for Kim, is that she can't change her costume, since it comes from her tattoo. That way, she can complain about her lewd superhero appearance, but is unable to do anything about it.

Also, re: costumes, I had an idea where the seamstress the superheroes all used for their costumes is retired or something and that's why the Supermoms don't get more conservative costumes.
>> No. 49105
>>49104
That's a good explanation – but doesn't it contradict recently established continuity? Namely, if there are other superheroes besides the Supermoms – how do they get their costumes tailored? Where does Gunner Graves mend his lumberjack T-shirts? There has to be at least one super-tailor, even if the old one has retired.

However, I think we should come with an explanation as to why the Supermoms keep their old a-bit-too-tight uniforms. And this needs to be explained (maybe in a short story) right after issue 1! In issue 1, they fought in what they had, it was an emergency. But after that battle, if they're thinking of coming back, they would either retailor the costumes to better fit their MILF bodies, or have a sound reason for not doing so.

This, of course, concerns Star-Striker, Mend, Diva and Sig Rune. You gave a great explanation for Kaiju. As for Tropica, she likes to entice men, and she creates her costume herself anyway. Hell, she may consciously make a skimpier costume nowadays, than she did in her teenage years.

So, let's see what could the reason for keeping old costumes be:
>They're perverts
No. Even in the NSFW universe – it's more interesting to corrupt a non-perverted character
>Nostalgia
Doesn't explain why not essentially remake the old, nostalgic costume for a different body type.
>Maybe these specific costumes are imbued with a magic spell / omega theta fi rays / alien tech / etc etc etc which they can't duplicate now, and which helps them fight
It's logical, but why only 4 heroines got that?
>They don't make superhero costumes like they did back in the day.
Basically, their costumes are made using a tech / magic that is forgotten today (for some reason; maybe due to the decline of superheroes). So, they can't be replicated or fixed. The same with Kaiju's magic tattoo. But then again, it means that SS+M+D+SR's costumes have some beneficial properties.
>Legal reasons
Superheroes have to register their costumes, and any redesign they make thereafter. That's a difficult bureaucratic process. May be played for laughs – right after issue 1, the Supermoms file papers for costume redesign, but the bureaucracy is so convoluted and vast, they don't get any resolution for the whole time of this series' run. They may mention it from time to time, or try to get some results, all in vain. Thus, they're stuck with old costumes for the time being – a "temporary" situation that becomes de facto permanent. What do you think?
>> No. 49106
>>49105
Oh, and one more thing to consider.

If we use a reason that means there's no way to fix there costumes – we get a problem.
Of course, during battles, Supermoms' skimpy costumes will sometimes get torn to reveal even more. That's okay, but they need to fix it before the next issue! How do they do that, if those costumes can't be fixed anymore?
>> No. 49107
>>49105
I think for Sigrun, she is too proud of her heritage to change her costume - and besides, she thinks she looks great in it. Kaiju, she can't change it without changing her tattoo, and good luck finding a magical tattoo artist these days. The rest? I'm feeling the bureaucracy idea is the best one, but it's far from perfect.

>>49106
Unstable molecules, duh. They won't get torn.

Almost finished with the Star-Striker solo story I started working on. It's packed with stuff, too. I just hope none of it seems jarring.
>> No. 49108
>>49107
I agree with the Sig Rune idea. Still, leave 3 of them (SS, Mend and Diva) to think about.

>They won't get torn.
>They won't get torn.
>They won't get torn.
DDD,:

P.S.: Still waiting for critique on "Fans", btw! While I'm waiting, I decided to rework the story a bit, make it less dull and add some action/fun sequences. If any critique is posted before I finish it, I'll just incorporate it into the remake.
P.P.S.: Still working on the group shot, takes some time since I'm not a good artist :)
>> No. 49109
Here's the Star-Striker solo story. It happens after the second script, before the Supermoms meet their fans, and before the pot-luck dinner.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/te977upj90hp2lw/ss1.celtx

>>49108
Working on the Star-Striker story delayed my critique of your script. I kind of don't want to do anything until the script is actually completed, so I have the full picture, you know?
>> No. 49110
>>49109
Hey! A nice establishing story! Kinda reminded me of those little establishing comics about various heroes DC used to have on their site – only those were pitifully small, while this is a full-fledged story. Would be great if we have one of those for each of the Supermoms!

>7.2
Maybe have her design a sidekick costume in the style of Star-Striker's costume? A much less revealing one, more like goofy-looking (compare Robin's costume to Batman's – it's much more silly). I'd like to keep the SS costume replica for the "Fans" episode, if you don't mind
>Grounded
Oy vey, now I have to scrap this idea from the "Fans" episode. Oh well, not a major point anyway
>10.6
Maybe not have her say "alter ego" here. The main fun of this jealousy is that when she gets jealous, she forgets SS is essentially her – she treats her like a different woman Steve (as she thinks) lusts over. Maybe even have her think rude things about SS (e.g., "that... HUSSY"), things a woman can say about another woman – here it'll be funny since it's her alter ego. Just a suggestion
>Beverly is showering
Aw yiss.
>Is MY body not SEXY enough for him???
Too lewd a phrase for SFW Universe, maybe?
>LOOK at me! I'm getting jealous of MYSELF!
Dunno, imo this resolution is too fast. Wouldn't it be fun if the jealousy angle continued in further stories, all without her realizing she's basically jealous of herself? I dunno, what do you think?
>Star-Striker shields her eyes as Mrs. Evil activates the device, blinding our heroine with a bright flash.
Such... NSFW... possibilities...
>Page 15
I think the reveal of other superheroes is too much. Wouldn't it be more fun if Gunner just mentioned all those names here, and in later issues reader would get to finally see them, one by one?

Criticisms aside, I liked it! And the new Mrs.Evil & Evil Boy fit nicely! Gunner Graves needs a personality, tho. I imagine him as some kind of super-lumberjack, but that's just my vision.

>Working on the Star-Striker story delayed my critique of your script. I kind of don't want to do anything until the script is actually completed, so I have the full picture, you know?
Ah, I see, it's okay. I'll try to finish the remake in the mean time.
>> No. 49111
>>49110
I was reading the "fans" script while writing my Star-Striker script, so (and this is the way I was thinking when writing it) it could be that Betsy being grounded is a setup for her sneaking away to go to the convention.
>> No. 49113
All right, I updated my Star-Striker story taking >>49110 into account. Same Dropbox link from >>49109

One of the ideas I had for the pot-luck dinner story is to combine it with the PTA idea in >>48826 and >>48829 where a supremely powerful alien being teleports the heroes all together to another location, where all the supervillains were holding a pot-luck dinner too, or teleports both groups to a neutral ground of some sort. At first, the two sides try to fight, but find it impossible due to the alien being's meddling, and the monthly PTA thing starts. A few ideas I had for that:
>Star-Striker finds a supervillain who has a similar predicament with their kid wanting to get into the family business, and they swap stories/ideas on how to dissuade their children from following in their footsteps
>Diva meets a single dad supervillain with similar powers and they get to flirting: "You and I could make beautiful music together." Will anything become of it?
>Mend swaps recipes with a villain
>Kaiju finds a villainess who doesn't approve of who her son is dating either

Now, I don't know about this last idea, it might be a little much, but:
>one of the Supermoms strikes up a very friendly rapport with one of the villains, so much so that either they reveal their identities to each other or just happen to meet in real life and recognize each other, and we get the dynamic of the sheepdog and the wolf from those cartoons
Like I said, that one may be a bit much.
>> No. 49114
I also just remembered I had this, a 3rd Supermoms script I was working on but then forgot about. Garuda did the 3rd script better than I could have, for sure. Here's what I did do:

https://www.dropbox.com/s/a7uk2es81sjsqyq/supermoms3.celtx

Maybe there's some stuff in here that can be appropriated for other scripts. It's not much, but I do like what I put down.
>> No. 49125
>>49113
Read the update, I think it's great.

Still, SS's jealous dialogue... I feel she jumps to the conclusion maybe to quickly, and the resolution is quick too. How about smth like this (take account for my bad English, of course):
>>Hey, honey! Check it out! It's Star-Striker!
>Mmm.
>I'm glad we have heroes like HER to protect this city again.
>"Hm? Why is Steve so excited over Star-Striker all of a sudden?"
>>"Oh, of course he is excited!"
>"Look at that toned BODY prancing around in tight SHORTS!"
>>"So you like superheroines now, huh?!"
>"Is plain old Beverly not GOOD ENOUGH for you anymore?!?"
>>I'm going to BED.
>Need company?
>HEADACHE. (chilly balloon)
>"You're too busy watching superpowered BOOBS and BUTTS, anyway!"
>>"...Is it my body?"
>>"Wait. Star-Striker's body is MY body, too."
>>"UGH! It just drives me CRAZY!"
>What's the matter, STAR-STRIKER?
What do you think?

>One of the ideas I had for the pot-luck dinner story is to combine it with the PTA idea
I like that idea.
>Star-Striker finds a supervillain who has a similar predicament with their kid wanting to get into the family business, and they swap stories/ideas on how to dissuade their children from following in their footsteps
I think maybe, SS meets some supervillain(ess) who was a minor nemesis back in the day, and hasn't seen him/her since. So SS is wary and somewhat hostile to him/her, but after the villain(ess) mentions this predicament with his/her son/daughter, SS becomes interested, and they hit it off.
>Diva meets a single dad supervillain with similar powers and they get to flirting: "You and I could make beautiful music together." Will anything become of it?
That's a fine idea, but maybe we could have Diva find different potential boyfriends during this and next several issues (btw, I'll insert such a thing into "Fans", too). One of them could be a supervillain, one a superhero, one an antihero, one a civilian, etc etc. The reader would be kinda teased – whom will Diva choose? Maybe have some of them return in further issues. And have her make the choice much later.
>Mend swaps recipes with a villain
I think Mend would swap recipes with pretty much everyone (what a whore!). It could be a background event, a running gag repeating several times during the issue – Mend shown in the process of telling a recipe to persons you wouldn't expect would be interested in recipes (a grimdark antihero, a demonic villain, a high and mighty superhero, an alien tentacled thing, several seductive succubi, etc etc).
>Kaiju finds a villainess who doesn't approve of who her son is dating either
And keeping with one of the Kaiju running gags, it could play out like that: "Ugh, I know what you mean. My son recently told me he's in love with that trashy superheroine hussy" "Yes, that's unfortunate, I guess" "That superhero wench! She's always showing off her shameful skimpy costume, and my son fell head over heels for that!" "Hear hear, etc" "Thankfully, he hasn't made a move yet. Maybe there's time t stop this indecency – and to save his villain cred!" "I agree. Just for interest, what's that girl's codename?" "Hmm... Kaiju, I think!" Poor Kaiju's face after she hears that...
>Now, I don't know about this last idea, it might be a little much
Hm, yes, I also think that's a bit too much. We shouldn't get too identity-reveal-happy in our stories, or else we'll turn into Joe Quesada lol

>supermoms3.celtx
Nice bit! I think, some of these ideas definitely should be used

I'm still in the process of reworking "Fans". I decided to split the moms up at the beginning (so that most of them get their chance to act), and add more action. I guess I'll post it soon
>> No. 49126
>>49125
All right, I changed Bev's internal monologue a bit. I think next I'm going to do a Diva solo story, happening at about the same time the Star-Striker solo does. I plan on exploring her relationship with her daughter a bit, clearly show the reader that Shaundra knows her secret (since it's only been implied so far), start the "Diva wants to hit the dating scene" arc, and of course show her kicking ass.
>> No. 49127
Finished up the Diva script. It's a little rough, and Diva's dialogue probably needs to be rewritten, as I don't really feel I captured her dialect very well, but here it is.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/9hzvzzqj65cteb7/diva1.celtx
>> No. 49129
>>49127
I already thought of some changes I want to make:
>when Shaundra and Keiichi kiss, a teacher yells at them
>do something more creative with Diva's powers, really show what she is capable of doing with her solid sound
And clean up some of the dialogue. It's late so I'll do that stuff tomorrow.
>> No. 49148
>>49127
Updated.
>> No. 49169
if we have any drawfags here to do that full team shot, we should get it done fast. we need to make the thread soon and get some fresh blood into this before everything dries up completely. or otherwise we'll just have to make the thread without a full team picture.
>> No. 49172
>>49169
Hey,

I was a bit busy lately, but don't count me out yet
I'll try to draw it today or maybe tomorrow
>> No. 49174
>>49169
For the future /co/ thread, I'm gonna whip up some Pastebins of what we have so far, categorized into main characters, family members, villains, etc.
>> No. 49175
Main characters pastebin:
http://pastebin.com/FGwFiT5P
Let me know if I need to change anything.
>> No. 49176
Families pastebin:
http://pastebin.com/6qUuvER9
Let me know if I need to change anything.
>> No. 49178
https://www.dropbox.com/s/pmt10juiqcuvv59/fans_half.celtx
~half of the new "Prepare to meet your... fans!" script.
I'm in the process of drawing the group pic, btw.

>>49175
>>49176
Nice stuff!
A few suggestions:
>MILF is now Multinational Intellectual Logistics & Financing
>Diva's costume doesn't have an afro now, she has a... dunno how to explain it. Ponytail on a stick? You'll see it when I draw it
>Mention that Donald being SB is a well-kept secret
>Shouldn't Sigrun be OdinsdottIr, not OdinsdottEr?
>> No. 49183
>>49178
>Diva's costume doesn't have an afro now, she has a... dunno how to explain it. Ponytail on a stick? You'll see it when I draw it
I know what you're referring to, and I know there's a name for it, but I have no idea what that name is.
>Mention that Donald being SB is a well-kept secret
You mean, outside of the Supermoms? I was under the impression that all the girls knew Donald's secret, and his supervillain parents of course, but outside of that no one.
>> No. 49185
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49185
Preview for the group pic.
Actually, due to my lame drawing skills, it's turning out to be more like "solo pictures combined together" than a genuine group pic. But, anyway...

Btw, if anyone has any corrections/suggestions about Star-Striker's costume, feel free to voice them!
>> No. 49187
>>49185
Make her mask go all the way around her eyes like in the previous pictures, and give her a utility belt.

I also had an idea for Star-Striker where she has a motorcycle, red white and blue of course, to get around.
>> No. 49189
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>>49187
>Make her mask go all the way around her eyes like in the previous pictures
Oh, of course, it's supposed to be that way. I was just lazy to draw it all for that quick preview lol It'll be there in the final version
>and give her a utility belt
Argh! So should she have an utility belt, or shouldn't she? Actually, I like those skimpy short shorts so much, I dunno if an utility belt is needed here... I mean, logically she may need one, but it'll clutter her midriff/belly area... And after all, does she really need it, I mean, she's a punch-n-kick combatant
>I also had an idea for Star-Striker where she has a motorcycle, red white and blue of course, to get around.
That's a fine idea, but we'd need a drawfag who's good with drawing motorcycles lol
Maybe smth more silly like a bald eagle-shaped glider (a la Green Goblin)?

P.S.: Here's what Bev probably looks like in her civvies
>> No. 49190
>>49188
I just asked for a utility belt because I have her using a grappling hook in the script I wrote in >>49109 but I could always get rid of it, or we could just have it never explained where she gets the gadgets she occasionally uses from for humorous effect.
>> No. 49191
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>>49190
Hm, I see...
Here, I tried the utility belt (+ added the full mask), and I dunno... Kinda makes the shorts look too much like panties – and one of the main focuses in the 1st issue was on these shorts. So I dunno really...
>> No. 49192
>>49191
Yeah, now that I see the utility belt I don't like it. She should just go beltless, like in >>49185 and inside the beltless buckle on her waist is her Crypto-Communicator, like where I placed that device on Diva's costume in my script >>49127
>> No. 49193
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>>49192
Yeah, and maybe she can smth hidden in those white stars, too (and for a one-time gag, between her breasts)
>> No. 49194
>>49193
Looking good now! I can't wait to see how the rest of the team looks!
>> No. 49195
>>49178
Pretty good so far, but here are my thoughts:

>Establish it as Santa Esmerelda right off the bat, so it doesn't come as a surprise to readers that they aren't in Sapphire City. Just a caption in the first panel would suffice.

>As a big proponent of sliding timelines, I'm not too sure about picking specific dates for the Jimmy Christmas and White Dragon flashbacks. That's just me, though.

>I think the "stuck in traffic" line by Star-Striker is unnecessary. You could do "we had to take a slight detour" laid out over a panel of the Supermoms beating up some bad guys or something.

>Maybe throw in a thought bubble of Star-Striker thinking "luckily, he doesn't know my secret identity--but if he recognizes my voice..." when she finds out Jimmy Christmas works for her company. Or something like that, to more clearly establish that he doesn't know her secret identity...yet.

>I don't know about the bike being Keiichi's. What conservative Japanese parents buy a crotch rocket for their 16-year old son? Maybe this bike could be used as character development for Kaiju, it being a secret she keeps from her husband, who abhors the dangerous killing machines known as motorcycles? Maybe it WILL be Keiichi's, when he graduates, and she's just, ahem, "keeping it warm" for him in the meantime?

>Did you forget that Kaiju could shrink down? Perhaps they could use that to their advantage.

>Sig Rune isn't mentioned at all at first and then suddenly she's there with Star-Striker, Mend and Tropica. Just a little thing that got overlooked.

>Not too sure about Mend saying "Hell yeah." Seems like it's a bit too much for the sweet and gentle Anne-Marie.
>> No. 49197
>>49195
Wow, thanks for the helpful critique! All solid advice
>As a big proponent of sliding timelines, I'm not too sure about picking specific dates for the Jimmy Christmas and White Dragon flashbacks. That's just me, though.
I could change the caption to e.g. "35 years ago". Need some feedback from other anons as to what's better. The problem is, these panels could only work if it's the 70s, so in the case our timeline really gets to slide, those panels lose their sense.
>Or something like that, to more clearly establish that he doesn't know her secret identity...yet.
I actually don't think he ever will, the same with her boss (Lord Darkthorne) – it's more interesting that way.
>I don't know about the bike being Keiichi's. What conservative Japanese parents buy a crotch rocket for their 16-year old son? Maybe this bike could be used as character development for Kaiju, it being a secret she keeps from her husband, who abhors the dangerous killing machines known as motorcycles? Maybe it WILL be Keiichi's, when he graduates, and she's just, ahem, "keeping it warm" for him in the meantime?
The thing is, I originally wanted to make it Kaiju's, but that felt so OOC for her I changed it to Keiichi's. But making it Diva's isn't better: we get a Japanese and a non-Japanese characters on a Japanese bike, and it's owner is the non-Japanese person? Of course, IRL it's entirely possible, but in our cliche-invoking narrative it feels kinda counterintuitive.
>Did you forget that Kaiju could shrink down? Perhaps they could use that to their advantage.
Damn, I DID forget that. But anyway, in the bad guy fight scene there's no need for her to do that. As for the gang scene, she's too startled in those 2 panels to think of anything; and the situation will resolve (SPOILERS lol) the next time we see them.
>Not too sure about Mend saying "Hell yeah." Seems like it's a bit too much for the sweet and gentle Anne-Marie.
She's sweet and gentle, but at the same time, she's a former tomboy. So she gets to do some energetic and tomboyish things, while being generally cute.
>> No. 49198
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49198
Just got to read the Diva script. I liked it! Fun, and to the point.

I think it manages to showcase the main differences between Tropica's and Diva's flirting:
>Tropica does it for fun, Diva does it because she wants a man
>Tropica is actually good at it, Diva's attempts look a bit clumsy and over-the-top (which is cute)

Some moments:
>Eric
Needs to be fleshed out a bit. Maybe make him into a somewhat regular "Commissioner Gordon"-type character interacting will a ll the Supermoms, not just Diva/
>Shaundra being a scene girl
Hmm, pretty unique – do you have any suggestions as to how she would look like?
>...thou art CORRECT. I have never been set STRAIGHT.
I think this line is too much. I liked the pun in the previous panel, and I think the reader will get it there, no need to reiterate it. And I think, it's better if Sig Rune never acknowledge her bi tendencies, at least consciously – it'd be funnier if it were all coincidences and subconscious slip ups.
>Gary, the Golem Master
Does he have a neckbeard?
>Pot-luck
Nice how you tied those up to a major plot. Maybe all of those small character-centric issues need to finish with a link to the Pot-luck Party.
>> No. 49199
>>49198
I liked Diva's physical appearance a lot better in >>48906 . I don't think she should be big all over, just her ass. Also, I feel like the afro fits in more with the theme of her costume than that hairstyle.
>> No. 49200
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>>49199
>I don't think she should be big all over, just her ass
After a long unhealthy, sedentiary lifestyle? Canonically, she's the only ex-Teen Queen who didn't even try to stay fit. Basically, I envisioned her as a typical phat ass black mama, knamean?
I dunno... I could make her smth like picrelated – but doesn't thin!Diva look more bland than chubby!Diva? Need more opinions about that
>Also, I feel like the afro fits in more with the theme of her costume than that hairstyle.
The afro is too 70s. I mean, girls in the Jimmy Christmas/White Dragon flashbacks gonna have afros. Diva probably wasn't even _born_ in the 70s
I chose the current hairstyle because it a) looks like what a superhero teen in the 80-90s would wear b) resembles an eighth note symbol
>> No. 49201
>>49200
Maybe we could do a storyline where she gets in shape?

Also, needs the mask.
>> No. 49202
>>49200
I prefer this look over the chubbier one. The sassiness really seems more evident here.
>> No. 49203
>>49201
>Maybe we could do a storyline where she gets in shape?
Maybe, but this needs to be addressed somehow. And btw, she has to get fit sometime _before_ issue #1! How/why that would happen? Any ideas anons?
>Also, needs the mask.
Ah, yes, I'm always forgetting to draw them lol
>>49202
>The sassiness really seems more evident here.
Maybe it's the pose?
>> No. 49204
>>49203
Flashback issue where Candy decides to hit the dating scene again, so she works out and gets herself in shape, but when she does hit the dating scene (as Candy LaBelle) it's nothing short of disastrous, as no man she dates can handle her sassiness. It ends (very shortly before issue #1) with Candy thinking back to how she practically had men lining up for her to date when she was a superhero, and wondering where she put her old costume.
>> No. 49205
>>49204
Additional details:

>workout montage with Candy and Beverly, lots of potential for fanservicey shots here
>Candy is first driven to hit the dating scene again when Shaundra starts dating Keiichi, partly out of a desire to compete with her daughter, who she sees a lot of herself in
>Shaundra is suspicious of her mother, thinking Candy is getting back in shape not for dating purposes, but so she can come out of superhero retirement, so there's potential for some more Shaundra/Candy argument scenes here


Also I had some ideas for a Mend solo story:
>Anne-Marie and Donald take Harold and Jack to the park
>lots of children running around and playing
>suddenly, an evil supervillain appears
>he hates children and wants them all to have bad childhoods, and his patented "Charley Horse Ray" will do just that by giving debilitating leg cramps to all it hits
>all of the children are hurting and in trouble
>Anne-Marie, who was playing with Harold and Jack on the slide, is affected as well
>when no one is looking she kisses herself better
>Anne-Marie springs into action while the retired Donald watches
>Anne-Marie enters the slide, Mend comes out
>while helping the hurt children, the supervillain takes notice of her and aims his Charley Horse Ray at our (seemingly) helpless heroine
>in the nick of time, Mend conjures one of her protective bubbles around the villain and his infernal machine, the attack bouncing off the inside of the bubble and hitting the villain, incapacitating him just long enough for the police to take him away
>Anne-Marie gets out of costume and the family all heads home for some delicious, fresh-baked treats
>> No. 49206
>>49205
Just had another brainstorm:

>Harold and Jack go down the slide
>"your turn now, mommy"
>then the villain attacks
>the slide is a big one, twisty and curvy, which leads to a scene where Mend is changing inside the slide (the perspective in the panel is from outside the slide) with different speech bubbles at different points in the slide as she puts her costume on
>Mend comes out of the slide right in front of her sons, heals them
>they go to their father and the three watch the battle take place
>Donald assures his sons that their mommy is all right, and when they express concern over Mend's ability to beat this insidious villain, he tells them not to worry, and in a way narrates the battle, showing that he knows all of his wife's moves, and trusts her to handle the situation alone completely
>> No. 49207
>>49206
>"Who are you and where's mommy?"
>"Err...ahh...umm...she's...she's safe, laddies. I'm MEND, and certainly NAE yer ma. Now run along to yer father!"

I'm having a lot of fun with this.
>> No. 49208
>>49198
For Shaundra's appearance, here's what I'm thinking. Feel free to make suggestions as well:

Now, for the hair, I was originally thinking a big afro as sort of a juxtaposition between her hair and her attire, but I don't know if it would look good with the rest of her as it will be, so if that doesn't work, I'm thinking a pixie haircut, maybe pink or something.

For clothes, I was thinking a plain black tanktop with cut up jeans, maybe some sort of punkish logo on the tanktop, Doc Marten boots, spiky earrings, nose stud, a lip ring on one side of her bottom lip, and some eyebrow piercings as well. Gotta have some chains hanging from her pants as well, but nothing overkill. She always carries with her a messenger bag that has a bunch of band patches sewn into it.

Shaundra dresses the way she does as a way of rebelling against her mother, who was a big R&B artist.

Also, I'm working on that Mend solo story now.
>> No. 49213
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49213
Liking all your Mend ideas, and waiting for that Mend solo
Just don't forget she used to be the tomboy of the group, so she's not just sweetness incarnate, she has that fighting spirit in her too

Btw, as I haven't ever been with a freckled girl (I know, I have completely failed at life), and have no freckles myself – could someone tell me what other Mend's body parts (besides her face) could realistically have freckles? Thanks in advance!

The Shaundra concept sounds pretty weird, but in a good way. A black alternative/scenester girl with a decent booty – that's gonna be fun to draw
>> No. 49214
>>49213
You forgot the mask again!

Otherwise, I really like it. I like how the shorts and boots in terms of the length on their respective limbs match the shoulderpads and gloves.
>> No. 49220
>>49213
Freckles can appear pretty much anywhere that's regularly exposed to sunlight, but I wouldn't overdo it on Mend.
>> No. 49228
Here's the first draft of the Mend solo script. It's rough, but here it is.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/6rmsvm9m4ln1tvh/mend1.celtx

Let the critiques fly!
>> No. 49237
I'm going to do some drawfaggotry of this. I might change up the costumes or something. We'll see.
>> No. 49238
>>49237
It's good to have some fresh blood on this project! I'm looking forward to seeing what you come up with!
>> No. 49239
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49239
Kaiju. I wanted to give her a petite bodytype and small breasts. It'd be great if all Supermoms have distinct bodytypes (SS is the superhero "standard", Mend is tiny and chubby, Kaiju is petite, Diva has dat booty, Sig Rune is tall and a bit muscled, Tropica is voluptuous).
The big gloves and boots are metal. Design-wise, they're supposed to emphasize her petite build. Plot-wise, they're inhibitors that help her hold her mass while giant-sized (and maybe also help her in some way when she's tiny-sized, too). Dunno if the ribbons are too much.

>>49213
Argh! What's it with me and masks?! I always forget them! Not this time though!
>>49220
So, no freckles except on her face?
>>49228
This is really good, I like it! I even have no critiques this time, I just like this script
>>49237
Wow, great! Welcome to our gang, bro! Would be great to see your take on the characters! I wonder, if there's gonna be some "marshmallow hell" scenes hehe
>I might change up the costumes or something.
That's okay, it's a collaborative project after all! The costumes change all the time in my drawings, too, since we haven't yet got any 100% final versions. Maybe your versions will become the final ones!

Also, some crazy ideas.
How about that midlife crisis superhero who lusts over every Supermom with little success etc etc, is Gunner Graves? I dunno, when I hear "Gunner Graves" I think of someone really awesome, so it could be funny if a guy who was the epitome of awesome when he was young (you could give him a robot gun hand, and sunglasses, and a pair of katanas etc etc etc – the epitome of ~80-90s awesome!) would become this washed-up has-been! I've even drawn a sketch of him in by notebook. But I want to hear first what Gunner Graves' creator thinks – what plans did he have for him? I don't want to ruin someone's ideas

Another crazy idea. I remember someone coming up with the Evil Supermoms (their evil twins from a parallel universe). What if in that universe, they're not independent villains, they're henchmen of a diabolical mastermind villain! And this villain... is an evil boy genius! Kind of a mix between Lex Luthor or Brainiac and the "boy genius" archetype. The Evilmoms serve him as bodyguards, soldiers and servants, and use their powers to further his goals and protect him. The Supermoms learn to their horror that the Evilmoms used to be exactly like them, until one day the boy genius used some secret invention to make them willingly leave their jobs and families, and even their superhero ideals, and basically become his willing slaves. In our universe, a meteorite fell down from the sky and hit a different spot, so the boy... moved to a different city with his parents. He still lives there, being a goody-two-shoes, which makes his evil counterpart despise him No idea how the Supermoms will defeat this menace, but it probably should have them disguise themselves in Evilmoms' costumes (the same costumes, just with more black and leather) at some point. Whaddya think?
>> No. 49241
>>49239
I like the original Evil Supermoms idea better. It's simpler. However, I am certainly not adverse to our heroines dressing up as their evil counterparts. Perhaps the evil universe's top villain is planning an interdimensional takeover, so the Supermoms subdue their evil counterparts and steal their costumes in order to infiltrate the mastermind's ranks and sabotage their plan?

Nice Kaiju design, but I have to ask, what's with the gloves and boots? To me it doesn't seem that they really "fit" with the rest of her costume, stylistically.
>> No. 49242
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49242
New!Diva.
>> No. 49243
>>49241
That plot also works.
Anyway, I'm just throwing out ideas as they pop up in my head, I'm aware some of them might not fit the project.

I dunno, wanted to have something anime-ish and 90s-comics-inspired at the same time. And to make the costume not look like just a Japanese school uniform. But maybe you're right and they don't fit... as I wrote in my post earlier, I thought design-wise their bulkiness can accentuate her petite build
>> No. 49244
>>49242
Is that a translucent visor/goggles I see? I like it!

Suggestion: Maybe jack up the bellbottoms a bit so we can get a better view of her boots. Also, I liked the belt with the musical note buckle from >>48906 (especially since in my scripts I had that musical note be her Crypto-Communicator), so maybe that could return?
>> No. 49245
>>49243
I like the idea behind the gloves and boots, I just don't think their design works well with the rest of the costume. I like the nod to anime and sentai with them, I just think they should fit in with the rest of the costume better. The gloves especially seem kind of like Mickey Mouse hands to me.
>> No. 49246
>>49244
Thanks!
Damn! Now that I remember to draw masks, I forgot to draw the crypto-comm! Do you think it should be on a belt, or maybe just a decorative buckle attached to the catsuit itself (in the same place a belt's buckle would be)?
>>49245
I see what you mean. Hm, maybe they need to be ever bulkier? I'll try to think of something...
>> No. 49247
>>49246
Yeah, just a buckle by itself would work.

As for Kaiju's gloves and boots, I don't know how they should look. Maybe it's the colors. I think their color scheme compared to the color scheme of the rest of the costume is what isn't working for me.
>> No. 49248
>>49246
Maybe the grey on the gloves and boots can be white, and the red can be pink, to fit with the color scheme of the rest of the outfit.
>> No. 49249
I was thinking about the kids, and I thought about what if Shaundra had powers? Not exactly like her mom's, but maybe a sonic scream or something, something that's obviously inherited from her mother. Maybe in a story she realizes she has the power, and contemplates becoming a villain just to spite her mother, but a firsthand experience with people using their powers shows her that a lot of responsibility and control goes into having and using superpowers, so she decides to keep her newfound abilities secret...for now.

It could also be used as a device to help Shaundra maybe not hate her mother so much, since her having powers makes her more able to sympathize with her superpowered mom.

What do you guys think?
>> No. 49251
>>49249
I was thinking about this, and how I would reveal that Shaundra had (sort of) inherited her mother's powers, and I came up with this story idea:

The Supermoms all have family things on the same day, but they end up having to blow them off to save the world. Afterwards, each of the girls has to deal with how their family took their blowoffs. The only ones I could come up with were for Anne-Marie and Candy.

Anne-Marie:
>Harold and Jack are in a school play. Donald turned his phone off to be respectful to the play, so Anne-Marie can't reach him when she calls to tell him she has to suit up and save the world. He overhears people talking about it at the play, and when Anne-Marie comes home, extremely apologetic and teary-eyed, Donald says it's OK because she did what she had to do. Anne-Marie makes it up to her family by baking them a nice big cake or something.

Candy:
>Candy is supposed to give Shaundra (who doesn't have a car) a ride to work, but blows it off to save the world as Diva and doesn't even call Shaundra to tell her anything. Shaundra doesn't make it to work and gets fired. When she finds out that her mom blew her off to play superhero, Shaundra gets even angrier and lets loose an ear-shattering sonic scream, shockingly discovering that she has powers similar to her mom's.

For the others I didn't think of anything fully, but for example Carmen makes it up to her husband by getting all the kids out of the house (Yolanda isn't mad because she knows her mom's secret and understands) and when Juan comes home there are rose petals everywhere, etc. With Beverly, I was thinking that Steve would be disappointed in her but he's laid back so it's not that bad, Betsy would be very angry with her ("I bet Star-Striker would never do THIS to HER family"), and Ben (who, if you'll remember, inherited his mother's brains) starts to get suspicious. With Kim, I was thinking she had to blow off some traditional Japanese thing and while her kids don't really mind (Megumi is too young to care and Keiichi isn't as traditional as his parents), her husband is furious, but his demeanor means he's just passive-aggressive as hell. No clue what Sigrun's part would be like, though. Any help on this would be greatly appreciated.
>> No. 49252
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49252
Shaundra. Dunno if it turned out looking too lewd for a teenage girl. I treated it as a challenge, to draw a black punk chick with a sizable booty. If it doesn't fit the character, say so.

>>49251
>>49249
I was at first wary about the idea of Shaundra having powers, but after reading your story concept, I support it. I like the story concept very much. As for Sigrun, maybe since Alexander is growing up rather lonesome, maybe it's his birthday, and since he has no friends he expects at least his mom to be there... but alas.
Btw, I'd prefer that after Shaundra discovers her powers, tries to use them for evil, and learns the lesson, she nevertheless shouldn't become a hero. Instead, she would make her point to only use her powers in the most mundane and nondescript ways possible – though she would often use them to help her friends or other people, not realising she's basically acting like a hero (just without a costume or a flashy name).

>>49247
>>49248
Hmm, I'll think about it. Making the gloves/boots white doesn't work, since it makes her costume mostly white, and we've already got one white-costumed heroine (Mend). The reds on the gloves/boots are supposed to mirror the red lines on her kabuki mask
>> No. 49253
>>49252
I think it is a little bit too lewd, maybe eliminate the midriff? The fishnets might be a little bit too much, too. Otherwise I really like it!

I like the idea of Shaundra using her powers to help people while keeping it a secret, as it makes her look kind of hypocritical in her hatred of her mother's secret, while still showing that at the end of the day she is a good person.

I think the Sigrun/Alexander idea is solid, maybe also something can be thrown in there related to Olivia, maybe that is when she starts suspecting that her employer may very well be a superhero.
>> No. 49254
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49254
>>49253
How about now?

The fishnets are a punk thing. What could replace them? Striped stockings maybe? Or are those more of a goth thing? Any suggestions?
>> No. 49255
>>49254
Well, with the midriff covered, I think the fishnets look better now, but just to see how it looks, how about ripped jeans? If that looks better than the fishnets, great, otherwise, the fishnets still look good.
>> No. 49256
>>49252
I had an idea about Shaundra and her powers. Before her powers manifest, she smokes, in defiance of her mom. After she gets her powers, though, she quits smoking, ostensibly to protect her regular voice, but really to protect her superpowered voice. Just a little thing that shows her growing as a person.
>> No. 49258
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49258
Tried it anyway. Funny how purple is the opposite color from Diva's trademark yellow (I thought of it only after I finished coloring it)

>>49255
I dunno, I think only MILFs can pull off wearing jeans on a large booty. Shaundra would be too self-conscious to do that
>>49256
That's a great idea! As most good Supermoms ideas, it combines real world problems with superheroic things
>> No. 49259
>>49258
I prefer the fishnets, but I think the purple hair works better than green.
>> No. 49260
>>49259
What about the shorts? Are they better blue or gray?
>> No. 49261
>>49260
I think blue shorts would work better with the fishnets.
>> No. 49262
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49262
>>49261
What about purple ones?
>> No. 49263
>>49262
I'll allow it.
>> No. 49264
>>49263
I wonder how should Keiichi be dressed. Do they go to a school that has a uniform (Shaundra wouldn't wear it anyway, but Keiichi, being a good boy, would)? Need your suggestions

(Working on Sig Rune and a redraw of my old Tropica pic, to finalize the Supermoms group pic)
>> No. 49265
>>49264
I don't think Sapphire City Magnet School should have uniforms. That being said, Keiichi should still wear a traditional Japanese male's school uniform anyway, on account of his conservative, traditional parents. There could be a running thing where Shaundra tries to get Keiichi to dress normally but he doesn't want to upset his parents.
>> No. 49266
>>49265
Talking about the school here got me thinking. Just what kids are going to the same school? When I came up with the school name, I named it a magnet school. I once went to a magnet school that was combination middle and high school (grade 6-12), but some magnet schools are just high schools (9-12). As far as high school students, I think it would just be more convenient if all of the kids age 14 and older went to the same school, which would mean that Maria (14), Betsy (14), Alexander (15), Shaundra (16) and Keiichi (16) all go there. If we were to add the middle school component, we could also add Yolanda (12), Anna (11) and Ben (12). The rest of the kids are all elementary school age.
>> No. 49267
>>49265
Hm, I agree with this. Do you perhaps have any useful reference links? I'm kind of lost in all the different kinds of Japanese school uniforms
>> No. 49268
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49268
>>49267
Google image search pulls this up. I think it would work as it has a distinct Japanese flavor to it.
>> No. 49269
>>49268
Thank you! Its strictness could serve as a good visual counterpoint to Shaundra's rebellious style
Btw, does Keiichi wear glasses?
>>49266
I'd support combining the high and middle schools, while the younger kids go to a different (elementary) school. Hm, I thought Yolanda was older
>> No. 49270
>>49269
I don't see why Keiichi wouldn't wear glasses. It would fit with him being a nerd, and further contrast him from his girlfriend.
>> No. 49274
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49274
Ms.Odinsdottir. I'm not so good at drawing muscular backsides, but... yeah.

I've actually had an idea about Sig Rune's character's development. What if we add a rather unusual love triangle? Hear me out.
At her teaching job, Sigrun is treated with a wary respect. She distances herself from everyone emotionally, and they mostly reciprocate. However, there's the history teacher, Mr. Tabari, who has been smitten by his statuesque colleague since the day he first saw her at a teacher conference. Sigrun, of course, doesn't even usually acknowledge the guy's existence, since he's just another puny mortal who can't even lift. However, that doesn't diminish the poor guy's feelings towards the cold beauty. Mind that Mr. Tabari isn't a wimp or unpopular with women, but constantly trying to win Sigrun's affection is like trying to scale an ice wall.
It all continues the same way until one fateful day. The day when this puny mortal bested Sigrun in a fair battle! Of course, it wasn't a battle of brawn – after all, even the school's strongest manlet, the P.E. teacher, proved easy for Sigrun to defeat. No, Mr. Tabari bested Sigrun in another field she thought herself unbeatable – the knowledge of Medieval history! If Sigrun were a mere mortal, this event wouldn't have any significance. But the world of gods and valkyries operates on the sacred magic of narrative principles. Mr. Tabari's victory resonated with Sigrun's deep-rooted instincts, telling her to submit herself to this fair champion, choosing him as her faithful consort. Having never acknowledged such feelings in her life, Sigrun doesn't know what to do about them, - though now that she had the chance to know Mr. Tabari better, he doesn't seem too bad...
And if that wasn't complicated enough for poor Sigrun, she now starts to realize some other feelings she never acknowledged before, those directed towards a certain mortal different from Mr. Tabari in a lot of ways...
This all could happen over the course of several issues, of course, being a gradual development. It would also help subtly establish Sigrun's bisexuality (as compared to Olivia's... more specialised preferences), while having her gradually explore her feelings towards non-superhero mortals in general. What do you think?

>>49270
Duly noted.
>> No. 49275
>>49274
I was under the impression that Sigrun was a straight-up lesbian.
>> No. 49276
>>49275
I was of the impression that she, as a divine being, doesn't differentiate between which mortals to bed. And mostly, she's acting as asexual, not acknowledging her feelings towards anyone. She's completely oblivious towards Olivia's hints and advances – though there's a definite possibility of them getting together (as has been mentioned earlier, Olivia's a really special person in Sigrun's life for many reasons). There are a lot of jokes about Sigrun's lesbian tendencies – however, they're like Batman gay jokes, in that if there's some truth to them, that truth is so deep inside the closet it'll take years to find its way out.
>> No. 49277
>>49274
Is her ass completely naked under that leather flap(?), or does she wear panties underneath it?
>> No. 49278
>>49277
Since we already have panty shots covered with Kaiju, I'd say she's naked under there.
>> No. 49279
>>49277
Drawfag here, deffo naked.
She has a longer flap covering the front side (it's visible in this drawing between her legs), and the short flap covers her buttocks. A lot of creative censoring will be needed in the comic, of course. As for why isn't half of Sapphire City shocked by the sight of her naked valhalla – well, let's say there's the same invisible plot armor at work, as with her secret identity
>> No. 49281
>>49274
Would she end up revealing her secret to him?
>> No. 49282
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49282
Okay, here's what we have so far. All characters that have been drawn to this moment. Of course, they differ in style somewhat, but most character designs are a work in progress, anyway

>>49281
I don't think so. I don't even know if they actually end up dating or anything, or if he's just a foil for Olivia and a plot device to let Sigrun explore her feelings towards mortals in general
>> No. 49284
>>49282
Looking at Mend in this picture, I can't help but think her mask should be different somehow. Look at the rest of the team. We have a number of other different facial coverings (or lack thereof) covered, and Star-Striker already has a basic domino mask. Maybe Mend should have a different type of mask, one none of the rest of the Supermoms have.
>> No. 49285
>>49284
Looking at her mask now, I actually think it's fine in terms of general layout, but for colors, how about pink, like the pink in the rest of her costume, with a black outline?

I was also thinking that Star-Striker's mask could be skinnier, too. That way we get a good contrast between their masks.
>> No. 49287
>>49275

i don't get that vibe from her. Olivia is, i know that (and naming the place Sapphire City is an extended lesbian joke in itself), but Sigrun is pretty much omnisexual. she appreciates valor. she's attracted to the brave, be they man or woman or horse-alien.

>>49284

maybe she should have a full-face mask with an open mouth. her powers are in her lips, so why not protect the rest of it?
>> No. 49288
>>49284
That would be fine, but what could it be? We have a superhero domino mask, a luchador mask, a kabuki mask, a futuristic visor, and a maskless heroine. What other options could there be? Need your suggestions.
>>49285
I don't think the difference between "a bigger domino mask" and "a thinner domino mask" is easily distinguishable. As for the color, it may be pink, but I wanted to emphasize white as Mend's main color (hinting to its usual medical/healing connotations). And btw, a pink mask may look a bit like blushing.
>>49287
Sound logic! But Tropica already has the full-face mask. Or maybe it should be smth like Animal Man or Dove (the female version) wear, with hair uncovered by the fabric?

And btw, gentlemen. How do we ki-- I mean, when do we make a new post in /co/?
>> No. 49289
>>49288

soon.
>> No. 49290
>>49287
>maybe she should have a full-face mask with an open mouth
Hmm, I'm definitely interested in seeing what this could look like. Would her eyes be exposed or would the mask have white eyepieces?
>> No. 49291
So, the solo stories for Diva, Star-Striker and Mend are written (by me) and while I definitely need to do a bit of tweaking on the Diva script, they're all pretty much done. Garuda, if you could look over Mend's dialogue in her solo story and make it seem more Scottish than I tried to make it, that would be great. I tried but I doubt it's perfect.

I know Garuda is working on the Sigrun solo, and I don't know how far he is, but I did a lot of thinking about the character suggested in >>49274 and thought a human character, not one of the other moms, who helps Sigrun be more human than Asgardian, has potential, and maybe that character could be worked into the Sigrun solo story, even if just for a little bit. For example, he could see Sigrun being rather brash and blunt, and talk to her, that while in her country (since people who don't know her secret think she's merely from Europe) that behavior may be OK, in America one has to use tact. At first she'll blow his earnest attempts to help her off, but after he gains her respect she'll start to heed his advice. It could be portrayed as how no mortal has really had an effect on her personality and demeanor before since she viewed herself as "above" all mortals (with the exception of her teammates, who she views as equals), and when this character humbles her through either the method described in >>49274 or another way, she starts to value his opinions and insights. She could even, in the future, come to him for superhero advice, obviously phrased so it doesn't reveal her secret, of course.

We also need a Tropica solo, but I really don't feel like I could write one and have it be any good at all, since I feel like I really can't capture the dynamic of Carmen and Juan in a way that does that relationship justice. However, I do have on idea for it: the seeds of the realization that Yolanda has the ability to talk to plants can be laid, through an exchange between her and her mother, about how good Yolanda is with plants, while Carmen has to rely on her powers. Yolanda could say something like, "you just have to listen to the plants and give them what they want," something like that, that can be interpreted as an expression rather than "Yolanda can actually talk to plants."
>> No. 49296
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49296
>>49290
Something like this maybe?
>>49289
How soon?
>>49291
>Sigrun
I don't think the situation with Mr.Tabari (if you guys decide to use this idea) should resolve just in one issue. It's more of a slow, gradually evolving story, that happens over the course of a whole arc, in the background.
>Yolanda
I think it's a good idea
>> No. 49297
>>49296
I'm not a fan of how Mend's mask looks in that style, although I do approve of having her mask be the kind that ties around her head rather than just sticking to her face. I think maybe the style in >>49282 with the eyes visible combined with the wrap-around-head style from >>49296 with maybe a pink outline, like how pink is a secondary color in the rest of her costume? Not 100% on the pink outline but I do like the wrap-around style.
>> No. 49298
>>49296
Oh no, I was never intending Mr. Tabari to be a one-off thing. It would slowly build until he wins Sigrun's respect and she opens herself to him, at least a little bit more than she does for most other mortals.

There could also be an angle where Olivia becomes jealous of Sigrun confiding in him over her.

I had a story idea for Star-Striker where she is besieged by a conservative organization that objects to her provocative costume. They whip up a brand new costume for her that covers her whole body, and Star-Striker gives into their demands and wears it, but the plan backfires when the organization sees her in action, the tight, form-fitting costume hugging all the contours of her body, somehow managing to be even lewder than her old costume. Star-Striker herself finds it terribly unwieldy and stiff, leading to her almost losing to an opponent she shouldn't lose to. At the end, the conservative group gives up, deciding that they can't do anything that'll work, and Star-Striker goes back to her old costume.

Also, on the topic of costumes, as for why the Supermoms don't get costumes that fit their current bodies, we could throw a line or two in somewhere that states that their old tailor(s) retired to someplace far away years ago, and there are no tailors discreet enough to serve superheroes right now. I remember that issue was brought up earlier in this thread so I figured it was time to solve it.
>> No. 49299
I just hope the folks at /co/ like the idea.
>> No. 49302
>>49296
I'm warming up to this Mend mask design, but think the eyepieces need to be streamlined a bit. Otherwise I'm starting to really like it.
>> No. 49304
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49304
>>49297
Something like this?
>>49302
Hm, what shape should they be? Triangle like Animal Man's? "Big eyes" like Dove's/Spider-Man's/Black Cat's? Round? Need your suggestions
>>49298
I like the idea of Sigrun opening herself up a little bit for Mr.Tabari after his victory, with a desperate Olivia watching this unfold. The reason I like this love triangle, is that usually we get one successful lover and one "underdog" everyone roots for. But here, both Olivia and Tabari have realistically rather slim chances of getting with a goddess like Sigrun. Both are "underdogs". So, some of the readers could root for the "cool nerd" Tabari, while others would root for the "quiet girl" Olivia.
>Star-Striker and the costume
Would they say she dresses like a WHOOORRRE? Seriously though, this story idea is quite funny, but I think it should end in the conservatives proposing an even more conservative costume, looking like a radiation suit – which makes SS finally snap and don her 1st costume in a "fuck you" to the conservatives.
>the tailor retired
It's not a simple problem. If the old superheroic tailor retired, how do they mend their costumes? And who makes/mends costumes for other heroes (e.g., Gunner Graves)?
Then again. It's only a problem for Star-Striker, isn't it? Tropica makes the costume herself, Kaiju's costume is unique and unreplaceable, Diva's is somewhat stretchy and it covers most of her body, Sig Rune does not care for puny mortal morals when it comes to battle armor, and Mend may be okay with a bit of her underboob sticking out for some reason (dunno why, though). And SS's reasoning could be explored in the story you proposed.
>> No. 49306
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49306
Also, tried to remove some internal outlines. I think she looks cleaner that way, maybe
>> No. 49307
>>49306
I think I prefer the internal outlines. It may just be your drawing style that makes it look weird, though.
>> No. 49308
>>49304
I'm thinking maybe "big eyes"?

As for the tailor deal, maybe the Supermoms' old tailor retired, but there's a new guy, and none of the Supermoms like his ideas for new costumes. Maybe he's a bit too into the 90s or something. It could be a good moment for some pages of the Supermoms in wacky alternate costumes.
>> No. 49311
>>49307
Okay, maybe
>>49308
>I'm thinking maybe "big eyes"?
Actually, I tried to do it, and I just can't manage to make it look cute. Maybe a more talented drawfag could manage this. I'm atm sticking with the normal eyes
>It could be a good moment for some pages of the Supermoms in wacky alternate costumes.
Oooh, I like this idea very much! There could even be several tailors, all subtly parodying different "excesses" in superhero costume designs/redesigns! Seeing Supermoms in those wacky costumes could be very fun

Actually, it all starts to fit nicely into one costume-themed issue! The main plot is Star-Striker, who becomes unsatisfied with her "skimpy" costume.
How's about this for main plot:
>Cover: Bev in civvies walking away from the camera, her costume tossed into a garbage bin, silhouettes of the Supermoms in the background
>Bev and her family are having a meal, Betsy is going to leave for a friend's party, trying to look nonchalant
>Bev's voice stops her right at the door
>Bev tells Betsy she can't go party in such a skimpy costume
>Bev asks Steve to support her, but finds out that his attention is elsewhere – he's watching news about SS battling some villain. Of course, Steve is just a big baby and is fascinated by superhero action, but the jealous Bev thinks he's ogling SS's T&A in her skimpy uniform. While Bev is occupied by all this, Betsy uses this moment to slip away
>Later, SS is fighting a villain, while still fuming about all this. She finally notices the double standard of her reprimanding Betsy for her somewhat skimpy outfit, while wearing a costume that "seduces the husbands of innocent citizens".
>To top of it all, the villain she's fighting is The Slimeball. He has the powers of being a ball made out of slime, and also is very sleazy and perverted. He makes all kinds of creepy and pervy comments about how SS (and her various body parts) look in her costume, etc. (if needed, I could provide the comments lol)
>That is the last drop. SS delivers a severe beating to Slimeball, and vows to change her costume.
>Next, we see her discuss this with other Supermoms. They meet in Mend's house. She starts with "we need to change our costumes" "our image" etc.
>But it turns out, Diva is okay with her current costume, even if it hugs her body a bit tighter than in did in her youth. Sigrun does not care for mortal morals, and by the way, did she mention Beverly's ripe feminine form looks picturesque in her current suit. Tropica makes her costume herself, and she likes to tease men as it's fun. Kaiju can't change the costume even if she wanted, it being a one-of-a-kind mystical ancient Babylonian hi-tech tattoo that creates a magical outfit that incidentally looks like a skimpier version of a Japanese school uniform. That leaves only SS and Mend.
>SS tries to rally Mend's support, noting that her breasts look a bit lewd in her costume now that her body has matured. Mend is unsure, she starts to agree, but at that same moment Shadow Boy, who was passing by, overhears that bit of discussion and nonchalantly notes that it's the part he likes the most, and disappears again. Mend is now not in favor of changing her costume, leaving SS alone.
>SS is not mad at her comrades, though, but is still determined to change her own costume. The Supermoms support it, as it's her decision about her own image, and offer their help.
>They go to their old tailor, but find out that he/she is retired. Maybe the journey is perilous in itself. Maybe the tailor is a secret agent, or a wise old Chinese master, or I dunno
>Then they decide to search for currently active superhero tailors. They find several (through their own search or recommendations from other superheroes). Other moms decide to also try their redesigns, for curiosity's sake. We see a montage of each tailor, and some or all of the Supermoms dressed in silly redesigned costumes. By some mysterious reason, sometimes it's not just the costumes that change, but even the moms' physical form itself (it'd be a fun way to parody some styles)
>a) an "x-treeeme 90s" designer who changes some moms into thin broken back Sindels, others into hulking monstrosities, all complete with robotic arms, huge guns and pouches
>b) a "wacky 90s" designer who redesigns them in the colorful toy-style design of 90s X-Men, Gen13, Claremont FF, Slapstick, etc., complete with bulky boots and gloves, and cartoonish animesque faces
>c) a designer who just adds a lot of unnecessary superfluous lines on their old costumes
>d) a sleazebag designer who gives them even more stripperrific costumes citing that it symbolizes their "freedom" and "femininity" and makes them "more mobile in battle". The moms are surprised how it was even possible with SS's costume, and Tropica refuses to leave her booth at all
>e) a female designer who just gives them pants. No, not even pants in the style of their old costumes, just random loose-fitting casual pants of random colors, put over their old costumes. E.g., Tropica looks like Hulk or Ben Grimm in them.
>f) a designer recommended by the Portland Hipster. Dresses them in rather bland casual hipster duds that in no way look like superhero attire.
>g) a designer with rather messy hair, who makes them all look gothy and somewhat emaciated
>h) a young female designer who mysteriously and randomly changes their races and body types (fat, very thin, hunchbacked, body hair, etc), while as a side-effect giving them all shiny red noses. The costumes remain the same – "What costumes?"
>i) maybe more?
>The last one is a representative of a Society of Concerned Unrelenting Mothers. She criticizes SS's current costume for its "indecent" and "objectifying" nature, and offers a redesign that "covers everything". Tropica sarcastically asks if "covering everything" is a cure for all problems, but a tired SS tells her to stop it, and agrees on the offer. Partly because some of the representative's reason relate to her earlier thoughts, partly because she's just tired of all the redesign silliness, and this one frankly doesn't look too bad.
>And then it all happens like described earlier
What do you think?
If no one wants to do this story, I could take a shot at it, after I finish "Fans". If someone wants to do it, be my guest
>> No. 49316
i have a spot that i thought was cute and i wanted to share it with you. Sigrun now has two dogs, Hati and Skoll. she named them, but Olivia got them for her, as a birthday present, since all the high society ladies have dogs.

the joke is they're Pomeranians, and Sigrun keeps asking when they'll stop being puppies and grow so she can take them bear-hunting or whatever.
>> No. 49317
I had an idea for a future SUpermoms storyline, but it may be a little bit too much. Basically, the Supermoms meet another superhero team from the future...their children!

Now, it's not THE future, but a possible future. The main reason why I think it's too much is I don't want the Supermoms know their kids have/will have powers yest, although we could always do a mindwipe thing at the end so they forget. The team the Supermoms encounter could be:

>Star-Striker (Betsy, the mantle was passed down)
>Scream Queen (Shaundra)
>Viking Warrior (Alexander, no powers but he is putting his mother's training to use)
>something for Harold and Jack, who inherited a mixture of their parents' powers
>something for Keiichi, who used his brains to build himself an Iron Man-esque armored suit
>Plant Princess (Yolanda, who used her ability to talk to plants to essentially become the benevolent human ruler of all flora on the planet)

The future team could team up with the Supermoms in the present, or bring them to the future, to battle against a threat from the future team's time. It could be presented the whole time as not THE future, but A future. What do you guys think?
>> No. 49319
>>49316
Reading this made me realize that none of the Supermoms had pets previously, so I got to thinking, maybe more than just Sigrun could have some pets. For Kaiju, I was thinking she would have a cat, since the Japanese love cats.

Speaking of Kaiju, I've been working on a solo script, and here's the outline so far:
>opens with Kaiju helping out with a natural disaster or something of that nature, something that doesn't involve beating up bad guys
>at home, Keiichi has Shaundra over to study
>Kim doesn't want any funny business going on so she shrinks down and sneaks into Keiichi's room to spy on him and his girlfriend
>suddenly, cat appears
>Kim manages to stay out of sight while the cat chases her around the room, Keiichi and Shaundra either don't pay attention to the cat or don't get a good look at Kim
>Kim squeezes through a hole in the wall to hide from the cat
>suddenly, spiders
>Kim fights off the spiders using her Japanese martial arts while Keiichi and Shaundra make out
>Kim emerges from the hole, victorious, just as Shaundra and Keiichi wrap up their study session
>thinks that nothing happened

Any suggestions/ideas?
>> No. 49329
the Sigrun solo is going weird. slow, but going. but weird. we'll see. i might have to pawn it off on somebody else and just edit and do continuity from now.

new villain idea: Showmistress, a disgruntled former Hollywood production assistant who uses specialized broadcasting equipment to recruit her army of mindless slaves (basically, she's an angry hipster making an extended joke about people's mindless opinions).

i have another guy, too, but i don't think he'll work for this, on second thought, and i think i might use him for one of my personal projects.
>> No. 49330
also, i'm wondering if we shouldn't try to merge this with the mainstream /coc/ universe.
>> No. 49331
>>49316
An interesting idea.
And Sigrun being Sigrun, she still manages to train them to be the fiercest Pomeranians to ever walk the Earth – a definite sign that, given some time, she'll get the same result with Alexander as well
>>49317
Hm, I don't know... I like the various hints at their children's possible superhero future being placed in the stories... like an invitation for the readers to piece together the puzzle themselves. Maybe it's best to be kept that way?
Btw, seems like Bev's son could also become a superhero (or supervillain), given his very intelligent and inquisitive mind. A superscientist, or maybe someone akin to Nick Fury.
>>49319
A cat is fi-- okay, I'll resist the temptation of the obvious meme.
As for the script – I like it, but it seems too short. Maybe insert a flashback, to the time Kaiju was imbued with the mystical powers of Ancient Babylonian artifact? Maybe she's the daughter of a Japanese roboticist (he later moved to the USA), who was always absent at work. Recently he was absent because he was helping a major underwater excavation of an unknown ancient civilization near a tiny volcanic island in the Pacific Sea. Teenage Kim visited him on a holiday, and asked her dad to let her dive and see the dig, and she finds an artifact everyone overlooked. It speaks to her and tells her it was made by Ancient Babylonians (who were actually scientifically advanced aliens!) and gives her the tattoo on her back. It makes her transform into an Ancient Babylonian magical priestess (who coincidentally wore ceremonial mystical robes who looked just like a skimpy version of a serafuku). Kim at first can't control her powers as the rapid size changes make her almost die, so her dad (the only one who knows her secret) builds her robotic gloves and boots, to keep his daughter alive. What do you think?
>>49329
>the Sigrun solo is going weird. slow, but going. but weird. we'll see.
Great! Can't wait.
>new villain idea: Showmistress
An interesting idea, could be pretty fun
>>49330
No, no, no, please no! Let's keep it a separate universe with its own cast of characters etc.
That said, of course, there could be trans-universe crossovers (think, Punisher meets Archie – there's a lot of fun and interaction within the story, but they're from different universes that can never be conflated).
I dunno if we should post the project in a general /coc/ thread on /co/, or create a thread just for the project. The former may get the attention of /coc/ thread members, the latter may insure that all the attention and discussion goes to Supermoms and not the other /coc/ projects
>> No. 49332
>>49331
Kim's a bright scientist, right? I'd like to think she built the gloves and boots herself.

>Babylonian
I don't think that fits very well with the way her character is portrayed, which lampoons Japanese pop culture conventions. As for an actual origin story, I tried coming up with something, but everything I came up with sucked. I think we should leave her origin open-ended for now, and just talk about how her tattoo is magical and she uses her robotic gloves and boots to keep things under control. I also think we should hold off on origin stories for a single all-Supermom issue where all of their origin stories are revealed.

Now, are her gloves and boots stored in the tattoo itself? I think that would make things a lot more convenient.

Here's some things I thought about adding to the Kaiju solo story:
>something showing off Kim in her work environment
I don't know what she actually DOES beyond a generic scientist job. Anyone have any ideas? Maybe Kim at work could segue into Kaiju getting big to prevent a natural disaster, like she hears about it at work and excuses herself.
>a little thing with Megumi
Kim walks in on Megumi watching her sentai shows, telling Megumi it's time for her nap. Megumi mentions Kaiju, and says she likes that heroine, Kaiju being just like her shows. Then, Kim puts Megumi to bed for her nap, and the spying on Shaundra and Keiichi commences.

Any other ideas?

>>49330
The Supermoms need to be in their own universe.
>> No. 49333
>>49331
The /coc/ threads on /co/ are really just for the /co/verse. Garuda has posted about Supermoms in those threads before to no real response. I'd say we'd be better off just making a thread on /co/ about it.

After we have a finalized group shot, of course.
>> No. 49334
>>49331
I think the best thing to do is to give it it's own thread. That way we don't alienate the typical users by having it appear in their thread and to introduce the concept to people who've never heard of it
>> No. 49335
>>49332
>Kim's a bright scientist, right? I'd like to think she built the gloves and boots herself.
14 years old, dude.
Plus, the protag's scientist father building smth to save/preserve/remake/improve their child's life is so common in anime it isn't funny.
>I don't think that fits very well with the way her character is portrayed, which lampoons Japanese pop culture conventions.
It was a reference to the best non-existant mecha anime evar: http://youtube.com/watch?v=Hfyasdj2Bzc, which is in itself a pastiche of different mecha stereotypes + Akira
I suppose, it may as well be Mycenaean (Mazinger Z), Egyptian (Yu-Gi-Oh), belonging to a pre-historical civilization (Sailor Moon) or just plain alien (Ultraman). Japanese protags quite often get their powers from some advanced civilization, ancient or alien
>I don't know what she actually DOES beyond a generic scientist job. Anyone have any ideas? Maybe Kim at work could segue into Kaiju getting big to prevent a natural disaster, like she hears about it at work and excuses herself.
I think she's the lead designer of one of the main divisions of the scientific branch of the MILF corporation. I like the plot idea you suggested
>Megumi mentions Kaiju, and says she likes that heroine, Kaiju being just like her shows.
How about, this issue also features her husband and in-laws making some comment about Kaiju's lewdness, and Kaiju thinks if they're right, but after her little daughter sees no problem in Kaiju and even tells her she wants to be like Kaiju when she grows up, she stops worrying about what others think. Needn't be a major plot point (this angle is already examined in other issues), just a background event near the beginning of the issue, and its resolution near the issue's end.

>>49333
>After we have a finalized group shot, of course.
Who else needs to be drawn there to finalize it? Need your input.
>> No. 49336
>>49335
P.S.: Expanding a bit on Kaiju's job. Since her dad was a roboticist, I'd suppose she is, too. But actually, no one knows what exactly the whole MILF corporation does, so it's only logical that the reader won't know what Kaiju's division does, either.
>> No. 49337
>>49335
I think Tropica should be by herself in the group shot, maybe in a seductive pose where she's blowing a kiss at the viewer so there's still a sense of her flirtatious personality.
>> No. 49338
So, I'm working on the Kaiju solo script now, and I'm wondering, should her shape-changing abilities be tied into whether or not she's wearing her costume? I'm at the part where she shrinks down to spy on Shaundra and Keiichi, and I don't know if I should have her in costume or not.
>> No. 49339
On the Kaiju script, I've hit a bit of a roadblock. So, Kaiju shrinks down to spy on Keiichi, and to hide from her pet cat, runs into a hole in the wall, where she encounters the Micro-Men, a band of mini-sized villains who she beat before she retired. My question is, what evil plot would several very tiny men have tried that Kaiju could have stopped? None of the Micro-Men have any notable powers beyond being very tiny.

In my original outline I had Kaiju fighting spiders but I think tiny men who Kim defeated many years ago, coincidentally living inside the walls of Kim's house, plotting their return to evil would be cooler.
>> No. 49392
Is someone gonna make a /co/ thread?
>> No. 49393
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>>49392

i'm going to make it tomorrow.

I AM GOING TO MAKE THE THREAD TOMORROW. BE THERE. SOMETIME AROUND NOON PST (3 EST).
>> No. 49394
>>49393
I will be there.

Hopefully we can bring some drawfags over.
>> No. 49397
So when coming up with something to post in the /co/ thread I came up with this story idea:

>A battle with a villain and his mind-controlling machine goes awry. While the villain is defeated, the Supermoms have all had their minds switched around! Star-Striker's mind in Mend's body, Sig Rune's mind switched with Kaiju's, etc. While Kaiju (not in her own body, of course), the scientist of the group, tries to figure out a way to swap everybody's minds back, the Supermoms have to pretend to be the body their minds are inhabiting. Expect pretty of wacky hijinks.

What do you guys think?
>> No. 49398
So here's the Kaiju script as it is now. It's not done, but all I really have left to do is have Kaiju fight the Micro-Men and miss Keiichi and Shaundra kissing, then getting the invitation to the potluck dinner.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/bxr8zm6jvbl1oxl/kaiju1.celtx
>> No. 49399
Guys, let's post more actively on the /co/ thread, okay?
>> No. 49401
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49401
Just posted from an anonymous drawfag in the /co/ thread.

If you're reading this, thank you!
>> No. 49403
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49403
>>49401
And Star-Striker from another wonderful drawfag!

Thank you!
>> No. 49405
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49405
More trophies from the thread! It's still on, btw

Star-Striker seems to be popular for some reason (I suspect costume design)
>> No. 49406
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49406
Also, a Tropica one
>> No. 49407
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49407
And a couple drawings from based JMD!
>> No. 49408
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49408
>> No. 49410
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49410
This just in, a hot Mend from JMD! Come on, guys, thread not dead yet!
>> No. 49411
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49411
And a fiery Tropica
>> No. 49412
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49412
A STRONK Sig Rune
>> No. 49413
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49413
And a cute Kaiju

Thanks, based JMD!
>> No. 49418
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49418
One more Tropica from JMD
>> No. 49420
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49420
And another one.
>> No. 49423
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49423
>> No. 49425
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49425
>> No. 49428
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49428
More from JMD.
>> No. 49429
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49429
>> No. 49430
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49430
And a sketch from someone else
>> No. 49431
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49431
>>49430
It turned out to be Bellend
>> No. 49432
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49432
>> No. 49433
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49433
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49434
>> No. 49435
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49435
>> No. 49436
An idea from the /co/ thread I liked:

>Ms Goldbeetle
>Goldigger/thief/kleptomaniac villainess modeled after the dung beetle.

>Robs bank, people, of all their money and jewels and collects them into a ball and proceeds to roll them dung beetle style.
>She wears a super suit or costume shaped like a dung beetle but made of gold, precious stones and wears Kamen Rider style money-scarf

Needs some work, but I like the idea of a villain using a giant ball of their stolen loot as a weapon. Maybe she can be one of the new villains that's popping up.
>> No. 49437
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49437
>>49436
I'm gonna save all the ideas from the thread, and post them here later. I hope /co/ anons will venture here after the thread dies
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49440
>> No. 49441
>>48837
I imagine her with a more worldly wise version of Bubbles' voice, for some reason.
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49442
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49443
>> No. 49445
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49445
>>49442
Trying new things
>> No. 49446
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49446
After reading through the pastebin, I figured >>49403 was a little too generously proportioned. So Bev went on a diet.
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49447
>>49445
What if there were more circles?

(note to self: no commas in filenames)
>> No. 49448
I hope we get some art of the villains soon
>> No. 49449
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49449
>>49394
>Hopefully we can bring some drawfags over.
be careful what you ask for...
>> No. 49450
>>49447
She wore that as a teenager, did she?
>> No. 49451
>>49449
These are supposed to be fun cheesecakey characters not serious explorations of race and gender issues, fuck that puto.
>> No. 49452
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49452
>>49450
Maybe she did?
>> No. 49454
So I had an idea for a story that's basically just a flashback to how Mend and Shadow Boy met and fell in love. It has a frame story of Harold and Jack asking Anne-Marie and Donald how they met, with mostly narration by Anne-Marie (although Donald butts in from time to time) telling her sons how she and their father met, albeit told in a way that doesn't reveal their superhuman statuses. For example, Anne-Marie will talk about a "really tough project at work" while the panel shows the Supermoms beating up bad guys.

The way I always pictured the Mend/Shadow Boy relationship is Shadow Boy was a big-time nemesis of the Supermoms, his shadow powers letting him always slip through their grasp. He's definitely into Mend from the beginning, though, using his shadow form to slip around her and joke around while the Supermoms are trying to defeat him, but Mend is too focused on the task at hand (beating the bad guy, in this case Shadow Boy) to reciprocate.

The Supermoms finally come up with a plan to beat Shadow Boy and it works! However, Shadow Boy is badly hurt and actually leaves his shadow form, revealing his true identity. A concerned Mend rushes over to tend to him. After all, just because he's a bad guy doesn't mean he should be hurting like that. From there I'm kind of split. Either the two share a tender moment and kiss, Mend healing Shadow Boy, or Mend heals Shadow Boy with a peck to the forehead, but then Shadow Boy makes his move and full-on mouth kisses her. Either way, the two end up together and that's the last anyone ever saw of Shadow Boy.

What do you guys think?
>> No. 49455
>>49454
I like the latter choice more. Makes it feel more believable.
>> No. 49456
>>49455
All right, sounds good.

For Shadow Boy's shadow form I was thinking it's just totally dark save for his eyes which are all one color. I was thinking red. And in his shadow form his movements are really fluid, and he can hop from shadow to shadow, etc.
>> No. 49457
>>49449
This guy doesn't know what he's talking about

>I agree with 59077453
With the guy who didn't read the scripts or the bios, and based his criticism on the assumption all Supermoms do is save civilians and fuck? Says a lot
>the Japanese mom
is an anime stereotype, not an ethnic stereotype. I didn't know "anime" was an ethnicity.
>anime explosion of the 90s-00s
I wish he'd learn about the topics he uses in criticisms before actually using them. Kaiju's family arrived in the U.S. in the 1980s – the time the anime/manga invasion began (which influenced, e.g., American alternative comics of the 80s, not that Mr.Critic knows shit about this). Kaiju acted as a superhero in the mid-late 90s, retiring around 2000 – basically, her Teen Queen peak was the time Final Fantasy VII was ported to the U.S. and revived the animu craze.
>the sassy Black mamma
Making a black soul singer is racist now? What if I create a white country musician? Or a Hawai'ian hula dancer? How dare we, link cultures with their preferred musical genres!
As for her being a single parent. Black women being single isn't a stereotype. Black men leaving their wives (black or white or whatever), is a stereotype. But – we don't know shit about Diva's ex, he could be black or white or Asian or Kryptonian for all we know.
>70s disco Foxy Brown
Diva's is mainly a mashup of 80s singer heroes (e.g., Dazzler, Jem, Michael Jackson etc), with design mostly based on ridiculous costumes of the era (not just singers' – e.g., Marvel's Dagger) – with just some design elements taken from 70s blaxploitation costumes for flavor. But of course, if she's black, she's Foxy Brown, nothing stereotypical about Mr.Critic's thinking here.
>the aryan Ubermom
This is just retarded. Sig Rune's basically rule63 Thor, or a version of Marvel's Valkyrie. Are these characters "racist" because they're blonde, too? It's like criticizing Neil Gaiman for making his awesome Anansi black.
>Latina is a useless slut
She's not useless, this is a retarded assumption – she's one of the major powerhouses of the team. Being flirty doesn't make a woman a "slut", Mr. Progressive Critic, good modern thinking here. But I admit Tropica's character is a bit stereotypical.
>American MILF is completely normal
They're all American, except Sig Rune.
As for SS, she's a high-ranking exec, the "man of the house" in her family, a very energetic and assertive woman, often obsessed with managing and improving everything she could get her hands onto, sometimes thinking things over too much for her own good. It's "normal" in the way every other Supermom is "normal".
Funny how he seemed to "forget" about Mend, because she doesn't fit this pretty picture of evil racists perpetuating harmful stereotypes like "soul singing".

>thinking this isn't wrong.
The absolute worst thing is cowering in fear and guilt everytime you create a character based on any archetype from fiction, unless you make completely 100% new and unexpected combinations, or just stick with aliens and robots, because everything about a Black/Asian/Latino character seems to be a "racist stereotype" in some critics' book (see: Princess and the Frog). As a wise anon said, it's silly harmless fun, not a serious political/racial tract.
>> No. 49458
IDEAS FROM THE /CO/ THREAD

Idea 1
A flashback issue about the Teen Queens' formation

>try not having a "hero fights villain, others join" story
>maybe SS puts a classified ad or a pull-off flyer, or a craigslist ad, not expecting actual superpowered beings to answer it
>or maybe, all these teenage girls are rejected from major superhero teams, and meet in the lobby of the Superhero Recruitment Center after being rejected

Idea 2
The ChibiUsa

>maybe the Teen Queens had a kid member, like ChibiUsa, and now they meet them after 15 years
>one idea is to have this kid be another girl, who's a young (20-25 y.o.) mom now
>another idea, is to make this kid a young annoying brother of one of the Teen Queens. 15 years later, Supermoms find out he's grown up into a quite charming young man – at least, that's what most of the Supermoms think, to the dismay of his elder sister

Idea 3
Mend's Blindfold

>after JMD mistakenly drew Mend as wearing a blindfold, it has been suggested to make this canon
>but why does she do it? how does she see?
>the suggestion is to give her another power – the power to "see" ailments and illnesses when blindfolded
>could work like e.g. Daredevil's radar sense
>it's a bit weird, but could put some variety into her battle tactics, and team strategy: when blindfolded, she's almost oblivious to what's going around, but can spot (and heal) illnesses and wounds quickly
>one anon even suggested that Mend could also sense mental illnesses (e.g., crazy villains), but this may be a bit of a stretch, dunno
>btw, can Mend heal mental illnesses? That would be OP

Idea 4
Power Evolution

>this idea stemmed from Mend's Blindfold
>the idea that after 15 years, the moms' powers have evolved in some ways – basically, they can now do some shit they couldn't as Teen Queens. A good example would be Sue Storm, who at first could only turn herself invisible, then learned to turn other things invisible, and then mastered invisible force fields that can kill a man and destroy a lot of things
>as for Supermoms, Mend's "illness sense" could be one of those new powers
>SS would, of course, get wiser and better with strategy because of her age and experience and, well, not being a teenager
>Kaiju may have mastered the ability to shrink – maybe during her TQ years she could only grow, hence the "Kaiju" moniker
>Sig Rune, of course, didn't stop training all these years, so of course she's stronger and more adept with her mace
>Tropica, Diva – these ones need some brainstorming

(cont)
>> No. 49459
IDEAS FROM THE /CO/ THREAD p.2
Villain Ideas

Villain 1
>a villain that is born of the motherly fear of harm to children that appears as a mysterious woman to children, seduces them, and eats them alive.

Villain 2
Cat Lady
>woman who steals cats, kills dogs, bombs animal shelters, and has catgirl henchmen.
>she was a sexy vampy catburglar (think Black Cat/Catwoman) 15 years ago... but now she's basically your old crazy cat lady

Villain 3
Ms Goldbeetle

>described here: >>49436
>what I like about this character, is that it fits the main idea of Supermoms: combining real-world mundane problems and occurrences with superhero/villain elements
>so she could have a gold-digger personality – and a supervillain so obsessed with gold she rolls giant balls out of it

Villain 4
Evil Mayor

>basically, to make a JJJ/President Luthor/Amanda Waller to subtly oppose our heroines
>may be Sinister Sorceress Seductra, or other fomer villainess
>she may be still running for mayor during earlier adventures, but then she gets elected to the surprise of the Supermoms
>she may be publicly supportive of the Supermoms but behind closed doors vows to destroy them
>she could have a really MILF-tastic wardrobe when she was a villain all those years ago, but now she's very conservative, "family values", that kind of thing (which gets her public support)

Villain 5
Loud Bitch

>an extremely loud, talkative, gossipy female villain
>also a compulsive lair, rumor-spreader, and is notorious for not being able to keep secrets with sound and vibration powers
>maybe this concept may be used for Alternate Universe Evil Twin version of Diva

Villain 6
Snake Eyes

>he shoots snakes out of his eyes

(cont)
>> No. 49460
>>49458
I think Mend should stick to curing only physical injuries and not mental illnesses. Makes it too easy to deal with villains. Also for the enhanced powers, how about having Tropica a wider variety of plants to control?
>> No. 49461
IDEAS FROM THE /CO/ THREAD p.3
Hero ideas

Hero 1
80-90s Time Travelling Teens

>a pair of teenage super heroines from the 1980-90's who are floating loose in time and space
>naive, energetic, and totally, totally 80's
>Supermoms met them in their Teen Queen period, when they were not as outdated yet
>now they meet them again
>basically, a relic of their teenage years appearing in the present, completely unchanged

Hero 2
British Indian Superspy

>Emilia Peterson is a British Indian woman who used to work as a spy but after a mission went too far she realized the true intent of her boss so she faked her death and moved to America where she married an African-American police officer and had two sons.
>after sending her two sons off to college she began to notice a new company rising in power with the company's president being her old boss.
>inspired by seeing the Supermoms on TV she decides to start training again and take up superheroics hoping to join the Supermoms and gain their help in taking down the company.
>seeing as she used to be a secret agent being a superhero isn't too hard for her and the best part? She gets to tease her husband on the job.
>I was thinking she'd be pretty flat chested, like a B cup but have a huge Tahiry Jose/Nicki Minaj ass which gets her stuck in a few tight situations.
>and she'd be kind of rude, in a caring way but easily angered.
>I also imagined her wearing glasses so she either has glass in her mask or wears contacts on the job which further help disguise her identity.
>imo, this project overlaps a bit with Beverly's bio (MILF corporation, evil CEO etc.), Diva's bio and plotline (bodytype, African-American policeman as love interest), and the Euromoms' Bala Woodsworth (British Indian, rude), but I think it can be tweaked a bit without losing its main content

Hero 3
Sky Grinder Bounce

>the idea behind this was a kinetic character, actually designed a game setup in the early days of the DS that would work well with her.
>her ability is to project flat surfaces with one of 5 properties: normal, bounce, slide, stick, and slow.
>the ones she uses most are Bounce and Slide. What she does? Trampolining up high, high into the air, looking for trouble, and then uses Slide to essentially rail-grind her way down to where she finds it.
>her main fighting trick tends to be either reflection or flying kicks.
>I always see her as dressing in skiing clothes, since she goes up so high, and I figured a scarf served as a cape replacement.
>I always envisioned her as kind of androgynous to the reader at first(Think Samus Aran) and a teenager

Hero 4
Unnamed Music Man

>if the music has style, he flows with it – depending on what he's got playing in his ears, he gets different abilities and personality
>a power ballad allowing him superstrength, classical giving him superb timing and planning, the harder the rock the harder the berserker, emo makes him weak but a horrible screeching wail, tango tends to be a lot of tricky moves and using the partner's motions against them, etc.
>may be a partner-antagonist-possiblelovelinterest for Diva (their relationship may be akin to Spider-Man x Black Cat)
>or more of a helpful villain: sort of that character that pisses off the hero, but never enough to take a punch, egging them on for their own purposes.

Hero 5
Solidarity

>a joke character at first, but his power set always interests me: density manipulation at the atomic level.
>at first, it would only be himself, allowing him to grow monstrous in size...but be as 'light' as a Macy's Day balloon and able to have objects pass right through him, or to shrink down to the size of an action figure, but be almost immobile and just as heavy as when he was normal sized, meaning he could be a human bullet if thrown.
>his original origin was that he was a pizza boy who got stuck in the new Anchovy and Tomato PackerDepacker 2000Xtreeeem from his pizza shop's parent company
>eventually was going to expand his ability so that he could affect other things, allowing him to ghost walls or turn a 4XL shirt into a piece of body armor.
>> No. 49462
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49462
Also,
we should start designing Superdads now
>> No. 49463
>>49458
I think it's pretty clear that Mend just has wacky eyepieces on her mask. It's like cartoonish eye outlines, which I think compliment her general nature.

>>49436
I thought about Ms. Goldbeetle more and I came up with a backstory. A gold digger was in the process of divorcing her 6th husband when she found out she got some storage locker of his in the divorce. Inside she found the original Goldbeetle costume, her ex-husband having been a former villain. Realizing she could get money way quicker by being a supervillain (and she wouldn't have to waste time seducing innocent men and tricking them into signing pre-nups), she modified the Goldbeetle costume to fit her and took to crime. The way I view the suit working is it has components in it that control a small ball. This ball has its own gravitational pull and pulls things into it in a sphere shape. Ms. Goldbeetle can ride the ball around, and use it as a weapon. A side effect is the ball picks up whatever it hits, like a Katamari.


Also, I was thinking about Victoria Timberlake and came up with some ideas for the story that introduces her.
>Beverly is at a coffee shop
>she and Victoria order the same exact thing at the same exact time
>they hit it off
>when Bev tells Victoria her name, Victoria says something like "Banks, huh?" as foreshadowing but it isn't elaborated on right there
>Lord Darkthorne does something insidious in the city (which lets us introduce that character as well) and Bev and Victoria find themselves trapped
>Bev can't change into costume around Victoria so she and Victoria make it out of wherever they're trapped
>they meet up with the rest of the Supermoms who are doing damage control briefly, everything seems to be under control
>Bev invites Victoria to her house so the new friends can chat some more
>Steve happens upon the two, much to his horror
>"Bev, who's-Vicky???"
>"I go by Victoria now. Hello again, Steve."
>Steve and Victoria's history is explained
>issue ends with Bev and Victoria trading Steve stories, much to his horror

What do you guys think?

I'm still working on the Kaiju script. I should have it finished by tomorrow or Friday.
>> No. 49464
>>49462
Tropico's entire non-mask wardrobe is a single well-placed leaf.
>> No. 49465
I had an idea for a one-off episode that maybe had the occasional call-back. It might make a neat Kaiju episode, or maybe even tie in to Shaundra developing her own powers.

Basically, Keiichi ends up being in the wrong place at the wrong time- maybe he's a bystander at one of the Supermoms' fights and gets hit by a stray beam of magic/radiation/whatever. Nothing really comes of it (Mend gives the flustered boy a kiss just to make sure) and people forget about it.

But then, over the next week or so, Keiichi finds that he's getting these weird, tough patches of skin in places, and he's getting angry more often. Kim and Shaundra notice more than anyone; Kim is disturbed but can't get him to open up about it, while he tells Shaundra about the weird patches of skin; when she takes a look, they turn out to be scales.

In the meantime, the Supermoms keep getting called out at night to deal with a monster, but it's always gone before they get there. Worse, reports have it bigger and bigger each time. Eventually, Shaundra drops a hint to her mom about Keiichi's "condition".

But, at that point, it's too late: Keiichi ends up turning into a giant monster in the middle of the city, and he and Kaiju have an Ultraman-style battle. I figure it ends with either Kaiju, Shaundra, or the both of them snapping him out of it and turning him back to normal. Could be a nice episode about Kim's relationship with her son, or maybe Shaundra dealing with a superhero issue that relates more to her personally.

(Also, there could be a NSFW-ish joke when Keiichi changes back, about how he tore his clothes to shreds when he transformed, and Shaundra and the other Supermoms reacting to the sight.)
>> No. 49466
>>49459
>Villain 6
>Snake Eyes

>he shoots snakes out of his eyes

Best villain ever.
>> No. 49467
>>49459
What type of snakes does he shoot out?
>> No. 49470
>>49465
Would Keiichi remember anything that happened when he was a monster?

Also, perhaps Kim learns about Keiichi's condition before he goes full-on giant monster and, being the scientist, comes up with a cure, but right before she can give it to him he transforms and she has to fight her own son, while her teammates run all over his back, Shadow of the Colossus style, looking for a non-scaly spot to inject the cure.
>> No. 49471
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49471
>>49464
I hope you consider this leaf well-placed

>>49463
I liked Ms.Goldbeetle's backstory, though I think she should continue her golddigging ways, anyway. She may now prey not just on ordinary wealthy men, but e.g. on supervillains. On issue may even feature her trying to trick Leonard Drakethorpe – who is as clueless about her goals, as he is about his subordinate Bev Banks' secret identity! Lord Darkthorne's face when he's saved by his nemesis (who doesn't know he's a supervillain, of course) would be priceless

>Victoria script
Frankly, I'd like there to be some intrigue about Vicky being Steve's ex-wife. In the plot you suggested, it's all revealed in the finale, kinda anticlimactic. How about this:
>lazy Sunday morning
>everyone in the Banks family is relaxing... everyone except an organizing freak like Beverly!
>she decides to spend this weekend by tidying up the attic
>it's full of dust and lots of old stuff
>among the old stuff Bev finds an old album with high school photos
>euphoric, she runs down and pesters the half-asleep Steve with her find
>shows him photos of old classmates, tells where they are now
>may be some fun stories (e.g. stereotypical jock became popular hair stylist, nerdy geek became pro wrestler, etc.)
>then sees a photo of Vicky, remembers her: flashback to Vicky being a bitch to Bev, and a bitch in general
>is angry, makes a speech about what a bitch Vicky was, ends with smth like "I'm glad you haven't met her"
>*beat*
>"Um... Honey, she was my first wife"
Then cut to a Supermom mission, Bev is fuming to other Supermoms while fighting some villains, they're discussing the situation, etc.
And later it all unfolds like you described (except, without the reveal at the end, of course; and probably Bev learns that the woman is just before the supervillain attack (maybe they're even arguing when it happens), so that when the villain attacks she would first be tempted not to help Vicky, but decides to make the right choice).
What do you think?

Btw, I'm planning to properly introduce Lord Darkthorne in "Fans" (OMGSPOILER!lol), I mean – his both identities, his plans, his relationship with Bev, everything – so in this issue (if it takes place after "Fans") there would be no need to shift attention to him, and keep all attention on Vicky and Bev.
>>49465
Interesting plot, and interesting twist on Kaiju's powers! Will the powers stay with Keiichi after the issue (just being kept in check), or does he lose them? I just hope that the Supermoms' attention to a naked teenage boy will not be too creepy... Shaundra's reaction though could be as creepy as she wants lol
>> No. 49472
>>49471
So, maybe Vicky and Bev hit it off, without telling each other their names, and then Vicky does, and right as Bev is starting to react, shit goes down. Bev gets Vicky out of there (so they have the shared experience) then ducks away to change, and saves the day.

I like your Tropico!

I had an idea for a spot in >>49465 which assumes that issue takes place after the issue where Shaundra's powers are revealed. Shaundra is in the city, Keiichi is a monster and the Supermoms are doing their best to stop/cure him. Keiichi's giant monster tail (I'm assuming his monster form will have a tail of some sort) swats a building, and rubble falls down, heading right for some civilians. The Supermoms are all too busy to notice, and Shaundra has to make a split-second decision to use her powers to save the civilians. With this, she begins to realize the weight and responsibility that comes with having superpowers, and luckily nobody notices her doing it. Just a little spot to help move that storyline along.

And I was thinking that when Keiichi is cured, he would be all like "what happened?" while he covers up his nakedness. Perhaps throw in a line at the end about how Kim is "positive" he's been cured, then a close-up of his bloodstream with STRANGE GREEN THINGS floating around...just to leave it open-ended.
>> No. 49473
>>49470
I like that idea! Like, Kaiju holds him off while the others climb around him. Maybe they could slow him down in other ways too, like Tropica tangling his legs, or something like that. As for whether or not he remembers, probably? He'd probably feel bad about it for a while, but if no one got too hurt he'd probably get over it quick enough.

>>49471
Maybe Keiichi could keep the powers, but not really know how to control them so well? Like he won't go on any more rampages, but they still fluctuate more with emotion than with him actually trying to change, so he doesn't really do much with them.

As for the Supermom's reactions, yeah, I was thinking more maybe just Tropica or Diva or someone teasing him a little or making a quip after making sure he's alright. Shaundra might have a stronger reaction, like getting flustered, or staring, or making a flirty remark or something, but would probably stop once she remembered her mom and his mom being right there.
>> No. 49474
>>49473
I'm thinking something more like the powers are dormant within Keiichi. Maybe certain stimuli awaken the powers in different ways, resulting in different transformations?
>> No. 49475
>>49474
Yeah, I could see something like that. Fear makes a faster monster, maybe with wings. Anger means stronger, maybe with thicker scales. Ha, and embarrassed or flustered gives him fire-breathing, maybe. I like it.
>> No. 49476
>>49475
Maybe reduce the size after the first story. The serum he got during his first "outbreak" did do something, so he doesn't grow in size when he transforms. That could lead to some funny situations with Shaundra, among others.

Of course, at least at first and for a while, only Shaundra would know about his now-permanent "condition."
>> No. 49477
>>49475
And after they turn 18, Shaundra will learn that being aroused makes him turn into a tentacle monster
>> No. 49478
Is anyone up for sketching some of the villains we've come up with so far?
>> No. 49479
>>49476
I like this, but it should be downplayed. Too many secondary characters with powers can take away from the main characters. I've seen it happen to cape comics before, and it always drags the story down.

We have, what, 3 kids with superpowers now? Let's leave it at that.
>> No. 49481
So are we going to make another thread on /co/ soon since the last one went so well?
>> No. 49483
>>49481
Maybe on Saturday or Sunday?
>> No. 49484
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49484
Also from the thread:
Someone posted an old idea created for /a/. Maybe we could reuse some of these concepts. Picrelated is a different idea, also created for /a/.

>Super Milf squad!

>All the moms are in their mid 30s

>The agency of superhuman affairs finds 7 young clones (3 males,3 females and one alien, around the age of 14) in the abandoned laboratory that once belonged to a legendary supervillian (Kinda like Dr.Doom)
>They all have the potential to became dangerous supervillians
>They task 7 female superheros into raising and teaching this clones to be good and heroic
>(Also, one of them has DNA from the Legendary Supervillian, but you dont know wich one)

>-SuperHero Mom
>Has Flying, super strenght, enhanced resistance, x-ray vision, super breathing capacities
>Has a normal daughter who doesnt know mom is a superhero
>Husband is a normal human reporter, who knows her secret
>She was the sidekick of a female superhero with similar powers, who died fighting a The legendary supervillian
>she goes by the same alias of her mentor.

>-Cyborg Mom
>Kinda like Iron man minus the armor, a flying arsenal, with the looks of an average woman,
>slim but stacked
>Bossy
>Married to a scientist that worked for her father
>Has an adopted daughter with mechanical limbs
>doesnt want her daughter to get into superheroics

>-Feral Mom
>Its basically a wild catgirl, with some extra skill, enhanced reflexes, strenght, senses,etc
>Daughter is a catgirl, but more human in behavior
>Husband is a veterinarian

>-Ninja Mom
>Typical ninja stuff, weapons, traps, and some magic /jutsu stuff
>Has a son with some ninja skills, hanging out with the wrong crowd
>Father of the child was from another ninja clan

>-Magical girl Mom
>Not a mom, shes single
>Has scepter that transforms into different magical weapons
>works as a school teacher
>Romantic airhead

>-Alien Mom
>Powers, kinda like a mix of Ryoko,Star Fire and Piccolo
>Was part of a harem when younger, but was ditched for another alien girl
>Has 2 young female alien apprentices/ protegees who admire her
>*One is a Red skinned stretcher/rubber-made, can turn its limbs into blades
>*The other is extremely cute energy blaster, her uniform is a mock up to those of Freezer grunts

>-Enchantress Mom
>Basically top tier witch/summoner
>Has a ghost Butler
>Divorced, husband is a demonic ruler
>Daughter blames her for the split up, her dad gives her constant strange magical artifacts/creatures as gifts
>Daughter has magical powers, but doesnt take it too seriously
>> No. 49485
>>49483
Saturday sounds perfect to me.
>> No. 49486
>>49485
I will be making the thread tomorrow. Probably around 10:00 AM EST.

I also finally finished the Kaiju solo script! Here's a download link:
https://www.dropbox.com/s/bxr8zm6jvbl1oxl/kaiju1.celtx
What do you guys think?
>> No. 49489
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49489
>>49452
I drew a couple more of the Superteens.

I was thinking maybe Tropica has a costume - like a tight singlet or something - along with the leaf-pattern skin stuff in her teen days, but opted to not wear it when coming back into action.
>> No. 49490
>>49489
I like it! Maybe have Star-Striker's top match the design of her top in >>49446

If you get to teen Kaiju and Sig Rune, I think their costumes should be the same that they are in the present day, since their costumes are magically generated, and Sigrun's costume should be the same because her flawless Asgardian figure has stayed the same through all these years.

I do like the idea of teen Tropica having a less provocative costume, showing how she's gotten even more flirtatious with age. Perhaps we could even have teen Tropica be much less sure of herself, akin to teen Sig Rune?
>> No. 49491
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49491
Was wondering if this thing was still going on and i was directed here. I'm not an artist, but here's another template.
>> No. 49492
Can anyone convert the pre-existing Supermoms scripts into HTML for better readability for the upcoming /co/ thread?
>> No. 49493
>>49491
Get ready for the thread tomorrow, and bring that template with you!
>> No. 49494
>>49490
>I like it!
Thanks!
>Maybe have Star-Striker's top match the design of her top in >>49446
Ha, I drew that one too. It seemed like the strapless one was more used (and it communicates "larger" when worn by mom!Bev).
>If you get to teen Kaiju and Sig Rune, I think their costumes should be the same that they are in the present day
Noted

>I do like the idea of teen Tropica having a less provocative costume, showing how she's gotten even more flirtatious with age. Perhaps we could even have teen Tropica be much less sure of herself, akin to teen Sig Rune?
That would be interesting. I wasn't sure how design Tropica (or what pose to use) because her figure doesn't really translate to teen that easily. I was thinking about taking some inspiration from wrestlers, due to her lucha mask.
>> No. 49495
>>49494
Maybe Tropica is much less curvaceous, as she hasn't fully bloomed yet (pun intended), and wears a wrestling-inspired singlet to maybe accentuate what little she has.
>> No. 49496
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49496
...and the rest of the Superteens!
>> No. 49497
>>49496
That looks great! Do you have a name/nickname perchance?

Maybe teen!Tropica's costume should still be made of vines she grows herself, not spandex/fabric.

Also, I'd play with the hairstyles a bit. E.g., teen!Kaiju doesn't yet wear her MILFy hairbun, as she's not yet MILF. Maybe some haircut that Japanese teenage girls are more likely to wear; smth with bangs I think.
teen!Mend was a tomboy, so maybe shorter hair? teen!Tropica could wear some more conservative haircut, to mirror her costume (a ponytail, maybe?) As for teen!Star-Striker, she was a cheerleader, so maybe she has something cuter, like twin pigtails, or just long hair (like teen!Tropica in your pic)? Just my two cents.
>> No. 49498
>>49496
That looks great! Do you have a name/nickname perchance?

Maybe teen!Tropica's costume should still be made of vines she grows herself, not spandex/fabric.

Also, I'd play with the hairstyles a bit. E.g., teen!Kaiju doesn't yet wear her MILFy hairbun, as she's not yet MILF. Maybe some haircut that Japanese teenage girls are more likely to wear; smth with bangs I think.
teen!Mend was a tomboy, so maybe shorter hair? teen!Tropica could wear some more conservative haircut, to mirror her costume (a ponytail, maybe?) As for teen!Star-Striker, she was a cheerleader, so maybe she has something cuter, like twin pigtails, or just long hair (like teen!Tropica in your pic)? Just my two cents.
>> No. 49499
Supermom bios: http://pastebin.com/8LME7fbj
Their families: http://pastebin.com/6qUuvER9
Some team story drafts: http://pastebin.com/LzNR2PXr

Scripts:
https://www.dropbox.com/s/nuyhwalyaw6ic04/supermoms.html
https://www.dropbox.com/s/ow1ca87n68h4l8i/supermoms2.html
https://www.dropbox.com/s/4rwibr7ow6929vi/supermoms3.html
https://www.dropbox.com/s/rmw4wlt511dfqev/ss1.html
https://www.dropbox.com/s/qgz4rd97hqonyvw/mend1.html
https://www.dropbox.com/s/1dlvyupzr0sz36a/diva1.html
https://www.dropbox.com/s/962j6mkc202skxc/kaiju1.html
https://www.dropbox.com/s/byhy47r7k9enh2i/fans_half.html
Note: Some scripts are unfinished!
>> No. 49500
>>49497
>>49498
Thanks! I'm about to go to bed, but I wanted to make sure to get those out before the thread in the morning. I might look over the designs again tomorrow. (the picture in this post is the same, just with the characters more spread out).
>Do you have a name/nickname perchance?
I go by "Corndog" sometimes while drawing on /co/, so there's that.

>Maybe teen!Tropica's costume should still be made of vines she grows herself, not spandex/fabric.
Interesting idea. I was playing with the idea of her being uncomfortable with herself (to contrast when she grows up). Most of the vine patterns on her skin are covered and she overdoes it a bit with the safety gear - heck, even the flower on her chest is covered with one on her uniform.
>teen!Kaiju doesn't yet wear her MILFy hairbun, as she's not yet MILF. Maybe some haircut that Japanese teenage girls are more likely to wear; smth with bangs I think.
Oh, I see - I was drawing it as a topknot. Maybe a bob cut or something could work.
>teen!Mend was a tomboy, so maybe shorter hair?
Okay, maybe I could cut off her ponytail or something.
>teen!Tropica could wear some more conservative haircut, to mirror her costume (a ponytail, maybe?)
I did make her hair shorter, maybe a ponytail or braid would work better.
>As for teen!Star-Striker, she was a cheerleader, so maybe she has something cuter, like twin pigtails, or just long hair.
That reminds me, I should probably read more of the supplemental material at some point.
>> No. 49501
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49501
>>49500
more like, THIS picture
>> No. 49502
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49502
Combined several peachtemplates into one lineup, may be useful for the upcoming thread
>> No. 49503
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49503
~15 years ago
The nefarious plans of the teen supervillain Shadow Boy are foiled thanks to Mend

...2 months until he gathers enough courage to ask her out on their first date
>> No. 49504
>>49503
I prefer the idea of teen Shadow Boy being the one who was constantly flirting with Mend, but Mend's tomboyishness had her trying to not pay him any mind, until he finally made his move.

Also, /co/ thread coming today, in about an hour and a half! Be there!
>> No. 49505
>>49500
>Interesting idea. I was playing with the idea of her being uncomfortable with herself (to contrast when she grows up). Most of the vine patterns on her skin are covered and she overdoes it a bit with the safety gear - heck, even the flower on her chest is covered with one on her uniform.
Ah, I see. It makes sense! I like the cute flower elbow/knee-guards.

But I think we definitely need to differentiate the three shy teens we have atm: teen!Kaiju, teen!Tropica and teen!Sig Rune.
Maybe teen!Sig Rune is the silent awkward one, with a bit of sociopathy – basically, like a tall and clawless X-23. She's not comfortable among mortals, even such friendly mortals as the Teen Queens. she just feels out of place and awkward.
Teen!Kaiju is the cute shy type. She's shy not because she feels awkward or uncomfortable (like Sig Rune), but rather because she thinks it's polite. She may be embarrased by "rude"/"impolite" things.
Teen!Tropica... I'd suggest she shouldn't be shy at all. On the contrary, she should be the most talkative and brattiest Teen Queen (we lack a member like that atm). She's not into boys much yet, though, and it may be the only thing she's actually a bit shy about. Why does she wear all that protective gear? Because of her overprotective mom! And when Mrs.Delacruz tells you to wear an ugly leotard, you do it, since she's not the woman to be argued with! Later, Tropica will inherit her mom's assertive personality, as her husband and kids can attest
>> No. 49506
>>49504
That's what I was going for.
After his defeat, SB suddenly notices Mend, in a different light. He starts sending her letters full of dark emo poetry, or throwing flowers from rooftops. Mend is conflicted, as some part of her appreciates the attention and thinks he is cute, while another part tells her he's their enemy, and that she shouldn't be concerned with such stupid things anyway. The rest of the TQ don't know anything (as SB was pretty stealthy in his attempts).
Cue to:
>one day, SB appears out of shadow in front of the TQ headquarters
>he's wearing a dark purple suit, and is holding a bouquet of black roses
>SS: Code A, Teen Queens! Enemy attack alert! Let's whip this supervillain's butt!
>A suddenly blushing Mend: Ah... heh heh... girls, I think he's here for me
>Everyone is shocked (Tropica is already squeeing in her shipper mind)
>> No. 49507
/co/ thread is up.
>> No. 49511
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49511
We got some concept art of the Sinister Sorceress Seductra.
>> No. 49512
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49512
>>49511
I believe this is more or less the final design.
>> No. 49515
the thread's still on
>> No. 49516
Maybe we should create a wiki?
>> No. 49517
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49517
So we had a lot of good discussion and ideas. This is the first concept art of Lord Darkthorne. We still need to come up with a color scheme and a mask of some kind.

Some ideas:
>Anastasia Dux, the publicly reformed villain once known as the Sinister Sorceress Seductra, successfully runs for mayor and the primary contributor to her campaign, Leonard Drakethorpe, CEO of MILF, volunteers to be her economic adviser. Little does Sapphire City know that Drakethorpe is really insidious supervillain Lord Darkthorne, and Seductra being elected mayor is all part of his plan to rule the city, with Seductra as his second-in-command.

>Sinister Six type team consisting of Mrs. Evil (archnemesis of Star-Striker), Ms. Goldbeetle (Sig Rune), Hot Flash (Tropica), Loud Bitch (Diva), Iron Maiden (Kaiju, Iron Maiden is a hot robot lady who can grow-shrink other things), and some pheremone-power woman who controls people (Mend) (I was thinking Phere-Mona for her name)

>Sigrun is accidentally brought to Midgard as a teenager, right into a bank robbery or something, and saves the day, spending some time experiencing Earth before going back to Asgard. She now finds Asgard boring and voluntarily goes back to Midgard. Sigrun's natural form is also living snow, requiring concentration to keep her human shape. No mortal knows this secret.

>weaknesses explored for the Supermoms - Diva's powers don't work when she's gagged or otherwise loses her voice, Tropica requires soil for her plant growth powers to work, Sig Rune is weak to stereotypical representations of female genitalia (tacos, clams, rugs, etc.)

>Diva's origin story is that early in her singing career she lost her voice and took a lozenge that unbeknownst to her was radioactive, granting her her voice powers

>Tropica's origin story is after a lucha libre show she fell into a vat of radioactive fertilizer goop and gained powerss

>Mend's origin story is a group of love-loving aliens landed on Earth and, detecting great love in her heart, gave her her powers, even though tomboy Anne-Marie ("Nan" at the time) wanted something more offensive, she grew to love her powers

>We got rid of the male foil to Sigrun, instead we're going to focus her character development on Olivia
>> No. 49518
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49518
And a Sig Rune redesign.
>> No. 49519
The poll: http://strawpoll.me/1197473
>> No. 49520
>>49517
I just had some ideas for Sigrun's first journey to Midgard.

>fighting some evil wizard
>gets hit by a spell
>disappears
>cut to a young Star-Striker facing off against a large number of bad guys, she seems outnumbered
>suddenly, a freak snowstorm appears
>as the snowstorm fades, Sigrun appears in the middle of it all (an allusion to her snow form)
>Sigrun finds herself on Midgard, think it's an illusion
>beats up the "source of the illusion," the bad guys, with Star-Striker
>she's still on Midgard
>the civilians all crowd around her, thanking her for helping Star-Striker save the day
>a reporter interviews her
>"What's your name?"
>the flustered and confused Sigrun stutters while saying her name, leading to "Sig Rune"
>Star-Striker and Sig Rune get out of there
>Star-Striker thanks Sig for her help, and the two talk, and Sigrun reveals her origins
>Star-Striker takes it upon herself to show Sig all that the Earth has to offer
>Sig shows off her clothes-changing powers by changing from her warrior garb to something that fits in more
>ice cream, lingerie shopping, a movie
>as their evening of fun is drawing to a close, Sigrun suddenly gets teleported back to Asgard
>decides she wants to stay in Midgard "at least for a little while," due to how much more fun it was than Asgard
>goes back, with more than enough riches from Asgard to keep her flush with money
>first member of the Teen Queens

What do you guys think?
>> No. 49521
Seductra ideas from the thread.

>Perhaps one of the aspects of her character is that to show the public she's truly reformed, she has a magic dampening device around her at all times. Of course, it doesn't actually work and it's all a ploy to fool the public into thinking she isn't evil anymore.

>She has a revealing costume, but as mayor of Sapphire City, her wardrobe is very conservative buisiness suits, in a muted, dull version of whatever color her supervillain costume is.

>Maybe she secretly hates wearing all these business suits? I imagine as soon as she's away from the prying eyes of the public she flashily transforms her clothes into her old costume.

>What if to Seductra, the conservative clothes are even more kinky than the ultrarevealing ones she wore back in her supervillainess days?

Story draft:
>Bev is at home watching TV
>footage of Star-Striker in action
>Steve's interest is piqued because it's flashy superhero action
>Bev gets jealous of her own alter ego
(that will be a running gag, where Bev thinks that Steve is attracted to Star-Striker over her, when really it's all in her head, and Bev hilariously ignores the fact that she IS Star-Striker, it's actually explored first in the first Star-Striker solo script)
>then the election results show up on TV
>"There was an election?"
>Bev was too busy fighting crime to notice
>"With all districts reporting, Anastasia Dux, the now-reformed former supervillain once known as the Sinister Sorceress Seductra, has been elected Mayor of Sapphire City."
>Bev can't believe one of her team's most dastardly adversaries is now the mayor of her fine town
>the Supermoms all roll up to City Hall and demand to speak with Anastasia
>Anastasia comes across as genuine and serious about her efforts to do good, albeit a bit conservative, making remarks about the Supermoms' attires in relation to their ages
>the Supermoms are all satisfied, except for Star-Striker, who doesn't trust this woman
>behind closed doors, Anastasia utters a magic spell and reverts to her old supervillain costume
>Lord Darkthorne is in the room
>he was behind it all along
>with the two of them joining forces, Darkthorne revealing to the reader that he runs MILF, they can rule Sapphire City

>How about when the Supermoms go to see Seductra, they get stopped by loads of henchmen. Of course, they defeat them. When they reach Seductra, she pretends she's good and well-meaning. When the Supermoms ask her what the deal was with the henchmen, she acts surprised and concerned, says "I can't believe they did it" and "they misunderstood my orders" and "measures will be taken" etc

>Leonard Drakethorpe could be officially known as a friend of the new mayor. It's just that no one knows he's actually the supervillain, Lord Darkthorne!
>They could've been former lovers, though, and one of the few ex-couples (good or evil) lucky enough to remain friends after the breakup.
>He's rich and runs a giant corporation, he could have been a primary backer in Seductra's mayoral bid.

>After she calms the Supermoms down and deflects their concerns, Seductra holds a press conference. Standing by her side is her campaign's primary backer - Leonard Drakethorpe. She makes a speech about how she, as mayor, will turn the city around, and say some thing about how stimulating Sapphire City's business sector is the first step in revitalizing the city, and Leonard Drakethorpe has graciously volunteered to be her economic adviser, or something like that. Then they head into City Hall and behind closed doors transform into their supervillain costumes in a big, flashy reveal, and cackle menacingly as the issue ends.
>And Bev's fears could be put to rest some as her boss is the mayor's right-hand man, and if there ever was an honest businessman, Leonard Drakethorpe is that man. If she only knew...

>LD and SSS are equal. And LD isn't commanding SSS or creating the whole plan, it's more like they have similar interests at the moment.

>Maybe, given their dominant personalities, they could have some good power play-style banter, but ultimately be equal.
>"I'M the mayor!"
>"MY money got you elected!"
>"I have the legislative power!"
>"I have the monetary power!"
>You know, things like that. They butt heads, but not in a way that seriously affects their plans. Just villain banter.
>> No. 49522
>>49517
>Sig Rune is weak to stereotypical representations of female genitalia (tacos, clams, rugs, etc.)
No.
The idea was, all Valkyries are weak to what they desire most. Thus, they have to undergo some grueling training to get rid of all desires. This explains how Olivia managed to overpower and defeat Sigrun (though it's still a mystery for Sigrun). Also, as a running gag, Sigrun may suddenly show weakness to seemingly random objects (clams, tacos, rugs etc)
>> No. 49523
>>49522
>Sigrun may suddenly show weakness to seemingly random objects (clams, tacos, rugs etc)
An idea to combine this with >>49521 : As Beverly is showing Sigrun the wonders of Midgard, they stop to grab a bite to eat, and Sigrun has a taco. Afterwards, she's practically in a food coma, totally blown up just from munching on a juicy taco.

>This explains how Olivia managed to overpower and defeat Sigrun
It'd be interesting working this angle into a story. Maybe Olivia is trying to help Sigrun be a better mother to Alexander, but Sigrun can't see past her own bullheadedness. Olivia block's Siggy's path, and as Sigrun tries to barrel past Olivia, Olivia surprisingly judo throws her or trips her or something and totally humbles Sigrun. Then, Sigrun takes Olivia's advice.
>> No. 49524
From the thread:

>An idea for a Star-Striker solo story. Betsy overhears Alexander Odinsdottir complaining about his mom's strict, intensive warrior training regimes she forces him to do, and decides to ask Ms. Odinsdotter herself for some training. Sigrun would never turn down a request like that, after all, being a great warrior is what every child should strive to be, and sets a training date for Betsy. The script would deal with Beverly finding out about this and getting mad, refusing to see the hypocrisy in her actions, as she trained like that when she was Betsy's age. Betsy ends up seeing Sigrun for training on the sly.
>> No. 49525
From the thread:
Which Supermom kid could become a villain in the future?

Let's see who can:
>Betsy
No! Hero or bust.
>Ben
This is actually an interesting one. Ben inherited his mother's smarts, and he's known to be pretty secretive and cunning. And assuming his older sister becomes a hero (despite Beverly's intentions), he may become a villain just to troll her. And it would be a fun dynamic.
>one of Mend's twins
As a sort of "genetics" thing. One becomes a hero, another a villain. It's a bit silly, but in our silly universe it might work.
>Alexander
He's already inherited his mother's sociopathy (partly due to her own style of raising him). I could see him become an "angry-about-everyone-and-everything" antihero... but dunno about "villain".
>Shaundra
She would often proclaim that she wants to become a villain, just to spite her mom. She would even try to become one. But at the end, she would either be a hero, or not be a supercharacter altogether.
>Keiichi and Yolanda
I don't see them becoming villains. Their personalities seem too unsuitable for that.
>> No. 49526
Thinking of the Sinister Six analogue for the Supermoms, Mrs. Evil, Ms. Goldbeetle, Iron Maiden, Hot Flash, Loud Bitch, and Phere-Mona, they need a good team name. Are they all moms, too, like the Supermoms? I'd imagine Ms. Goldbeetle must have at least one kid from all her past marriages, Mrs. Evil of course has a son, Hot Flash could have an adult kid, we have no information on Phere-Mona so she could be anything we want, same with Loud Bitch, and Iron Maiden could have a "daughter" who's really just a robot she built for herself.

It would be a nice evil analogue to the Supermoms that isn't an alternate universe version. Also, this could lead to some good scenes in the superhuman PTA idea from earlier in the thread. Maybe Iron Maiden's "daughter" masquerades as human, in order to learn as much as possible from human schools, helping her "mother" absorb as much information about humans so she can dominate them easier?
>> No. 49527
Ideas from the thread:

>Diva's dating subplot features three potential boyfriends:
>A civilian: Eric the cop
>A villain: The Music Man (he plays more of a Catwoman/Black Cat role to Diva)
>A hero: Kid Mondo (kid superhero who retired when he became a teen – right when Diva started her superhero career)
>> No. 49528
From the thread:
The beach episode.

Basically, all the moms are in their civilian identities with their families.
They wear swimsuits mentioned here: >>48809 (maybe Diva's swimsuit needs to be different)
Then some villains strike and they change into their secret identities... but wearing bikini versions of their costumes!
>Star-Striker
A blue bikini with white stars. Looks like a skimpier version of her costume (sans boots and gloves)
>Sig Rune
Out of her costume, only the boobplates and the belt with the leather flaps (maybe the flaps are much shorter this time) are left
>Diva
A yellow one-piece swimsuit with holes in strategic places
>Mend
A bikini version of her costume
>Kaiju
Her magical tattoo suddenly conjures a beach version of her costume, which looks not unlike the Kill la Kill costume. Of course, she's very embarrassed by it.
>Tropica
Dons a different micro bikini (e.g., if in her civilian identity she wore a sling microbikini, now she dons a bikini-like microbikini), green in color.
>> No. 49529
The Mend dilemma:
What is the source of her healing powers: her saliva or her lips?

>If it's the saliva:
>licking wounds or spitting on them would be the most effective way of using those powers
>kissing wouldn't be effective at all, as a kiss conveys too little saliva (if at all)

>If it's the lips:
>then kissing wounds to cure them makes sense
>> No. 49530
>>49528
I think the enemies the Supermoms battle in the beach episode should have costume-based swimsuits as well.
>> No. 49533
I'm about ready to start work on the potluck dinner story. Here's the outline I have so far. Any suggestions/criticisms?

The day of the potluck dinner has arrived. The Supermoms are all busy making dishes, some with more success than others. Mend, Kaiju, Tropica, Diva and Sig Rune show up to the dinner on time, all piling out of Mend's minivan. Star-Striker is late, because she just got her old Star-Cycle back up and running and wants to look really good for the potluck. Star-Striker forgets the address, not sure if it was 127 Forsom Street or 128 Forsom Street. She sees Mend's minivan parked outside of 128, and assumes that's where the potluck is (but in reality, Mend had to park on the other side of the street becuase the parking lot at 127 Forsom Street was too crowded). To make matters worse, both addresses are occupied by identical-looking buildings! Star-Striker goes to the wrong one and finds out that a potluck dinner IS being hosted there...for villains! As Star-Striker flees to the other side of the street, the villains ready their weapons. Star-Striker makes it to the superhero potluck and warns Gunner Graves of the supervillains across the street. Gunner Graves and all the other heroes believe the supervillains are meeting together to plot against the heroes. The two sides meet dramatically in the middle of the street, a crazy superbattle erupting. It doesn't last long, however, as eventually both sides realize the other's intentions were genuine and not related to destroying the other side. A temporary truce is declared and the potluck dinners are merged, and we see the Supermoms discussing parental problems with some of their most dastardly enemies. As soon as the dinner is over and the heroes and villains head outside, however, it's game on again, and the issue concludes with the Supermoms battling their enemies.

Think this works?
>> No. 49534
The Sig Rune dilemma:
We have brainstormed this character, and ended up with a lot of potential bio ideas:

>What are her powers?
>a) superstrong and supertough
>b) flying
>c) magical mace
>d) magical sword (possibly flaming)
>e) valkyrie-sense (the ability to sense battle or fighters in danger in the vicinity)
>f) she's secretly a snowstorm masquerading in a human-like body

>What's her origin?
>a) she's the last of a long line of Valkyries that have been sent from Asgard to monitor the vicinity of Sapphire City since the times of Eric the Red.
>b) an enemy in Asgard uses a spell that unexpectedly transports her to Midgard
>c) a summoner in Midgard uses a spell that malfunctions and transports Sig Rune from Asgard

>Why does she stay in Midgard?
>a) that's her duty as a Valkyrie
>b) because the Teen Queens have been so friendly and welcoming to her
>c) she doesn't like spending time among the predominantly male einherjar in Valhalla
>d) she likes all the aspects of Midgard life, even the most mundane ones like ice cream, movies or lingerie

>Her love life
>a) Olivia and Tabari
>b) only Olivia (she defeats Sig Rune)
>> No. 49535
>>49534
>Powers
I vote a, e, and f.
>Origin
b
>why does she stay
b and d mostly, with the hint of c
>love life
b
>> No. 49536
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49536
Were people down with the Sig Rune redesign or potential redesign?
>> No. 49537
>>49536
Yeah, I'm down with that.


Also, I may be commissioning a piece related to Supermoms in the very near future. Two characters max. Nothing fancy. Any suggestions?
>> No. 49538
The Kaiju dilemma:
Her teen name and possible battlecries

>a)
>Teen Queen name: Kaiju
>Supermoms name: Kaiju
>Growing battlecry: Daikaiju~ ("Big monster")
>Shrinking battlecry: Chibikaiju~ ("Tiny monster")

>b)
>Teen Queen name: Chibikaiju
>Supermoms name: Kaiju
>Growing battlecry: Kaiju~ ("Monster")
>Shrinking battlecry: Chibi~ ("Tiny")
>> No. 49539
>>49537
If possible, something Star-Striker-related. She seems to be the least popular among the Supermoms atm
>> No. 49540
>>49538
I was thinking her teen name would be Kaiju. I think all of the Supermoms should be using the same names they used as teens. So Option A.
>> No. 49541
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Here is what we have for Ms. Goldbeetle so far. Pic is inspiration.

>Kamen Rider-style money scarf
>suit of armor (modified for her sexy body) based off of a dung beetle's shell, the back of the armor being very ornate, laden with gold and jewels
>has a small sphere that she can control that has its own gravitational pull, enabling her to stick loot to it in a ball shape
>controller on her left wrist that allows her to move the ball around Powerglove style, as well as a small keypad that lets her change the ball's gravimetric settings
>can increase the gravitry of the gravimetric sphere to a certain extent, can also invert the gravitational pull to repel all loot from the sphere in all directions
>can change the sphere's settings so it only attracts certain materials, e.g. precious metals
>uses the ball for transportation and as a weapon, Indiana Jones style
>goggles or a visor as her means of concealing her identity
>two mechanical arms integrated into the suit that she controls through a neural interface, activated whenever she puts on the suit (but she hasn't quite mastered them yet)
>the old Goldbeetle could use wings inside the suit to fly, but Ms. Goldbeetle can't fly
This one could work one of two ways. Either Ms. Goldbeetle just can't figure out how to fly, or, in the process of modifying the costume to fit her figure, she damaged/destroyed the parts that enabled her to fly.

Character details:
>real name Danielle Darling
>around the same age as the Supermoms
>6 ex-husbands
>seduces men and tricks them into signing pre-nups, then divorces them and takes their money
>impeccably well groomed and dressed at all times
>big, lavish spender
>the most recent ex-husband was the former supervillain known as Goldbeetle
>she got a storage locker containing the Goldbeetle suit in the divorce
>modified it to fit her figure
>commits heists as Ms. Goldbeetle to supplement her gold digging income
>has set her sights on Leonard Drakethorpe, CEO of MILF
>Drakethorpe is totally oblivious
>humorously, their relationship never gets to the level where she can rip him off so they end up being a long-term item in the series (not by Danielle's choice)
Maybe Drakethorpe just falls hopelessly in love with her, even though it's really obvious to everyone else that she's only dating him for his money.
>> No. 49542
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Guys, we need more feedback on these dilemmas.

Mend dilemma: >>49529
Sig Rune dilemma: >>49534
Kaiju dilemma: >>49538
>> No. 49543
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>> No. 49544
>>49529
Lips.
>>49534
Superstrength and supertough, battle sense, snow form
Seductra tries to summon a frost giant but gets the words of the spell wrong and summons Sigrun, but in a different location, so Seductra just thinks the spell didn't work and goes about her business, and never realizes it was she who summoned Sigrun to earth. Sigrun stays in Midgard because she likes all the mundane earth things that we take for granted, and she struck up a friendship with other heroes, the Teen Queens in this case. Olivia X Sigrun OTP for life.
>>49538
The first set of choices.
>> No. 49545
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>> No. 49546
I was thinking of another series of solo issues, where the nemeses of the Supermoms, their Sinister Six, are established, and fight their respective Supermom. One where Mrs. Evil and Star-Striker go at it, Sig Rune battles Ms. Goldbeetle, etc. Something that divys its time up into talking equally about that issue's particular Supermom, AND its particular villain, like we go into Mrs. Evil's personal life, and the reader discovers that Evil Boy is her son, things like that.

What do you guys think?
>> No. 49547
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49547
An idea of Goldbeetle's costume.

Basically, she's thin as a rake with perfectly spherical fake tits. These tits are covered by beetle shells (the blue things in the sketch). Her appearance is based by a collage of famous golddiggers someone posted in the /co/ thread
>> No. 49548
>>49547
I like it!

Have we decided on what the rest of her costume is going to look like?

Also, maybe the boobplates should be golden instead of blue. Maybe with a jewel in the middle of each like nipples.
>> No. 49549
>>49548
I based them on actual beetle shells. Maybe they could have golden rims?
>> No. 49550
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49550
...this doesn't feel like home.
>> No. 49551
>>49550
Why? Welcome! Enjoy your stay, take part in the discussion if you want!
>> No. 49552
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>>49550
Well, hello there JMD!

Can you give us your take on the Sinister Sorceress Seductra? This is the design we're going with thus far:
>> No. 49553
http://the-conservatory.wikia.com/wiki/Supermoms
There's also a sample page for Star-Striker that needs work.

Let's start filling it with all our ideas. That way we'll be able to keep track of them much easier.

What pages need to be created:
>Supermoms (main page)
>Star-Striker
>Diva
>Kaiju
>Sig Rune
>Tropica
>Mend
>Supermoms Families
>Supermoms Villains
>Supermoms Allies
>Supermoms Civilians

I don't think any more are needed
>> No. 49555
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>>49550
>>49552
Here's a full-body pic of Sorceress Seductra's final design: >>49512

And picrelated is a pink version of it
>> No. 49556
>>49549
Golden rims sounds good. What about the rest of her armor?
>> No. 49557
>>49553
For the scripts you have there, there are a couple different versions of the script named "supermoms2" floating around, but this one is the most recent edit (in celtx format): https://www.dropbox.com/s/7glutl63dd4ftwg/supermoms%202%20edit%202.celtx

>>49553
Cool! I'll contribute what I can.

>>49550
It's okay, we don't bite!

>>49547
I'm thinking she should also have an obnoxious fake tan.
>> No. 49558
>>49557
Ah, I see, thanks, I'll leave the links to the recent one.

>I'm thinking she should also have an obnoxious fake tan.
I agree.
>> No. 49559
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>>49552
>> No. 49560
>>49559
Very nice!
>> No. 49561
>>49559
I'm diligently awaiting to be disciplined
>> No. 49562
>>49559
I love it!

Could you do another Star-Striker/Diva?
>> No. 49563
>>49559
Hope you draw her interacting with one of the Supermoms
>> No. 49566
>>49559
JMD, can you do Sig Rune in her new costume shown in >>49536 and >>49518?
>> No. 49567
>>49562
Seconding, especially Star-Striker
>> No. 49568
Thred ded.

Good job, everyone! Another productive thread. Let's make another one next weekend!
>> No. 49569
>>49568
Hopefully next thread we can get more drawfags in before it's almost dead.
>> No. 49570
>>49529
I think just leaving it at "kisses" is fine, I don't think we need to go for realism and exact definitions here.
>>49534
a, c, e
a or b
b and/or d
either is fine
>> No. 49571
>>49550
>>49559
Feel free to visit us anytime.
>> No. 49575
Working on a script introducing Ms. Goldbeetle now, it's going pretty well but I have one scene where Sigrun says something rude to Olivia and Olivia replies with "The nerve!" but I want to to be in French. Is there a good French equivalent to that saying?
>> No. 49577
Suggesting that Ms. Goldbeetle didn't just find the costume in her ex-husband's safe, but actually sued the costume and name off of him in divorce court! That would be quite a unique origin story, pretty funny, and would suit her personality well.
>> No. 49578
Edited and expanded the Star-Striker wiki article. It probably needs some stylistic editing.

Gave her a penchant for buying expensive lingerie (partly as a way to explain the lingerie pics) Hope no one minds. It may be a sexy side of her character, if we decide to go with it

Also, I suggest we need a "Supermoms" logo, to put on the eponymous wiki page
>> No. 49579
>>49578
Also, we need to decide if we want spoiler-y information (e.g., Vicky being revealed to have been Steve's first wife) on the wiki? I think we should, but I need more input on this
>> No. 49580
>>49579
Yes, the wiki should be comprehensive.

>>49575
Fuck you, that's a great idea and now I have to rewrite the Ms. Goldbeetle origin story I've already written to include that.
>> No. 49581
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Tried a Goldbeetle idea. Main inspiration was the idea of the gauntlets. The venty thing could what activates her gravity ball deal. Enter commands on the right hand pad to determine the actions of her left gauntlet. Was considering a mask as part of the getup, but I'll try it next.

Somebody mentioned a fake tan, but that can be changed. Also, don't like the hair, so that can change, too.
>> No. 49582
>>49581
What about the beetle shell boobplates?
>> No. 49583
>>49582
Perhaps I should have detailed the color differently? Maybe make it blockier a little so it appear like an armor plate.
>> No. 49584
>>49581
Love the fake tan
>> No. 49585
>>49581
Love the fake tan
Can you do a make her costume gold too?
>> No. 49586
>>49583
Ah! Now I see.
I think it's the color. It's too black-brown, it needs more dark blue-green
>> No. 49587
>>49586
I'm continuing with the brown-gold idea, but I'll try green in a little.

>>49585
Like, all out gold? I can try.
>> No. 49588
>>49581
The armor should be bulkier in the back, I think, to fit the beetle look better. I'm interested in what mask ideas you come up with. Personally, I was thinking some sort of goggles. Also, needs the beetle shells from>>49547
>> No. 49589
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49589
Here's this.
>> No. 49590
>>49585

An all out gold costume made me think of Goldar and Scorpina from power rangers
That just gave me an idea. Could you make a beetle costume similar to theirs?
Can you try giving her
>> No. 49591
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49591
And a shot at all gold.
>> No. 49592
>>49591
Gotta say, I prefer gold.
>> No. 49593
>>49592
I think I should change her hair color if we do gold. It's all kinda blending together.
>> No. 49594
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49594
Red hair
>> No. 49595
>>49593
I was thinking a bleached-blonde look, like almost white.
>> No. 49596
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49596
Brown hair.
>> No. 49597
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49597
A lighter blonde, as suggested.
>> No. 49598
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49598
Even more blonde.
>> No. 49599
>>49598
Thats starting to look really good
>> No. 49600
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49600
Here's a crack at a mask.
>> No. 49601
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49601
Mask again with that superblonde.
>> No. 49602
>>49598
I prefer this (the most bleached-out blonde) variant. It's looking really trashy with that guido-bronze skin, and that's good for this char
>> No. 49603
>>49600
>>49601
I personally prefer maskless, because with the mask we can't see her glorious botox'd lips: >>49547
>> No. 49604
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49604
A slight alteration
>> No. 49605
>>49601
I really like the mask, but as >>49603 said, we can't see her lips. Maybe goggles of some kind, with an outer face-style armor?
>> No. 49606
File 139327208244.jpg - (215.14KB , 621x768 , goldbeetle-concept11.jpg )
49606
No mask again, just the lines/stripes/segments/whatever.
>> No. 49607
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49607
How about just an adornment around her face?
>> No. 49608
>>49606
Give her the neck armor back, and give her some sort of mask that keeps her lips exposed.
>> No. 49609
>>49607
I like it, but it doesn't really conceal her identity. Maybe elongate the adornment so it wraps thinly around her eyes?
>> No. 49610
File 139327290371.jpg - (229.39KB , 621x768 , goldbeetle-concept15.jpg )
49610
I didn't want to go outright mask like we did with Seductra, but I think this can work?
>> No. 49611
>>49610
Yeah, that's great. Of course, it needs the mechanical arms. Maybe they could be a different color, to show that they are in fact not her real arms.

Also, how would she retain the gravity sphere when not in use?
>> No. 49612
>>49611
I could apply more arms with shitty photoshop a little later.

The idea with how I designed her was the ball could be emitted and returned through the vent thing on her left gauntlet.
>> No. 49613
>>49611
Was also considering pincers instead, but that probably doesn't work with the beetle motif.
>> No. 49614
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49614
Wasn't sure how to put in the second right arm and I can't really draw. So, you kinda see the arm peaking behind her back. I wanted that arm to look like the second left arm. JMD or somebody can make that look better. Limitations of the template and all that.
>> No. 49615
I had an idea for the "Keiichi gets turned into a giant kaiju monster" story. So, Evil Boy, Mrs. Evil's 14-year old son/minion, goes to the same school all the Supermoms' kids go to, right? How about, he overhears Betsy talking about a really hard pop quiz in Ms. Odinsdottir's class, a class he has later in the day, and he calls his mom, asking her to help him get out of it. So Mrs. Evil, finding that a suitably evil thing to do, giving her son an unfair advantage in the pop quiz, shows up and attacks the school with a transformation ray gun (which she tells Evil Boy she never got to work, but the whole event should make school close for the day and he'll have time to study for the pop quiz). Sig Rune shows up quicker than Mrs. Evil anticipated, and she is quickly joined by the rest of the Supermoms. In the melee, the transformation ray actually goes off, hitting poor Keiichi, who was in the wrong place at the wrong time. Then the rest of the story goes down as previously described.
>> No. 49616
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49616
>> No. 49617
>>49616
Awesome! Thanks, JMD!

Could you try Ms. Goldbeetle?
>> No. 49618
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49618
>> No. 49619
>>49616
>>49618
Great!

I hope she's completely naked under the water
>> No. 49620
>>49618
I heartily approve of Mend's puffy lips. You're a saint, JMD.
>> No. 49621
>>49616
>>49618
A nice Diva, thanks! And a fucking cute Mend! How do you manage to make her cuter with each picture?
>> No. 49622
>>49618
Dem dick-healing lips.
>> No. 49623
JMD, whenever you're in the mood for someone who isn't Mend (Mend best mom, I agree with you), could you please draw some Star-Striker? Girl needs more love
>> No. 49625
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49625
>> No. 49626
>>49625
Awesome!
>> No. 49627
>>49625
I'm a little taken aback that something I concepted and others are crowdsourcing to improve is being turned into REAL art. This is nuts.
>> No. 49628
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49628
>>49623
When did I ever say Mend was the best?
>> No. 49629
>>49628
This is just Best Mom Mend cosplaying as Tropica
I can tell by the chubby belly
>> No. 49630
>>49625
>>49628
These are so good! You even managed to make Ms.Goldbeetle sexy!
>>49627
Mend's creator here, you tell me
>> No. 49631
>>49628
>>49618
>Mend best mom
>Tropica best mom
Mud fight!
>> No. 49632
>>49628
Well, you draw her so much and so good... Search your heart, you know it to be true
Anyway, hot Tropica
>> No. 49634
So it looks like we have Ms. Goldbeetle more or less 100% designed. I'm not too sure about the choice of footwear in >>49625 but I suppose it could work.

Who should we design next? I'm thinking Mrs. Evil and Evil Boy, or some more family members.
>> No. 49635
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49635
>> No. 49636
>>49635
Well, hello there Mrs. Striker!
>> No. 49637
>>49635
Aww yeah
JMD you're the fucking bomb
Next time you draw her, would be nice to see her ass in those tight blue booty shorts
>> No. 49638
>>49637
Wouldn't mind a rear view of every Supermom.
>> No. 49639
>>49635
Justice can't be contained! It's almost spilling out!
>> No. 49640
>>49625
I don't know if this was intentional, but I really like the dark area around Ms. Goldbeetle's eyes in this pic. Maybe there could be some black around her eyes, within the borders of her facial adornments?
>> No. 49641
>>49634
Here are my ideas:
>Mrs. Evil
All black, flowing cape with spiked pauldrons, maybe a white skull on the back of her cape. Thigh-high heels, mid-bicep length gloves, a bustier that goes down a bit (just a bit) to cover her crotch, and a cowl that goes around her eyes, leaving her eyes, mouth and chin area exposed, covering up her nose with an interconnecting line going underneath her eyes, and going all the way over the top of her head covering up her hair. Maybe black lipstick too?

>Evil Boy
Scruffy brown hair, domino mask, and that's all I got aside from a general /ss/ feel, but nothing too lewd.
>> No. 49642
>>49641
>spiked pauldrons
That's Lord Darkthorne's prerogative
Otherwise, I liked what you described. Definitely needs some black lipstick.
Just be sure to distinguish her design from Seductra's: >>49512
Evil Boy should be a cuter version of the same outfit

Btw, how about she's a bit younger than the moms (she was preteen when they quit). Makes sense if Evil Boy is younger than the moms' eldest kids (they're 15-16)
>> No. 49643
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49643
>> No. 49644
>>49642
In the Star-Striker solo script, Mrs. Evil is presented as a former archenemy of Star-Striker, and her son is Betsy's age, so I would assume she's roughly the same age as the Supermoms.

Maybe her pauldrons have the skull-and-crossbone design that's on her cape?

As for Evil Boy, I'm thinking short shorts, a sleeveless top, wrist-length gloves, normal-length boots, domino mask, and maybe a mini cape.

>>49643
Oh my...
>> No. 49645
>>49643
Now I'm curious what the other Supermoms reactions would be if Tropica did that to them.
>> No. 49646
>>49643
KIS-SU! KIS-SU! KIS-SU!
Er, I mean, Tropica just wants Mend to heal her lips, that's all! Honest!
>> No. 49647
>>49643
This is a kind of specific request, but could you do a shrunk-down Kaiju standing on Tropica's shoulder?
>> No. 49648
Another batch of racism complainers surfaced in /pco/, nothing really new or relevant among their complaints, but they got me thinking:
We need to flesh Tropica out a bit

a) Her husband is a stay-at-home dad. SS's husband is a stay-at-home dad. Too similar.
I reiterate my old suggestion: Let's make Juan the co-owner of the flower shop. That would be a different situation that other moms have: they all have different jobs from their husbands, while Tropica and Juan would share it.
What do you think?

b) She wears a lucha mask. Let's try adding some lucha flair to her powers/origin.
Maybe the mask was an ancient artifact? The wiki says lucha masks have Aztec predecessors. Maybe this mask is an Aztec ritual mask of a plant goddess?
Luchas never lose or take off their mask, it would be an insult. But Carmen never takes off her mask! It's just comprised of the vines, and grows or de-grows by her will.

What do you think, guys?
>> No. 49649
JMD, could you please draw the redesigned version of Sig Rune?
(here it is: >>49518, but note that the artist forgot to draw her long braid for some reason)
>> No. 49650
>>49648
I'm totally fine with making Juan co-owner of the flower shop.

As for Tropica's mask, the big thing with her costume is that it's grown entirely out of plants, including her mask.

As far as origin stories we have:
>just really wanted to be a superhero (Star-Striker)
>exposed to radiation (Diva)
>empowered by aliens (Mend)
>mystical artifact (Kaiju)
>mythical being from another world (Sig Rune)

The Tropica origin story we came up with is she fell into a vat of radioactive fertilizer goop. We have one vanilla origin, 2 science-based, and 2 mythical. However, Kaiju keeps her abilities under control with science, so that counts one for science too I think. So it would balance the origins out if we gave Tropica a mythical origin. I would still like a falling-into-goop spot though. Maybe young Carmen is exploring some Aztec ruins and falls into an ancient room, unvisited for centuries. Inside there is a reservoir filled with a strange glowing green goop. Carmen is pushed in by an unseen force and has a crazy, trippy dream where some Aztec plant god(dess) bestows power upon her. Her "costume" is what the Aztec plant god(dess) has chosen for her, but her mother says no way and makes her wear the singlet we see in the Teen Queens pic in >>49496. Then, as an adult, she doesn't bother wearing that singlet anymore.

What do you think?
>> No. 49651
>>49643
>>49628
JMD, I love you to pieces, but what's with the beer belly on Tropica? She's supposed to have an hourglass figure, like in your other drawings: >>49429 >>49418 >>49411
Mend's puffy belly looks cute, Tropica looks better without it (imo)
>> No. 49652
>>49650
I like your idea!

Some suggsestions, tho:
>exploring some ancient ruins
She's not an archeologist! Maybe rather make it like in From Dusk Till Dawn, where some unassuming building (maybe the flower shop itself?) is actually a part of a forgotten ancient temple?
And btw, Aztecs are a bit overused, maybe the mask and temple are not even Aztec, but Olmec (a much much older native civilization)?
>costume
It could be a funny scene. "Behold, Carmen, your Costume of Justice... is this mask!" "What. Only the mask? Nothing else?"
>> No. 49653
>>49652
And Carmen has to explain to the elder spirit that in this day and age, people cover up certain parts of themselves.
>> No. 49654
>>49652
Maybe it's an abandoned building, and Carmen tells the god(dess) that one day she will come back and turn the building into a proper shrine to the god(dess)'s power over nature, and as an adult she opens the flower shop there with her high school boyfriend Juan.

And no matter how much the god(dedss) urges Carmen and counsels her, she just can't take care of plants well without using her powers.
>> No. 49655
>>49654
And I just had an idea about Yolanda's powers. Maybe she can talk to plants because she was actually born inside the flower shop (the rest of Carmen's children were born in the hospital like normal), and on her birth she received some of the god(dess)'s power, which in this case manifested itself as plant communication, rather than plant control like her mother.
>> No. 49656
>>49653
>>49654
>>49655
I like all of these! Except:
>born in the flower shop
ewwwwwwwwwwww
Maybe instead she was conceived in the flower shop? Those boring after-hours, and stuff
>> No. 49657
>>49628
>Tropico the best mom

Glad to know we share great taste in women Justin
>> No. 49658
Just finished this Sig Rune solo script. It takes place whenever. Probably after the first Sigrun solo, and after the initial Supermoms story.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/j0j3gd31midpkjb/sigrun2.celtx

Please critique this.
>> No. 49659
>>49651

Forgive me, I'm letting my love for the Latinas mix with my love of chubbies.
>> No. 49660
>>49659
It's OK JMD, it happens to the best of us.
>> No. 49661
>>49650
I had an idea about the goop. How about Carmen has to bathe in it every so often (timeframe to be determined) to maintain her powers?
>> No. 49664
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49664
>> No. 49666
>>49664
May I just say thank you so much for participating in this silly project of ours when you could be doing something else. It means a lot having you around.
>> No. 49668
>>49664
Phenomenal.
>> No. 49669
>>49664
Any chance we could get a colored Ms. Goldbeetle?
>> No. 49670
>>49664
JMD, I love your Mend. The way the eyepieces in her mask can be so expressive like that is just incredible. You've made Mend my favorite mom.
>> No. 49672
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49672
>> No. 49673
>>49672
>that headband
Amazing. I love it.
>> No. 49674
>>49641
>>49642
>>49644
Does anyone object to the Mrs. Evil and Evil Boy designs? Could we get a template of Mrs. Evil?
>> No. 49675
>>49674
May not have time today, but I'll think of something.
>> No. 49676
>>49657
>Tropico the best mom
>Tropico
>o
>>49471
>> No. 49677
>>49672
>>49664
Nice new drawings, JMD! I dig them!
>> No. 49678
Let's think about the following:
How about we create a few more minority secondary characters? Not for PC reasons or something – more like, for design variety, and to show that Sapphire City is pretty diverse (so that e.g. Kaiju or Tropica's families wouldn't look like unique exceptions, but rather nothing out of ordinary). What do you think?
Who they could be:
>other heroes (who?)
>villains (who?)
>some MILF Corp. employees (we already have James T.Christmas)
>cops (we already have Eric)
>Magnet School faculty (maybe keep Mr.Tabari?)
>Supermoms' kids' friends
>> No. 49679
Oh and btw... do we know who Bev dated before she met Steve? Or maybe she even had a husband before him? Steve isn't much older than her, and he had a (maybe short, but still) previous marriage (Vicky). I refuse to believe that a beautiful woman as Bev hadn't any relationships during that period. Was it maybe Gunner Graves?
>> No. 49680
>>49678
Earlier today I had the idea that we could make Hot Flash black. As far as other heroes go, we have tons of heroes where we only have their names and literally nothing else so we can have them look however we want to. Maybe we could have Seductra be Asian? We'd have to change her real name, though.

I had an idea for Iron Maiden, the robotic arch-nemesis of Kaiju, where she builds a "daughter" to learn as much as possible about human teenagers (so she can rule them, of course). What if this "daughter" actually didn't know she was a robot? Her "mother" could have a human disguise and everything to keep up the illusion. Maybe Iron Maiden, not knowing much about human biology, made her "daughter's" skin a different color than hers? Maybe Alexander would see Iron Maiden's "daughter" with her "mother" and just assume she's adopted, just like him, and a love interest blooms?

Also Iron Maiden should work at MILF. I think the more heroes and villains who don't know each others' identities work at MILF, the better.

Betsy could have a bunch of cheerleader friends who are all stereotypical popular girls. Maybe Keiichi doesn't have many friends because he's so nerdy. When writing the Sigrun solo in >>49658, I had Alexander's friends be stoners and skateboarders.

>>49679
Gunner Graves is like 10 years her senior, and she was so no. Maybe Bev had a penchant for dating "bad boys" who, more often than not, she would end up putting behind bars as Star-Striker.
>> No. 49683
>>49680
As much as I love the idea of Hot Flash being black, I can't really picture Seductra as asian.
>> No. 49684
>>49683
Fair enough.

>>49680
That got me thinking about the Mothers of Evil, what I'm calling the Supermoms' arch-enemies (does anyone have any better suggestions for the name?). Basically, they're in similar situations as the Supermoms, only they're evil.

>Hot Flash: black woman in her 50s. Looks damn fine and knows it. Took experimental, untested menopause medication and developed fire powers. Can fly around, shoot fireballs from her hands, and turn into a fire form, creating fire duplicates of herself as well (these duplicates are however very weak and can be dissipated easily). Takes great pride in how good she looks for her age, and doesn't let her foes forget it. Has one or two adult children. Possibly divorced?
>Mrs. Evil: Star-Striker's old nemesis, now a mom herself. Has a 14-year old son who is also her sidekick/minion, Evil Boy. Uses henchmen and evil gadgets, not a very skilled fighter. Evil Boy's secret identity is a potential love interest for Betsy Banks.
>Phero-Mona: Mend's arch-enemy, has pheromone powers. She can use her pheromones to turn any non-superpowered people into her willing saves. Her spell can be broken by one of Mend's healing kisses. Has a 7-year old daughter and a 10-year old son. Interestingly, her husband is unaffected by her powers but seems to exhibit no superpowers, because he really does love her, and true love triumphs over her pheromones. She just thinks he has hidden and/or really obscure powers, though. Phero-Mona can direct her pheromones in a specific direction if she pleases, but her pheromones affect every non-superpowered human they come in contact with.
>Loud Bitch: Diva's nemesis, and every really annoying white girl ever. Has two bratty teenage daughters. Sonic scream that can break up Diva's solid sound constructs. Speaks in a valley accent, uses "like" way too frequently. Maybe has a secondary power? Divorced.
>Iron Maiden: Kaiju's arch-nemesis, a sexy robot lady with the ability to change the size of other things, in the form of purple beams fired from her fingers. Frequently has Micro-Men-built miniature weapons which she blows up to things a normal-sized human can use. Wishes to learn more about humanity so she can simultaneously fit in and conquer us all. Has a human skin that she wears when interacting with society, such as her job at MILF where her secret identity is Kim Ujifusa's main rival in the science department. Has constructed a "daughter" who doesn't know she's actually a robot, in an attempt by Iron Maiden to learn more about kids and what living as an adult human parent is like. Hilariously, Iron Maiden's "daughter" (name ideas, anyone?) looks nothing like her, due to Iron Maiden not knowing too much about human biology. Iron Maiden doesn't like wearing her human disguise, leading to many situations where she has to scramble to throw it on before someone sees her in her "natural" state.
>Ms. Goldbeetle: Sig Rune's arch-nemesis, a fake-tanned, boob-jobbed, botoxxed gold digger with a supersuit. Her 6th ex-husband was the former supervillain known as Goldbeetle, and she stole the name and suit from him in divorce court, modifying the suit to fit her and taking to the streets, stealing everything she could get her hands on. Gravimetric ball that she can control, using it to pick up gold and other valuables, forming a giant rolling ball she can use as transportation and as a weapon. Her suit also has two mechanical arms that she can control, however they're a bit buggy (no pun intended) and don't always work. Ms. Goldbeetle hasn't quit her "day job" though, and continues to seek men to seduce, marry, and then rob blind in divorce court! Has a daughter and a son, each from different previous marriages. She doesn't need to steal to support them, as their fathers pay her ample child support.

What do you guys think? Anything that needs changing?
>> No. 49685
>>49684
Maybe Iron Maiden's daughter DOES know she's a robot, but unlike her mother, actually LIKES pretending to be a human? She still has a number of robotic tendencies, though.

Oh, and they both have to consume oil, but have to hide it when in their human disguises/around humans.
>> No. 49686
>>49684
>>49685
I can just imagine IM and her daughter sitting at the dinner table, oil cans in front of them.
>"MOOOOOOMMM, I don't WANNA take off my human suit!"
>"Daughter Unit, you are being highly illogical. This behavior is not what you were programmed to--"
>"I'm not using YOUR source code, OK?!? I want to do my OWN THING!"
>"Daughter Unit, you appear to be malfunctioning. A diagnostic is imperative--"
>"Ugh, I can't STAND this! I'm going to finish dinner in MY ROOM!"
>daughter leaves
>IM sits at table for a bit
>"Query: are all human teenagers this: brash, illogical, and rude?"
>> No. 49687
>>49678
>kids' friends
I'm thinking for simplicity's sake, we could combine some of that with the evil moms' kids in >>49684. For example, Loud Bitch's daughters seem like the perfect fit for the cheerleading team that Betsy is on. Going off of the idea in >>49686, Iron Maiden's daughter could strike up a friendship with Shaundra based on the common ground of them both being rather rebellious against their mothers. Obviously we have the Betsy/Evil Boy relationship previously discussed, and Ms. Goldbeetle's kids could be friends of one or more of the Supermoms' children. Throw in a couple regular people friends in there and I think we'd be set.
>> No. 49688
>>49678
How about we make Eric's partner a woman? May be, e.g., a tough no-nonsense Latina woman, a la Vasquez / Renee Montoya / Corazon Santiago?
>> No. 49689
>>49680
>>49683
>Asian Seductra
I agree, I also don't see Seductra as Asian. But maybe Phero-Mona or Cat Lady is Asian?
>> No. 49691
>>49689
I can totally see Phero-Mona as Asian.

>>49688
Maybe she hates superheroes, too.
>> No. 49695
>>49688
>>49691
What if she's related to Tropica somehow?
>> No. 49696
>>49686
I like this. Iron Maiden considers herself above humans, but in reality she acts a lot more like them than she thinks.
>> No. 49697
>>49672
Thanks JMD! You're great as always!
But... isn't the double female symbol on the headband a bit too blatant?
>>49678
I just recently had an idea of a hero (antihero?) who's Junichi's cousin. His identity isn't secret, and he's almost the opposite of Junichi or his parents – not reserved, not conservative, not always polite, but a good guy nonetheless. He could be the hero who annoys Junichi's sensibilities even more than that indecent "Kaiju" hussy. What do you guys think?
>Magnet School faculty
For some reason, I always imagined the SCMS principal as a large black woman, like, a non-evil Amanda Waller
>>49679
I don't think she was married before (imo it would complicate her story too much), but I'd suggest she did date other people.
I remember there being a story suggestion that had Gunner Graves as her ex-boyfriend. Basically, on Bev & Steve's anniversary (or maybe Valentine's Day) everything that could go wrong, goes wrong. A couple supervillain attacks and crises that keep the Supermoms separated into several groups and occupied, Steve being oblivious as always (including being oblivious to what date it is), and to boot Bev's ex-boyfriend (Gunner Graves) suddenly wants to rekindle their old flame. Bev, of course, is just annoyed and nothing more, but Gunner desperately tries to impress her by treating her as his damsel-in-distress (a parody of the Superman-Lois dynamic), constantly barging in to save her from various minor dangers – which annoys Bev even more as she doesn't have the time to change into Star-Striker and help other moms! Could be a fun story maybe, what do you think?
>>49680
I love Iron Maiden and her daughter a lot. Probably, my favorite villainesses so far
How about her daughter has no "human disguise" – but everyone treats her as just another person anyway, and thus she just has no reason to think she's different! Kind of like a play on Mechazawa (who isn't a robot, though, dunno why I brought him up).
>Gunner Graves is like 10 years her senior, and she was so no.
He's older, but why is this a problem? Women often choose older partners. But as I said, I don't support Bev having a previous marriage.
>Maybe Bev had a penchant for dating "bad boys" who, more often than not, she would end up putting behind bars as Star-Striker.
We already have that dynamic in Mend x Shadow Boy, this would be too similar. Bev prefers good boys, thus her brief relationship with Gunner Graves, her love and marriage with Steve, and her respect (nothing more, htough) towards Leonard Drakethorpe who's an upstanding citizen if she ever knew one.
>>49684
I like all of these concepts, I think we could leave them at that for now, and flesh them out more later if needed.
I like Iron Maiden being Kaiju's rival both in superhero life and in normal life. She could be the leader of another division of the science department of MILF. But I'm personally against putting much more heroes/villains into MILF, I think we should be very cautious with this.
Also, a thing that caught my eye: too many divorced or single villainesses. It almost looks like some dubious social commentary, guys. At the same time, there's only one Supermom to ever have been divorced (Diva). Maybe we should rethink some villainesses' bios, or maybe we could make another Supermom an ex-divorcee? Tropica maybe?
>>49687
This looks like a play on the various "heroes/villains' teenage kids in high school" shows like Monster High / Ever After High/ Descendants / etc. And I like it! We play with different comic/cartoon archetypes, why not play with this one as well? Let's make it so
>>49688
>>49689
>>49691
>>49695
I'm liking both Asian pheromona (what nationality could she be, btw?) and Eric's tough cape-hating Latina partner (how about Corazon Cortez for a name?).
I don't think the latter should be related to Carmen or Juan in any way, though.
>> No. 49698
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49698
I'm trying to come up with something for Mrs. Evil. Have a genderbent Dr. Mundo from League of Legends in the meantime.
>> No. 49699
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49699
I went with the ideas earlier and made this first idea of Mrs. Evil.

Yellow first, although I realized that's too much like Goldbeetle.
>> No. 49700
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49700
But then I went with purple instead, if only I because I gave her purple hair. Maybe too Raven-y.
>> No. 49701
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49701
Blue hair. I mostly just wanted dark, almost-black hair.
>> No. 49702
>>49701
>>49700
Mmm, goth girl MILF~
I'd suggest paler skin for better contrast
>> No. 49703
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49703
>> No. 49704
>>49699
If you're coming up with templates for ms evil
Try a genderbent version of Sydney from the ps one game vagrant story.
With spiked metal nipple pasties
>> No. 49705
>>49699
If you're coming up with templates for ms evil
Try a genderbent version of Sydney from the ps one game vagrant story.
With spiked metal nipple pasties
>> No. 49706
>>49704
I'm not liking that idea, frankly.
>> No. 49707
>>49703
I like this design, but I think she needs a cape. As for her hair, maybe it's a wig? And when she's out of costume she just has normal hair. Could be that when she was younger she dyed it, but in the corporate environment she works in now that doesn't fly.

>>49697
No, I think Iron Maiden's daughter should have a human disguise just like her "mom" and be programmed more like a human than Iron Maiden as well. I think the rebellious daughter angle could work well there, and also give her some common ground with Shaundra. Maybe she could hate her mother as well for her extra-curricular pursuits?

And I thought of a name for Iron Maiden's daughter: Daughter Unit ZE-1, or Zoe for short. What do you guys think?

>SCMS principal as a large black woman
I'm fine with this, but how about this idea: the original principal is The Headmaster, and we do the story where he mind controls the entire school and the Supermoms stop him, and THEN the black lady comes in as principal? She could be no-nonsense as fuck.

>Gunner Graves
They could have dated briefly right when/after she retired, and he still holds a flame for her.
>> No. 49708
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49708
>>49707
Figure I'll just connect the cape to the cowl as opposed to just a separate thinger.
>> No. 49709
>>49708
Slight modification.
>> No. 49710
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49710
Oops, forgot to maintain the pale skin.
>> No. 49711
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49711
oops again.
>> No. 49712
>>49710
As far as identity concealment, I'm thinking she obviously doesn't wear the gothic makeup, and maybe a long hair wig, the twist being that the juvenile-looking blue hair IS her real hair?
>> No. 49713
>>49711
I should really refresh this thread more, haha. Maybe her real hair is just like or similar to Bev's and she throws the blue wig on in costume.
>> No. 49715
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49715
First a try without the makeup. I was thinking less goth and more just something foreboding. Mrs. Evil needed evil eyeliner or whatever. However, the overall look does make her look super goth.
>> No. 49716
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49716
>>49715
And now another look I was workshopping. Maybe the ponytail works the whole 'wig' approach if people are uncertain about the dark blue hair.
>> No. 49717
>>49716
I prefer the shorter hair. Makeup I'm fine with or without. It really depends on how the shadow caused by the hood is played out.
>> No. 49718
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49718
A casual/civvie look for her. Dunno why I went with a poncho and yoga pants, but I wanted something other than jeans and shirt like Tropica had and business suit like Star Striker. This seems like a good casual medium.
>> No. 49720
>>49712
>>49713
Maybe she's a really bland looking generic housewife in real life
>> No. 49721
>>49718
>yoga pants
Now I imagine her having a DAT ASS to rival Diva's, and probably a black hubby who adores it
>> No. 49722
>>49715
I don't see anything bad with her being a bit gothy
Btw, I like this ponytail-less version more
>> No. 49723
>>49720
Totally down with this.
>housewife
But how would we get her secret identity to interact with the Supermoms' secret identities? I kind of want to do a thing where the Mothers of Evil (is that the name we're going to go with?) and the Supermoms all interact in both their secret identities and alter egoes.

Like I had an idea for Phero-Mona where she runs an aromatherapy shop that competes with the aromatherapy part of Carmen and Juan's shop, and Hot Flash is this master baker who Anne-Marie competes with (she cooks all of her dishes using her powers, giving them a unique flavor that nobody else can replicate).
>> No. 49724
>>49721
Agreed
We definitely lack some serious PAWG at this point

>black hubby
An interracial relationship may be nice to break the mold
>> No. 49725
>>49723
Book club. Ka-pow.
>> No. 49726
>>49725
Brilliant. Maybe the book club is the secret identities of the Supermoms and the Mothers of Evil, and we throw Vicky Timberlake in there as the person running it.
>> No. 49727
>>49723
>master baker
But Mend isn't a professional baker, baking is just her hobby
Maybe she's Mend's neighbor who brags about her cooking all the time, or something?

Or maybe instead, the Evils (Mr. and Mrs. Evil, and their teenage son Algernon Evil) are her annoying neighbors?
>> No. 49728
>>49726
But Vicky isn't a villain

Also, agreed on making her a pawg
>> No. 49729
>>49727
I never pictured there being a "Mr. Evil." I mean, she is married, but I think she should be analogous to Bev in that her husband is normal and totally oblivious.

Maybe Mrs. Evil can be a neighbor from hell. Drawing from real life experience with awful neighbors, she could leave passive-aggressive notes taped to various things around the outside of Anne-Marie's house, relating to various issues (real or perceived) with Anne-Marie's house and property. Like maybe they go a little too long with mowing the lawn, things like that.
>> No. 49730
>>49728
No, she's the sole ordinary person in the book club (of course she has no clue, just as the rest of the book club has no idea who half of the people they socialize with every week truly are). She sort of acts as the audience analogue, because everyone on each team is a little bit nutty (you have to be to be a superhero/villain).
>> No. 49731
>>49729
Maybe she married a guy whose name is Evil?
>> No. 49732
>>49730
>She sort of acts as the audience analogue
I don't know
I'm wary about promoting Vicky to this position from just a supporting secondary character
And I always thought Beverly is the audience analogue, amongst more weird and superpowered teammates
>> No. 49733
>>49724
>black hubby
>which means chocolate-skinned shota son
I approve
>> No. 49734
>>49731
Well, her original name was Ms. Evil, when she was a teenage supervillain. Now that she's married, it's only fitting to change to Mrs. Evil.

Although it would be pretty funny to have her husband's last name (and her last name) be some variation on the spelling of "evil."

>>49732
Maybe audience analogue is a bit too far, but I think Vicky's more or less normal personality would serve as a good contrast to the rest of the book club's insanity, what with Sigrun being Sigrun, Tropica being spicy and fiery, Diva consuming insane amounts of wine every meeting, Mrs. Evil being just as over-the-top as she is in costume, Hot Flash bragging about she looks better than all the other moms 20 years her junior, Iron Maiden being awkward in interacting with humans and interpreting emotions (and sarcasm), etc.
>> No. 49735
>>49721
>>49728
>>49733
Seconding this.
>> No. 49736
>>49734
I don't know.
I don't like all the Supermoms and all the villainesses constantly interacting together in a book club. It breaks the group dynamics (of both groups), and turns it all into a clusterfuck of 12 characters interacting at once. I suggest making this club for the villainesses only, as a counterpart for the Supermoms' yoga club.

You could have a one-time thing of Supermoms interacting with the villainesses in their civilian disguises – e.g., a PTA meeting. It would be enough, imo
>> No. 49737
>>49736
Seconding this, at least as far as group interactions are concerned. I still support having individual Mothers of Evil interact with individual supermoms in their civilian identities.
>> No. 49738
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49738
Made a Goldbeetle casual outfit. Seems just right to me?
>> No. 49739
>>49738
Love the giant shades. It fits perfectly.

So, how does everyone feel about this design for Mrs. Evil? >>49711
>> No. 49740
What do you guys think of this idea for a Halloween story, or really just one particular scene in the story? It's Halloween night, and the Supermoms have to save the day. In the middle of it all, Star-Striker finds her face-to-face with Steve Banks. He says to her, "Wow, Beverly! That's some Star-Striker costume! You really went all-out for Halloween this year!" And that's the only time he ever recognizes Beverly in her costume, only because it's Halloween.
>> No. 49741
>>49740
Heh, I like it
May even have a whole issue of gags like that

>company Halloween party
>Oh my, Mr.Drakethorpe, your Lord Darkthorne looks pretty convincing! For a moment there, I was afraid it's actually him!
>Glad that you appreciate it, my dear Beverly! You look really fine yourself, in your Star-Striker costume! I dare say, much better than the original!
>> No. 49742
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49742
Well, if the Supermoms have yoga club, they need yoga outfits. Here's Diva. I'll do some more tomorrow.
>> No. 49743
>>49742
>Supermoms' asses in yoga pants
I am not ready. I AM NOT READY.
>> No. 49744
Mothers of Evil secret identities:
>Mrs. Evil: Kathryn Evelle. Big booty, married to a black guy. Stay-at-home housewife. 14-year old son Thomas is secretly her sidekick/minion Evil Boy.
>Hot Flash: Janet Jones. Very sexy looking black lady in her 50s.
>Iron Maiden: Barbara Bushnell. Her human disguise has the appearance of a typical white MILF. Her "daughter," Daughter Unit ZE-1, or Zoe for short (and while in her own human disguise), appears from the outside in her human disguise as a 15-year old Asian girl, leading everyone to assume Zoe is adopted. Babs (although she hates being called that name ("nicknames are illogical displays of affection, affection being a critical flaw in human programming")) works as the lead scientist in a separate division from Kim Ujifusa at MILF, and the two frequently vie for juicy projects and funding. Zoe has taken a liking to Alexander Odinsdottir, and becomes fast friends with Shaundra LaBelle over their shared rebellion against their mothers.
>Ms. Goldbeetle: Danielle Darling. Professional gold digger. Has two children from past marriages, 12-year old Duane and 15-year old Donna. Donna is on the cheerleading team at SCMS, and Duane is Ben Banks' partner-in-crime for his many acts of mischief at school. Both kids are spoiled by their mother who uses her money to buy her kids' love.
>Loud Bitch: Sara Vale (name possibly needs work). Valley girl, loud and obnoxious. She, like, talks like this? And, like, phrases most of her sentences as questions? Has two bratty daughters, 14-year old Vanessa and 17-year old Betty, who are both on the SCMS cheerleading squad, Betty being the captain. Married to a meathead named Stan.
>Phero-Mona: Lin Wong, Chinese aromatherapist and acupuncturist. Owns a naturalist shop across the street from Carmen and Yuan's plant shop. 7-year old daughter and 10-year old son, can someone help me with names? Married to a yuppie named Gregory who is always talking business on his cell phone.
>> No. 49745
>>49742
Oh my
I can only imagine how that looks in proportion
Also, needs some whale tail showing, just saiyan

As for other Supermoms' yoga clothes:
>One of them should definitely wear some tight short shorts
>One can wear longer shorts
>One can wear those almost transparent lewd yoga pants
>Mend should probably get some tomboy-ish gym clothes
>> No. 49746
>>49744
All sounds good, except:
>the appearance of a typical white MILF
Er... what exactly do you mean?
>Chinese aromatherapist and acupuncturist
Could have a fun origin here. She could've been an American in several generations, like 1/4 Chinese (2/4 Irish), and completely out of touch with her Chinese heritage and culture. But she maintains a facade of "knowing some ancient Chinese knowledge blah blah" to hide the fact that she uses her powers for her aromatherapy. Aslo, dunno about acupuncture, it doesn't really mix with her powers.
>> No. 49747
I just noticed something.
Do we have any ex-divorcee moms (moms who were divorced and later remarried) besides Ms.Golddigger?
>> No. 49748
>>49707
>I'm fine with this, but how about this idea: the original principal is The Headmaster, and we do the story where he mind controls the entire school and the Supermoms stop him, and THEN the black lady comes in as principal? She could be no-nonsense as fuck.
I support this.
>> No. 49749
>>49747
Someone earlier floated the idea of Tropica being a divorcee. I don't know how that would play out though.
>> No. 49750
>>49749
I dunno, I like the idea of Tropica and Juan being college sweethearts. We don't have this dynamic with any other Supermoms.
>> No. 49751
>>49750
Maybe Kim and Junichi are college sweethearts? Then Carmen could be an ex-divorcee
>> No. 49752
Star-Striker wiki page finished, for now. Need your guys' input, especially some stylistic editing.
Gave Star-Striker strong legs, compared with Sig Rune's strong arms. Of course, she doesn't have overmuscled bodybuilder legs (she's not a muscle girl, Sig Rune is), it would just mean that visually her fighting style would consist of more leg action (kicks, leg holds etc). Let me know what you guys think.

Working on Diva page now.
>> No. 49754
>>49746
I like the "barely Chinese" gimmick, and how about she's also married to a Chinese dude? As for acupuncture, we can play that up as not really being related to her powers by having her be terrible at it. And her actual first name is "Lynne" but she spells it "Lin" on the signage of her shop: "Lin's Genuine Chinese Aromatherapy & Acupuncture".

I also came up with an expansion for Mrs. Evil being a "neighbor from hell." She could sneak around at night with her son in their civilian identities, teaching him different ways to be evil. The purest evil, to her, is being an annoying neighbor, and one night she teaches him the art of leaving passive-aggressive sticky notes around the neighborhood for everyone to find ("your grass is 0.5 inches higher than regulation," etc.). Have we decided who she lives next door to?
>> No. 49755
>>49754
>and how about she's also married to a Chinese dude?
I'm in favor of adding a few interracial marriages to the mix atm, since we have so few (Mrs. Evil x Mr.Evelle and... that's all we have, actually)
>And her actual first name is "Lynne" but she spells it "Lin" on the signage of her shop
Heh, I like it
>Mrs. Evil and her son
I like the idea of Mrs.Evil teaching her son to be an evil neighbor. Actually, that gave me an idea. Maybe, despite the ominous name (Mrs. Evil), all her villainy mostly consists of various petty acts? Like, the ones who mostly just annoy people but do no serious harm. What do you think?
>Have we decided who she lives next door to?
Let's see. Not Diva or Sig Rune for obvious reasons. Not Tropica since we won't see her home much in the stories, anyway. So that leaves SS, Mend and Kaiju. I'd personally suggest SS, as she's the kinda sorta main hero of the stories, so it would make sense for the reader to learn about her neighbors.
Btw, her other neighbor could be that paranoid conspiracy theorist guy who hunts for superheroes everywhere... or maybe he could be Mend's neighbor, considering that in that case, he would be obliviously living next door not only to a superhero, but to an ex-supervillain as well! Yes, now that I think about it, I like him being Mend's neighbor better
>> No. 49756
So will there be another thread on /co/ this weekend?
>> No. 49757
>>49756
Yes.

>>49755
The conspiracy guy should be Mend's neighbor for sure. I picture Mrs. Evil as Star-Striker's neighbor, constantly harping on her for minor infractions, like leaving the morning newspaper out for too long or leaving the lid of her mailbox down after she gets the mail.

Maybe Evil Boy questions the true evilness of his mother's activities and she goes into a lengthy, convoluted explanation as to why of her mildly annoying behavior is actually true evil. But occasionally, maybe only when she's with the other Mothers of Evil, she does have a legitimate evil plan.
>> No. 49758
>>49746
I had this idea for Iron Maiden's human disguise being a kind of amalgamation of all things that are attractive in women, at least what Iron Maiden thinks humans find attractive in their women. But I'm open to suggestions as to what her human disguise would actually look like.
>> No. 49759
>>49758
>Iron Maiden's human disguise being a kind of amalgamation of all things that are attractive in women, at least what Iron Maiden thinks humans find attractive in their women.
Heh, isn't this what Ms.Goldbeetle looks like?
>> No. 49761
>>49759
She's more kind of an exaggerated stereotype of the rich women who buy their looks, but I kind of see what you mean. Do you have any ideas for what Iron Maiden's Barbara Bushnell disguise looks like?
>> No. 49762
I'm updating the Diva wiki page, currently in process. Tried to flesh out her backstory a bit.

Also created an improvised timeline on the Supermoms page (currently only features SS and Diva). Had to make a notable change: push back the date of Teen Queen's disbandment from "15 years ago" to "17 years ago". Why? Because Shaundra and Keiichi are 16 years old, and it's hard to imagine Diva and Kaiju getting teen pregnant and still continuing their superheroics for 2 years.

Need your feedback and input on the Supermoms, Star-Striker and Diva pages, and possibly some participation as well!
>> No. 49763
>>49761
How about she got her knowledge about "how a normal human housewife looks" from 50s sitcoms and old ads, and so her human disguise looks like a stereotypical 50s always-cheerful housewife? And her daughter also may look like a 50s prim and proper girl
>> No. 49764
>>49763
Hmm, I'm intrigued. Are there any examples for Zoe?

She still should appear to be of a different race from her mother, so we can go the "Alexander thinks she's adopted too" angle for their relationship.

>>49762
I'm gonna have to rewrite some of my Diva solo to compensate for the edited timeline.

Speaking of the scripts, please, if anybody can critique the currently available scripts, please do so if you haven't already, particularly the Star-Striker, Diva, Kaiju, Mend, and Sig Rune solos because I wrote those.
>> No. 49766
I just noticed we've hit the bump limit. Could someone make a new thread?

Perhaps doodleanon, with a new doodle of the team? That would be good to get it off on the right foot.

Or JMD if he's still here.
>> No. 49767
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49767
Here's a Sig Rune yoga getup. I pictured a really awful 80s exercise outfit, and this is the result.
>> No. 49768
>>49767
Almost perfect, but her hair's only a braid like that when she's in costume.

Also glasses.
>> No. 49769
>>49766
I don't think a new thread will be necessary unless we hit image limit.

I've never seen a thread 404 via last page drop off on /coc/.
>> No. 49770
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49770
>>49768
Very well, then.
>> No. 49771
>>49770
Oooh, mama!
>> No. 49772
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49772
How about a Tropica yoga outfit? Seems appropriate she'd wear something a little more alluring even for just some working out.
>> No. 49773
>>49772
I like it!

What would Kim wear, I wonder?
>> No. 49774
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49774
>>49773
Was thinking a skirt or skirt/pants combo for her, but I haven't started that yet.

Someone had mentioned something tomboyis for Mend. I took that as maybe just a thick sweater and pants or something.
>> No. 49775
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49775
And here's Kaiju.
>> No. 49776
>>49775
How revealing~

Maybe Kim has an adventurous side after all!
>> No. 49777
>>49775
For Star-Striker, I'm thinking something that screams "American."
>> No. 49778
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49778
And your Beverly.
>> No. 49779
>>49777
I don't think that's necessary, given how her superhero outfit does that. You just need something practical for yogatime, but I can try something else.
>> No. 49780
>>49778
>>49779
That outfit works.

Now, we need to start designing Iron Maiden, human form and robot form. Any ideas?
>> No. 49781
>>49780
I'm picturing two cone-like antennae that retract into her head when she's wearing her human disguise. Maybe a singular eyepiece, stretched across where the eyes would normally be, like Cyclops. Generic metallic grey finish I guess. In her arms she has hidden compartments where she stores her tiny weapons which she blows up to full size using her size-changing powers.
>> No. 49782
>>49781
No nose, big "lips," conical boobies. Overall, a sleek look.
>> No. 49783
>>49782
Spherical tits would look better with the sleek look you're suggesting.
>> No. 49784
Is the guy who was writing the "Supermoms Meet Your Fans" issue still around? I want to see how it ends.
>> No. 49785
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49785
>>49772
I sure am terrible at faces
>> No. 49786
>>49770
>>49772
>>49774
>>49775
>>49778
Sexy! Templater, if you got time, could you please do all the Supermoms in their civvies? We've got Kaiju, Mend and Tropica, so we still need Star-Striker, Diva and Sig Rune. I don't think we have any pics of Diva in civilian clothes, though, so they need to be designed.
>> No. 49787
>>49784
Hi, I'm still around! I was very busy these days, but I'll try to finish it as soon as I can!

>>49785
I like it! Do you have a name?
>> No. 49788
I think we need to design the kids, too – the most prominent ones, at least. Atm we only got Shaundra. As Templater can only design girls (for obvious reasons), and I don't know if any drawfriends are around currently, I suggest we start with the girls.

My thoughts:
>Betsy
I picture her as a stereotypical cheerleader, with long (dyed) blonde hair tied into pigtails. Maybe she has some other hairdo while not cheerleading, dunno which hairdo will suit her though.
>Yolanda
I don't know if I'm too late, but I have an idea. How about, in contrast to her mother and father's energetic and powerful personalities, Yolanda is a shy, wallflower type of girl? Especially since both Betsy and Shaundra are very strong and assertive young ladies, this could be something different. As for her looks... glasses may be too stereotypical, but I think a curly-haired ponytail and a nerdy sweater (maybe also a long maxi-skirt) would suit her
>> No. 49789
Are we gonna make the thread tomorrow? What time?
>> No. 49790
Finished the Diva wiki article: http://the-conservatory.wikia.com/wiki/Diva
Still hoping for your input, guys!
>> No. 49792
>>49789
I plan on making the thread at 10 AM EST, same as last week. I think the focus of that thread should be on worldbuilding. I'll try to get some people to critique my scripts because there sadly hasn't been much of that in this thread as of late. Hopefully Corndog will come back and drawfag a bit, same for JMD. I also wonder where Garuda has been of late, he was the only other guy working on scripts with me and I miss his feedback.

>>49788
Maybe Yolanda is just like her mom when she's around her family, but outside of her comfort zone she's really shy?

Semi-related, I was thinking about Tropica's flirtatious nature and I feel we should tone it down a bit, like she really only does it because it's fun and she likes watching men (especially ace reporter Buzz Edison) squirm.

>>49790
Not related to the Diva article, but the scripts section is erroneous. Supermoms #2 was written by me (although Garuda did contribute significantly). Also, it should be updated to include the Sigrun solo I wrote in >>49658.
>> No. 49793
>>49792
>I also wonder where Garuda has been of late, he was the only other guy working on scripts with me and I miss his feedback.
Actually, I worked on the scripts a bit, too. I was a bit busy these days, but I'll read your latest scripts soon and give my 2 cents

>Maybe Yolanda is just like her mom when she's around her family, but outside of her comfort zone she's really shy?
I dunno, in a cartoonish world like ours such drastic changes in personality could be confusing

>Semi-related, I was thinking about Tropica's flirtatious nature and I feel we should tone it down a bit, like she really only does it because it's fun and she likes watching men (especially ace reporter Buzz Edison) squirm.
But... wasn't it always like that? What specifically are you suggesting to tone down?
>> No. 49794
>>49793
It might have just been my perception of Tropica's flirting. I think if we make it clear that's why she does it, no one will have that perception of it anymore.
>> No. 49795
>>49794
Ah, I see. I agree, we need to make it very clear.
>> No. 49796
>>49792
Sorry, both changes to the Scripts list now made.
Also, started work on the Tropica page.

>>49794
Btw, maybe it could be fun if she did it not only for fun, but also sometimes barely subconsciously, as a habit. At the same time, she's very jealous of her husband Juan. It could lead to fun scenes, e.g. where she's shouting at Juan for looking at a pretty customer, taking a quick pause to flirt with an unlucky male assistant that happened nearby, then goes back to arguing with Juan without even realizing what she's doing
>> No. 49797
I have returned

Thinking about working on revising >>49501 based on discussions in the meantime.
>cut Mend's hair
>change Kaiju's hair
>change Tropica's pose
>update Sig Rune's costume
>revise Star-Striker

Of course, there's been a bunch of new concepts in the meantime. I could also work on drawing some of those up (or redrawing some things that are only templates).
I just was thinking about reworking the SuperTeens pic because I saw it was on the wiki.
>> No. 49799
>>49797
Nice to see you! Glad you're back!

>update Sig Rune's costume
Btw, she needs some nerdy glasses
>> No. 49800
>>49797
I'd love to see your take on Mrs. Evil and Evil Boy.
>> No. 49801
>>49799
I think Sigrun should only wear glasses in her civilian identity. After all, Asgardians have perfect 20/20 vision.
>> No. 49802
Writefag here, I wrote up a short little Tropica solo script. I feel like I need to add something to it to get the page count to an even 18, but I can't figure out what. Any ideas?

https://www.dropbox.com/s/h5tuwoux5yrwf5i/tropica1.celtx

As always, please critique this.
>> No. 49803
File 139363603299.jpg - (121.92KB , 828x1200 , Mrs Evil.jpg )
49803
>>49800
>Mrs. Evil

This was fun.
>> No. 49804
>>49803
Needs to be paler, but otherwise I like it!

I think we can do without the dots on either side of her mouth, though, because I feel they make her look old, and the nose doesn't seen right.
>> No. 49805
>>49803
forgot to mention my thoughts on the design:
Mainly she's influenced by both the previous posts and Disney villainesses (Evil Queen, Maleficent, Narissa). The cloak takes some hints from the Goblin hoods (Spider-Man) to keep it from looking too much like Raven.
I like the color scheme.
>> No. 49806
File 139363694985.jpg - (84.38KB , 482x533 , faec.jpg )
49806
>>49804
Better?
>> No. 49807
>>49803
Is she wearing colored contacts of some kind? That's pretty cool, and could add to her disguise.

Think you could take a crack at Ms. Goldbeetle? >>49625 >>49614
>> No. 49808
>>49806
Yeah, a lot better.

It still seems like she has a "fat person face" though, if that makes any sense.
>> No. 49809
File 139363758128.jpg - (123.64KB , 828x1200 , Mrs Evil.jpg )
49809
>>49807
That's based on Shan Yu - making the whites dark to give a creepier look.
>>49808
I see - that's probably a combination of me trying to give her a broader jaw and being bad at low angles.

>Think you could take a crack at Ms. Goldbeetle?
I dunno, JMD's a tough act to follow. Def gonna look over >>49744 and draw some more though.
>> No. 49810
Remember guys, /co/ thread tomorrow at 10 AM EST, so that's in 13 hours.
>> No. 49811
File 13936428478.jpg - (457.96KB , 1573x1200 , superteens.jpg )
49811
Updated SuperTeens.

That's probably it for tonight but I'll try to drop by on the weekend /co/ thread.
>> No. 49812
>>49811
I know Kaiju is supposed to be petite, but I don't know if she should be THAT small. She looks like she's 7 years old.
>> No. 49814
File 139365179316.jpg - (461.81KB , 1573x1200 , teen queens.jpg )
49814
>>49812
good point
>> No. 49815
File 139365489335.jpg - (140.10KB , 1200x768 , yoga candy.jpg )
49815
>>49742
>> No. 49816
File 139365575943.jpg - (154.86KB , 828x1200 , Mrs Evil.jpg )
49816
>>49809
touched up a few things
>> No. 49817
File 13936587214.jpg - (254.94KB , 934x1276 , Iron Maiden.jpg )
49817
>>49780
I did a sketch of Iron Maiden.
Inspired variously by Maria (Metropolis), C-3PO, Crow, the T-X, Cylons, and Drossel.

Thoughts? I tried to incorporate "smooth", "compartmentalized", "flexible" and "shaped vaguely like a hot mom" into the design.
>> No. 49818
>>49817
Tried to catch up on all the Seductra stuff and see what the character is about but it seem so confusing. My question is Is it OK to have different takes on the same character or is it imperative follow whats written here
>> No. 49819
>>49818
AFAIK it's still brainstorming mostly. You'll notice that each artist draws the characters slightly differently.
>> No. 49822
>>49817
I'm thinking more grey color scheme overall, and her mouth area looks like human skin, when she's a robot.

>>49818
Feel free to give us your own take on the character. Nothing's truly concrete until actual comic pages are done.

And a heads up, in about an hour from this post I'm going to be starting the /co/ thread. Just look up "Supermoms" in foolz to find it (I swear I'll actually get the title right this time).
>> No. 49823
Will be around later. Busy couple days.
>> No. 49824
/co/ thread is up.
>> No. 49825
>>49824

nope.
>> No. 49826
So, the puritan mod's back.

I suggest to post Supermoms in the /co/-creations thread. What do you think?
>> No. 49827
>>49826
I think the problem was the starting image was too lewd. You should try again with a less questionable drawing
>> No. 49828
>>49826
DO IT. Dont be scared
>> No. 49829
>>49827
>>49828
Okay, I'm confused now. Should I try another thread, or post it in the /co/-creations thread?
>> No. 49830
Okay, trying new thread. Watch me get banned
http://boards.4chan.org/co/res/59415254
>> No. 49831
>>49830
Okay, as of now the thread's active, with no deletion/bans in sight. Let's cross our fingers and hope for the best.
>> No. 49833
>>49830
>>49831
Aaaaaaaand dead again.

What is up with these mods?
>> No. 49834
WHAT THE FUCK /CO/ MODS
>> No. 49835
RIP thread
>> No. 49836
>Error: You are temporarily blocked from posting for violating Global 3 - Garbage Outside of /b/.
It's Inspector Redwood. He recently started to delete MILF and cheesecake threads in /co/ while leaving loli/muscle/giantess threads alone. He uses global rule 3 to "justify" this, despite that rule saying nothing about SFW cheesecake art or /co/creations.

I suggest someone to post Supermoms in the /co/ creation thread: http://boards.4chan.org/co/res/59359106 I don't think anyone could object to a /co/creation being discussed in a thread about /co/creations.
I would do it myself, but I'm blocked for 15 minutes, and maybe the mods will tempban me after that
>> No. 49837
>>49836
Btw, Global rule 3:
>Do not post the following outside of /b/: Trolls, flames, racism, off-topic replies, uncalled for catchphrases, macro image replies, indecipherable text (example: "lol u tk him 2da bar|?"), anthropomorphic ("furry"), grotesque ("guro"), post number GETs ("dubs"), or loli/shota pornography. Keep /pol/ in /pol/. In essence: Don't shitpost.
>Shitposting is "knowingly contributing low quality, off-topic, or ill intentioned posts."
>> No. 49838
>>49836
>Do not post the following outside of /b/: Trolls, flames, racism, off-topic replies, uncalled for catchphrases, macro image replies, indecipherable text (example: "lol u tk him 2da bar|?"), anthropomorphic ("furry"), grotesque ("guro"), post number GETs ("dubs"), or loli/shota pornography.

I don't see the problem.

Could you "dispute" the ban? I mean, try to see what exactly the violation is.
>> No. 49839
>>49838
Usually the temp ban for that kind of posting is too short to allow users to contest it.
>> No. 49840
>>49838
I'm blocked atm, blocking is undisputable.
I'll see if they'll ban me afterwards. Last time IR banned me for 1 day (for making a SWF comic book characters cheesecake art thread), such smalltime bans are undisputable as well.
>> No. 49841
File 139370742084.png - (249.26KB , 1160x946 , kaiju.png )
49841
lolredwood.

He seemed so likable, too.
>> No. 49842
Okay, unblocked atm, made a post here: http://boards.4chan.org/co/res/59359106
Let's flock to that thread, guys!

Please be active, I may get banned any minute now, and I'd like the discussion to continue!
>> No. 49843
File 139370810176.jpg - (97.49KB , 448x473 , 1390531861212.jpg )
49843
>>49841
Great pic of Kaiju in action! Glad you're with us, despite the redwoodfaggotry
>> No. 49844
So, Star-Striker has a motorcycle, the Star-Cycle. Any ideas on what it should look like?

I'm picturing an all-American chopper, decked out in the red, white and blue.
>> No. 49845
>>49844
well I know what I'm drawing later
>> No. 49846
>>49844
She has a motorcycle? Hah, didn't even know that! I think yeah, like you described
>> No. 49847
>>49836
>>49841
>>49843
Since when does redwood have any power?

Isn't he just some tripfag who at least one mod likes?
>> No. 49848
So, in light of the recent events, I propose the following course of action:

>We post in weekend /co/creation threads on /co/.
>The first post should contain a brief description (e.g. "Supermoms are a /co/created team of MILF superheroines") and a list of links (to this thread, to the wiki, maybe also script links)
>/co/creation thread people asked us not to dump a lot of old info, so our discussions should pertain to new things, changes, and new art
>To attract more people, post a link to the /co/creation thread post in the General Drawthread

>Maybe the "Supermoms" page on the wiki needs to be remade into a concise thread about the project, with a brief description and links
>All info about the team itself should go into another wiki page (maybe "Supermoms and Teen Queens")

>Also, maybe we should update the Pastebin files (about the Supermoms, their families, and others characters)

Your suggestions and input, please!
>> No. 49849
>>49848
I don't know, the people in the /co/creations thread were pretty hostile when we went in there, I'd rather this project not get ostracized for being perceived as butting in to other threads.
>> No. 49850
>>49848
I think the wiki page for the Supermoms is fine.

>>49849
There is one very persistent /co/ creations thread troll who dedicates himself to clinging onto anything new in an attempt to kill it before it gets started.

This has been going on for over a fucking year, don't let it bother you or else he'll drag the whole thing down.
>> No. 49851
>>49847
He's a janitor at least, if not a mod
>> No. 49852
>>49849
I dunno, they've seemed reasonable. They just ask not to dump old info, and post link instead, which is pretty logical.

>>49850
>I think the wiki page for the Supermoms is fine.
Then we need to devise a quick blurb that can be posted in the /co/creation threads with the links, to give people a concise understanding what this project is about.

>There is one very persistent /co/ creations thread troll
He now decided to masquerade as a Supermoms fan, doing exactly what they asked us not to do (i.e., dumpshitting the thread). Dunno what course of action should we take about him
>> No. 49853
>>49852
Ignore the asshole and move on.

He's failed every time but once, you guys already have content backing your stuff so he can't ruin it.
No one in the threads is going to give you shit about Supermoms, so just stop replying to that one guy all together.

I only asked in the first place that you not dump all the info in the threads because you seemed to be getting a powermad mod/janitor's attention. If I had known it would've been the troll's cue to start instigating then I would've just said nothing.
>> No. 49854
>>49853
Ah, I see. No prob, I hope the troll situation rectifies itself, and that mods won't ban us in your thread as well
>> No. 49855
File 139371706313.png - (181.95KB , 1073x1040 , 1393710812628.png )
49855
JMD's latest art
>> No. 49856
File 139371767328.jpg - (309.04KB , 1167x1000 , diva.jpg )
49856
Revised that Diva picture of mine to match the costume design everyone else is using
>> No. 49858
I haven't been around, but I'm looking at the new stuff right now. I'll look into making some casual templates and whatnot.
>> No. 49859
I had an idea re: the Supermoms' base of operations, the old Teen Queens base, and Seductra.

Back when the Teen Queens retired, the base that the city had built for them was closed down. When the Supermoms start looking for a base of operations, their first thoughts are to use their old headquarters, but they find out that now-mayor Seductra has slated their old headquarters for demolition, and they are unsuccessful in their attempts to change her mind. Seductra offers to build them a new base, but they don't trust her (and rightfully so). So they brainstorm and come up with the yoga/pilates place as their secret base.
>> No. 49860
>>49859
Hm, you tied that all up pretty nicely! I support making this canon
Now when does it happen? Sometime after Issue 4?
>> No. 49861
>>49860
I assume immediately after the election of Seductra happens, whenever that is.
>> No. 49862
File 139372829572.jpg - (142.52KB , 621x768 , sigrune-casual.jpg )
49862
Someone asked for casual outfits? I think this and Star Striker were the only ones I hadn't done yet that already had ideas. I guess I'll just try something for Diva.
>> No. 49863
>>49861
I think we need to write some comprehensive list of ideas that are already agreed upon, but haven't yet happened as of Issue 4 – so that we could know what needs to happen in future scripts. Maybe on the wiki?

>>49862
Looks nice!
>> No. 49864
File 139373070053.jpg - (141.80KB , 621x768 , starstriker-casual.jpg )
49864
>> No. 49865
File 139373082649.jpg - (131.56KB , 621x768 , diva-casual.jpg )
49865
I think I'd want to see this more to model.
>> No. 49866
>>49865
JMD if you're reading this, we'd love to see some casual attire Supermoms!
>> No. 49867
File 139373361259.jpg - (156.78KB , 1000x1000 , mrsevil1.jpg )
49867
My take on Mrs.Evil

I imagine her as a not too bright gal, an airhead
The kind of mom whose behavior would make her son facepalm all the time
>> No. 49868
>>49867
I like it!

As far as the character goes, I approve of her being an airhead. Maybe Evil Boy has to constantly keep her from losing her train of thought in the midst of her evil schemes.
>> No. 49869
>>49865
Those look real nice, Templater, but the Diva one breaks my suspension of disbelief. No jeans on this Earth could contain DAT ASS. Sweat pants or yoga pants or cargo pants would be more believable, imo
>> No. 49870
>>49868
Thanks!
I imagine that Evil Boy doesn't really want to be evil, but he's dragged into it by his airheaded mom. I imagine him always rolling up his eyes or facepalming when he's with her
>> No. 49871
>>49870
Maybe my "dark mistress" picture is how she was in her day and/or how she sees herself, whereas that picture is more like how she really is
>> No. 49872
Added pages for all 6 Supermoms to the wiki. They can all be accessed from the main http://the-conservatory.wikia.com/wiki/Supermoms page.

Currently Star-Striker's and Diva's pages are finished, Tropica's is half done, Kaiju's, Sig Rune's and Mend's pages only have art.

Also, all scripts are added to the Supermoms page.
>> No. 49873
>>49868
>>49870
I had an idea for Evil Boy, sort of an origin story, where Mrs. Evil decides to get back in the game, and wants her son to become her sidekick, so she starts trying to have him discover her villainous past, putting parts of her costume in closets, leaving newspaper clippings about her villainous alter ego from the old days out for him to find,etc., but he either doesn't notice or doesn't pay the hints any mind, so one day he comes home from school and she's just standing there in full costume.
>"Oh no! My own son has discovered that I, his ordinary-appearing mother, am really the former supervillain known as Mrs. Evil!"
>"Mom, what are you--"
>"There's only one thing I can do to keep my secret safe! Quick, Thomas, to the lair!"
>Thomas rolls his eyes
>they're in the basement
>"This is the lair?"
>turns out she legit has a lair hidden underneath the basement
>she already had a costume made for him
>"Thomas, the only way you can keep my secret safe is to pledge your allegiance to evil and join me as my sidekick, Evil Boy!"
>"Or I could just not tell anyone."
>"Nonsense! You're Evil Boy now."

What do you guys think?
>> No. 49874
>>49873
I like it! You wrote her just like I imagined! Just needs 50% more giggling
>> No. 49875
>>49873
All her son wants to do is plat dota2 all day long
why torture that NEET?
>> No. 49876
File 139378793997.jpg - (130.49KB , 621x768 , diva-casual2.jpg )
49876
>>49869
Well, cargo pants it is, then.
>> No. 49877
>>49876
This looks good! You actually managed to make her not as lewd as she could be, and I like it
>> No. 49878
>>49877
I figured the musical career thing meant she'd want something slick and classy.
>> No. 49879
File 139379259780.jpg - (156.39KB , 1000x800 , star-striker.jpg )
49879
Star-Striker is the best Supermom
If you disagree, you hate freedom
>> No. 49882
>>49879
Nice!

Could you try a take on Iron Maiden next?
>> No. 49885
So I wrote a quick little Mrs. Evil/Evil Boy script.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/ijz684wagaqca1p/evil1.celtx

What do you guys think?
>> No. 49886
File 139381177380.jpg - (166.83KB , 539x1000 , tropica 9.jpg )
49886
Tropica by a lovely, talented anon.
>> No. 49887
File 139381183449.jpg - (163.19KB , 525x1000 , tropica 10.jpg )
49887
>>49886
Yoga.
>> No. 49888
So much great new art! Added all to the wiki
Anyone know the artists' names perchance?
>> No. 49889
File 139385645237.jpg - (84.35KB , 500x500 , boyish_girls.jpg )
49889
Mend meets Lovely Ladybug
>> No. 49892
File 139386783975.jpg - (166.68KB , 621x768 , catlady01.jpg )
49892
I'm currently doing the http://the-conservatory.wikia.com/wiki/Supermoms_Villains wiki page, some ideas popped up in my mind:

>How about Mrs. Evil's name is Evelyn (instead of Kathryn)? Evelyn Evelle, sounds flashy and silly at the same time, imo it fits her personality all too well. It also explains why she was Ms. Evil when she didn't have the "Evelle" surname yet

>How about "Loud Bitch" is an activist. An activist for what? Oh, for everything that comes along. If there's a controversial cause, she'll be there, on _both_ sides
>And the name "Loud Bitch" definitely needs to be changed. How about "Loudspeaker"? Would also fit the aforementioned activism

>Also, about "Loud Bitch"/"Loudspeaker"'s daughters. I already renamed "Betty" into "Ashley", so as not to confuse the reader (we already have one teenage cheerleader named "Betsy"). How about we give the name "Vanessa" to "Loud Bitch"/"Loudspeaker" herself instead of her daughter? "Vanessa Vale" – sounds flashy (like all alliterative names do)

>I made the last step and made Phero-Mona not Chinese at all. She's Lynne Jones, a Welsh American, who married businessman Gregory Wong (1/4 Chinese; his Chinese ancestors immigrated from the UK). So she uses her husband's surname to give her claims of "Ancient Chinese knowledge" a tiny bit of authenticity. Also, made her a heavyset curvy woman, which would look funny (and sexy) in a stereotypical quasi-Chinese dress.
>What do you think? If anyone's against it, speak now or forever hold your peace

Need you input, ideas, suggestions etc. on these villainesses.

Also, is picrelated the latest design for Cat Lady?
>> No. 49893
>>49892
I don't think you're going to be able to have a stats box for each villain on the same page.

It just won't look good unless they get downsized enough to where they're only next to the character they're describing or the info on the characters is enough to make the stats box not bleed into the next characters' area.
>> No. 49894
>>49893
No worries, when there will be text for each villain (remember, it's bio + powers + family, at least) I think it'll balance itself out.
Maybe the Mothers of Evil deserve their own page. Maybe Lord Darkthorne and SSS should be given their own pages as well, dunno. What do you think?

And anyways, what are your thoughts on the villainesses?
>> No. 49896
>>49892
I approve of everything in greentext in this post.

I also had an idea for Loudspeaker. How about, when she uses her powers, her mouth gets cartoonishly huge/tall, like in the old Tex Avery cartoons?

Also, I think we need to work on redesigning Cat Lady. A good starting point would, in my opinion, be giving her cat eyes.
>> No. 49897
>>49892
How about Phero-Mona looks Asian, but isn't Chinese? Keep her Welsh, but have her be e.g. 1/4 Vietnamese or smth. That way, she can keep her "ancient Chinese" front, and we need more Asian chars anyway. And her husband, Gregory Wong, may be e.g. 1/2 Chinese
>> No. 49898
>>49892
Scriptfag here, I edited my Mrs. Evil script to account for the change in her real name. Same Dropbox link.

Still looking for criticism on all of my scripts, guys!
>> No. 49900
Okay, finally got some free time to read the solo scripts.
All in all, I like them, they're fun and well-paced, and written very well!
I can give some minor suggestions, but you may disregard them if you wish.

STAR-STRIKER SOLO
>4.4-4.5
Now that Mrs. Evil has been given a more silly personality, how about Beverly thinks: "'So much trouble'? Hmph! Buzz really needs to brush up on his superhero history" or smth like that. Mrs.Evil still is a major and persistant enemy, but she's not super dangerous.
>8.2 & 8.5
Maybe break the text in a different way: "You [...] dressed..." "...like THIS!" It's kinda confusing the way it's broken up now.
>9.3
Maybe have the cops be Eric and Corazon Cortez, so they would get established before the Diva solo.
>9.5
"Not succeed". Well, Betsy is pretty successful already, she's the head cheerleader after all. Maybe word it a bit differently, e.g., "crush her dreams" or smth like that.
>10.1
Maybe have the announcer mention a part of Seductra's name (e.g., "Alexandra Du--"), to establish continuity.
>10.4
Maybe Steve's dialogue is a bit stiff here. How about he says smth like "Wow! Looks like Star-Striker's back for good!" "Mmm" "I'm glad she's gonna protect our city again. Aren't you, honey?" and then have him ask "Honey?" once more in 11.1, to which she replies "I'm going to bed". Or maybe it's just me, disregard it then.
>10.4
Also, I think "What is he--" is superfluous here.
>10.6
I'd suggest phrasing the first caption like "...get EXCITED over her?!" That way, the first time she means "excited" in the "happy and interested" sense, and the second time in the "sexually aroused" sense.
Also, maybe simplify the second phrase, to "He can't look AWAY from that toned BODY prancing around in those tight SHORTS!"
As above, it may be just me, if so disregard.
>11.1
"HUSSY superheroes". Sounds a bit weird, maybe "SCANTILY-CLAD superheroines"?
>12.1
Mrs.Evil's description (and the scene in general) needs some minor tweaking to reflect the recent changes (e.g., no whip, Evil Boy isn't giddy but rather bored or embarrassed, more giggles, etc.)
>13.1
"Servant". It's a bit weird, especially if she wants to entice her son to become interested in supervillainy. Maybe "sidekick"?
>15.4
"The European Dreams". Oh, so that's the Euromoms' official name?

(cont. with Diva solo)
>> No. 49901
DIVA SOLO
>3.4-3.5
"You suckas" - "Y'all suckas" - too similar, one needs to be changed.
>4.1
"Single". Maybe he's a widower? We have no widow(er)s that I can remember, and a gritty grizzled cop may be a fitting character to be one.
>5
Corazon Cortez needs to appear somewhere in the background, maybe even give her a line.
>7.4
Maybe simplify the last two sentences, so that "truth" won't appear 3 times. E.g., like this: "I wish I could tell Keiichi the truth..." "The truth that my MOM... is secretly the superhero known as DIVA!"
>8.4
The second sentence needs to be removed or tweaked to fit the timeline: all kids were born after Teen Queens broke up. Maybe she gets suspicious when she learns that Candy mysteriously got her voice back the same year the voice-powered Diva appeared on the superhero scene?

(cont. with Mend)
>> No. 49902
>>49894
When it's a group page where the members on it don't have enough info to merit them having their own individual pages, usually they just don't have stat boxes.
>> No. 49903
>>49901
>The second sentence needs to be removed or tweaked to fit the timeline
I've actually already changed that and updated it in my Dropbox folder as of last week.
>> No. 49904
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49904
>>49896
This was the most recent version of Cat Lady that I had attempted.
>> No. 49905
Also, seeing that anon's version of yoga Tropica is continuing to make me feel incredibly weird to see variations of something I designed (even if it was only put a character already designed in different clothes). It's fun to be part of a project.
>> No. 49906
>>49900
>>49901
Made some edits to those two scripts, the Dropbox files have been updated (same links).

And yes, the European Dreams is what I decided to call the Euromoms. Since they never retired, I don't think they should have ever changed their name.
>> No. 49907
JMD, if you're reading this, might I humbly request yoga Supermoms?
>>49774
>>49775
>>49778
>>49742
>>49770
>>49772
>> No. 49908
MEND SOLO
>4.4
Where's Donald speaking from, if the panel's showing the twins and a semi-opened door with Mend's face in the crack?
>16.4
Again, maybe these police officers are Eric and Corazon Cortez.

(cont. with Kaiju's story)
>> No. 49909
>>49908
>Where's Donald speaking from
Well, it does say (O.P.) so I thought it was obvious he was behind the door.
>> No. 49910
>>49903
Oops, probably was reading an older version. Disregard that, then.
>>49906
Read them - nothing more to say, they're very good! Maybe the part where the word "truth" is repeated 3 times (Diva story) still needs tweaking.
>>49909
Oh, seems like I missed it, sorry.
>> No. 49911
>>49907
Someone (not necessarily JMD if he doesn't want to) needs to draw more of the moms in work/everyday clothes, too
>Beverly in office clothes
>Anne-Marie in a "Kiss the cook" apron
>Kim in traditional Japanese clothes
>Kim again in lab coat with a "MILF" badge
>Sigrun in her teacher clothes
>> No. 49912
>>49908
Aaaaaaaaaand Mend script updated in Dropbox.
>> No. 49913
File 139388914396.jpg - (106.83KB , 621x768 , kaiju-casual2.jpg )
49913
>>49911
Not a lab coat, but still.
>> No. 49914
>>49912
Great! Nothing else to say.

KAIJU SOLO
>2-3
A "Daikaiju!" shout should be incorporated here somewhere.
>5
Again, maybe some of the cops here are Eric and Corazon. Maybe they're in the background, with the gawking married cop being the main talking character here.
>7.1
Do middle class punk black girls say "Yo"? I thought it's a ghetto thing?
>8.1
Maybe needs a "Soon..." text block or something, to show that time has passed. Currently, it kinda looks like she just took her daughter and shoved her into this room.

(cont. with Sig Rune solo)
>> No. 49915
>>49913
I think Kim should wear her hair like that normally, and then wear her hair in the bun-style only when she's in costume.
>> No. 49916
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49916
>> No. 49917
>>49916
Now I want to see a drawfag's take on this.

Apron only.
>> No. 49918
SIG RUNE SOLO
>1.4
"Hubby number SIX". I'd expect this number to be much higher. If she started at 18, and she's near 40 now, she theoretically could've had a new husband every couple of years. That makes ~10-11 ex-husbands.
>6.2
"Battle training???" But Sigrun said "combat training", would make sense for Betsy to repeat that.
>7.2
Again, cops, Eric & Corazon, the works. As in the Kaiju story, they may be somewhere in the background, just among the other cops.
>8.1
She doesn't have the scarf in the designs, so maybe it should be removed. Or are the designs non-canon yet?
>12.3 & 12.4
Maybe these two panels should switch places, for better pacing
>> No. 49919
>>49917
>Apron only.
THIS.
May go into the /pco/ thread, though.
>> No. 49920
>>49914
>>49918
Kaiju and Sig Rune solo scripts updated.
>> No. 49921
TROPICA SOLO
>3.4
"He IS cute, too! If I were YOUNGER and not married to a wonderful MAN..." Don't know about this. Tropica is very faithful to Juan, and has no feelings towards other men she flirts with. Now, in real life, of course, a faithful woman may have thoughts like this, and it's nothing out of ordinary. But in our story, coupled with Tropica's heavy flirting, it may confuse the reader - e.g., make him think she's having second thoughts or smth. Also, I think Tropica would be the last person to worry about the age difference. Maybe phrase it a bit differently?
>4.3-4.5
It happens a bit silently and abruptly. Maybe have her verbally reprimand Juan, only to end it in a passionate kiss?
>13.2
Who was the first silhouette? Ms. Goldbeetle?
>13
By the way, this story is a bit small (13 pages) compared to the other Supermom-centric solos. Maybe add 5 more pages of Tropica interacting with her family (daughters, maybe) or other Supermoms?
>> No. 49922
>>49920
Everything's fine! (Just need to remove the superfluous "You--" in 12.3 - the pacing would be better if the "WHAMM!!!" happened right after "...STERNER--")
>> No. 49923
>>49921
Yeah, I wanted to fill it out with Carmen interacting with her family but I totally ran out of ideas.
>> No. 49924
File 139389934514.jpg - (150.93KB , 621x768 , sigrune-swim.jpg )
49924
Sig Rune swimsuit, anyone?
>> No. 49925
>>49924
Seems kind of...basic, don't you think?
>> No. 49926
MRS.EVIL SOLO
>7.5
It's weird that the first person she thinks of is her son. Why not her husband? Why not be satisfied with just the henchmen?
There needs to be some logic in her actions. Maybe she's thinking along the lines of "I can't wait until the henchmen arrive, I need to start building my superweapons stat, but I need help... who can I ask?" and at that moment her son arrives. Maybe she first thinks "Napoleon? No, (some explanation why not)". Maybe she's just very attached to her son and thinks smth along the lines of "Ah! I'm sure little TOMMIE will be glad to help his MOMMIE~"
>9.2
"Betsy Banks is into me". You sure about this? Wouldn't it be best for the relationship to build up somehow? Maybe he's into her, but she doesn't notice anything aside her various careers and superhero ambitions. Or maybe she's actually into him for some reason (it needs to be explored why), but he just can't notice or acknowledge it (maybe he's too self-centered, or maybe he thinks a 10/10 like her won't go after him, or maybe he hates her for some reason, or I don't know). Anyways, I think a relationship featuring one of the main secondary characters (Betsy) definitely requires some build-up through the series.
>12.2
"Mrs. Evil gets on one knee". This is weird. Why does she do that?
>13.4
"After all, you aren't exactly a "Ms." anymore..." I thought "Ms." (unlike "Miss") can be used for married women as well? Maybe her teenage name was "Miss Evil"?
>14.2
Could be funny if Evil Boy's mom picked a very embarrassing costume for him, smth a la Robin. Of course, his reaction would be not as gleeful.
>15.1
What if Mrs.Evil, panicking, tells Evil Boy "Quick! Let's hide the EVIDENCE – take off our supervillain COSTUMES!" not realizing that means undressing in the same room as her son? Or would that be too lewd?
By the way, I'd suggest Mrs.Evil/Evil Boy interactions could profit from some light totally-not-incestuous allusions, the same as we do with Sigrun and her totally-not-lesbian reactions to Olivia and women in general. Just little gags here and there, like Evil Boy getting his face accidentally shoved into Mrs.Evil's cleavage, etc. But I don't know if other anons agree, or maybe they think it's too lewd and weird for this. So, I'd like some input on this.
>15.5
"We see Thomas heading for his and Evelyn's bedroom". It's Napoleon, not Thomas, Mr.Freud!
>> No. 49927
>>49924
I still support: >>48809

>Star-Striker
average bikini with an American flag pattern
>Sigrun
white bandeau bikini
>Diva
yellow bikini with boyshorts bottom
>Mend
flower-patterned side-tie bikini
>Kaiju
conservative one-piece
>Tropica
micro-bikini
>Olivia Les Bien
topless
>> No. 49928
>>49925
Probably. I think, given how overboard the superhero costumes are, you would want to make the ordinary outfits, even swimsuits, seem ordinary. I was imagining proper swimsuits as opposed to say, exotic dancer bikinis and the like?

You're not right, however.
>> No. 49929
>>49927
Diva needs something different (at least a different color), to not follow her costume too closely.

But I agree with a simple white bandeau for Sig Rune, given her style and stature (and the average size of her breasts). Also, needs a giant white sun hat (you know the type) and sunglasses.
>> No. 49930
>>49927
Oh, I forgot all about that list. I'll give it a shot.
>> No. 49931
>>49927
Tropica's bikini should be one of those V-shaped deals.
>> No. 49932
>>49927
>>49929
I'd give Diva what's written by Mend:
>flower-patterned side-tie bikini
As for Mend herself, she would do better with boyshorts, especially as an ex-tomboy it would suit her. What color, though... definitely not white (as it would look too similar to her costume)
>> No. 49933
>>49931
A sling bikini? YESSSSSSSSSSSS
>> No. 49934
>>49933
>>49932
>>49931
>>49930
>>49929
>>49928
>>49927
So, the fixed list would be:
>Star-Striker
average bikini with an American flag pattern
>Sig Rune
white bandeau bikini
>Diva
flower-patterned side-tie bikini
>Mend
(color? not white) bikini with boyshorts bottom
>Kaiju
conservative one-piece (color?)
>Tropica
sling bikini (color? maybe purple)
>> No. 49935
>>49934
>Mend
Maybe green?
>Kaiju
Some dark color, e.g. dark blue or dark gray
>Tropica
Purple would work fine
>> No. 49937
How about favorite underwear? My take:

>Bev
Very sexy lacy red underwear (the wiki states she loves shopping for expensive lingerie)
>Kim
Conservative white bra and blue-white striped panties (as seen in the 1st issue)
>Carmen
Black lacy bra and thong
>Anne-Marie
Grey boyshorts and sports bra, hardcore tomboy style
>Candy
Some generic, but bright colored bra and panties
>Sig Rune
UNDERWEAR IS FOR THE WEAK
>> No. 49938
>>49926
Updated the Mrs. Evil script. I left out the incest references because I want to see what other people think of that idea. It's still kind of hinted at in the word choice in a few lines of dialogue, but not super heavily.
>> No. 49939
>>49938
Everything seems to be fine! What about the Tropica solo?

So, we need input from all anons on the following question:
>Should the Mrs.Evil/Evil Boy interactions have slight gags and hints of a totally-not-incestuous kind (like with Sigrun and lesbianism)?

also, another question I'd like to ask everyone:
>Maybe Mrs.Evil's teen name should be "Miss Evil" rather than "Ms.Evil" (as it would make a bit more sense to change to "Mrs.Evil")?
>> No. 49940
>>49939
For the Tropica solo, I'm looking for input from you guys as to what sort of family interactions I should have in there to lengthen the issue.
>> No. 49941
>>49940
I don't know what exactly, but I'd suggest a scene that showcases her other family members (her children, especially Maria and Yolanda, and maybe even Mami, the muy caliente not-quite-old-yet Grandma)
>> No. 49942
for some reason I am having the hardest time trying to post

anyways I drew up a full-body front-view template for that helpful anon to use
http://i.imgur.com/5rp5CkX.png

thoughts?
>> No. 49943
Mothers of Evil: What we need to think about:

>"Ms.Evil" or "Miss Evil"

>Loudspeaker's job
>Stan Vale's job
>Loudspeaker and family's apperance. Especially their daughters'. I don't think we could tolerate 2 more blonde cheerleaders. What if they're Italian American and have Italian features inb4 guidos? What if they're Jewish American and have dark curly hair? Or Polish (Stanislaw Walewski?), or Indian... Let's think about it.

>Need consensus on Iron Maiden and daughter's unit designations. I propose: BA85-1.0E for IM and BA85-2.0E for daughter. It could mean "Battle Android 85 version 1.0 Evil" which is logical enough and corny enough for the tone of our project. "BA85" – that's where IM gets her name from ("Babs"; maybe that's how the scientist who created her nicknamed her). "2.0E" – her daughter is obviously just the upgraded version of her (more miniaturized, more sleek, more streamlined, more deadly!). Thus, it would make sense that IM is v1.0 and her daughter is v2.0 of the same hardware. The daughter gets her name "Zoe" from "2.0E". Remember, they're robots, they can't create anything (including names) that hasn't been created by humans. As for "Bushnell", I suggest it's the name of the roboticist who created Babs. So she took his name as his "daughter".
>Btw, about Dr.Bushnell. How about this for a story? Dr.Bushnell was the lead scientist of the whole scientific branch of MILF, a world-reknowned roboticist. For added drama, we can make him Kim's teacher at the university, and the man she admires and respects (a guru, a sensei). Under L.Drakethorpe's orders, he works on a super secret project – BA85-1.0E (Kim doesn't work on this project and doesn't even know about it). Something goes wrong (or maybe right, considering the battle android is designated as "Evil"), and Dr.Bushnell is seriously injured. Being a ruthless pragmaticist CEO (and a supervillain boss), L.Drakethorpe just orders to split the scientific branch into several parts, assigning Kim (as Dr.Bushnell's "second-in-command" and the best qualified scientist there) to lead all non-secret (and non-evil) projects, while the secret division is now led by a mysterious female scientist – who's actually the robot Dr.Bushnell created (and was maimed by!). What do you think?
>Daughter's name. I suggest "IIron Maiiden". Would be a play on how the version number is often played with in software/hardware names, and also on the fact that the Bushnells don't really understand how human language works. Later, they could get a cute little girl-sized but super-deadly v3.0E who would be called IIIron Maiiiden
>IM and daughter's designs. I'm no good at drawing robots, sadly, but I have some ideas that may be useful (of course, that's for the artists and other anons to choose). IM, being v1.0, should be bigger, and more "clunky" (meaning her ass and breasts would look "not quite aerodynamic" – i.e. prominent). Zoe, being the more advanced v2.0, would be smaller (miniaturized), and her design would be sleek and streamlined (meaning, a small ass and a DFC). Zoe would also be the deadlier of the two. Also, in Corndog's great drawing of IM, she has 2 "horns" on her head. How about, the number of "horns" signifies the robot's version? Thus, IM would have 1 "horn" and Zoe would have 2 "horns"

>Not quite sure Ms. Goldbeetle should have kids. They have no value after all, why would she get them from the former husbands? She strikes me as an egotistical sociopath who doesn't really like any people save herself, kids included.

>Hot Flash: Everything. Her job, her family. We know almost nothing about the woman!

>Loudspeaker, Phero-Mona. Too many daughters, maybe? Or maybe, we can never have too many daughters? Need input on this
>> No. 49945
Edited the first half of "Fans". The Celtx and HTML files should be available at the same links, listed on the Supermoms wiki page.

Working on the second half now; would like to hear your input on the first half in the meantime.
Especially need some HELP with comic-style word EMPHASIS.
>> No. 49946
>>49942
Wasn't expecting gifts. I'll see what I can do with this.
>> No. 49947
File 139395528811.png - (542.43KB , 2400x1277 , 000.png )
49947
>>49946
>>49942
Hey, found this in a different thread (a /pco/ thread full of sexy Sue Storm x T'Challa writefaggotry, btw)
Maybe this template can be of use to the esteemed Supermom drawfags?
>> No. 49948
>>49943
I gave Ms. Goldbeetle kids (although we could change it to just one - perhaps her kid from her FIRST marriage, when she was still figuring out her scheme) so her being part of a group called the Mothers of Evil made sense.

As for the Iron Maiden idea, I'm fine with it, but the way you word it it sounds like Zoe will be Iron Maiden's sidekick or something, and I'd prefer her to just be a "normal" character (as normal as a robot masquerading as a human teenager could be). I don't see one horn on Iron Maiden looking good. I'm thinking maybe her daughter doesn't have any horns, being more streamlined than her predecessor.

As far as Loudspeaker's kids, she needs at least one bratty, stuck-up daughter who's the captain of the cheerleading squad at SCMS.
>> No. 49950
File 139396178869.jpg - (120.02KB , 454x768 , sigrune-swim.jpg )
49950
Alright, tried Corndog's template. A little deadeyed, and I need to make room up top to get all the hair in, but I think it works.
>> No. 49951
>>49948
>so her being part of a group called the Mothers of Evil made sense.
Ah, I see. How about her kid is a girl who follows in her mother's footsteps? Basically, a bitchy popular girl, always surrounded by a throng of enamored boys willing to fulfill her every wish, and she just blatantly uses them. The only boys of roughly her age resistant to her charms are Keiichi (but Shaundra doesn't know this at first, leading to some slight drama), and maybe Alexander. She becomes Betsy's enemy, partly due to her starting to overshadow Betsy's popularity (she just moved into Sapphire City with her mother, so she just joined Betsy's class), partly due to her winning over Thomas Evelle's affections (leading to both girls often fighting over the potential sidek-- er, boyfriend).
Or maybe it could be a boy who's popular with the girls in a similar way, dunno

>the way you word it it sounds like Zoe will be Iron Maiden's sidekick or something, and I'd prefer her to just be a "normal" character (as normal as a robot masquerading as a human teenager could be)
Ah, okay. Then she wouldn't need the "IIron Maiiden" name at all.
But... I'd like her to show up sometimes in her metal form, when could this happen if she's not a villain/hero?

>I don't see one horn on Iron Maiden looking good. I'm thinking maybe her daughter doesn't have any horns, being more streamlined than her predecessor.
That works, too. Or maybe her "horns" are more streamlined than IM's?
I'm kinda wary about the dual horns on IM because they make her look kinda demonic, and there's no apparent reason for that. Maybe position them a bit differently, or give her 3 horns?

>As far as Loudspeaker's kids, she needs at least one bratty, stuck-up daughter who's the captain of the cheerleading squad at SCMS.
Okay, we should inventarize our teenage girls. Let's see:
>Betsy Banks, 14, blonde, head cheerleader
>Shaundra LaBelle, 16, black, delinquent
>Maria Delacruz, 14, Latina brunette, soccer captain
>Yolanda Delacruz, 12, Latina brunette, shy nerdette
>Zoe Bushnell, ???, ???, "normal girl"
>Donna Darling, 14, ???, popular girl
>Sara Vale, ???, ???, cheerleader
>Ashley Vale, ???, ???, cheerleader
>Gwyneth Wong, ???, ???, ???
>Meaghan Wong, ???, ???, ???
We need to determine the ages, appearances and roles of these teenage girls. Maybe some need to be scrapped?
>> No. 49952
>>49951
>I'd like her to show up sometimes in her metal form, when could this happen if she's not a villain/hero?
Well, I had the idea earlier of whenever her and her mother are alone, they take off their human disguises (although Zoe wants to keep hers on, much to her mother's dismay), and how about while Zoe subsists off of oil, she can "eat" human food, in order to appear "normal," but the food just gets stored inside her body somewhere and she has to take off her human disguise in order to take it out? That way we could do some secret identity psychology with her too. Maybe there could also be scenes where Alexander and Zoe are talking on the phone and when it cuts to Zoe she's not wearing her human disguise?
>> No. 49953
File 139396342656.jpg - (131.22KB , 454x900 , starstriker-swim.jpg )
49953
And... a Star-Striker swimsuit.
>> No. 49954
File 139396421323.png - (159.37KB , 1420x2401 , template.png )
49954
>>49950
>>49942
No offence to Corndog (whose Supermom drawing I like a lot!), but this template feels a bit weird, especially in the pelvis area. Here's my humble attempt at tweaking it
>> No. 49955
>>49954
*drawings
>> No. 49956
File 139396452431.jpg - (149.38KB , 686x469 , number.jpg )
49956
>>49954
In terms of the Supermom stuff, it doesn't fit the body types they're actually drawn in, but it's pretty solid for anything else I want to template.

I'll get use out of it. That peach one? You wouldn't believe how many of those I've made.
>> No. 49957
File 139396562612.jpg - (344.40KB , 1420x2401 , bev.jpg )
49957
Tried drawing a Bev with the tweaked template >>49954
>> No. 49958
File 139396698636.jpg - (334.02KB , 1420x2401 , siggy.jpg )
49958
>>49957
And a bored Siggy
>> No. 49959
File 139396703217.jpg - (129.38KB , 454x900 , diva-swim.jpg )
49959
Still using the skinnier one, but here's a Diva attempt.
>> No. 49960
File 139396817956.jpg - (293.39KB , 1420x2401 , kimmie.jpg )
49960
Can't forget about the shy conservative Kimmie
>> No. 49961
>>49954
>No offence to Corndog

None taken - thanks for improving on the template!
>> No. 49962
File 139397012347.jpg - (374.48KB , 1420x2401 , candy.jpg )
49962
My take on the charming Candy
>> No. 49963
>>49962
http://www.dolldivine.com/erte-elegance-art-deco-fashion.php

you can also use this help with character designs too
>> No. 49964
File 139397153040.jpg - (367.18KB , 1420x2401 , nan.jpg )
49964
The cutest one, Anne-Marie
>> No. 49965
I don't think we should be posting templates on the wiki. I think we're oversaturating that site.
>> No. 49967
>>49965
If you manage to get some kind of general agreement on which pics you'd like deleted, then let me know.

Right now I'm just letting you guys do your own thing on the wiki since this isn't one of the projects I'm all that well versed in yet.
>> No. 49968
File 139397364079.jpg - (393.70KB , 1420x2401 , carmen.jpg )
49968
And of course
>> No. 49969
>>49967
Thanks! Please, if you feel we're doing something wrong or overstepping our bounds, let us know by posting here!

>>49965
I would suggest making thematic collages out of them, a la >>49502
E.g., all Supermoms in supercostumes, all Supermoms in casual clothes, all Supermoms in work clothes, all Supermoms in swimsuits etc. Or all Mothers of Evil. Another way could be one collage for each character: e.g., all Mend's costumes, all Diva's costumes etc.
That way, there wouldn't be too much of them, and we can still preserve the designs (and let the people browsing the wiki know about them)

Mr. Wiki Guy, what do you think about this idea?
>> No. 49970
For the bikini thing, I was under the impression that the Supermoms have different bikinis in their civilian identities and "costume" bikinis, that they wear with their masks (or lack of, in Sig Rune's case). These recent templates are kind of confusing to me because I'm seeing costume bikinis mixed with a lack of disguise.
>> No. 49971
>>49969
Yeah, group them up in collages like that.

You guys seem to have a pretty stable flow of pics coming in right now so you shouldn't need to rely on templates for visual content.
>> No. 49972
File 139397518433.jpg?nsfw - (170.76KB , 768x1000 , star-striker 13.jpg?nsfw )
49972
Just saw this, from the same guy who drew >>49886 and >>49887. Spoilered due to being slightly lewd.
>> No. 49973
>>49971
Thanks, we'll do that then!
I think we can soon get rid of the "Supermoms in superhero costumes" templates altogether, seeing as we get a lot of drawings of that matter already.

>>49972
You villain! Posting a pic like this, and not posting sauce!

Btw, Mr. Wiki Guy, would you allow us to post a pic like >>49972 on the wiki? On one hand, nipples are covered, on the other hand, there are areolas...
>> No. 49974
>>49970
Well, these all (maybe except Star-Striker) seem to be "civilian" bikinis. I think, yeah, Star-Striker needs to change.
>> No. 49975
>>49974
I was under the impression the sling style of bikini was Tropica's costume bikini style.
>> No. 49976
>>49973
Here's the guy's Tumblr. Warning: it's full of NSFW stuff.

http://chogorimountain.tumblr.com/
>> No. 49977
>>49975
Ah, maybe. What was her civilian bikini, though?

And btw, what could Bev's civilian bikini look like?
>> No. 49978
>>49977
I'm thinking all of their civilian bikinis should be much more modest than their costume bikinis, but beyond that I've got nothing.
>> No. 49979
>>49976
Damn! How can I compliment this guy more? I love his versions of the Supermoms!
>> No. 49980
>>49977
Really anything other than pushing the whole MERICAMERICA thing. That's why I tried to avoid doing that. If you want their look to steer away from their hero looks, then certainly for Star Striker we just stay away from blatantly USAUSA. Do red, white, or blue, but in different combos. Stars or Stripes, but not both. That sorta thing.
>> No. 49981
>>49979
You can thank him on Tumblr, maybe encourage him to draw more Supermoms art.
>> No. 49982
>>49973
I haven't set any rules about SFW and NSFW content on the wiki.

No one ever bothered to brief me on it when I became the admin so I've just been going on the assumption that the wiki is SFW.

Then there's wikia as a whole, I don't know what their policies on the subject are and global wikia site moderators/admins have a lot more power than just local wikia admins/creators.

Just use your best judgment and if it comes back to bite us, we can deal with it then. Or I'll deal with it then. Or someone somewhere will probably deal with it then.
>> No. 49983
File 139398041868.jpg - (405.31KB , 1420x2401 , bev_civ.jpg )
49983
>>49978
>>49980
Like this? [1 of 2]
>> No. 49984
>>49983
Precisely.

I'm gonna give a swing at these again, but you've got it on lock for the moment. :P
>> No. 49985
File 139398073560.jpg - (406.13KB , 1420x2401 , bev_cost.jpg )
49985
>>49983
[2 of 2]
>> No. 49986
>>49982
I see...
Let me phrase it this way: I would like to post this pic on the wiki. Do you think I need to shoop away the areolas, or would it be fine to post it just as it is? What would you suggest?
>> No. 49987
File 139398176688.jpg - (180.85KB , 621x768 , goldbeetle-swim.jpg )
49987
Oh, I forgot that I made this Goldbeetle swimsuit.
>> No. 49988
>>49987
That made me wonder what would a swimsuit version of Ms. Goldbeetle's costume look like? Because, for the swimsuit issue, the heroes AND villains would all be in swimsuit versions of their regular costumes.
>> No. 49989
File 139398245618.jpg - (417.26KB , 1420x2401 , kimmie_cost.jpg )
49989
Imagining a skimpier version of Kim's costume is a tough task

The contrast between her "civilian" swimsuit and this looks really lewd
>> No. 49990
>>49986
You could probably get away with uploading it.
>> No. 49991
>>49989
I like it!
>> No. 49992
File 139398267828.jpg - (357.79KB , 1420x2401 , kimmie_costedit.jpg )
49992
>>49989
a couple tweaks
>> No. 49993
>>49989
I think her in-costume hairstyle should still be there, though, rather than having her hair let down or in the down-pointing bun from her civilian identity.
>> No. 49994
>>49981
But I have no Tumblr ;_;
I have no Tumblr and I must post

Anyone here has a tumblr? Could you please compliment that guy for me, so that he'll draw more Supermoms?
>> No. 49995
File 139398372896.jpg - (384.89KB , 1420x2401 , kimmie_costeditedit.jpg )
49995
>>49993
Like this?
This kinda makes it looks like just a skimpy version of the costume, instead of a skimpy costume-based swimsuit
>> No. 49996
>>49995
Hmm, maybe you're right.
>> No. 49997
File 139398495528.jpg - (374.75KB , 1420x2401 , bev_yoga.jpg )
49997
Bev after a hard workout session
>> No. 49998
File 139398803410.jpg - (373.88KB , 1420x2401 , nan_civ.jpg )
49998
New "civilian" swimsuit for Anne-Marie
>> No. 49999
File 139398844351.jpg - (376.50KB , 1420x2401 , nan_cost.jpg )
49999
>>49998
And the "costume" one
>> No. 50000
>>49999
>not muh Mend's mask's eyes
>> No. 50001
File 139398941924.jpg - (373.11KB , 1420x2401 , nan_costedit.jpg )
50001
>>50000
You mean this? I thought it's not canon

Also, nice quads
>> No. 50002
>>50001
It became canon the second JMD drew it so well. I like how unique it is compared to the other moms' masks.
>> No. 50003
>>50002
Yeah, but we need a logical reason for it looking like that.
I remember suggesting that it's an actual blindfold that gives Mend some kind of extra illness sense, but anons didn't like it.
Let's try to come up with other explanations!
>> No. 50004
>>50003
>we need a logical reason for it looking like that
We do???
>> No. 50005
>>50004
Well, it's different from the other masks. We should explain why, it would make viewers curious
>> No. 50006
I thought the idea was that it worked like Robin's mask, Batman's cowl, or the Ninja Turtles' bandannas - that is, it moves with the brow and eyes to convey expressions because it's a cartoon
>> No. 50011
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50011
"Costume" bikini for Siggy
>> No. 50012
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50012
Btw, noticed that Siggy looks nice with white hair. How about it, anons? Or too Frozen for our tastes?
>> No. 50013
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50013
Evelyn.

Being a good girl (well, actually a bad girl, but you get the point), Evelyn has packed a very prudish swimsuit for her beach adventure... too bad the absentminded MILF totally forgot the top! Now the poor Evil Boy has to spend the entire superhero-villain battle trying to cover his mother's naked breasts with any object at hand
>> No. 50014
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>>50013
Okay, okay, a less risque variant.

Lucklily, Evelyn has found some skull-shaped pasties that she wanted to use on her costume and accessories! Now Evil Boy can look at his mother's breasts without being embarrassed!
>> No. 50015
File 139404263843.jpg - (314.35KB , 1420x2401 , evelyn_costdecentvar.jpg )
50015
>>50014
And a happier looking version
>> No. 50016
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50016
Candy's "costume" swimsuit
>> No. 50018
File 139406003480.jpg - (392.73KB , 1420x2401 , carmen_cost.jpg )
50018
Tweaked Carmen's "costume" swimsuit
>> No. 50019
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50019
>>50018
And this is her "civilian" swimsuit.
>> No. 50020
I was thinking about the villain designs we've come up with so far, and part of Ms. Goldbeetle's design really bugs me. You can see it here: >>49625, we don't really have anything for her legs. I was thinking her suit ends at the crotch in that v shape, and she wears high heeled boots in the same style as her suit that end in noticeable kneepads, with the rest of her legs bare. What do you guys think?
>> No. 50021
i've been out for a while doing my own stuff. i'm going to run through the scripts and do some editing on the ones already done. hammer something out.
>> No. 50022
>>50021
Good to have you back, man!
>> No. 50023
An artist called Whargleblargle drew a marvelous Star-Striker (here: >>155587)

Anyone know of other artists drawing Supermoms?
>> No. 50024
>>50023
Well, some guy from Tumblr drew >>49886 and >>49887 and >>49972, but I don't know if he's sticking around. JMD draws many Supermoms things, and Corndog is another artist I know of on the project, and there's doodleanon who draws stuff too.
>> No. 50026
In a /co/ thread about tropes, I saw some that could work pretty well for Supermoms. Just some fun tropes that could make for good comedy and light storytelling.

>the heroes don't realize they're fighting a villain and win anyway
>the villain thinks some kind of genius because of this
and
>Villain and Hero are evenly matched
>"There is only one way to settle this!"
>cut scene to them doing something mundane yet competitive

Any ideas?
>> No. 50027
>>50026
We could tie the second trope in with the beach episode where the Supermoms and the Mothers of Evil find themselves at a stalemate, and settle their differences with a game of (super) beach volleyball. The Supermoms win, of course.
>> No. 50030
>>50027
>The spectators win, of course
ftfy
Cue frequent wardrobe malfunctions on both sides...
>> No. 50032
Someone created a thread on /co/: http://boards.4chan.org/co/res/59607902

Let's discuss the timing beforehand next time, okay guys? I have to go now, looks like I'll miss it
>> No. 50033
>>50032
It's just the regular /coc/ weekend thread. One goes up every Friday.
>> No. 50034
I probably can do some drawings tonight - anything I oughta focus on?
>> No. 50035
>>50034
Any of the Mothers of Evil we've designed thus far. Ms. Goldbeetle or Mrs. Evil.
>> No. 50036
Ms. Goldbeetle it is, then. I played around with the design a bit - what do you think?
For some reason I can't upload images here anymore.
http://img3.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20140308050507/the-conservatory/images/9/9c/Goldbeetle_wiki.jpg

Incidentally, I think her name sounds better as just "Goldbeetle", without the Ms.
>> No. 50037
File 139425542164.jpg - (222.20KB , 1061x1000 , Goldbeetle.jpg )
50037
>>50036
testing upload
>> No. 50038
When should we start focusing on designing the male characters?
>> No. 50039
Wouldn't it make more sense to move any character data that's on (or will potentially be on) the Sapphire City page to the Supermoms Allies page?

Doesn't make much sense to have a location tagged with an alignment, genders, and characters.
Unless a location IS a character like a living city or a castle golem/giant.
>> No. 50040
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50040
>>49916
this did not turn out very well but w/e I'll post it anyway
>> No. 50041
>>50037
>>50040
Hey, great new art, Corndog!
>this did not turn out very well
I like it! She looks a bit like an Archie character turned MILF, which isn't a bad thing. Maybe the eyes and mouth are a bit too big

>>50039
The initial idea was this:
>Supermoms Villains: lists all characters with "evil" alignment (supervillains and non-powered crooks)
>Supermoms Allies: lists all secondary characters with "good" alignment (superheroes and policemen)
>Supermoms Civilians: lists all characters with "neutral" alignment (school staff, MILF employees, civilian neighbors, journalists etc)
>Sapphire City: about the location and its most notable places
I just decided to combine the latter two, to take less space on the wiki.
The problem is, the civilian characters aren't allies, they're neutral. E.g., the paranoid neighbor who searches for superheroes everywher or the school principal who doesn't like heroes – they're more like nuisances than "allies".

I would be happy to get your suggestions on this matter. Maybe I should split this page in two, as originally intended? One for civilians, one for the location

>>50038
We definitely should. The problem is, we don't have male templates, so visualisation is left to our drawfriends. Maybe we could start brainstorming them without pictures, and the drawfriends will join?
>> No. 50042
From the thread:

>That said, we need to design Hot Flash. All we know about her now is that she's ~55 years old but looks good. This isn't enough – e.g., Sinister Sorceress Seductra (picrelated) is also ~55 and also looks good. Ideas?

>How about there are 3 Hot Flashes?
>GMILF Hot Flash, ~55, looking good for her age
>MILF Hot Flash, ~35, member of Mothers of Evil
>Young Hot Flash, ~15, sidekick of MILF Hot Flash
>> No. 50043
>>50037
I think we need the "Ms." to differentiate her from the previous Goldbeetle, whose name and equipment she acquired.
>> No. 50044
>>50042
I think just one Hot Flash, 55, should suffice. The age is important since her powers come from a menopause-based origin. We do need to flesh her out more, though.
>> No. 50045
>>50037
Hmm, the bug eyes are new...I like them!
>> No. 50046
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50046
>>50041
Well I've got a few male templates for you and anyone else here can work with.
>> No. 50047
/r/ peach templates of:
>Beverly in casual clothes (the ones she wears around the house)
>Candy in stage clothes (I know she retired from her musical career, but maybe she still appears at charity concerts etc)
With these 2 peachtemplates, I could finish 2 more template collages for the wiki (Supermoms in casual clothes and Supermoms in work clothes)
>> No. 50048
>>50043
What if we went the Stilt-Man route and called her "Lady Goldbeetle"? "Ms" reminds me of "Mrs. Evil" too much.
>> No. 50049
>>50048
I'm down with that.
>> No. 50050
>>50048
>>50049
Me, too.
>> No. 50051
>>50047
Candy's stage costume should include roller skates and leopard pattern leggings
>> No. 50053
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50053
New Star-Striker pic from the /co/ thread
>> No. 50054
How about a supervillainess MILF who is unfaithful to her husband?
>> No. 50055
>>50041
I still haven't really worked out where miscellaneous characters should be put on the wiki.
It's never been that big of an issue before.

When a character doesn't have enough info to support having their own page or isn't part of a group I usually just end up not adding them because I don't know where to put them.

I have a backlog of several dozen characters from the Lovely Ladybug setting who aren't on the wiki because of this.
>> No. 50056
>>50055
I see.
Well, maybe I could put the more friendly neutrals on the "Allies" page and the less friendly ones (the paranoid nut, the society of concerned mothers, etc) on the "Villains" one. And the "Sapphire City" page could be scrapped altogether, with various info from it going onto other pages. Would that be okay?

If it's possible, it would be great if the "Allies" and "Villains" pages stay, since they contain a lot of creative input that could be lost otherwise. I think, there are some pages on the wiki that list several villains or minor heroes of a specific setting.
What do you say?

Also,
here's a list of pics that can be already deleted:
starstriker01x.jpg
diva01.jpg
kaiju01.jpg
sigrune02zz.jpg
tropica01.jpg
mend01xx.jpg
starstriker03.jpg
diva02.jpg
kaiju03.jpg
sigrune04z.jpg
tropica03.jpg
mend03.jpg
sigrune01x.jpg
sigrune03xx.jpg
These are peach templates that I have combined into collages.
>> No. 50057
>>50048
All right, went ahead and changed her name in the Sig Rune solo script I wrote. The Dropbox link is updated with the new version.
>> No. 50058
>>50056
The Sapphire City page is fine if it's a location that has some info you want to represent. It's kind of a mess right now by the looks of it though. Try using lists instead of just piling on more and more sub-sections if there isn't any extensive info on them.

This is just an issue that I've never had a reason to address before and now there is one.
Just another thing to add to the to-do list I guess: "make bugverse misc. character page" or something.

The pics are deleted now, added the other pic that wasn't in use to Diva's page.
>> No. 50059
>>50058
>The Sapphire City page is fine if it's a location that has some info you want to represent. It's kind of a mess right now by the looks of it though. Try using lists instead of just piling on more and more sub-sections if there isn't any extensive info on them.
I see. I'll try adding what info there is, and cleaning up the rest.

>"make bugverse misc. character page"
Actually, I'm rather interested in what other characters there are in the bugverse, Lovely Ladybug is an interesting character

>The pics are deleted now, added the other pic that wasn't in use to Diva's page.
Thank you! Actually, I think you can delete this Diva pic, too – there's a more recent version of Teen Diva in the Teen Queens group pic by the same artist.
>> No. 50060
Looks like that anon who shitposts in an effort to derail the project is in the weekend /coc/ thread talking about fetishes. Just ignore him.
>> No. 50061
>>50060
Yeah... I wonder, why is he doing that? Can't he find another thread that's more to his liking?
>> No. 50062
>>50061
He's doing it specifically to make everyone who works on Supermoms look bad by making us seem like we're hijacking the /coc/ thread. He also does stuff like make a bunch of pro-Supermoms posts in a row that come across as the project being forced on the board. Just ignore him.
>> No. 50063
If Corndog wanted to make a matching male template, I'd look into trying something. I kinda stopped for a little because that other guy running templates seemed to be doing a bang up job. It seems like templates are good way to get a look into where to go, but you all would appreciate proper art.
>> No. 50064
>>50063
Templater, could you please do this? >>50047
>> No. 50065
>>50059
The Justice Coalition and Fairy Kingdom make up the bulk of the other characters, but there's also roommates and family members of the cast. And drug dealing pimps.

The Evilverse sort of parallels a number of other /co/verses, so there's reverse morality/bizarro versions of a lot of them... which also aren't on the wiki yet.
Lovely Ladybug's parallel is the Mighty Goliath, an evil overlord type character who is very tall and male in contrast to bug being very short and female.

The Lovely Ladybug thread is over here >>40523
>> No. 50066
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>>50040
revised

>>50063
I might could do that later. What build and pose should I try?
>> No. 50067
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50067
>>50018
TOP GUN OST - KENNY LOGGINS "P…youtube thumb
>> No. 50068
>>50067
UNF
>> No. 50069
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50069
Tried my hand at the male template.
Here's the Superdads' cocky leader, Mr. Star-Striker
Maybe he needs a more jerk-ish haircut, I dunno
>> No. 50070
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50070
>>50069
Also, updated the male template a bit (added face, chest etc)
>> No. 50071
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50071
>>50069
Version with chest hair. Need your educated opinions on which one is better
>> No. 50072
>>50071
I don't know what makes good beefcake, hair or no hair, so I'm of no use here.
>> No. 50074
>>50066
The post should be probably be similar to the female one you made. As for build, I don't think it needs to be a bulky beefcake but probably not a skinny dude. I always figured when it came to templates, they're not gonna really ever be on model, so there's no point on trying to hit a specific look. Average, fit-ish dude, I guess.
>> No. 50075
>>50074
I think, at least for the Superdads, we should be using a bulky beefcake style for them since that would be the male equivalent to busty, curvy cheesecake.
>> No. 50076
>>50075
Maybe not go too nuts, but in that regard, sure.
>> No. 50077
>>50075
But some anon is already using this template for Superdads >>50070 >>50071 Whats the problem with it?
>> No. 50078
>>50077
Matching purposes for me, personally. Doesn't really matter *that* much, I suppose.
>> No. 50079
Okay, tempbanned from posting /co/ for a couple of days. Hope any of you guys are up to answering Supermom-related questions in the /co/ thread, should they arise?
>> No. 50080
Starstriker01w.jpg and Starstriker01w.png are effectively the same image

just an FYI
>> No. 50081
>>50080
Yes, starstriker01w.jpg and divateen01.jpg can be deleted.
>> No. 50083
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50083
JMD posted another cool Mend drawing
>> No. 50085
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>>50083
Also this sexy Star-Striker pic from another artist.

I'm tempbanned on /co/ atm so I can't comment in the /co/ thread, but I just wanna say, you rock guys!
>> No. 50088
Hey guys, how about you finish some of those pages you made?

No more "blahs" get the pages done before you give the assholes anymore shit to fling.
>> No. 50089
>>50088
Wiki guy here, I'll be glad for some help. Writing shit ain't easy, yo
I'm currently working on finishing the main six Supermoms' pages

As for the shit-flinger(s?), I suspect it's our old pal provocator troll, who still can't unrustle his jimmies over Supermoms' existence.
>> No. 50090
Guys, please stop arguing with the troll. Just ignore him
>> No. 50092
>>50089
Just do what I usually do then.

Look at all the info that exists and summarize it onto the page. You don't need to include the entire life story of a character on their page, just what is essential to their character.

Stories are best told in... actual stories.
>> No. 50093
>>50088
in most cases it seems that you could just delete all the "BLAH BLAH BLAH" - leaving the sentence fragments - and it would be fine as a placeholder.
>> No. 50094
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50094
Fuck yeah Bellend
>> No. 50096
Great thread, everyone
>> No. 50097
>>50096
I don't think we've reached image limit yet, so we're still not done here.
>> No. 50098
>>50097
Ah, I meant the /co/ one. This one will yet survive for a while, I think
>> No. 50099
>>50098
I don't think any thread has ever 404'd naturally on this board.

The next /co/ creations thread on /co/ proper should probably not be started with a Supermom's theme since it might run the risk of exhausting the topic or inciting something that'd consume the thread.

I was enjoying the crossover from a few threads ago when the Sageworthy Society invaded Sapphire City. That didn't get finished.
>> No. 50102
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50102
Tried to work the concept again on Cat Lady.
>> No. 50105
this isn't really important, but for any future scripts, some common errors i'm seeing in these:

>even if someone's identity is supposed to be a secret, don't call him "Mysterious Figure" or "First Dude". use his actual name. if he's meant to be mysterious because we can't see him, just tell the artist that in the script.

>only all-caps the character's FIRST mention, even if they're mentioned in other issues. if we end issue eight with Sigrun looking at something, then start issue nine with Sigrun looking at something again, SIGRUN, the first time, is all-caps.

>don't get bogged down with panel descriptions. only Alan Moore cares that much. this will save you enormous amounts of time.

>panel types are only for thought/speech/radio/etc. bubbles. don't use them for "sarcastic", "joking", and so on.

>leave as much to the artist as possible.

>be aware of how many panels you have on a page, and how many speech bubbles you have in a panel. for a splash page, it's okay to have ten bubbles, but for a page with eight panels, it will get very cluttered.

>for flashbacks, just write FLASHBACK (all-caps) before the descriptions of EACH flashback panel. even if it's two pages of flashbacks, they all have FLASHBACK on them.

>ALL-CAPS, while certainly KIRBY-ESQUE, can get TIRESOME if OVERDONE. i probably OVERDID THEM MYSELF in my first scripts. just something to CONSIDER.

also, i have my girlfriend doing some on-paper art for this. it's very good. different, less overtly lewd, more clothes. her Tropica and Kaiju, in particular. when she's got the set done, i'll scan them up.
>> No. 50106
i'm going in the order that they're on the wiki.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/hx232wp0qicmf94/supermoms%20prepare%20to%20meet%20fans%20first%20half%20EDIT.celtx
>> No. 50109
>>50105
>>50106
Yay! Garuda is back!

>i'm going in the order that they're on the wiki.
Wow. Now I'm humbled. It's so much better than it was! And I dig all the jokes you inserted, my version probably was really bland. Damn, I'm now nervous about finishing it, those are some big shoes to fill. But I'll try, probably quite soon, so maybe you could critique or even edit it as well! Would be swell! I'll definitely try to take your advice in consideration, it's very helpful.

>even if someone's identity is supposed to be a secret, don't call him "Mysterious Figure" or "First Dude". use his actual name. if he's meant to be mysterious because we can't see him, just tell the artist that in the script.
All right, I actually just wanted to make it a surprise for the anons in this thread, heh. But I think by now everybody's already deduced for my comments that the first dude is Lord Darkthorne
>>ALL-CAPS, while certainly KIRBY-ESQUE, can get TIRESOME if OVERDONE.
I actually have no clue how to write those caps highlights. I mostly tried to copy you guys, but I admit I'm a complete noob at doing them. Do we actually need them? What's the consensus?

>also, i have my girlfriend doing some on-paper art for this. it's very good. different, less overtly lewd, more clothes. her Tropica and Kaiju, in particular. when she's got the set done, i'll scan them up.
Great, I'm very intrigued! Can't wait! Is she doing standalone art pieces, or the comic issues?
>different, less overtly lewd, more clothes. her Tropica and Kaiju, in particular.
I just hope she doesn't totally forego the cheesecake premise, since it's one of its main points. But I guess, judging by your scripts, there's nothing to worry about here
>her Tropica and Kaiju, in particular.
Kaiju's costume is probably my least favorite among the Supermom costumes I designed, so I can't wait to see what she comes up with.
As for Tropica, she grows her own costume, so it's not like it's a stable design in-universe. And I think it's been gradually getting skimpier with each new artist, heh
>> No. 50111
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50111
Created new presentation collage
Added proper names and quick bios, so that people wouldn't waste thread space asking things like "Is she really called Ebony?" or "What's their powers"

...I think we all agree that we shouldn't start the new /coc/reations thread with Supermoms? And that if someone does it, it would be obviously not any one of us, but rather the provocator troll?
>> No. 50112
>>50111
I'm pretty sure the one who started the last /coc/ thread was that guy.

And for Tropica's description, just change it to "florist." It seems like too much, what's there now.
>> No. 50113
>>50111
Btw, how about this for a first post text to accompany this image?

-------------------------------------

In this thread, you can also discuss
SUPERMOMS
/co/created comic project about a team of MILF superheroines!

Plus4chan /coc/ thread: https://plus4chan.org/b/coc/res/48794.html
Main wiki page: http://the-conservatory.wikia.com/wiki/Supermoms

Comic issue scripts (currently looking for artists!):
*Issue 1: https://www.dropbox.com/s/yv4w712h7wafqx2/supermoms1.html
*Issue 2: https://www.dropbox.com/s/ow1ca87n68h4l8i/supermoms2.html
*Issue 3: https://www.dropbox.com/s/4rwibr7ow6929vi/supermoms3.html
*Issue 4?: https://www.dropbox.com/s/byhy47r7k9enh2i/fans_half.html (unfinished)
*Star-Striker Solo Issue 1: https://www.dropbox.com/s/5wpouc4z36dc584/starstriker1.html
*Diva Solo Issue 1: https://www.dropbox.com/s/1dlvyupzr0sz36a/diva1.html
*Mend Solo Issue 1: https://www.dropbox.com/s/qgz4rd97hqonyvw/mend1.html
*Kaiju Solo Issue 1: https://www.dropbox.com/s/962j6mkc202skxc/kaiju1.html
*Sig Rune Solo Issue 1: https://www.dropbox.com/s/xqir102ufoekc9s/sigrune1.html
*Tropica Solo Issue 1: https://www.dropbox.com/s/d7n9fg8ogijzkaf/tropica1.html (unfinished)
*Mrs. Evil Solo Issue 1 https://www.dropbox.com/s/2in3mu2nthj1jr5/mrsevil1.html

Also,
Plus4chan /pco/ thread (for lewd fanart/fanfiction): https://plus4chan.org/b/pco/res/151110.html
>> No. 50114
>>50113
Nah. Seems overbearing. Most people in the /coc/ thread already know what Supermoms is. I think if we go in posting like the /coc/ posters normally do we'll be fine. Don't make it a big deal.
>> No. 50115
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50115
>>50112
How about this?

>>50114
I dunno, every thread we get a lot of questions etc., which means not everyone yet knows what Supermoms are.
In any case, I think we should at least post the links to this thread, the /pco/ thread and the wiki page. As for script links... a lot of new people tend to think that the only thing our project has, is standalone drawings; scripts could make them we've got fleshed-out characters and stories
What do you think?
>> No. 50116
>>50115
I'd just direct any and all questions to the wiki.
>> No. 50117
>>50116
Get those wiki pages finished first.
>> No. 50118
I just wish we could have our own threads without the janitors deleting them onsight
>> No. 50119
>>50105
Sounds great, it's always nice to see alternate takes on costumes. I agree that Kaiju is probably the weakest design - interested to see what comes up!

>>50113
really I think only the /co/ and wikia links are necessary

you could also mention that there are scripts (if there's one spot - wiki or pastebin or whatever - where they are you can link that) but the massive block of links is probably too much
>> No. 50120
Okay, how about this text:

------------------------------------------------

Let's discuss
SUPERMOMS
a /co/created comic project
about a team of MILF superheroines
and their wacky adventures

Plus4chan /coc/ thread: https://plus4chan.org/b/coc/res/48794.html
Comic scripts (currently looking for artists!): http://pastebin.com/BrmvGgtU
Main wiki page: http://the-conservatory.wikia.com/wiki/Supermoms
>> No. 50121
>>50118
I'm more and more inclined to think it's just one janitor (Insp. Redwood maybe), who hates anything MILF-related. There's another /co/created cheesecake project called Breast Quest, and it gets threads daily without any problem
>> No. 50122
>>50120
No. We don't need to make a big deal about it. Just post a Supermoms pic and try to pick up where we left off. That's what the rest of that thread does.
>> No. 50123
>>50122
Why not the links, at least?
>> No. 50125
My suggestion: How about we center the Supermoms discussion in the next /co/ thread on the villains? Mothers of Evil, Lord Darkthorne, Sorceress Seductra, the one-time villains from the issue scripts, etc. We need to flesh them out more, and maybe we even get new art for them!
>> No. 50126
>>50125
Sure, let's just hope the discussion doesn't get sidetracked or deleted
>> No. 50127
The Provocator Troll is back again. He started yet another Supermom-themed thread with a mod-bashing post. Welp.
>> No. 50128
>>50127
>Supermom-themed OP post that we specifically decided not to do
>mod-bashing post
>first 4 posts are samefag strawman arguing
Classic.

What should we do about this situation?
>> No. 50129
Troll's "/coc/" thread: http://boards.4chan.org/co/res/59841877
New /coc/ thread: http://boards.4chan.org/co/res/59843159
Our actions? Should we try to post at the new thread, or attempt to make a Supermoms thread out of the trollthread?
>> No. 50130
>>50129
Give it a day before bringing it up in the new thread.

Let the dust settle a little.
>> No. 50131
He now self-bumps his own trollthread to not let it 404
>> No. 50133
Made a post in the new thread, get in there bros
>> No. 50135
So, nobody wants to discuss anymore? Pity
>> No. 50136
>>50135
Well the thread is dying anon.
>> No. 50137
>>50136
Which thread?
The /co/ thread currently has ~200 replies until autosage
And this thread won't die until we hit imagelimit
>> No. 50138
>>50135
I prefer just to discuss it in here honestly.
>> No. 50139
>>50138
Discussing it in /co/ can get us more interested anons and art
>> No. 50140
we should have a character who wears a jacket

and/or a scarf
>> No. 50141
so, is this it?
that's really sad, there was so much created
>> No. 50142
>>50141
Mentality like that is what kills projects.
Just because it isn't being talked about non-stop doesn't mean it's dead.

It's like the reason why /coc/ threads on /co/ only get made during the weekend, because we learned that by having a constant thread up people just got burned out and that it was important to take breaks.

I don't see any of the people who write stories or draw pics for this project saying anything about being done with it, so give the whining a rest and be patient.
>> No. 50143
Hm, BreastQuest just got another thread that wasn't deleted. Mods only cleared a few lewd pics and deleted some troll-related banter.

Maybe we should try making a Supermoms thread again?
>> No. 50144
>>50143
It's worth a try
>> No. 50145
>>50144
But when? Now or next weekend?
Maybe the latter would be better, given the negative amount of discussion in the last /coc/ thread?
>> No. 50146
>>50145
Either next weekend or sometime this week.
>> No. 50147
I was thinking of story ideas, and I was thinking about one of the original premises of this project, where we take everyday "mom" things and make them super somehow. Anyone got any ideas?
>> No. 50148
>>50147
Cleaning the house becomes fighting demons made of filth.

Driving to the store/work/wherever becomes a racing death course while dodging giant monsters.

Working an office job becomes like being in a knighthood with paper soldiers/monsters and office supplies as weapons.

Things like that?
>> No. 50149
>>50147
I had an idea where one of the moms has to spend the day running errands for her family, but just coincidentally all sorts of supervillain/disastrous things happen, and she has to suit up to stop it, all while keeping to her strict schedule. Like for example, Betsy Banks is attending weekend cheerleader practice, and Beverly has to pick her up right at 4:00, but on the way to the school, a supervillain attacks, and Star-Striker only has a short time to stop him/her before she's late.
>> No. 50150
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50150
>>50147
>>50148
>>50149
That's actually one of my favorite parts in this project! I remember there being some ideas, e.g. a PTA meeting where superheroes and supervillains would attend, or a visit from the in-laws. We should make a handy list of story ideas, methinks

I don't know if these "mundane" adventures should become the main point of the issues, or rather be something that goes on in the background?
>> No. 50154
>>50125
Speaking of villains, should we focus on designing the remaining male villains?
>> No. 50155
>>50154
Might as well since we got nothing else going on
>> No. 50158
>>50106
I've brought this up before, but I think the motorcycle Kaiju and Diva are riding in this script shouldn't be Keiichi's. It just doesn't seem in-character for Kim or Junichi to let their son have something as dangerous as a motorcycle. I had the idea that it's Kim's, but she keeps it a secret from her husband, showing that maybe she isn't quite so traditional Japanese conservative after all. What do you guys think?
>> No. 50160
>>50158
I don't think it's OOC. Maybe Junichi made a deal with Keiichi, like serious men of business they are. Keiichi get all A's, Junichi allowed him to buy a bike.

The other options feel a lot worse:
>Option A. It's Kim's secret bike
So, both Beverly and Kim have secret bikes? It's too repetitive. And while Bev's secret bike fits well with her superhero persona, it's of no use to Kaiju.
>Option B. It's Candy/Diva's bike
Why does Candy/Diva have a Japanese bike? It's not in-character for the lazy stay-at-home Candy, and it doesn't fit Diva's superhero style (she can ride on soundwaves, don't forget that).
>Option C. There is no bike, Neo
Than it means, this entire part of the script should be scrapped. I'm okay with this, but what to replace it with? While I think Keiichi having a bike isn't too OOC (as I explained earlier) to warrant a massive script overhaul
>> No. 50161
Btw, are we going to make a thread this weekend?
>> No. 50162
File 139550102227.png - (61.17KB , 200x78 , 13884597582s.png )
50162
Really Sexy
>> No. 50163
>>50161
Yes, but we should wait a little bit before making the thread. Saturday mornings is probably when /co/ is at its worst.
>> No. 50164
>>50161
I'd do it but I'm not sure if there's any links I need to post
>> No. 50165
>>50164
I'd suggest the links mentioned in this post: >>50120
>> No. 50166
OK thread's up

http://boards.4chan.org/co/res/60085924
>> No. 50167
File 139553086637.jpg - (103.16KB , 450x600 , 1395527992294.jpg )
50167
Some bounty from the thread.

A Betsy Banks superhero costume design with Evil Boy.
>> No. 50168
File 13955313932.jpg - (190.29KB , 800x1131 , star-striker 17.jpg )
50168
And Star-Striker by Corndog, I think.
>> No. 50169
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50169
Could this be what the future holds for Star-Striker?!?
>> No. 50170
>>50168
good eye, it was me

I was basically redrawing that first Star-Striker image I drew
>> No. 50171
File 139554383989.jpg - (42.46KB , 475x475 , 1395539118760.jpg )
50171
An enthusiastic Mrs. Evil brings her son/sidekick, Evil Boy, along for another adventure in true evil.

Hmm, looks like the ditzy Mrs. Evil left her hooded cape at home...luckily her wig protects her identity!
>> No. 50172
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50172
>> No. 50173
Well, we've done a lot today. We've made progress on Iron Maiden's design, gotten a few new drawings, and had some pretty decent (mostly) discussion about various things. I hope the thread's still up when I wake up tomorrow.
>> No. 50174
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50174
>> No. 50175
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50175
>>50174
>> No. 50176
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>>50174
And her daughter, BA85-2.0e, or Zoe.
>> No. 50177
File 139558263378.jpg - (156.28KB , 1000x1000 , NOT ROBOTS.jpg )
50177
Preliminary designs for mother and daughter human disguises.
>> No. 50178
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50178
Phero-Mona.
>> No. 50179
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50179
>>50178
Alternate costume colors. I think green would work best.
>> No. 50180
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50180
We're going with green.
>> No. 50181
Good weekend thread; I'm going to bed so if it doesn't survive into the morning here's the archive:
http://archive.foolz.us/co/thread/60085924/

Basically we need to finish designing the Mothers of Evil, and after that I think, if any of the drawfags are up to it, we should start working on illustrating the scripts.
>> No. 50184
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50184
Another Phero-Mona

>>50181
We need to design the characters that appear in these scripts, first. Like, the moms' family members, the lesser villains, etc.
>> No. 50187
File 139565386133.jpg - (168.97KB , 911x834 , Hot Flash.jpg )
50187
I posted this on /co/ but I dunno how long the thread will survive

Hot Flash concepts
>> No. 50188
>>50184
So after we finish on the Mothers of Evil, we can finalize Lord Darkthorne, maybe get another drawing or two of Sinister Sorceress Seductra, then the family members, then the lesser villains, then supporting characters, then we can start work on the scripts?

Sounds like a plan!
>> No. 50189
>>50188
I think people are already doing it, not necessarily in this order.
E.g., this thread was mainly dedicated to fleshing out the Mothers of Evil, but we also got some designs for Betsy and Evil Boy
But yeah, that definitely sounds like a plan
>> No. 50190
File 139566929530.jpg - (35.75KB , 463x463 , star-striker teen.jpg )
50190
And here's an alternative take on teen Star-Striker. Personally I like the long hair on her teenage self.
>> No. 50191
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50191
>>50190
And teen Tropica, minus the mask...
>> No. 50192
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50192
>>50191
...and with mask.
>> No. 50194
/co/ thread is dead
>> No. 50195
Looks like we just need to hammer out the fine details of Hot Flash (does her flame form overtake her costume like Human Torch or can we still see her costume, and if so, does it change color), work on Loudspeaker's design some more, and then we can start working on designing family members, lesser villains, and supporting characters.
>> No. 50196
>>50195
I think her flame form should overtake her costume just because it'll make her look more menacing instead of a palette change
>> No. 50197
File 139579101778.jpg - (357.30KB , 1128x975 , Hot Flash.jpg )
50197
>>50195
>> No. 50198
>>50197
One of the ideas earlier was that her flame form is blue-white instead of red-orange flame, the hotter colors signifying that she's more powerful. Could you do her flame form in blue-white to see what looks better?
>> No. 50199
File 139579399847.jpg - (227.17KB , 647x961 , Hot Flash (fire).jpg )
50199
>>50198
I did a crummy photoshop

If y'all think this is what we should go for then I'll recolor it
>> No. 50200
>>50197
>>50199
I was a big advocate for blue-white, but now that I can see both, honestly I prefer red-orange for her flame form. Although the way it's colored now it makes it look like she has a mustache.
>> No. 50201
So, here are the ideas for Loudspeaker's design that we came up with in the most recent /co/ thread.
>respirator-like mask with wires coming out of it, two to speakers mounted on her shoulders, two to bullhorn-like apparatuses mounted on her back
>her tech powers up her voice to produce concussive blasts
>the bullhorns can be used like a jetpack
>can only direct her voice through one outlet (speakers or bullhorns) at a time
>wears her hair in a ponytail that goes between the bullhorns
>fingerless gloves
>elbow and knee pads
>armored top that shows off her midriff
>armored hot pants
>armored boots
We're still trying to decide on a color scheme, though, something that is different from her teammates. I suggested white with purple trim.
>> No. 50203
File 139580855883.jpg - (209.48KB , 648x938 , Hot Flash (fire).jpg )
50203
>>50200
aight
>> No. 50207
>>50201
Sounds like a good design for her costume. What were we thinking for her physical appearance - build, skin tone, hair color?
>> No. 50208
>>50207
I was thinking white and blonde with a skinny, but not overly so, body. Typical valley girl appearance.
>> No. 50209
>>50208
Aren't Lady Goldbeetle and Iron Maiden (her human disguise) also white and blonde?

Also, an idea. How about a mom (one of the villainesses, probably) who constantly bosses around a henpecked husband? It's quite a common comedic type. Maybe Loudspeaker is like that to her hubby?
>> No. 50212
>>50209
Sure I can see that happening.
>> No. 50213
>>50209
I think one of the ideas someone had for Loudspeaker is that she's actually Asian. What do you guys think?
>> No. 50214
Does anyone have the Kaiju redesign ideas saved from the last /co/ thread?
>> No. 50215
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50215
>>50214
>> No. 50216
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50216
>>50213
Why not
Could even make for some jokes, based on the contrast between her and the faux-Chinese Phero-Mona
I imagine her being tall and thin, and preferably not Japanese or Chinese

Or as another thought, we could give Loudspeaker some other previously unused ethnicity: e.g., Indian, Native American, Italian, Arabian, Persian, Armerian etc

>>50214
>>50215
I believe this may be the latest one
>> No. 50217
>>50216
I think we need to work on this design some. I'm not really heavily feeling the mask, maybe facepaint like in the older designs would be better.

Or, the mask gives her anime eyes.
>> No. 50218
>>50217
I really dunno about the anime eyes. I mean, I know where you're coming from, but I believe it'll look really weird compared to "normal" eyes on all the other characters. It'll be "uncanny valley"-level creepy

As for the mask, iirc it was suggested in the thread. Personally, I think I like the mask a bit more, since facepaint makes her look kinda like some native tribeswoman, instead of Japanese. However, with a full-face mask, it could be difficult to show her emotions in the comic... So I dunno
>> No. 50219
>>50216
I'm kind of interested in Native American Loudspeaker myself, married to a white nerdy guy she bosses around.
>> No. 50220
>>50218
Maybe it could be a magical mask, tied to the magic of her tattoo, and it would enable her to show the full range of human expression somehow?
>> No. 50221
So are we doing a /co/ thread this weekend?
>> No. 50223
>>50221
Of course. Hopefully once we finish designing the villains we could get some art made of them by interested drawfags
>> No. 50224
>>50221
How about we make a thread on Saturday evening, like last time
>> No. 50225
>>50220
With the mask's face expressions resembling ukiyo-e prints? I like this!

>>50216
>an annoying activist woman
>Armenian
iseewhatyoudidthere.jpg
>> No. 50227
>>50224
Sure sounds ok to me
>> No. 50229
I had some ideas for Loudspeaker and Diva.

When Loudspeaker uses her tech to amplify her sound (I thought of calling it "Hyper Speech"), her banter is actually the attack itself, like large, slanted words go from either the speakers or bullhorns when she uses them, and that's how the sound attacks are represented artistically.

And for Diva, I had the idea of her solid sound taking the appearance of musical bars in the shape of an object, with musical notes flying every which way upon impact.

What do you guys think?
>> No. 50232
>>50221
Why hasn't anyone made a thread yet?
>> No. 50233
>>50232
I don't know, I'm not the one who makes the threads.
>> No. 50234
I guess we're not having a thread this weekend, but I've been working on some scripts a bit, specifically a script that focuses on the teenage kids of the Supermoms, and the beach episode.

For the kids script, I need some help coming up with things for Keiichi, Shaundra, and Maria to do. I've got Betsy and Alexander covered (and Zoe as well), but I can't figure out what to do with the rest. Any ideas?
>> No. 50237
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50237
Aww, no thread this weekend? Bummer ;_;
Here's Donna Darling, the most popular girl in SCMS and Betsy Banks' nemesis. And her cronies, the Vale twins
>> No. 50238
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>>50237
Also, this. I like the Anti-Moms concept, so here's their version of Mend! I suggest her name should be Rend, and her power a poisonous kiss!
>> No. 50239
>>50229
like that one boss from lollipop chainsaw?
>> No. 50240
>>50237
All right! I wonder if we should slightly change the appearances of the Vale twins, to reflect their mother's Native American heritage?
>>50238
I wonder what the other Anti-Moms look like? I had an idea for evil Star-Striker, where her name would be Star-Smasher.
>> No. 50241
>>50240
>I wonder if we should slightly change the appearances of the Vale twins, to reflect their mother's Native American heritage?
Oh, I didn't know if there's a /co/nsensus on their ethnicity and what it is, so I drew them ambiguously brown-ish. Of course they can be changed, to what? That said, we need more brown-haired girls here (not necessarily the Vale twins tho)
>I wonder what the other Anti-Moms look like?
I think I remember someone expressing the idea that Anti-Tropica would be based on artificial metallic constructions instead of nature, and covered in barbed wire instead of vines. I just think it sounds really badass
>I had an idea for evil Star-Striker, where her name would be Star-Smasher.
I imagine anti-Star-Striker in a Cap America vein, where instead of the American flag, she would wear the colors of an Evil German Party (it's a cartoonish universe, so we can't call it the Nazi party or use swastikas, so it would be an expy). Her name could be Sternschlager or smth like that
>> No. 50242
>>50241
It seemed like Native American was where we were going with Loudspeaker, but just to be sure, are there any objections?

The main goal of Loudspeaker is to have her not be a white blonde, as we already have enough of those.

She should still totally talk like a valley girl, though.
>> No. 50243
>>50238
I really like that black and green color scheme. Since we haven't decided on a color scheme for Loudspeaker yet, how about that?
>> No. 50244
>>50242
Maybe we should list several alternatives, and hold an improvised vote? I agree with her talking like a valley girl regardless of her ethnicity
>>50243
The scheme is actually just an inversion of Mend's color scheme. I think all Anti-Moms should have black as their main color, tho, to symbolize their 'evilness' lol
>> No. 50245
>>50234
>>50237
We could have a thread made this week, but apparently one of the mods is going ban crazy and deleting any any and all thread he or she doesn't like
>> No. 50246
>>50245
Again? There should be a way to stop this bullshit.

>>50238
Not just poisonous, it could infect people with illnesses and cover them in bruises and scars, what do you think?
>> No. 50247
>>50246
I think that's a bit too edgy for the tone this project is supposed to convey.
>> No. 50250
>>50247
It could be shown in a cartoonish way
The way they showed Bushroot killing people in Darkwing Duck
>> No. 50251
>>50245
What should we do next week? Maybe post in the /coc/reations /co/ thread again?
>> No. 50252
>>50251
No, let's just try for a real thread of our own this weekend. The last one went fine and didn't get nuked.
>> No. 50253
>>50252
But what about: >>50245 ?
>> No. 50254
>>50253
No Supermoms threads have been deleted in a while. The last Supermoms thread that was made hit the bump limit and died naturally.
>> No. 50255
bellend08 is hosting his livestream. So if you want to you can commission him to draw some supermom related characters
http://www.livestream.com/bellend08
>> No. 50256
Does anyone wanna take a crack at designing Loudspeaker?
>> No. 50257
A question that I feel needs to be addressed.

What about the Supermoms' parents? Who are they? Are they alive? Do they interact with them? Etc. etc. Or their husbands' parents, for that matter.
So far, I know of Shadow Boy's parents (Mend's parents-in-law), Junichi's parents (Kaiju's parents-in-law) and Tropica's mother Mami.
I think we need to discuss this.
>> No. 50258
>>50257
On a side note, do Kim's parents-in-law even appear in the issues? I thought they live with Junichi & Kim, but it doesn't seem that way in the scripts.
Should they appear? What should their role be? I believe, initially their role was supposed to be to disapprove of Kaiju. But maybe Junichi is enough for the "Kaiju is indecent" jokes to work?
Would like to hear your input on this
>> No. 50259
>>50258
We ended up dropping that somewhere early on.
>> No. 50260
>>50259
What exactly was dropped? The in-laws are still mentioned in the scripts, they just don't seem to appear "on-screen"
>> No. 50261
Star-Striker solo edit.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/6q9forjm11fvqgs/star-striker%20solo%20edit.celtx

sorry if i'm running over anyone's continuity with some of the small stuff. we can take care of continuity once we have edited scripts.
>> No. 50262
>>50261
You know... I'm torn. Please, don't feel discouraged, I usually love your scripts, but to be frank, this one felt a little lackluster. Don't get me wrong, there's some really good parts, but then there are some scenes that just... don't sound right. I dunno if I can explain this.

The two offenders for me are the Tropica-SS scene, and the "jealous Bev" scene.
The Tropica scene feels a bit disjointed and too brief. The "what if you see your daughter dressing like you?" joke is gone. What's left is Tropica unexplainably thinking about her daughter dressing like her. Why? The discussion is about daughters becoming superheroes, not wearing their mothers' costumes. There's no explanation for this line of thought now. In the previous version, it was SS's clumsy wording which led to this comedically uncomfortable image. And why does Tropica bash her own costume? She's the one who wears it this way! It's not like anyone forces her to do it! This is pretty OOC for her. Maybe she could think of it along the lines of "Yep, I'm me, I like to dress sexy etc., but I wouldn't like my daughter to wear a costume like this at least until she's grown up"
The "jealous Bev" scene is now so emotionless. Most of the funny parts (the comedically jealous thoughts, mostly) were cut away. Why? Right now, the scene sounds so... realistic. It doesn't sound funny, it's, you know, it's just there. Maybe it's how people talk and think in real life, but this isn't real life! It's a joke scene! If there's no joke, the scene is just superfluous.

On the other hand, most of the rest is very good. I especially liked how the interview with Buzz, the chat with Gunner, and the Mrs. Evil segment turned out. So please, don't feel discouraged, it's just my two cents. I just opted to voice these concerns because I feel these scenes lack the qualities I usually find in your marvelous writings! Sorry if I was too harsh.

P.S.: I completely agree with you on continuity. However, let's keep the "17 years ago" thing (no "15 years"). Because I can't imagine at least 2 Teen Queens (Kaiju and Diva) getting engaged, marrying, giving birth to children, and then continuing to fight crimes as "Teen Queens". That just feels... wrong somehow

P.P.S.: I'm not the anon who wrote this issue, just so you know
>> No. 50263
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50263
Hey, here's my take on Kaiju's design (here shown in her Teen Queens days). I based in on Japanese aidoru (idols) rather than a serafuku (which I think is a bit overused). Several Japanese magical girl animes do the same, so it fits the theme. The current redesign is okay, but I feel it has too many flat pink shapes.
The red squarish things are the inhibitors that help her control her mass. I didn't like the clunky boots and gloves, so I miniaturized them. She also has a pair of white wristbands with red inhibitors, but those are most of the time hidden under her pink miko sleeves.
Teen Queen Kaiju wore a side-tied ponytail (again, an aidoru thing, and it's pretty cute). Supermom Kaiju will wear the sophisticated hairbun, which felt out of place on a teenage girl.
I was uncomfortable with drawing a young teen girl's pantyshot, however Kaiju isn't Kaiju without one, so here it kinda happens offscreen
>> No. 50264
>>50263
I like it! So, I guess once Kaiju grew up, the magic that generated her costume changed to suit her age?

Also, that design might need the mask design we've been working on if we can agree on something we all like.
>> No. 50265
File 139654975736.jpg - (33.04KB , 350x550 , Mature_Kaiju.jpg )
50265
>>50264
>I like it!
Thanks!
>So, I guess once Kaiju grew up, the magic that generated her costume changed to suit her age?
No, picrelated (over9000 hours in Photoshop). Iirc, the main point was that they wear the same costumes. And I think it suits mature Kaiju as well, since http://iamemiko.deviantart.com/art/How-Asians-Age-179418588
The only thing that changes is her hairstyle, since it's the only thing (besides the pantsu) that isn't created by the magical tattoo.
>Also, that design might need the mask design we've been working on if we can agree on something we all like.
I don't like the mask idea, since it would prevent artists from showing her facial expression, which is crucial in a visual storytelling medium (unless your character is a "faceless" type). Also, I like the kabyki-style facepaint
>> No. 50266
>>50265
One of the ideas we were floating for a mask is, since it's magical, there would be an element to it where it doesn't obscure facial expressions, like in >>50220 and >>50225
>> No. 50267
>>50263
>>50265
Gotta say I prefer this Kaiju design to what we currently have. I don't know about the facepaint, though. Maybe something a bit more concealing?
>> No. 50269
>>50263
>>50265
I really like this idea, and I think it can make Kaiju's fans as seen in the "Supermoms, prepare to meet your...fans!" script even funnier, because she has this Japanese idol image, all clean-cut and everything, and her fans are all rough-and-tumble bikers and the like.
>> No. 50270
So when should we make the newest thread?
>> No. 50271
>>50270
later today, I guess
>> No. 50272
>>50270
around 11 am
>> No. 50274
Still waiting for somebody to make a thread
>> No. 50275
Thred: http://boards.4chan.org/co/res/60538399
>> No. 50277
File 139693504118.png - (168.35KB , 631x976 , MrsEvil.png )
50277
Can't believe no one's posted all the new content we got yet.
>> No. 50278
File 139697864978.jpg - (20.47KB , 350x550 , kaiju 12.jpg )
50278
>>50277
There's a lot of content to go through.

Here's Kim in her civilian attire. A good look for her, I'd say.
>> No. 50279
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50279
>>50278
Kaiju cutting loose.
>> No. 50280
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An adaptation of a part of the Star-Striker solo script by an anon.
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Page 1 of the first script by JMD.
>> No. 50282
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Keiichi in heaven.
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FIGHT!
>> No. 50284
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A simply amazing Diva redesign by a talented anon. I like the way her new hairstyle works with the costume, and I also like how this costume retained the musical note motif, while not in the hair, in the chest. The mixture of gold and silver (to represent platinum, as in gold and platinum records, a reference to Candy's singing career) is great.
>> No. 50285
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There's also this concept for Loudspeaker. While a bit too busy, it's a nice base to work from
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>>50285
And also this cute Mend drawing.

There's also a porn drawing of Mend likely by the same artist, it's posted in the /pco/ thread.
>> No. 50287
>>50275
Incidentally, we probably don't need to post in the general drawthread anymore.

>>50284
great stuff
>> No. 50288
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Loudspeaker concept.
>> No. 50289
Thread died naturally, but there are some images near the end of the thread re: Loudspeaker that I missed.

Archive of the thread: http://archive.foolz.us/co/thread/60538399
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>>50289
>Thread died naturally, but there are some images near the end of the thread re: Loudspeaker that I missed.

got ya covered anon.
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>>50290
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>>50291
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>>50292
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>>50293
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>>50294
>> No. 50296
>>50295
I like this style for Loudspeaker best. The darker hair contrasts with the bright headphones better.
>> No. 50297
>>50289
Wow, the thread almost survived to the next weekend! And we got a load of great art

>>50296
I think she's supposed to be Italian!Loudspeaker, and the lighter one is Jewish!Loudspeaker
>> No. 50299
>>50297
Then we should go with Italian, for sure.
>> No. 50301
>>50290
Good, my work on Codex was saved. Here's her rough bio:

> Codex
> Real Name: Jeanne Pendragon
> Alignment: Chaotic Good
> Affiliations: Supermoms / Magic/Sorcery SuperMoms?, Grand Library of Solomon
> Powers: Photographic memory, Practices Magic Spells (Think early Gwen Tennyson or Venture Bros.' Doctor Orpheus)
> Civilian Occupation: A Librarian/ working at a book store?
> Family: unnamed husband, unnamed son.
> Appearance: Average sized Anglo-French descent, large breasts (easily H-Cups), wears a turtle-neck sweater to conceal them in civilian form. Brunette/Brown hair, always wears glasses. Has a wide, bubble-butt from all the sitting down and reading she does on her spare time. Blue Eyes.

I designed her as a candidate for a /d/-styled supermom. I decided on her because her magical abilities and studies made it possible for many /d/ scenarios without the need to bludgeon people over the head with such dirty thoughts.
>> No. 50307
So... are we gonna have a thread tomorrow?
>> No. 50308
>>50307
Of course. I think it goes without saying at this point.
>> No. 50309
Can anyone come up with a better name for Sig Rune's battle sense? I'm just calling it "Battle Sense" in the scripts, but I think it needs a Nordic flair. Any ideas?
>> No. 50310
>>50309
I suggest we dedicate the next thread to fleshing out (and possibly inspiring artists to draw!) Sig Rune and Diva, since they seem to be the two least developed Supermoms
>> No. 50311
Here's an idea I had for Phero-Mona to make her more interesting, powers wise. She has a number of different pheromones with different effects. All of the effects can be cured by Mend's healing kisses. For example:

>pink - mind control
>blue - drowsiness
>yellow - fear
>red - anger

What do you guys think?
>> No. 50312
>>50311
An interesting concept!

Maybe different concoctions would act as catalysts for various deep hidden emotions/instincts? So, there'd be no general "mind control", but rather tapping into this or that instinct to turn humans into mindless slaves.

May go like that:
>red = anger
>orange = greed/gluttony/etc
>yellow = fear
>green = envy/hate (anger is just being enraged in general, envy/hate is harboring negative thoughts towards other people)
>blue = laziness/weakness/drowsiness/etc
>indigo = ???
>pink = lust (inb4 used on Supermoms)
>black = despair/depression
>white = extasy/happiness/sensory overload
>> No. 50314
What would Kaiju say when she's going from small to normal sized, or big to normal sized? Would she just say "chibikaiju" to go down one step and "daikaiju" to go up one step? Or is it a different word to revert to normal size?
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>>50284
I can dig it.
>> No. 50316
>>50315
We missed you in the last thread!
>> No. 50317
>>50316
I'm a busy man

Looks like there was some good stuff done, though - I'm digging the redesigns! Might have to redraw that Teen Queens pic at some point.
>> No. 50321
>>50312
>>50311
I like this idea
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>>50312
>You know you cannot resist the Pink Fume, anon! ...But do you really want to?~
>> No. 50323
Feel free to make the thread anytime now fellas
>> No. 50324
Thread up. Look up "Supermoms" on Foolz.
>> No. 50325
>>50322
>Fume
I like this word, it has a fantasy-esque feel to it. Maybe she calls all her chemicals "fumes"? (Pink Fume, Red Fume, Green Fume etc) She could shout those names as she attacks

An even bolder suggestion – How about we change her name to "Fume"?
>> No. 50326
>>50325
I like Phero-Mona more as it's a play on words.
>> No. 50327
>>50322
UNF
>> No. 50328
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A drawing of Donald Bernstein, Mend's husband.
>> No. 50329
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Olivia is trying to keep the house clean, but Sigrun is getting in the way!
>> No. 50330
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Maria, Yolanda and Anna Delacruz.
>> No. 50331
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And a nice Mend.
>> No. 50332
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Some Iron Maiden/2.0e sketches. I really like these takes on the characters.
>> No. 50334
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Teen Diva.
>> No. 50335
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A Lord Darkthorne concept.
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>>50335
More spikes.
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Star-Striker.
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A color scheme for Iron Maiden that I think works pretty well! In her human disguise, she has blonde hair, stockings and red heels so there's a parallel there between her robot and human forms.
>> No. 50346
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A new villain, Protectora. Basically a "protective mother" type who thinks the Supermoms are bad for children, and uses her shields to try and stop the Supermoms. One shield reflects any attack back at the attacker, and the other freezes any who look at it in their tracks.
>> No. 50347
And here's my Mothers of Evil script!

https://www.dropbox.com/s/apa12r7us4fm3fm/moe.celtx

Let me know what you think, and don't hesitate to provide criticism!
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>>50346

The idea of her being a villain was discarded. She's neutral, if the definition works, since she's against both factions.
And the bigger shield "absorbs" attacks. Pic related on how it's supposed to work
>> No. 50351
>>50348
is it okay to post idea detail for Supermom allies here?
>> No. 50355
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Posting what wasn't posted yet.
I'll start with pictures, and get to text ideas next.

Protectora's original art by her creator.
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More Protectora.
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Protectora in her civilian identity, with her adopted kids.
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Protectora meets Star-Striker, a rough comic draft
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Concept for Codex >>50301

I suggested the author to maybe try a different type of hairbun, so that it wouldn't look too similar to Kaiju's
>> No. 50360
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The thread had several suggestions for a Kaiju redesign. First, the mask...
>> No. 50361
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Then someone suggested Kaiju's costume should include references to kaiju (the movie genre); here's an attempt at this redesign idea.
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Then someone presented a completely tokusatsu-style redesign (with a side of Bomberman)
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And then Kaiju herself got angry at the constant redesigns of her costume
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Last but not least, this JMD Tropica.

I'll post text ideas from the thread a bit later.
>> No. 50366
>>50355
okay, i think i cleared up the SoKor milf details. wasnt sure if this is was the right thread to post
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>>50366
Nice! I think I'll post all ideas I saved from the thread, and then you can finish it off with your new ideas, sound good?

Basically, a MILF heroine of South Korean descent. She's ex-military, was a martial arts heroine back in the day, now she's a trainer for young superheroes. Her dojang (Korean analogue of "dojo") is based on a rather... controversial principle. Her students are mostly young 18-20something males (and a few females probably). Quite often, to stimulate her student to train and fight harder, she teases and slightly dominates them using her undeniable sex appeal. Sometimes, she mixes fighting, wrestling and sex teasing into a dangerously arousing concoction. It's just teasing, though, no sex or anything, it would be unprofessional.
Unlike Tropica, she doesn't tease men for teasing's sake. She loves battle. She learned quite early that her sex appeal can motivate a lot of men, and so she uses it. But her main goal is training worthy opponents to fight, not fuck. When in battle, she gets a deranged facial expression, a mix of craziness and ahegao, which looks kinda sexy but deeply disturbing. She's not the most stable person around.
She's considered a "neutral" or an "antihero" by the heroes due to her unstable psyche and questionable methods. She often trains superheroes, though, and has good relations with most of them. E.g., she trains Star-Striker, especially in using various leg-based martial arts moves. Also, she and Tropica discuss ways of teasing men, and generally get along... until Juan tells Carmen about a new Korean trainer at his gym, and Tropica goes ballistic at the thought of that woman teasing her Juan.
Her appearance isn't yet set in stone. She's obviously fit, and her most beautiful (and deadly) feature are her legs. Her costume is (possibly) a Korean martial arts costume shirt, very short booty shorts, and martial arts pants with huge holes in them (kind of like Juri Han has, but maybe even bigger), or maybe only one half of pants, or maybe no pants at all (see picrelated for different inspirations). And she's barefoot. Her age is somewhere between 47 and 60.

Also, a short story concept by a horny anon:
>You've fought less pathetically than usual today anon
>You deserve to be rewarded
>Follow me
>*follow her, unsure what to expect, but intrigued*
>*she opens the door... to a bedroom with a king-size bed*
>Let's have some fun, anon, shall we?
>*you overcome your shock and make a motion to touch her*
>*she easily dodges it*
>Now, now, anon, did you think it'd really be that easy?
>First you have to defeat me... and then we'll see
>*cue long, hard, sweaty fight on the king-size bed that almost breaks it and leaves the sheets crumpled*
>*(or maybe it's a smaller dojang just for her personal uses)*
>*of course, she defeats you*
>Fufufu, you should try better if you really want it
>*she leaves the room and goes to the other students*
>*you just lie there, defeated, exhausted, unfucked...*
>*...but you get to spend half an hour alone with the MILF tease you lust after, having a steamy wrestling session on her bed, your body intertwined with that sexy sweating mature body of hers, her cute but sensual pants and grunts filling the air*
>*so you're happy*

As for her name, there have been several ideas:
>Tae Pow
>Queen Dan
>Hwarang
>Mrs. Tae-Foon
I personally like
>Seoul Sister which is a triple pun
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>>50367
Also, seems that Koreans love that "short shorts and bare legs" look. Gifrelated is KPop
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>>50368

Heavy sketch of her looks.
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internet went out gah!
>>50367
>>50369
>>50368

here is my little thing on her

can't decide on name was thinking Iron/steel Tae-gress, Tae-gr steel

> Real Name: Choi Chung-Ae
>Nationality: South Korean
> Alignment: Good
> Affiliations: Super heronies.
> Powers: Peak Human Condition, Taekwondo based MMA, Legs registered as deadly weapon
> Civilian Occupation: MMA instructor, motivator
> Family: Single mother of 3 children (1 son and two daughters)
> Appearance:
About 5'5 and weighs in 50 kilograms with a 33 bust. She is 47 years old but looks fairly young. Well very fit yet feminine. Being 'sexy' is an art to her. Lke any Martial Art, its a challenge but helps with discipline and believes you should take pride in yourself. Her most noticeable feature are her long Legs. While she has the upper strength, its doesn't feel as satisfying as using the whole leg.
>Backstory:
Grew up in a strict military family as an only child, her escape was Taekwondo. In her early teens she was very skilled but felt restricted. Became somewhat of a bully by egging anyone to fight. This lasted for a very short time when people refuse to respond, and felt remorse. She joined ROKA at age of 18 SWC 707th Special Mission Battalion at a young age, giving her chance to travel and learn various Martial art and discipline improving her 'style'. On her down time she uses/practice her skills as a vigilante. She had one daughter at 37 and retiring after 20 years with 2 more on the way. Began Settled down with her 3 children. Raising was relaxing, too relaxing soon hungered for 'bloodlust' or still had that fighting spirit and began volunteering being a special instructor for 7 years gaining a reputation.

>personality
she has sultry voice with a matching calm/collective exterior with very aggressive yet positive attitude but at times she shown to be enthusiastic. She instructs with tough love with great compassion (yet with her kids who she seems to spoil).

Her philosophy is to channel energy/emotion into fighting and since each person is different takes time time and care to help them. She loves it when seeing her students improve and their goals or full potential. She doesn't yell out of anger, believes in being supportive is best option.

With her serious students she somewhat manipulative, helping them channel their full potential. Sometimes she gets seems to gets too enthusiastic when fighting an challenging opponent.


I tried to hold back the lewd and as thourugh as i could be
sorry for TL;DR not the best writer feel free to tweak/ignore anything
>> No. 50371
>>50367
>60
you know anon, the 60 i was talking about my class teacher, you asked if she was a milf and responded with she not

sorry for the mix up!
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>>50370
South Korea's national animal is the tiger, she fucks like one too! are we allowed to say lewd stuff? i was thinking she wears that high tech armor but only the chest pat and gloves and helet is like the taekowndo one but sleeker. With short shorts. now if full leg she may have shin guards protecting her shins attached to like her ankle and or middle toe and knee so still shows whole leg and calfs and still bare foot,

with any pants, a slights on the side
hair could be punkish? or maybe long but not that long?

more inspiration
>> No. 50373
>>50370
of forgot to add she has a sweet tooth and her favorite are suckers Lollipops
>> No. 50375
>>50370
>>50367
mix these two concept. I like first one
>> No. 50376
>>50375
Actually, it's the same concept, just various ideas about it. The main difference, I think, is the lack of the "training young men using sexual teasing" thing in the second concept. While I personally like it and think it fits the project's main theme, the character's original author doesn't seem to like it, and his opinion should of course be noted. I'd suggest we discuss this, would be great to hear more opinions on this matter.

>>50373
That's an interesting character trait, but frankly I'm not sure how it fits the rest of her personality. Maybe establish some kind of contrast between this, and her tough militaristic exterior?.. Dunno.

>>50372
I think we need the artists to draw their takes on her costume, then it'd be easier to discuss. Right now, I like all suggestions.
The only part I'm not quite sure about, is that chestplate. Why does she wear it? Why only the chestplate? That confuses me, both logic-wise and design-wise.
As for the hair, I'd suggest she wears it short (we can try different short haircuts to see which one fits the best). Long hair could be grabbed by an opponent in combat, so for her it's not practical.

>>50371
Ah, I see. So, she's 47 then, right?

>>50370
I also support playing with the word "Tiger" in her name. Though I dunno about "Tae-gr" – I always thought "tae" was pronounced somewhat like "tay" (as in, "Tay Zonday")? Am I mistaken?
>> No. 50378
CODEX
Ideas from the thread.

>Codex' creator's proposition:

Codex
Real Name: Jeanne Pendragon
Alignment: Good
Affiliations: Supermoms / European Dreams, Head of the Eldritch Research Organization.
Powers: Photographic memory, Practices Magic Spells (Think early Gwen Tennyson or Venture Bros.' Doctor Orpheus)
Civilian Occupation: A Librarian/ working at a book store?
Family: Ral' Akoran, the Seer of a Thousand Fractals, unnamed son.
Appearance: Average sized Anglo-French descent, large breasts (easily H-Cups), wears a turtle-neck sweater to conceal them in civilian form. Brunette/Brown hair, always wears glasses. Has a wide, bubble-butt from all the sitting down and reading she does on her spare time. Blue Eyes.
A sorceress who at a young age (late teens) became very curious about the worlds beyond this one. A months of hastily gathered and planned research caused an inter-dimensional invasion of strange aberrational creatures. They were the Occulon, humanoid beings with several eye-stalks growing from their cyclopean heads, and several other very flexible tendrils... They saw her as a trespasser, and enemy, thus unwittingly a war was sparked by her reckless actions. Striving to stem the tide of the invasion, she offered herself up as a sacrifice to appease both sides. However, one such creature was touched by her noble actions, and called for a truce. His condition: to go out on a date with her.
The two hit it off surprisingly well. Some would say almost too well. Regardless Codex's curious nature resulted in a strange coupling... and it ultimately resulted in a wedding like no other. Ultimately, her performance as a sorceress propelled, and she became head of the Eldritch Research Organization, a branch dedicated to policing the supernatural occurrences of the world. However, this means she was stuck behind the desk rather than on the field.

Codex and her husband enter the field together, Ral hides in an interdimensional belt around her waist most of the time, his several tendrils and eye stalks peeking out to cast supplementary spells or to help speed up her own spell-casting. She is less effective if she finds herself separated from her husband, but she's still no pushover.
Her most noticeable weakness is her old habits to rush down one path too quickly, her photographic memory capabilities end up becoming a liability by focusing on one thing too much. Ral helps her compensate this weakness.
I wanted her to be effectively /d/, so getting her hitched to a benevolent monster of sorts would be an excellent source of humor and double-entendres.
I imagine the Occulon to be effectively humanoid Beholders/ tentacle people.

>Anon's attempt to fit this concept into the Supermoms universe:
~15-17 years ago, a young magical superheroine called Codex (a sometimes ally to the Teen Queens) sacrificed herself to protect Earth from an invasion of otherworldly beings she herself summoned by mistake. She became stranded in the other dimension, and everyone believed the worst...
...Cue another breach reappearing today, from which a matured Codex emerged. Turns out, she's happily married to a charming fellow called Mr. Occulus, and has a bunch of cute occulon kiddies back in that dimension. It all happened like OtherSpike described: one of the Occulons was so impressed by her bravery and selflessness, he fell in love with her.
Nowadays, Codex spends most of the time in the other dimension with her hubby and kids. On Earth, she serves as an enigmatic Dr.Strange-esque protector against the supernatural, rarely seen in action or teaming up with other heroes.
...Meanwhile, a mysterious new librarian joined Sapphire City Magnet School...

>also, some ideas about her husband:
As for her hubby, my first thought is that he's a got a laid-back attitude, kind of like Ben 10's Feedback.
How about he's "the unintelligible"? All of his race, actually. They could talk in blubs, or skreeches, or fhtagns or whatever, and everyone (except the reader, and maybe the 4th-wall-breaking Olivia) understands what they're saying. Might make for some funny scenes
For some reason, I see a mix of Shuma-Gorath, a tentacle monster, and Gary the Snail, dressed in a top hat and a bowtie lol
I kind of imagined a little of classic/ current Dungeons and Dragon beholders in a smaller, certainly more humanoid form, a little Shuma-Gorath, and actually a little of Filia from Skullgirls...
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>> No. 50380
>>50376
>Actually, it's the same concept, just various ideas about it. The main difference, I think, is the lack of the "training young men using sexual teasing" thing in the second concept. While I personally like it and think it fits the project's main theme, the character's original author doesn't seem to like it, and his opinion should of course be noted. I'd suggest we discuss this, would be great to hear more opinions on this matter.

I just tried to be thorough as in a real character, and tried to hold back being lewd and tried to 'imply sexy stuff. I like either but I prefer lewd and crazy.
It was hard to hold back mang.
Discussion/brainstorming is best! more the merrier.
I noticed I wasn't thinking about her having kids. To be a MILF you need kids right? Also i kinda wanted to make a joke about she 'tighter than a virgin' with her leggy exercises .
Maybe 1 kid...we'll brainstorm over it all good idea.

>That's an interesting character trait, but frankly I'm not sure how it fits the rest of her personality. Maybe establish some kind of contrast between this, and her tough militaristic exterior?.. Dunno.
I see it as a habit substitute or a tick, like smoking or drinking (maybe still drinks but not beer anymore) you know?
Also dealing with kids like a teacher, they have suckers.

>I think we need the artists to draw their takes on her costume, then it'd be easier to discuss. Right now, I like all suggestions.
The only part I'm not quite sure about, is that chestplate. Why does she wear it? Why only the chestplate? That confuses me, both logic-wise and design-wise.
As for the hair, I'd suggest she wears it short (we can try different short haircuts to see which one fits the best). Long hair could be grabbed by an opponent in combat, so for her it's not practical.
chest plate is just emphasis on military thing and maybe to protect her boobs from bouncing.
Also only the chest protection since mobility, I also had in mind she dabbles in Drunken fist and hats pretty fluid and flexible and need the mobility.
Short is best, but still feminine/fashionable/cute.

>Ah, I see. So, she's 47 then, right?
I was thinking about the kids thing. maybe adopt then?
She can be older but she looks very young and hot.
>I also support playing with the word "Tiger" in her name. Though I dunno about "Tae-gr" – I always thought "tae" was pronounced somewhat like "tay" (as in, "Tay Zonday")? Am I mistaken?
oh is it? shit didnt know that.
I was thinking soeul sister was punny, like maybe instead of military she grew up in an nun orphanage or something.

I think once find a name the costume should be easier to figure out.
>> No. 50381
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Protectora's story.
>> No. 50382
So what are the rules on making up characters?
>> No. 50383
So what are the rules on making up characters?
>> No. 50384
So what are the rules on making up characters?
>> No. 50385
>>50383

Don't mind those, sorry.
>> No. 50388
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50388
>>50379
I like idea of a coat, something that covers a lot, plays a contrast.

I like this hair but too long right?
>> No. 50389
>>50384
Dont Spam a million character ideas. Basically don't lower yourself to a character generator. Even if its not good, take time come up with designs and bio.
>> No. 50390
>>50384
Dont Spam a million character ideas. Basically don't lower yourself to a character generator. Even if its not good, take time come up with designs and bio.
>> No. 50391
Did some minor editing to the Mothers of Evil script. Nothing major, but there is one important difference that I feel makes the ending better.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/apa12r7us4fm3fm/moe.celtx

Please critique this, guys. Hell, critique all of the scripts.
>> No. 50392
>>50390

Where's a better place to debut it, here or the Saturday thread?
>> No. 50393
>>50392
If you already have a solid idea, sat since more traffic =more feedbsck
>> No. 50394
>>50393

It's almost done, I put all of my shitty drawing skills into one of the duo, but the other one is frustrating me.
>> No. 50395
>>50394
I should take a crack at drawing for saterday, I did some more reading ITT and wiki and gonna clean/adjust possible idea fer k-mom will post on sat. Reading helps
>> No. 50397
>>50395

How's your drawing skill? Is it better than me? (No skills at all)
>> No. 50398
>>50397
its shit. i havent drawn since high school.
>> No. 50399
many things happening. still here. still editing (currently on Diva's, but it's on back burner). also writing script for sequel to pot-luck thing, with Supermoms actually going up to the satellite to meet Gunner and crew.

Sigrun doesn't mind flying under her own power, but she HATES flying in planes and spaceships and shit. feels powerless.

girlfriend did sketches of designs for Star-Striker, Kaiju, Sigrun, and Tropica. will get those scanned in ASAP. busy weekend, though, so probably not for a while.

just letting you all know i'm still alive. and also kinda staggered at the life of its own this thing has taken on. keep up good work. viva las madres!
>> No. 50401
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>>50370
First attempt at the at this character.

I'm honestly not 100% on this and think the hair is kinda bleh (hair suggestions are very welcome).

But since there's still very little concept art I hope this helps get the ball rolling, I'm interested in any and all feedback so as to see what can be done to push this to a better look/place.
>> No. 50402
>>50399
Feel free to write the potluck issue itself, too, because I tried starting that months ago and I haven't gotten anywhere.
>> No. 50403
>>50401
Hot dam! Love the top, I like pants side cut
For hair, I kinda agree. Maybe a type of mohawk or swoop yo 1 side or this
>>50388
Or mix of those two?
>> No. 50404
>>50403
By swoop I mean uwards
>> No. 50405
>>50401
Good drawing! but needs moar naked legs
>> No. 50406
>>50405
Yeh I was gonna ask so I can draw various pants but I like that pants in the drawing
>> No. 50408
>>50404
Up swoop.

The reason I like>>50401 is what if she had weights or metal brace in the long on. Being cover they wont expect a hard kick?

Maybe ldg warmers or tights or bare..we brain storm tomarrow
>> No. 50409
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50409
My take on the K-Mom (my name suggestion for her is Taekkyon Tiger).
As usual, disregard if you don't like etc.

I based the concept on the "Lewd training" idea, which I liked very much. This is, of course, the outfit she dons when training young guys. At other times, she just puts on a sensible purple-hued martial arts costume.
In the design, I tried incorporating most of the various ideas expressed in the thread. The tiger-print top is actually a kevlar breastplate. The tiger-print bottom is just a pair of really tight booty shorts. The purple parts are made from the same fabric as her more sensible martial arts costume. The gray parts are probably metal.
Dunno about the haircut, tho.
>> No. 50410
>>50409
Oh and by the way, Ima probably try drawing Codex or Protectora next, I like all these new moms
>> No. 50411
>>50410
Is Codex a mom?
>> No. 50412
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50412
>>50409
I like that name.

I also like the costume, but I can't help but think she would be better with a tiger-inspired mask, not like King from Tekken, but more like pic related, or something along those lines, where it's clearly a mask and not a tiger's head.
>> No. 50413
>>50411
I think she has several cute tentacled kiddies in the parallel dimension.

>>50412
Thanks!
The mask in your pic is a wrestling/luchador mask, though, it would be confusing (especially since Tropica wears one). What can a Korea-related mask look like?
And does she ever need a mask? I thought it was said she retired from active superheroics?
>> No. 50414
>>50413
Just because they're retired doesn't mean they don't care about their secret identities.

I also had an idea where she's a gym teacher at SCMS, or would that put too many superheroes in that school?
>> No. 50415
>>50414
Might be...
I like the idea someone suggested, that she also works as a fitness trainer, and thus becomes Juan's trainer by coincidence... which makes Tropica not very amused.
>> No. 50416
>>50412
what about tiger skin pelt skin hat?
>> No. 50417
>>50413
We could work the "like Tropica" bit into >>50415, where she acts similar to Tropica in regards to her flirtatious nature, resulting in a friendly rivalry between the two.
>> No. 50418
I think we should have a moratorium on making new characters for the time being, until we have more or less final designs of all characters already listed in the current scripts. I mean, we have a lot of family members who have never been actually designed yet, and we still haven't come to a consensus on Kaiju's costume.

I think for now we should focus on designing what's already around and hold off on new characters for now. Taekkyon Tiger is good stuff, though.
>> No. 50419
>>50401
love to see it color, see how much skin shown.
>>50409
nice
I like the top in >>50401
she is a fit , assertive can-do/no excuse mom. is she "tiger mom" in a sense that she very supportive and wants people/kids to be their best. in stead of 'pole dancing' (do fit moms do pole dancing for exercise?) she does Martial Arts.
>> No. 50420
>>50418
I was thinking about kaiju, since she's a shape shifter or well size. could play on the kitsune?

Fox shape-shifting women
>> No. 50421
>>50420
I wouldn't mind a kitsune-themed idol-style design for Kaiju.
>> No. 50422
>>50418
is there a to do list pastebin?
>> No. 50423
>>50418
Sorry, of course I'll draw some "classic" characters, too. There are several I'd also like to do my take on.
>>50421
Okayyy... maybe I'll give it a try. Though I warn you, we risk making the woman seriously annoyed: >>50363
>>50422
The easiest way is to look at the wiki, that's the way I do it.
>> No. 50424
I like the name Taekkyon Tiger
out of curiousity why taekkyon how you chose that?

also i found a korean drama armor googl 'iljimae'
>> No. 50425
How about
hear me out guys
How about
Kaiju's costume is different every time it's summoned?

Since it's not an actual physical costume but rather a manifestation created by the magical tattoo, it could be explained in-universe as fitting the surroundings and the task at hand.
In the meta sense, that way EVERYONE WILL BE FINALLY HAPPY
Also, that way we could get things like e.g. swimsuit version, winter version, underwater version etc. etc.

There should be, of course, some constants that remain the same.
I'd propose:
>pink-white color scheme
>design always in some way related to Japanese traditional or pop culture, no exceptions
>red "gems" (stabilizers)
>red lines in the face area – either on some mask (a kabuki mask, a fox mask, etc), or as bodypaint
>PANTYSHOT (it's mandatory)

Sometimes, Kaiju can be surprised or embarrassed by the costume's new form, which plays into her running gags. Though we shouldn't do it too often, so it won't get tired.

What do you think guys?
>> No. 50426
>>50422
There is now.

http://pastebin.com/BCMX3znR

Let me know if I missed any characters.
>> No. 50427
>>50425
That could get really confusing to the reader. I think her costume should be the same no matter where she is.
>> No. 50428
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50428
>>50425
>Sometimes, Kaiju can be surprised or embarrassed by the costume's new form

sounds creative and fun imo but artist probably might not like coming up every time maybe?

>>50416
reminds me of a korean MMO enemy.
if she probably have bottom two mask or something.
bottom right is leg thingy but still shows off calf.

i'll stop posting inspiration/references
>> No. 50429
>>50426
We don't know if those Phero-Mona's daughters should even stay. We need to finalize the concept of her family before designing them. The same with her husband, we should discuss him.
There has been a non-template pic of Diva's gym uniform, by Corndog.
Also, the Anti-Moms and European Dreams need designs.

I'll personally work on Teenage Sig Rune (since I drew the rest of Teen Queens anyway), possibly will draw a non-superhero Betsy, and maybe some Anti-Moms, maybe some other characters as well.

>>50425
Hm, an interesting idea! Let's see what other anons think.

>>50424
I read up on different Korean martial arts, and this one seemed fitting. It's dance-like and graceful (thus fits the lewd/seductress angle), legs and feet play an important role in it, and it has the alliterative appeal with the word "Tiger". So... yeah.
>> No. 50430
>>50429
Pastebin updated.
http://pastebin.com/3RASFAU8

>>50399
Here, if you want to work on the potluck script, here's what I wrote before I got writer's block. I don't think I'll ever go back to it, so if anyone wants to give this a go, go ahead.
https://www.dropbox.com/s/a7uk2es81sjsqyq/supermoms3.celtx
The ideas I had that I didn't actually put in the script:
>Diva and Kid Mondo flirting with each other
>Sig Rune brings Asgardian mead to the potluck and is told that she has to take it back since there are some underage heroes at the dinner, and is humorously confused about drinking laws
>Star-Striker gets the address wrong and ends up going to a potluck dinner across the street - the supervillains' potluck dinner!
>> No. 50431
Some more ideas from the thread.

>PROTECTORA
>Original author's concept:
•Real name: Cassandra Vinceri (Karia Vinnieri)
•Affiliation: Mothers of Evil
•Powers: Time Stop and Stop Momentum (through her shields)
•Occupation: Leader of a governmental research company / Vice-Executive of Eternal Serenity - Life and Health Insurances Co.
•Family: Adoptive daughers; Abigail (10) and Ivory Vinceri (8). Mother and Father killed by Cassandra herself.
•Appearance: Light skinned with 6'2 ft, A-Cup, blue hair, blue eyes. If not wearing her usual bussiness suit, uses long dresses. Common bodytype; flat upperbody, roundish lowerbody.
•Extra: Takes small dosages of estrogen every day.

Karia always wanted to be a mother, but huge amounts of work and a bad temper never allowed her to enter in a good relationship. The constant stress in her life - caused by her parents and work - derelugated her menstrual periods, causing a rare symptom that made her ovaries to stop working. Unable to have children, her mind broke. With a blank stare in her eyes, Karia went to the Research Lab she worked on and stole the Systematic Timeless Objects Project from the building, and killed her parents and every other person on the way back. In that same year, after changing her name to Cassandra Vinceri, she moved to Sapphire City, where she adopted Abigail and Ivory. Her mind state still affected by her past, made her an overprotective mother, which became worse after Ivory was, by accident, severely hurt by Star-Striker. In order to assure her children protection, joined the Mothers of Evil to destroy the Supermoms League. Plans to end the MoE right after

>Another anon's attempt to tone her down and fit her into the cartoonish tone of the Supermoms' Universe:

Karia was a scientist working on a top-secret project of the Multinational Intellectual Logistics & Financing corporation. The project was so secret that neither Kim Ujifusa nor Babs Bushnell knew about its, or even Karia's existence.
Most of all, she wanted to have children. However an unexplained lab accident happened when the project was nearing completion. Karia survived, but was rendered unable to have children. Overcome with feelings of rage and helplessness, she stoke the S.T.O.P. test objects – two shields which stop time for any living being that's reflected in them.
She escaped, becoming a crazy antihero/antivillain bent on protecting children everywhere from everything she considers a threat.
Possibly, the accident was arranged by L.D. himself
P.S.: Another way would be to make her an overprotective mother. Dunno which is better.

>Shields:
The small one freezes the time for anyone whose reflection is shown. The bigger cancels all forces that enters in contact with it.


I like those designs, especially how the blindfold is more like a visor. Maybe it has a special lens that protects her from the freezing effects of her shield.

I think, inspired by the design on the right, that her freezing shield shouldn't be "on" 24/7, but maybe it can be activated by her, as well as activated to unfreeze someone by her as well, like switches inside the handle.
>> No. 50432
>>50431
I think she should be an overprotective mother gone overboard, where she dons a costume to protect other mothers' children as well, but overdoes it all the time and views anything slightly "sharp" (in a metaphorical sense) as endangering to children. Maybe some wacky uses of logic to justify herself.
>> No. 50433
>Ideas for these >>50328 >>50330 characters by the drawfag

>Donald
Ideas for the character: He has retained his youthful good looks (as Shadow Boy, he was quite the bishounen). Mend's teammates consider him a major hunk, and all three of Tropica's daughters have a crush on him. Personality-wise, he's a chill guy, his tough and handsome "bad boy" exterior hides his ravenous appetite for cookies and nerdy interests (he never misses the weekly Mutants & Masterminds game at Steve Banks' house)

>Tropica's daughters
My take on Maria, Yolanda and Anna Delacruz. The colors, of course, can be changed if needed since these are just casual clothes

Maria
She's a bit of a tomboy. Compared to young Mend, who was carefree and a bit aggressive, Maria is more level-headed and serious. She often has to care for her younger siblings, so she learned to be responsible. She's determined to become a professional soccer player in a couple of years.

Yolanda
The wallflower. A lot has been already said about her, I think. I'd suggest not to make her the stereotypical shy nerd, though. She's shy, but not exceptionally academically bright (in comparison to Keiichi who is a straight A student but not socially awkward, and Ben Banks who's a straight up genius but is usually up to mischief)

Anna
Cheerful, spunky and full of energy. She's not airheaded, though, knowing when to use her cuteness or make an innocent face to get what she wants. She will probably be the one to inherit Carmen's charms when she grows up.

These three young ladies are good friends to each other and often act together despite not having a lot in common (except parents and their crush on Donald Bernstein)
>> No. 50434
>A villainous group idea, several versions

>Version 1
Tequila Maria: Can make people aggressive and cause "angry drunk" fights and riots
TIna Martini: Amps up the libido of everyone in the room by teleporting alcohol into their bloodstream
Mary Jane: Your typical seductive pothead hippie-type, constantly followed by a concealing cloud of smoke, possibly wears pot leaves for clothes
Biergarten: A husky German fraulein who can make everyone happy, bubbly and relaxed using the ancient ancestral powers of German beer
For Mary Jane, she should wear tie-dye and hemp, to fit the stereotypical hippie stoner look. And her head is clouded in smoke all the time, but we can still see her dreadlocks sticking out.
Enabler, the group's coordinator: Previously a superheroine, Designated Driver, she has become an Oracle-esque magnate of illegal pot shipments and bootleg liquor. She runs the heists and operations from a slick tech lair. She has no powers, but the power of peer pressure should never be underestimated!

>Version 2
T.I.P.S.Y.
A gang of covert super-mercenaries capable of disturbing and destablizing a community through the bane of bored suburban mothers everywhere: alcohol.
Each member has a power (derived from a device?) called ambient intoxication, allowing them to secretly inflict their brand of drunkenness on an unsuspecting target.

Cosma Martini
Team leader. Specialty: "Spectacle" drunkenness. A nudge from her, and any Milf will realize how much fun dancing on a table is.
Boxé d'Vine
Specialty: "Bad Decision" drunkenness. "Oh, I'm certain my husband won't mind if I sleep with this guy..." She specializes in making any bad idea seem like the best in the world.
Frau Biërgärten
Specialty: sloppy drunkenness. What better way to make an impression on new neighbors than by slurring through a naughty joke before belching in their faces?
Some pun about Margaritas or Tequila.
Specialty: Angry drunkenness. Make every slight offense worth starting a brawl over.

Each woman is capable of blending into any social situation perfectly, and delights in the havoc they can wreck. They can be flashy supervillainess, but mostly, they prefer blending into the crowd and watching their handiwork from a safe distance.

>Plot ideas

Actually, that sounds like an idea with good potential. Maybe not as recurring villains, but as a one-time thing they could be really fun. Maybe in an issue dealing with the Supermoms having a party, and the T.I.P.S.Y. agents appear and make the moms cause havoc (maybe 4 moms get influenced, and the 2 remaining ones have to rescue their comrades and save the day)

Maybe we could use both ideas. TIPSY goes after the moms first, then later, after the kids.

Yeah, I agree with this. These could be 2 separate adventures, with a bit of escalation between them: first the moms have to deal with them themselves, then they must protect their kids.
I'm not quite sure about Mary Jane, though, she seems a bit out of place among alcohol-based villains

Maybe Mary Jane would be added to the team when they go after the kids.

I'd be OK with dumping Mary Jane. Or maybe she could be spun off into her own thing.

I think, with Mary Jane, you could do a thing where after T.I.P.S.Y. was defeated the first time (I think Diva and Sig Rune would be the Supermoms to escape their influence and save the rest, since they drink a lot more than the other moms), they decide to go after teenagers this time and bring in Mary Jane as a new member of the team to give them an edge in case those darn Supermoms try to interfere again.
>> No. 50435
>Various ideas on Tropica from the thread

One of the things that I feel really should be hammered into Tropica's character is a very deep knowledge of plants, all kinds. After a while, the plant-controlling character only using vines for virtually everything gets tired, you know? When writing the Tropica solo script (which still needs to have a full segment of Tropica interacting with her family/children added, any ideas?) I incorporated that idea, and in the Mothers of Evil vs. Supermoms script I'm doing it too (the script is coming along very well, if my creative juices keep flowing I should have a complete first draft ready before the weekend's over!). I really dig that aspect of Tropica's character and I hope that when you guys see what I did with it in the Tropica solo and the Mothers of Evil script, you'll like it too. It's really fun to write, looking for a new plant for Tropica to use certain qualities of to win the next battle with.
I don't know, maybe it's just me, but I really like distancing Tropica from the generic plant control moveset.

Also people need to start drawing her vine clothing as, y'know, actual vines and flowers and not bodypaint.


I had an idea, maybe as just a little gag, where a character who has allergies gets into sneezing fits whenever they're around Tropica, even when she's not in costume.
Wonder which character it could be? For some reason, I imagine a secondary character, e.g. a policeman. Or maybe one of the villains?

Now, as far as I know you might have done it on purpose, but I'll just point out that 'Delacruz' is not an actual Spanish surname, but 'De la Cruz' is.
>> No. 50436
>>50435
You don't need to copy-paste from the foolz archive.
>> No. 50437
>A Supermoms RPG game concept


It could be done in the manner of old JRPGs, with each Supermom having different special abilities and a different role on the battlefield. The kicker could be a mechanic that forces the player to use only 3 characters in one battle, thus making you choose which combination of the Supermoms would work better against the current threat!

Here's how their abilites may be represented:
>Star-Striker
Good melee fighter, but no special attacks. Instead, she has leadership abilities, which enhance the other two characters' fighting prowess significantly. She can also use tricks to debuff enemies.
>Sig Rune
Another mainly melee fighter. She's stronger than Star-Striker, and much much tougher. She can also upgrade her weapons for more damage. She has no special abilities, though.
>Diva
The closest the team has to a magic-user. She has a wide choice of powerful special abilities, but has only limited voice power (= mana). She's not very tough physically.
>Tropica
She's another "magic user". The difference is, she can use all of her various special abilities for free, without any "mana". The downside is that she has to wait for those special abilities (special plants) to grow: the more powerful the ability, the more it takes for the plant to grow!
>Kaiju
Her transformations also take some time to charge (representing her nude transformation scene), during which she's very vulnerable and must be protected. Once transformed, both of her forms offer her different bonuses: to strength and toughness, or to dexterity and dodging. No special abilities.
>Mend
The healer of the team. Her special abilities are free, but they're mostly healing or defensive ones. She's quite vulnerable physically.

The game could start with a tutorial battle – Teen Queens' last fight! Then we skip to the Supermoms' days. Having been out of commission for 17 years, our heroines have to relearn a lot – which is represented by gaining Exp. and gaining ("remembering") new special abilities.
>> No. 50438
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50438
>>50431

A small mix of both should work.

Karia Vinneri was a scientist working on a top-secret project of the Multinational Intellectual Logistics & Financing corporation. The project was so secret that neither Kim Ujifusa nor Babs Bushnell knew about its, or even Karia's existence.
Most of all, she wanted to have children. However an unexplained lab accident happened when the project final test was in course. Karia survived, but was rendered unable to have children. Overcome with feelings of rage and helplessness, she stole the S.T.O.P. test objects – two shields which could stop time for any living being that's reflected in them.

Trying to leave her past behind, Karia changed her name to Cassandra Vinceri, and to fulfill her wish to be a mother she adopted two children: Abigail and Ivory.
When heard about the appearance of Supermoms and the Mothers of Evil she became an antihero/antivillain Vigilante bent on protecting children everywhere from everything she considers a threat.

>>50432
>I think she should be an overprotective mother gone overboard
Nah.
>but overdoes it all the time and views anything slightly "sharp" (in a metaphorical sense) as endangering to children
The thing is that Protectora doesn't have any kind of real offensive power to be a thread to innocent people. She's the typical "ABSOLUTE DEFENSE" character, relying on her shields for combat. She uses of provocation and distraction to make her enemies jump into fight.

When you think about that, I guess she can use gadgets (like small bombs, smoke bombs, tasers and such) to keep the adversaries in the ground.
>> No. 50439
>>50438
If nobody important to the story knew her name, why would she need to change it? That whole name change thing just seems unnecessary.
>> No. 50440
>>50438
What I meant in
>but overdoes it all the time and views anything slightly "sharp" (in a metaphorical sense) as endangering to children
is that she overestimates the threat level of everything, from automobiles to swimming pools to the common cold to the Supermoms. Typical protective mother urges but turned up to 11.
>> No. 50441
I'm reading these ideas and now I'm panicking. I hope the idea I'm coming up with isn't too dark and stuff. I kinda got over passionate on what I was doing. I might have missed the general mood entirely.
>> No. 50442
>>50441
suppose to be fun take on mom stereotype or archetype.
as long its 'fun' pitch it
>> No. 50443
>>50442

Well, I suppose I'll just post what I have tomorrow and it can be reworked to fit the mood. If it's even picked that is.
>> No. 50444
>>50409
I got suggestion for hair but save it for 2marrow.
>> No. 50445
>Plot ideas from the thread

>Plot idea 1.
>Spa adventure


Supermoms find an ad for a «superhero spa» giveaway scheme, that is secretly (unknown to them) a plot by Sinister Sorceress Seductra to lure them out and defeat them. The moms decide to go out to this fancy spa complex for some R&R.

Our heroines soon split, and each one relaxes alone in a different part of the spa complex. They wear just masks and towels, so fanservice ahoy (this whole adventure will be fanservice ahoy). Suddenly, each one is attacked by various dangers based on spa-related things, e.g., aquatic monsters in the water, an evil guy attacking with a "hot springs" cannon, evil kung fu massagists, a villain throwing those stones they put on ladies' backs, spa-themed traps, etc.

They manage defeat the attackers/traps, and end up together in a hot bath or something, all naked (naughty bits concealed by the steam/body parts/text balloons/etc, of course). There the naked sweaty moms have to fight throngs of the villain's henchmen. Then they get their costumes (or towels?) back and prepare to find and fight the main bad guy, but Seductra escapes at the last moment, without Supermoms learning she was behind this plot.

And then at the very end amidst all the carnage and rubble, the Supermoms sit back, relax, and enjoy a nice soak in the hot springs. And vow to go to a regular spa next time.

The villains in this plot are either mind-controlled innocent spa workers, or henchmen and D-list villains (plus various traps and robots, of course). Some anon suggested Hot Flash could be among them, but that poses a problem since MoE don't collaborate with Seductra or Darkthorne. However, in any case, none of the villains actually know they're working for Seductra (since she's supposed to have retired and become «good» public figure), so MoE members' involvement is technically possible. Also, maybe Headmaster (the villain that used his hypnotic powers in SCMS) could make a comeback here, to hypnotize spa workers.

>Plot idea 2.
>Mother's Day (SFW)

The Mothers of Evil have issued a challenge to Supermoms (maybe it's a crime spree, or just a challenge to an all-out battle). However, it's Mother's Day, and most of the Supermoms are stymied by their families so they can't escape! , and that poses a problem! Because, e.g., Beverly Banks is trapped at home, her entire family attending to her every need, waiting on her, checking up on her, making sure she doesn't have to lift a finger on Mother's Day, and she has to figure out a way to get away, so she can keep the city safe.

However, some of the Mothers of Evil are trapped in the exact same situations! But here we see one of the differences between the two teams. The Supermoms, after some discussion, finally agree that family is more important than fighting your enemies (assuming the MoE don't threaten to destroy the Earth or smth dire like that, and only want a battle) and at the end they decide to refuse to attend, instead opting to spend time with their families (even Diva and Shaundra, which could serve as development for their mother-daughter relationship). Mothers of Evil, one the other hand, try to force their members into abandoning their families for the fight. The most reluctant of them would be, surprisingly, their leader Mrs. Evil, since compared to most of them, she actually loves her family.

Maybe at the end some MoE and Supermoms finally manage to slip away and try to enact their plan, but they're all too tired or it's too late, so the two teams show up, are either too tired to fight or realize what time it is and have to get back home so they can be ready for their real lives the next day, and go their separate ways, with both sides declaring it a victory.

This adventure could also, in the supporting scenes, explore the relationships between the moms and their families, and serve for character development.

>Plot idea 3.
>Meeting their younger selves

About the Teen Queens, would we get a few flashback stories about important landmarks in their crime fighting careers? Maybe even a story involving time travel where the Teen Queens and the Supermoms team up.

This plot idea should be expanded.

>Scene idea
>Men in refrigerators

A scene (not a whole plot, just one scene) making fun of the «women in refrigerators» trope.
Maybe it goes like this:
>Gunner: Stay here, Star-Striker! I'll deal with him!
>Star-Striker: I'll help you, Gunner!
>Gunner: No! It's too dangerous! You could die! I won't let you!
>cue SS stuffing Gunner into the fridge (maybe it's a super-reinforced nuclear resistant fridge) so that he wouldn't get in the way
>Gunner (from the fridge): Every woman I've ever loved suffered a gruesome fate!..
May take place in the issue where Gunner Graves reappears in SS's life as her ex-boyfriend etc.
>> No. 50446
>>50436
I try to organize them, so they're easily accessed for future use.


>Henchmen Union idea

So, both of the Supermoms' main villains (SSS and LD) hide their involvement in villainous plots. How are the henchmen dressed then? It's an interesting question.

How about, all the henchmen in this universe don't wear any villain's theme, but instead have their own organization. No, not like HYDRA, since it's still a supervillain with a lot of henchmen. But rather like a union, and have them argue every point of their contracts with the villains they work with, go on strikes etc. Maybe they decided to unionize after most villains and heroes retired (during that 17 years break)

This union could have formed from the remains of LD's old villain organization that he left behind when he went into hiding. So, they keep their old design, uniform, insignia etc., but now it's the name and symbols of their henchmen union.

Maybe we could have a recurring character who's a member of the henchmen's union and is always there whenever the Supermoms battle any villain that uses union henchmen. Maybe a couple of recurring henchmen who serves as comedic characters? Or maybe a rookie henchman who's always extraordinary lucky so he gets to witness Supermoms naked etc. (however, he gets beaten down by them afterwards).
>> No. 50447
Thread is up.

http://boards.4chan.org/co/res/60987278
>> No. 50449
>>50399
Garuda, see if you can work an idea we just had in the thread into the script you're working on: the Supermoms' team transportation is a flying minivan, since minivans are a very "mom" thing, it only stands to reason that a team comprised entirely of mothers would use one, albeit souped-up for superhero work.
>> No. 50451
File 139800105244.png - (182.13KB , 537x895 , tropica 12.png )
50451
Some things from the thread.

A nice Tropica.
>> No. 50452
File 139800114490.png - (125.52KB , 571x800 , sigrun 10.png )
50452
Sig Rune in what appears to be workout clothes.
>> No. 50453
File 139800127556.png - (797.01KB , 1590x1654 , 1397988060890.png )
50453
A close-to-finalized Loudspeaker design and a Taekkyon Tiger design.
>> No. 50454
File 139800135249.png - (421.92KB , 753x1878 , tiger2.png )
50454
TT. More leg shown.

Personally I prefer the design from >>50453 more.
>> No. 50455
File 139800222995.jpg - (45.55KB , 550x550 , kaiju 15.jpg )
50455
And my new favorite Kaiju design.
>> No. 50456
File 139801875454.jpg - (30.14KB , 500x500 , kaiju face.jpg )
50456
>>50455
>handlebars
>> No. 50457
File 139801936317.jpg - (119.84KB , 602x1280 , kaiju 16.jpg )
50457
Kaiju redesign sketch by JMD.
>> No. 50458
File 139802535785.jpg - (273.34KB , 661x935 , sigrun 11.jpg )
50458
Dramatic Sig Rune by http://danielolsen.co/
>> No. 50459
>>50453
>>50454

i too like longer version.

running gag she rip em off? satisfy the leggy time to time.
>> No. 50460
File 139803338739.png - (136.15KB , 689x981 , mend 13.png )
50460
A cute Mend by JMD.
>> No. 50461
File 139804139319.png - (136.87KB , 465x582 , 1398040570050.png )
50461
A possibly Evil Star-Striker? by JMD. Not naming this file until I know what's up.
>> No. 50462
File 139804154619.png - (438.95KB , 1021x1572 , hot flash 2.png )
50462
Hot Flash with goggles. I dig it.
>> No. 50463
File 139804318169.png - (380.24KB , 1470x977 , tiger 3.png )
50463
Taekkyon Tiger teaching kickball as part of her job as a gym teacher at SCMS. Maybe she kicked the ball a bit too hard...

We also came up with a name, Chun Tae. Simple, short and sweet.
>> No. 50464
>>50455
>>50456
I really like this design.
>>50462
welding glasses? nice.
>>50453
keep this version,

i love bare legs and feet but i like this one, we can get the leg love in action where it counts like juri.

only crtisim or detail like to see is the mask or something and abs
>> No. 50466
File 139806837653.png - (23.71KB , 383x300 , 1397995466573.png )
50466
You missed a lot, dude

A really adorable pic of Kaiju's familiar
>> No. 50467
File 139806866624.png - (79.04KB , 600x800 , 1397992742775.png )
50467
Also, a cute Mned

These are by grindavikbydaylight.tumblr.com btw
>> No. 50468
File 139806878913.jpg - (286.72KB , 890x1380 , 1398026642417.jpg )
50468
A pic of Protectora
>> No. 50469
File 139806921981.png - (33.93KB , 1095x984 , 1398025004165.png )
50469
A yet another redesign proposition for Kaiju
>> No. 50470
File 139807123258.jpg - (136.50KB , 689x981 , 1398034033789.jpg )
50470
Joke edit of JMD's pic
>> No. 50471
File 139807223176.jpg - (37.43KB , 500x550 , 1398032764729.jpg )
50471
Concept for Star-Striker's Anti-Mom counterpart, Sternbrecher or smth
>> No. 50472
File 139807239567.jpg - (2.83KB , 107x124 , 1398044903265s.jpg )
50472
Also, what was this? I missed it
>> No. 50473
File 13980747212.png - (427.59KB , 600x696 , fryod.png )
50473
>>50472
An idea for a Freud-based villain.

Great thread, guys! Archive is here: http://archive.foolz.us/co/thread/60987278
>> No. 50475
File 13980800193.jpg - (2.88KB , 107x124 , 1398042434394s.jpg )
50475
>>50462
>>50463
Who's the artist of these?
>>50473
And this one?

Also, looks like there was a blue version
>> No. 50477
>>50471
Sternbrecher is "Star-Breaker", though, iirc
"Star-Striker" would be Sternschlager

What's the name of Kaiju's familiar?
>> No. 50479
File 139809807172.jpg - (1.41MB , 2950x4250 , kaijupoll.jpg )
50479
POLL
Choose Kaiju costume designs you like the most!
http://strawpoll.me/1549091

1. Examine picrelated
2. Select SEVERAL options on the poll*
3. Vote!

* Several, because the goal is to find a compromise. So the most popular version may not be your most favorite costume, but at least it will be a costume you like.
>> No. 50481
File 139810254022.png - (426.59KB , 600x696 , fryod2.png )
50481
>>50479
11 is the best one. It's the only one I voted for.
>>50475
Here you go.
>> No. 50482
>>50477
We don't have one yet. It was suggested it start with a K, for alliterative purposes, but I don't know if we should restrict ourselves on that.
>> No. 50483
>>50481
Love ti hear the psycho-analysis of each mom.
>> No. 50486
>>50449

maybe. a little too jokey for me, though, at least as their standard vehicle. maybe a one-off.

i have their spacecraft down as a Quinjet ripoff called the LOV-r (Low-Orbit Vehicle, re-entry model) as a continuation of the extended dyke joke that this thing is turning to be.
>> No. 50496
>>50486
>a little too jokey for me
I dunno, Supermoms is a jokey project in itself. I like the minivan idea, personally

>i have their spacecraft down as a Quinjet ripoff called the LOV-r (Low-Orbit Vehicle, re-entry model) as a continuation of the extended dyke joke that this thing is turning to be.
Wait, what?
Why is it a dyke joke? Does this ship belong to Sig Rune?
If it's a team vehicle (and not a Sig Rune-specific one), a mom joke would fit a lot better than a dyke joke, imo
>> No. 50505
>>50479
Okay, so atm #11 (recent redesign, the one with antennae) and #3 (Bellend's version of Kaiju's 2nd costume) both share the 1st place with 30% votes. It's a tie!

More votes are needed!
>> No. 50511
File 139829432197.jpg - (33.87KB , 425x550 , Number_3.jpg )
50511
Hey guys,
I love Bellend's drawings (he's a great artist, and a huge inspiration) – but Kim here has a point! If #3 gets chosen, we should brainstorm on how to work around this problem. Maybe tweak the design a little (just a little)?

P.S.: Heh, please don't think this is a cunning plan to dissuade you from voting for #3 so that you'd vote for my designs instead lol (I honestly have no stake in this vote, since it's as fun to drawfag other people's designs, as your own, if not more)
>> No. 50513
>>50511
I prefer the sentai helmet style. Domino mask definitely not since we're trying to have each Supermom utilize a different style of identity concealment.
>> No. 50514
>>50513
Well, I tried to be as faithful to Bellend's concept as possible (#3 has a domino mask).
Heh, maybe I'm gonna draw other Kaiju costume designs as well, could be fun
>> No. 50515
>>50514
Go nuts! I don't know if anything will top #11 for me but I'm always open to seeing new costume designs.
>> No. 50522
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50522
>>50479

I voted 1,4,8,11, and 13

I wanted to try my hand at Kaiju back during last weeks thread on /co/ but it honestly stumped then and continues to stump now.

Trying to strike the right balance between Toku, Magical Girl and Kaiju elements is giving me fits.

I like the sharp corners to 1 & 4 and 8 and 11 are strong on the magical girl elements with 11's helmet giving it a nice toku touch. That said I kinda prefer the face paint since the helmet, it just seems very similar To Tropica's concealment method (Lucha Mask) whilst the face paint comes of as unique to only Kaiju.

I've put together a W.I.P design trying to blend the different costume elements as best I could like working in the shoulders from designs 1 and 4 (second row of ref was very helpful in that regard) with a streamlined look but retaining some magical girl elements and a psuedo skirt.

But I feel somethings missing or just not gelling. On that note I've included my references in the pic to better give an idea where I'm approaching it from look wise (they're all wrestling attires but they have design elements borrowing from toku and or magical girls.).

For me It's honestly proving very hard to figure out Kaiju's design so I'm definitely interested in the poll results to seeing how this all pans out.
>> No. 50523
>>50522
I like that design a lot, especially the exposed back so you can see her tattoo.

However, the lack of panties is a definite minus.
>> No. 50524
>>50522
Hey, you're the guy who drew Diva and Iron Maiden, right? I really dig your drawings. You've got quite a professional grasp on human form, and a fluid style.

As for your design, I like it as a whole (btw, I'm the guy who drew 8 and 11, just so you know who you're talking to). If I may offer some critique however (and of course, I invite you to offer any critique you have to my doodles, if you want!), here are my two cents (you'll see they're mostly lore-related things, since your design if viewed as a standalone is pretty solid):

1. The pantyshot. Yes, the 1st (and biggest) criticism I have is this, lol. But in a project like Supermoms, where fanservice and cheesecakey in-jokes are an important part of the charm, it's imo an important thing. Afaik, the main Kaiju-related running gag is that she gets pantyshots, especially when she grows big and half the city is literally looking up her skirt. Just wearing a leotard-looking costume is a different things: she's not embarrassed by her costume being lewd, only by it suddenly becoming lewd. Also, as the characters are supposed to joke around their respective genres, pantyshots do fit in, since they're suspiciously common in the magical girl genre.

2. Cleavage. Compared to all Supermoms, Kaiju is the flattest one (weird that it's the most Asian-stereotypical thing about Kaiju, and none of the project's critics have ever mentioned it, instead focusing on things that aren't really ethnic stereotypes). I like flat-chested MILFs as much as non-flat-chested ones (Kaiju being one of my most favorite characters being proof of that). But, well, a cleavage with an A size chest just looks weird, no offense. I doubt IRL any flat-chested woman would wear a cleavage like that, they usually choose different designs that compliments the type of beauty they have.
However... I could see it being made into another running gag. Maybe usually the Chosen Ones (chosen by this kind of magical costume/tattoo) had a much more shapely chest. It could be a flashback to the time Kim found the costume, with Kim being angry and embarrassed, as the familiar nonchalantly tells her so. Then after she releases him again in modern times, he continued heckling her on her pettanko physique ("Hey, [nickname], you're a mom now! Don't human moms usually grow big breasts?" etc.). Speaking meta, it could also reference the fact that flat chest jokes are pretty common in anime. So, tl;dr: I think the cleavage could stay if it's supported by lore.

3. Inhibitor(s). Just a minor one. There could be just a single inhibitor, but I think it should be made prominent. Note: the thing on her belt area is not the inhibitor, it's the cryptocommunicator (like the rest of the Supermoms have.
...That made me think. Where and how does Tropica wear her cryptocommunicator?!..

4. Haircut. I'd support Kaiju keeping her "conservative Japanese woman" hairbun even in costume. She treasures being refined and cultured, and plays her "traditional housewife" role enthusiatically. Thus, a visual sign like her keeping her conservative hairdo even in costume, would be a nice touch, imo.

5. Stockings shape. The only design criticism I have. The reason I, in my designs, faithfully supported the classic long stockings, is because it's a very, very prominent thing in magical girl costumes. With Kaiju being mainly a play on the magical girl genre, it fits a lot. It even has a specific fetish dedicated to it (or rather, to the naked bits between the stockings and the skirt/shorts), with a distinct term – zettai ryouiki (nope, anime fans are totally not creepy at all, lol). So what I'm saying is, it's a things that's very characteristic of both magical girl manga/anime, and Japanese cheesecake in general – both things that are referenced in the character.

Okay, sorry for so many criticisms, lol. I hope you don't think I hate it, because it's quite the opposite! Thinks I really like about your redesign concept:
1. The facepaint shape. Really, I've been banging my head on the wall for so long, and you nailed it in the first try. Not quite sure about the strong eyeliner, but otherwise, it's a perfect fit!
2. The way you included the tattoo. It's an important part of this character, so it deserves a prominent place in her costume design. You treated it the way it needed to. Out of curiosity, what does it depict?
3. The boots (aside from the zettai ryouiki thing), mainly the feet.
4. The costume's feel in general.

All in all, great job!
>> No. 50525
>>50524
>>50522
P.S.: Oh, and I'm glad that you liked my designs! I'm not as skilled an artist, but I like this project a lot, so I try! I understand your concerns about the helmet, yeah, it does kinda look like Tropica's... maybe it can be kept with the design a bit tweaked? I don't know really. Btw, the idea was that the helmet is a reference to both tokusatsu and kaiju (the monster eyes and antennae; the same way the familiar is a reference to both kaiju and magical girl familiars).

P.P.S.: >and 13
I agree, this should be made the official design!

P.P.P.S.: Are those sum Japanese female wrestlers? This is relevant to my interests...
>> No. 50526
File 139843964166.gif - (2.32MB , 331x248 , Skytwister_Press.gif )
50526
>>50522
>>50524
>>50525

Yeah I did the Diva and Iron Maiden as well as the early Tae Chun/Taekkyon Tiger and LoudSpeaker concepts .

I'm still relatively new to the project and I'm working to get up to speed.

And don't worry about the critiques they're more than welcome they're a huge help.

1. The pantyshot critique is noted, I tried to meet it halfway and work a short skirt into the leotard to kinda give a pseudo skirt and panties look. I'll try and some different approaches and see what can be worked out.

2. & 3. The cut in her top can be adjusted so it's less plunging and more fitting. And more prominent inhibitors can be added in the next design.

4.& 5. I understand the up-do and the conservative look especially as an identifier, the loose hair is more a personal touch to convey movement but it's all good either way to me . The thigh high boots are a sentai touch (think Gatchaman) on my hand but I can work them to resemble the sockings and attempt at the zettai ryouiki look .

That said the face paint is still up in the air for me and the back tattoo is just a place holder for now. I want to clean it up and base it off of Hannibal Chau's Kaiju symbol from Pacific Rim (the symbol is in the ref).

P.S.
I'm a big fan of your stuff I really enjoy how simply and effectively you portray your designs.

P.P.S.
Design #13 would definitely make drawing Kaiju easier.

P.P.P.S
Yes they're Japanese Female wrestlers (Joshi Puroresu) with Chaparrita Asari prominently featured (pic most definitely related). Joshi is a treasure for costume ideas because they're so many interesting and varied attires.
>> No. 50527
File 139844203579.jpg - (50.29KB , 637x251 , G-Force_-_group_shot2.jpg )
50527
>>50526
>Japanese Female wrestlers
Mmm, lovely. Thanks for the name reference, she looks pretty cute I must say

...Anyway.
>I tried to meet it halfway and work a short skirt into the leotard to kinda give a pseudo skirt and panties look
Yes, I understood your intention, but the problem is, if the panties are visible the whole time (and part of the leotard), there's no point in a pantyshot.
>The cut in her top can be adjusted so it's less plunging and more fitting.
Actually, I don't know, I'm starting to like the pettanko gag more and more, the more I think about it! Let's ask the other anons' opinions, maybe?
>the loose hair is more a personal touch to convey movement
I see. I actually was also thinking about Kaiju/Kim's hair from a graphic standpoint, but a different one. Her neatly tied up hair represents her very reserved personality. So if it gets disheveled, it could signify that she's really having trouble (kind of like Worf effect, since she's probably the most physically powerful member of the team). And the rare moments she lets her hair down, can signify either really intimate moments (e.g., that point in the script when she get dressed, alone with her husband) or when she lets herself go wild (as I drawfagged in >>50279, I remember it being a proposed scene in #4, don't know if it's still planned to be there). ...Oh man, I got long winded again, sorry!
>The thigh high boots are a sentai touch (think Gatchaman)
I actually thought of Gatchaman when I first saw it, just wasn't sure you used it as reference. But... look at picrelated! Look at the men! And the look at Jun (the girl)! All the men have diagonally cut "sentai-style" boots and leggings. Jun is the only one who has straight-cut boots and a short skirt. Why? Because zettai ryouiki. I tells ya, it's some kind of conspiracy in Japanese mass media.
By the way, while not being a magical girl, her design may serve as an additional inspiration for Kaiju's design, maybe
>That said the face paint is still up in the air for me
I like it the way it is! Again, let's wait for other anons' opinions
>I'm a big fan of your stuff I really enjoy how simply and effectively you portray your designs.
Aww, thanks! Actually, it's not so simple... it's a lot of banging my head against the wall in the process lol

>Design #13 would definitely make drawing Kaiju easier.
It's decided then! Okay everyone, the discussion is over! #13 is now canon.
>> No. 50528
File 139844268673.jpg - (37.20KB , 448x319 , gatchaman-team.jpg )
50528
>>50527
>>50526
P.S.: I understand why you looked at wrestlers for inspiration, since a lot of superheroes were inspired by wrestlers and strongmen. However (you may disagree with me, though), if we analyze Kaiju's role on the team and her powers, she doesn't get to do much strongman-type things.

Yes, she's one of the main powerhouses. But her powers are such that she doesn't have to get rough-and-dirty. Star-Striker and especially Sig Rune are more like that. Kaiju is, imo at least, more of a "glass cannon". She's very powerful in her Daikaiju form, but she usually doesn't need to really wrestle in that form, for many opponents just a few graceful punches and kicks will do the job. Plus, if an enemy manages to damage her inhibitor(s), she'd become powerless. So, very powerful but with a weak defense. Plus let's not forget her Chibikaiju form, which should be also referenced in the design. It that form, she's more of a scout and a surgical strike attacker, than a wrestler. An finally, she has the most petite and fragile looking stature of all Supermoms; so the costume should complement that.

Anyway, those are just my ramblings on the subject, feel free to disagree or argue – as they say, truth is born in arguments!
>> No. 50530
I wish there was a way we could combine the sentai-style helmet from >>50456 while still showcasing Kaiju's conservative hairstyle.
>> No. 50532
>>50522
I gotta say tha tattoo look good in here it doesnt look like E.honda or something scary
>> No. 50533
>>50530
Super form?
or maybe a light/energy/aura/magic 'helmet'

Isn't the Hannibal Chau's Kaiju symbol chinese inspired?
I thought it was a dragonfly tat.


kinda want to share idea of T.Tiger's story but don't want to lose momentum on Kaiju, might post tomorrow

>> No. 50534
>>50522
I like this one, it's pretty cool.

>>50530
How about something like Hank Pym's ant man helmet, but in reverse? At normal and small sizes no helmet but at giant size the helmet sprouts out.
>> No. 50535
File 139850975431.jpg - (1.02MB , 2500x2500 , supermoms02.jpg )
50535
New thread starter pic.

I used the current Kaiju design; will update it once we've finally settled on a new one.
>> No. 50536
>>50534
>How about something like Hank Pym's ant man helmet, but in reverse? At normal and small sizes no helmet but at giant size the helmet sprouts out.
I think, for consistency, it becomes active both in big and small forms. Maybe Kaiju herself can press the inhibitor button, and the helmet constructs itself in a cool Transformers-esque way. Without the helmet, she has the conservative haircut and the facepaint from >>50522
>> No. 50537
>>50522
Did you draw these? >>50463 >>50462
>> No. 50539
http://boards.4chan.org/co/thread/61205614

New thread!
>> No. 50540
File 139853728546.png - (203.22KB , 1000x1000 , bp.png )
50540
Anushka Azarov, AKA Battle Pussy. Villain. No other information given.
>> No. 50542
File 139860220157.png - (408.55KB , 1428x588 , kaijus.png )
50542
Some Kaijus from Bellend.
>> No. 50543
File 13986025097.png - (728.64KB , 1575x1718 , kaiju 17.png )
50543
Kaiju redesign idea. I rather like this one.
>> No. 50544
File 139860262685.png - (358.04KB , 435x1368 , kaiju 18.png )
50544
Another one. Hopefully this and >>50543 end up being the design we go with for Kaiju.
>> No. 50545
File 139860396591.jpg - (43.29KB , 413x550 , kaiju 19.jpg )
50545
More Kaiju!
>> No. 50546
File 139860525684.jpg - (76.94KB , 413x550 , kaiju 20.jpg )
50546
Fixed???
>> No. 50547
File 139860596249.png - (312.35KB , 983x2274 , kaiju 21.png )
50547
We're getting there! Hopefully we have a /co/nsensus on Kaiju before today's over.
>> No. 50548
File 139861469843.png - (158.14KB , 791x800 , phero-mona 4.png )
50548
Phero-Mona by anon.
>> No. 50549
File 139861497586.png - (315.15KB , 434x1367 , kaiju 22.png )
50549
Kaiju-chan~
>> No. 50550
File 139861856894.jpg - (79.10KB , 413x550 , 1398612677913.jpg )
50550
>>50546
Final fixed version.
>> No. 50551
File 13986186741.jpg - (30.29KB , 300x550 , 1398544838412.jpg )
50551
Also, a weird earlier variant
>> No. 50552
File 139861876156.jpg - (105.85KB , 800x583 , 1398609875511.jpg )
50552
Kim wearing a "modest" evening dress
>> No. 50553
File 139861883218.png - (92.04KB , 736x700 , 1398616509384.png )
50553
Phero-Mona vs Mend
>> No. 50554
File 13986248527.png - (317.12KB , 942x2270 , kaiju 23.png )
50554
This is most likely the finalized Kaiju design, at long last.
>> No. 50555
File 139862598819.jpg - (79.61KB , 413x550 , Super_Kaiju_64_DS.jpg )
50555
>>50554
My take on this. I agree, this should be the final design.
>> No. 50556
>>50547
>/co/nsensus

Do you know how many times a consensus has worked out in the past 8 years of /co/ what-have-you?
Actually trying to get a consensuses dooms whatever it is about to failure 99% of the time. Either it fails because it takes too fucking long to make and people lose interest, or it fails because whoever didn't get they want will curse it.

If you even manage to get a 40% majority in favor of one option, then that should be good enough.
>> No. 50559
File 139865085378.png - (161.53KB , 1061x1293 , 1398647744340.png )
50559
A different idea for Iron Maiden, perhaps she transforms from her human disguise to robot form?
>> No. 50561
File 139868505288.gif - (17.57KB , 320x180 , iron maiden 5.gif )
50561
A .gif of Iron Maiden bursting out of her human disguise.
>> No. 50562
File 139868512441.jpg - (32.53KB , 450x500 , 1398682314853.jpg )
50562
young love~
>> No. 50564
File 139877168978.png - (343.64KB , 1014x1358 , tiger 4.png )
50564
A possible mask design for Taekkyon Tiger.
>> No. 50565
File 139877180292.png - (335.78KB , 962x1333 , tiger 5.png )
50565
More TT.
>> No. 50569
File 139879396522.png - (398.86KB , 1060x2120 , diva 13 sketch.png )
50569
Diva.
>> No. 50571
File 139885117426.png - (194.55KB , 692x726 , 1398767915570.png )
50571
Thread died while I was out, and foolz refuses to work for some reason ;_;

Also, a new Tropica from the thread
>> No. 50572
File 139885226193.jpg - (135.59KB , 1500x1000 , TQ_Logo.jpg )
50572
Also, a concept for Teen Queens logo that looks like something from Saturday morning cartoons
>> No. 50573
Great thread everybody! I think the focus for the next thread should be finalizing Taekkyon Tiger, working on the families of Phero-Mona and Hot Flash, and hopefully getting more cool drawings of the characters!
>> No. 50574
If I may, I'd like to repost my opinion I expressed just before the thread's end:

>re: civilian characters, and superheroes'/villains' civil identites
I personally don't think this is something that needs to have a single approved look that has to be brainstormed like Kaiju's costume. After all, those aren't uniforms, these are ordinary day-to-day looks for these characters, they don't need to stay exactly the same!
There are generally two ways to go about it:
1. The TMNT/Darkwing Duck way, where e.g. April, a TV reporter/presenter, wore the exact same outfit both on screen and in her daily life (the same with Irma, Vernon, Burne, Drake Mallard, Gosalyn, Launchpad etc)
2. The Ghostbusters/WITCH way, where Jeanine changed her look every season, and WITCH girls wore new civilian outfits all the time.
I'm a huge fan of both TMNT and Darkwing Duck, but here I think the second way would be better. It just gives the artists more freedom to experiment (and come up with new sexy day-to-day looks for moms, and different outfits for other characters).
tl;dr: While more art of the civilian identities and civilian characters is always needed, this shouldn't be an elimination process to find the one single ultimate look for each one – but rather, those should be treated as different takes on the same characters, all of which could be used in different stories.

Also, I'd like to suggest that, while recurring characters probably need to be designed preemptively – how about we leave the one-shot characters' design to the artists who will (I hope) draw the respective issues? Those are mostly one-shot villains, and maybe some one-shot heroes. That way, there would be some element of surprise

What do you think?
>> No. 50578
>>50574
I think it would be good to have general representations of each character's civilian identity as reference points, with allowances for variations in clothing on an individual issue basis. I support drawings of the moms in their civilian clothes used to establish a base for "this is generally how this mom dresses." While those drawings would not be the end-all be-all "this is how this character dresses all the time," it would provide a frame of reference for artists.
>> No. 50579
>>50574
>>50578
2 cents of mine:
As an artist, I don't think there need to be graphical guidelines as to the characters' civilian clothes... UNLESS they're something out of ordinary. But even then, those pics could serve as an example rather than a guideline (for me, at least).
For example, Mend at home just dresses in casual clothes that fit her body type. That doesn't deserve a pic, imo (tho more delicious Mend in civilian clothes is always a nice thing). But Kaiju prefers to wear Japanese traditional clothes at home. That's notable. Here we see a pic of that >>50278 (drawn by yours truly), but it's just an example – e.g., JMD may come with a different type of Japanese traditional clothing for his drawings of Kaiju. The only constant is the information that could be posted just in text form.

Anyway, my thoughts on the matter (feel free to discuss and offer your suggestions/corrections):
>Star-Striker
Home: Casual
Work: Business attire (there already were 2 versions, btw: one with a skirt and one with pants – that's what I'm talking about, those things are just examples, not strict guidelines)
>Diva
Home: Casual
>Kaiju
Home: Japanese traditional
Work: Lab coat. What's underneath? Some very modest casual?
>Sig Rune
Home: Classy rich woman attire
Work: "Hot teacher" style (compared to her coworkers who wear more realistic schoolteacher clothes)
>Tropica
Home: Sexy casual
Work: Sexy casual or Sexy dresses, sometimes with Latin style elements (e.g., flower in hair, etc)
>Mend
Home: Casual (+ the infamous "Kiss the Cook" apron) (Where are all the naked apron Mend pics? I'm sad)
Will post more ideas on other characters later. Let's discuss!
>> No. 50580
>>50579
I think Diva needs some sort of flashy clothing to wear when outside of the home, since she's this famous ex-singer and all.
>> No. 50581
>>50580
Ah, good point, totally forgot about that! What kind of clothing do former R&B stars wear?
>> No. 50582
>>50581
I'm not sure, but it has to be flashy, definitely.

>>50579
I'm picturing Mend's normal clothing at home being stuff like her apron, etc. but when she's out and about we see her tomboy past reflected in her clothing choices.
>> No. 50585
POLL RESULTS:

KAIJU POLL 1
>#4 (long-lasting design 1) & #8 (long-lasting design 2)
11 votes each
>#11 (bug helmet)
9 votes
>#3 (Bellend's sketch)
6 votes
>#13 (panties only final destination
4 votes (which means one of the writefriends now just has to include a scene like this into one of the scripts)[spoiler] [spoiler](could even probably be me)
>#2, #5, #6, #10 (two costumes similar to #4, and two mostly robot/tokusatsu-themed)
2 votes each
>everything else
1 vote each

These results are very interesting, and could help us design new characters. However! However, they won't have any consequences to the look of Kaiju's costume, because:

KAIJU POLL 2
>Like the latest redesign
11 votes
>Dislike the latest redesign
3 votes

It's official, ladies and gentlemen! Kaiju finally has a redesigned costume. It's: >>50554 >>50555

TAEKKYON TIGER JOB POLL
>Schoolteacher by day, Lewd Training Dojang master by night
>Schoolteacher by day, Lewd Training Dojang master by night, Yoga & Pilates Club trainer on weekends
4 votes each
>Lewd Training Dojang master only
>First was Schoolteacher by day & Lewd Training Dojang master by night, then after the moms created their new HQ, retired from her school job, working as Lewd Training Dojang master on weekdays and Yoga & Pilates Club trainer on weekends
2 votes each
>Schoolteacher only
>Schoolteacher on weekdays, Yoga & Pilates Club trainer on weekends
>Lewd Training Dojang master on weekdays, Yoga & Pilates Club trainer on weekends
>Other (explained by the voter as "Make sure not to overdo the lewdity in lewd training")
1 vote each

These results need processing, maybe even a few more votes. What's clear, however, is that the Lewd Training Dojang definitely has to be at least one of her jobs (all top voted options have Lewd Training Dojang in them, and a lot of less popular options do as well).
>> No. 50586
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>>50579
Actually, thinking of that, I think we all know what the real important part of lore is.
What do the Supermoms wear to bed?
Because, face it, when we fantasize about spending a night with our favorite Supermom, we definitely need to imagine her looking just right.

So, without further ado, my thoughts on it:
>Star-Striker
She likes elegant fancy lingerie, so she obviously has a collection of elegant fancy nighties as well.
>Diva
Short satin nightie probably
>Kaiju
Picrelated obviously. A high-waisted nightie (high waist because small breasts + skinny frame), and a Japanese MILF trademark low-tied ponytail.
>Sig Rune
Nekkers (that was already covered in an issue script, IIRC)
>Tropica
Something sex-ay. While SS is more interested in an expensive elegance, Tropica goes straight for sex appeal.
>Mend
Cute pajamas with little teddy bears on 'em.

Your ideas?
>> No. 50588
>>50586
We definitely need to see the Sigrun/Olivia scene from the solo script. Not saying you should draw it, but someone should.
>> No. 50589
>>50579
One thing that does need to be clear-cut in regards to outfits is the moms' yoga outfits. This is a request for a drawfag to draw the moms in their yoga outfits.

Also, I think that for Iron Maiden, she should always wear the same clothing while in her human disguise, since she doesn't quite "get" people. Perhaps the clothing is actually part of her human disguise?
>> No. 50595
Guys. Editing the wiki atm, saw someone add a single change to Mend's article:
>"red hair" changed to "strawberry blonde hair"
Wait, what? Mend was a redhead since the get go (e.g. see OP pic)

Changed it back.
>> No. 50596
Also, have we agreed what the name of Star-Striker's Anti-Mom analogue is? Sternschlager? Sternbrecher?
>> No. 50597
>>50596
Sternbrecher sounds better. While it's not an exact analogue of "Star-Striker," "Star-Breaker" sounds more evil.
>> No. 50598
>>50597
Yeah, kinda like Skywalker/Starkiller
>> No. 50599
>>50595
I changed it.

If Mend's hair is red, why is it drawn strawberry blonde?
>> No. 50600
File
Removed
Red vs. Strawberry blonde

I would also like to encourage our esteemed artists to take caution over styling Star-Strike's hair. Some designs, as attractive as they may be, have taken too strong of a resemblance to Helen Parr's hair from The Incredibles.
>> No. 50601
>>50597
That works; after all, she's not just a German Star-Striker, she's an evil version
>> No. 50603
>>50599
>>50600
True, some artists draw it a bit yellow-ish. But yeah, she was designed as a ginger with freckles when she was first conceived (e.g. see here >>48797).

As for Star-Striker... Well, she's usually depicted with a haircut resembling Helen Parr because that's how she looked like in her establishing drawing (>>49193, which is actually v3.0). Most artists draw her like that, though sometimes she's drawn with a shorter haircut (e.g. >>50280), which is kind of similar to the very first pics of her (>>48795 >>48796). However, the latter haircut may now look too similar to Diva's new hairdo (>>50284)
>> No. 50604
Nu thred I guess: http://boards.4chan.org/co/thread/61458920
>> No. 50605
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50605
New art! Some sexy sketches
>> No. 50606
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50606
And a bootylicious Diva
>> No. 50607
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50607
updated op pic
>> No. 50608
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50608
New characters: Cloud Man and his wife Cloud Woman aka the villainess Tempest Lady

>The idea of the superhero wife who leads a double life as a villainess caught my attention. I'm not sure about the cheating part; I just see her as a bored housewife who gets her fill of thrills and excitement by leading a supervillainess life, doing what she wants, wrecking shit up, wearing provocative outfits, flirting with the baddest boys out there – but I don't know about the cheating part. But maybe that's just me.

>Ah, and by the way, I based them on the names "Cloud Man & Cloud Woman" from one of the scripts.

>As I see them, none of them is much of an asshole to the other or a pushover or whatever. They're just two very different and not quite compatible people, who both feel that incompatibility, but instead of confronting it or dealing with it, they just push on desperately trying to make the relationship work. But they're very different persons, with different interests and life goals and interesting.

>Cloud Man is a talented professor who invented the Cloud Controlling Contraption that gives him his powers. To market his invention to the investors, he hired a young upstart actress, who he posed as his "sidekick", "Cloud Girl". After he got his sponsorships, he started working as a corporate-sponsored superhero, partly as a way to test and promote his contraption. Cloud Girl stayed with him, and soon became his partner Cloud Woman. Later they started a workplace relationship married. But some time later, Cloud Woman became bored with this scientist-superhero life, missing her wild bohemian actress life. She decided to lead a double life as a villainess (maybe one of the supervillains convinced her to do that?) Tempest Lady, using her cloud powers in a more sinister way.
>> No. 50609
>>50608
I can't help but imagine they have Cloud Kids too. A whole family enterprise. Maybe the kids' names are Stratus and Cumulonimbus.
>> No. 50610
>>50608
What if her name as a villain were The Tempest Temptress?
>> No. 50611
Wtf. Did the thread just die?

>>50609
Frankly, I don't see CW as a mom. Her behavior would seem just too irresponsible and bad. If it's a childless marriage, well, she's just a bored housewife looking for new thrills. If she's a mom, that's just very irresponsible to the kids, and I don't think such feels would fit well with the lighthearted tone of the project, frankly.

>>50610
I like this name! But how about... Tempestress?
>> No. 50613
>>50608
I think the cheating part may come up later in the story (if it comes up at all). At the start, she could just lead a wild life, which includes a lot of partying and flirting with a lot of men, but no actual cheating.
>> No. 50615
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50615
I didn't see the thread this week :(

>>50605
I still think a shemagh type mask for TT would be better.
of course with a tiger theme on it.

Give expression on eyes and more intimidating.
>> No. 50618
Writefag here, the thread unfortunately died already. I'm on vacation and was unable to get to steady Internet until just now so I wasn't able to post in the thread like normal. Next week I won't be able to contribute much either (although maybe a little early on) but hopefully we can get more good ideas done in the meantime.

I like the idea for Cloudman and Cloudwoman, with Cloudwoman being a villain by night using the dark side of her powers. I think it would make a really good plot for an issue, perhaps something dealing with the some of or all of the Supermoms working with the duo, battling against this evil villain, who is really Cloudwoman herself!

>>50610
I like this name.
>> No. 50620
>>50615
That kind of works, since TT is supposed to be kind of intimidating. But she has to take that mask off like 50% times, since it's difficult to show emotions with a covered mouth.

>>50618
If I ever get to writing the "Beverly's ex-BF" issue, which I want to, I think I can use it in it, since it has kind of similar themes. Or maybe it should be a different issue. I'm thinking that the identity of Tempestress/Tempest Temptress should be only revealed in the end of the issue, and maybe only to the reader (the heroes would thwart Tempestress' plans, but won't learn she's Cloud Woman).
>> No. 50622
Let's address the elephant in the room.

Please read my whole post before typing up an angry or dismissive response.

Candy/Diva is the most boring character among the Supermoms. Everyone on /co/ rates her as the least favorite. And I have to agree with them. Some artists are desperately trying to make her more appealing by giving her "dat ass", but I really don't see it having much effect. Former R&B singer? Can you relate to that in 2014? Be honest, does that really draw your attention?

You want my advice? Redesign Candy as a fitness & yoga instructor or a tennis coach (former tennis player, could loosely base on the Williams sisters). We have no athletic characters among the Supermoms. I think Candy could fill that role perfectly.

Would you rather see Candy in one of those retro sparkly costumes as a (former) rhythm & blues singer, or Candy sweating in yoga pants, sports bra and headband singing "One-two, ♫ one-two, now one leg up! ♫ " as a fitness & yoga instructor?

You can still keep some of her vocal abilities. For example you can change her story as a girl who was taught how to sing by her parents and for her superpower you can make her "singing" (instructor chanting) have a strong hypnotic effect.

---

I'm really typing this on the fly and I have no intention of re-organizing this rambling of a post, because I just thought of another idea. IF you guys are vehemently opposed to this drastic change for Candy/Diva... then why not keep everything we have so far about Diva -- she can still be a former R&B singer and everything -- but NOW instead of being unemployed, she has become a fitness & yoga instructor already for the past few years.

I can see you some of you rejecting the first idea because of the amount of work that has already been spent on making the Diva character, but I cannot see you rejecting this second idea of making her current occupation a fitness instructor instead of being unemployed doing nothing.

The bottom line is Diva's character needs further discussion and revamping because we cannot deny her current lack of appeal, throw our arms up saying "lel whatever too bad" and just leave it at that.
>> No. 50624
>>50620
yeah, She not active hero. I imagine pull it down since when wearing it these days she wears it as a momento of the good ol' days and get 'her head in the game' in training or what not.

Also give excuse to be expressive with the eyes, you know?
>> No. 50625
>>50622
>Candy/Diva is the most boring character among the Supermoms. Everyone on /co/ rates her as the least favorite. And I have to agree with them. Some artists are desperately trying to make her more appealing by giving her "dat ass", but I really don't see it having much effect. Former R&B singer? Can you relate to that in 2014? Be honest, does that really draw your attention?

I don't think she's boring, you need to give the character a chance.

>You want my advice? Redesign Candy as a fitness & yoga instructor or a tennis coach (former tennis player, could loosely base on the Williams sisters). We have no athletic characters among the Supermoms. I think Candy could fill that role perfectly.

Diva is staying as a former singer. End of discussion.

We cannot make huge changes to the characters, otherwise we will scare off artists and writers. It's too late right now.

I think Sig Rune is considered athletic anyway.

>Would you rather see Candy in one of those retro sparkly costumes as a (former) rhythm & blues singer, or Candy sweating in yoga pants, sports bra and headband singing "One-two, ♫ one-two, now one leg up! ♫ " as a fitness & yoga instructor?

Probably second one, but I think I've already seen Sig Rune in fitness clothing.

>I'm really typing this on the fly and I have no intention of re-organizing this rambling of a post, because I just thought of another idea. IF you guys are vehemently opposed to this drastic change for Candy/Diva... then why not keep everything we have so far about Diva -- she can still be a former R&B singer and everything -- but NOW instead of being unemployed, she has become a fitness & yoga instructor already for the past few years.

Maybe. I do agree that unemployment doesn't sound exciting. But the whole point of Supermoms is that super-heroines are really just living double lives as ordinary moms with ordinary lives.

>The bottom line is Diva's character needs further discussion and revamping because we cannot deny her current lack of appeal, throw our arms up saying "lel whatever too bad" and just leave it at that.

Again, I think her "lack of appeal" is due to the fact we've hardly seen her. Give the current Diva a chance.
>> No. 50626
>>50622
Hi! I won't yell at you, actually I'm gonna say thanks for such an in-depth analysis! Not often people do that.

I agree that as of now, Diva is the least popular of the Supermoms. Let's analyze the points you make, and see if there's a solution.

>Some artists are desperately trying to make her more appealing by giving her "dat ass", but I really don't see it having much effect.
Could it be just because we got ~2.5 arts of Diva, compared to over9000 pics of Star-Striker, Tropica or Mend? But then again, you could argue "cause and effect"... maybe she gets few drawings because people don't like her... Dunno.

>Former R&B singer? Can you relate to that in 2014?
Well, firstly, the style is still alive (though not as popular as it was then). Secondly, a question to the oldfags: have you not fap-- I mean, fawned over Mariah Carey or Janet Jackson back in the day? And lastly, the style doesn't really matter. We can just omit it, and say she's an "ex pop-star". The style is not an important point for her character, the music stardom is.

>Be honest, does that really draw your attention?
I think, the thing that should draw your attention are her awesome powers, her personality or her sex appeal. Not the style of her music.

>Redesign Candy as a fitness & yoga instructor or a tennis coach (former tennis player, could loosely base on the Williams sisters).
We already have a fitness instructor character (Taekkyon Tiger). As for tennis player, super tennis powers? It may be me, but I don't see it as more exciting than super sound/music powers.

>We have no athletic characters among the Supermoms. I think Candy could fill that role perfectly.
Actually, we do.
Sig Rune is the resident musclegirl. She's the melee tank, having superstrength and supertoughness, and a lot of mythical melee weapons. Her body is tall and muscled.
Star-Striker is also a melee fighter, but not a superhuman one (rather like Batman or Nightwing). She tries to keep herself in shape to be able to perform all those crazy martial arts.
Kaiju is also pretty fit, though more like acrobatic/parkour.
So there, you have it, three fit characters (well, 2.5).
Meanwhile, we have no "big booty" member...

>Would you rather see [...] Candy sweating in yoga pants
Of course I do! Actually, I want to see all of them sweating in yoga pants (or equivalents thereof). And – that's why their HQ is disguised as a "Yoga & Pilates Club"! I definitely hope future scripts will include scenes of them doing exercises in their club.

>for her superpower you can make her "singing" (instructor chanting) have a strong hypnotic effect.
But we already have at least two characters (both villains, though) with different type of hypnotic effects: Phero-Mona (whose Fumes affect peoples' instincts and thus control their behavior) and Headmaster (whose whole schtick is hypnosis).


I'm really typing this on the fly and I have no intention of re-organizing this rambling of a post, because I just thought of another idea. IF you guys are vehemently opposed to this drastic change for Candy/Diva... then why not keep everything we have so far about Diva -- she can still be a former R&B singer and everything -- but NOW instead of being unemployed, she has become a fitness & yoga instructor already for the past few years.

I can see you some of you rejecting the first idea because of the amount of work that has already been spent on making the Diva character, but I cannot see you rejecting this second idea of making her current occupation a fitness instructor instead of being unemployed doing nothing.

>The bottom line is Diva's character needs further discussion and revamping because we cannot deny her current lack of appeal, throw our arms up saying "lel whatever too bad" and just leave it at that.
I agree with that! I definitely want to see her succeed, because I want to see her have a more prominent role in stories, and more hot art of her!

---

Now, please don't be discouraged by my comments. First, these are, like, just my opinions, man. Second, I may be wrong. Am I wrong? If so, please correct me.

---

And now, I'd like to express some of my thoughts on why Diva may be not quite popular.
>1. Personality
Star-Striker is all leader-y and righteous and kind of pushy. Tropica is flirty and fiesty. Kaiju is shy and reserved. Sig Rune is a stoic barbarian type. Mend is sweet and motherly, and a former tomboy. But who is Diva?
From what I've read, some write her as a sassy "oh no you di'nt" lady, some as a cheerful always friendly woman, some as a somewhat flirty woman always on search for a man. But, well, cheerful? Mend is more cheerful. Flirty? Tropica is more flirty. Essentially, she is a bit bland, personality-wise.
>2. Costume
I really don't want to start another costume war... but I feel that Diva's costume is kind of indecisive. In this project, all those costumes are pretty sexualized. Which means, they heavily accentuate certain body parts and curves. But Diva's costume, it's kinda like it can't decide where it wants to draw our attention to. It just has holes all over the place... and actually, her supposed main feature, the booty, isn't accentuated at all!

What could I suggest? I need to think more about this, but right now, I have one idea:
In the last thread, there was a suggestion to switch Diva and Mend's origins a bit. Make Diva's powers alien-based (a lot of things point to it: the futuristic costume, the visor, the whole construct-making thing that can't be explained by a simple mutation, etc), and have a non-alien punch Mend in the lips.
If so, we could play up the alien theme a bit with Diva. Maybe tweak the costume a bit, as it's alien and can look a bit more weird and futuristic. Strategically organize holes so that they don't look all over the place.
As for the personality... I don't know at the moment. Let's discuss!
>> No. 50627
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50627
What's the style of humor in Supermoms anyway?

The whole alien-punching-lips thing didn't make any sense to me at all, so I assumed it has random satirical humor like in Bobobo-bo or Sheep in the Big City.
>> No. 50628
>>50627
>What's the style of humor in Supermoms anyway?
Whichever the writefriends write.
For me, it feels like a cross between Darkwing Duck and Petit Spirou, though I may be wrong.

>The whole alien-punching-lips thing didn't make any sense to me at all
I think the idea was, Mend is really sweet and motherly now, but was a tough-as-nails tomboy as a teen. Likewise, her powers are very nice and helpful, healing people and whatnot. But their origin is not something lovey-dovey, she just got into fisticuffs with someone who has regenerative abilities, and he punched her right in the lips – that's why her lips' touch can regenerate peoples' wounds.
>> No. 50630
>>50626
So, what do you suggest for an alien-based Diva origin story?
>> No. 50631
i think candy labelle in her civilian identity would look better with nappy hair. she would look more black than indian.

though she'd have to use a hair straightener every time she dresses up in her diva costume.

i dunno, her civilian hair just looks bland to me. should i bother drawing some nappy hair concepts?

http://the-conservatory.wikia.com/wiki/Diva
>> No. 50632
>>50630
There could be a lot of possibilities here!
- Maybe it's the same story, just the "lozenge" wasn't just a chemical, it was actually an alien capsule with nanomachines and stuff
- Or maybe the "lozenge" was actually a whole alien spaceship. The aliens being tiny microscopic energy beings, who now live in Candy's throat, and help her do all her super stuff
- Or maybe she was abducted by aliens, but it wasn't for some terrifying experiments, they were just some alien teenagers who took her on a wild trip across the galaxy, crashing alien parties across the universe and whatnot, and gave her some souvenirs as a parting gift.
- Or maybe she's actually an alien herself.

>>50631
I'm personally all for nappy hair (I prefer my black women really dark-skinned and nappy-haired, my jungle fever is that hardcore), but maybe other anons think different. However:
>should i bother drawing some nappy hair concepts?
I think you should try that regardless. Maybe it'll look so cool everyone agrees to it. Would be interesting to see what you've got in mind.
>though she'd have to use a hair straightener every time she dresses up in her diva costume.
I don't see why she has to do it. I think the "note hair" she had in her teenage years could work with nappy hair as well (if you draw it a bit stylized)
>> No. 50633
>>50632
Whatever the origin of her powers is, it has to be something that's a part of her genetics, so a version of her powers get passed down to Shaundra.
>> No. 50634
>>50633
It could work with all of these, and maybe some others I haven't thought about:
- The nanomachines are attracted to a specific genetic markup, so some of them have migrated to Shaundra due to her similar genes
- "Hey! I didn't give y'all permission to settle in my daughter's body!" "Come on, what you gonna do? We're dealing with overpopulation here!"
- These alien souvenirs included some genetic changes that were inherited by Shaundra
-Obvious. If Candy's an alien, Shaundra's a half alien, and thus has a watered-down version of her mom's powers
What's funny, it was never explained how Shaundra could inherit powers gained by swallowing a chemical.
>> No. 50635
>>50634
"Hey! Ain't no damn alien punk gettin' even close to my daughter's body until she's 18, ya hear me?!"
>> No. 50639
>>50634
I think we should go with the "Candy's an alien" gimmick. Maybe we could do a parody of Superman's origin, where baby Candy was sent to Earth and her Earth parents discovered her? Maybe Candy is from a race of vocally-gifted aliens and even as an infant she had a lovely voice, and her parents adopted her but never told her her origins, her true powers not emerging until later.
>> No. 50640
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50640
>>50639
I like the alien idea! Though it means that we need some more actually black characters

>powers
Maybe it's the aliens' way of communication? They communicate using sound-based constructs. It's normal on their planet, but on Earth it can be used as a superpower


In other news,
WHO BEST MOM
>> No. 50641
>>50640
Sorry, but Best Mom is clearly Star-Striker.
>> No. 50642
>>50639
so space amazon alien?
or alien fall in love with human and integrated with humanity over the years
>> No. 50643
>>50642
I think the former. It's less complicated.
>> No. 50644
>>50642
>so space amazon alien?
Not amazon. Sig Rune is our resident amazon.
Just an alien baby, last of her species, I guess
>or alien fall in love with human and integrated with humanity over the years
Won't work: her ex was a major jerk, and she hasn't had any meaningful relationship before or after
>> No. 50645
>>50644
>her ex
We haven't set anything in stone for Shaundra's father yet. I say we shouldn't mention him at all within the scripts until we for sure have a plan for him.
>> No. 50646
>>50645
I think the plan for him is already set in stone:
a) he was a jerk
b) we never, ever, mention him in the comics (it should be kind of like our Uncle Ben's resurrection)
>> No. 50647
>>50646
No details about Shaundra's father should be set in stone at all. I feel we shouldn't commit to any aspect of his character until we're ready to do an actual storyline on him.

Maybe he's not around for a different reason other than being a jerk. Maybe he died. Maybe he got kidnapped by aliens or lost in space or something. There are a billion reasons why he wouldn't be around anymore, and we're limiting the possible story we could eventually tell by pinning him as a jerk from day one.
>> No. 50648
>>50647
Okay.
I just think we should never do a story about him, to keep him in a state of perpetual mystery.
>> No. 50649
>>50648
I don't want to take him off the table entirely, just until we come up with a really good story for him. We shouldn't force anything, though.
>> No. 50653
IT'S NOT TOO LATE.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/4aob6w4y1d8745q/supermoms%203.celtx

featuring many characters i pulled out of my ass because i needed to populate the world and didn't have time or energy to go through the threat for them. apart from Takkeyon Tiger, whom i'm not even sure i used right. whatevs. i'll fix it in post.
>> No. 50654
also, best mom is Sigrun.
>> No. 50655
>>50653
I like it a lot! Keep going!

I think I'll try drawing my vision of GG, though I admit I'm not quite good at drawing men

My 2 cents, which can however be disregarded if you disagree:
>Gunner
I think he's turned out a bit too serious. I feel he should have a bit more pronounced flaws, to make him have more potential for comedic interactions. Obviously you're not going with the "has-been Larry Laffer" suggestion, and I'm not urging you to make something _that_ comedic. But maybe play up his flaws a bit, while keeping him from becoming complete buffoon. What flaws though? In the script excerpt, he's a bit vain and has an ego, kinda reminds me of Hal Jordan or Guy Gardner. Maybe make this his main flaw? He's always full of himself, which sometimes helps him craft his leader image, but sometimes look funny or obnoxious.
>GG and SS
Maybe their tension shouldn't resolve right in the beginning of his first appearance issue! How about moving their talk to the end of the issue? The whole issue, the tension builds, and provides for both drama and funny moments. At the end, they resolve the issues, at least some of them (leave some for their further encounters! Maybe they clear up the awkwardness between them, but Gunner hasn't really gotten over their breakup, and that could be resolved in a future issue? Just a thought).
>GG and Diva
It needs some specific notification that GG is NOT Diva's ex, so that the reader won't get confused.
>We were kids
Just a minor thing: I thought the idea was that GG is a bit older than the Supermoms. Thus, back then, they were rookie teenagers, he was already a young cool popular hero (that's part of why they all got crushes on him). As for his first relationship with SS, that could've went after the Teen Queens' disbandment when she was ~18-19 (since GG is not a pedo).
>Kid Anarchy
I like the character, but the name... it sounds a bit 90s imo
>Other heroes
Probably needs Codex there, also Cloud Man and Cloud Woman and of course, The Hipster. Flying V and Coldfront – I'm interested in their schtick. Who are they? What are their powers and personalities? Just had an idea (you may disregard it, ofc), just based on their names – how about back then they were Cold War opponents (Flying V represented the West, Coldfront was a Soviet super), and now they're of retirement age, and best buds?
>The villains
I'm not sure they should be from the Supermoms' past. Too many things are from Supermoms' past. How about those a relatively new villains, and Supermoms show them (and the rookie heroes) that experience really matters?
>> No. 50657
>>50653
It feels like it kind of ends abruptly. I guess that's fine if you're setting up for a big battle in the next issue.

I agree with the other guy that the villains should all be new ones. That way, the Supermoms, not familiar with these new baddies, can get a briefing on their powers, enabling the audience to find out about them as well.

I also agree that the SS/GG drama ends too early. Perhaps they solve their problems in the midst of battle, GG joining them when all those villains end up joining together and there's a huge battle?

I feel that there should be more attention paid to Sig Rune bringing alcohol to a function in which there are underage superheroes. I also think there should be more time spent on the Supermoms mingling with the other heroes. There's some good potential in this issue to have some Diva romance development with Kid Mondo, among other things. Basically, several pages switching between Supermoms mingling with various other heroes, which would in turn properly introduce them to the reader, should be added here.
>> No. 50658
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50658
>>50655
And here he is!
He keeps his look is exactly the same as back in his youth (with a bit less hair and more beer belly). He's frequently seen hooking up with 20-something hipster heroines, impressing them with his knowledge of obscure 90s culture. But then again, he's still a way cool dude, and his battle skills are as sharp as back when he fought mutant demon cyborgs on Mars...
>> No. 50659
>>50658
Nice!
>> No. 50660
>>50608
An idea I had for Cloud Woman was that when she's being a villain, she could be constantly trying to seduce Cloud Man, but he doesn't give in because he loves his wife and being a good guy (if only he knew the sinister villain trying to seduce him was his own wife!).
>> No. 50661
>>50660
But why would she do that, if the main reason she started this double life was to get away from the life she shares with her husband and try something different?

However, how about this... It may serve as a rather interesting twist further in the story. Say, in her first story, she's just enjoying her new secret life, maybe flirts with a couple of villains but that's it. By the second story, she has already used her vamp charms on a lot of villains and anti-heroes, no one being able to resist her charms, but she never lets anyone close to her. A temptation comes in the form of a charming villain/anti-hero, and she even starts to consider having an affair with him. As for her husband, she thinks he cares more about his work than her, and isn't a very exciting person. Later in the story, the Supermoms can't manage to defeat her. At the last moment, Cloud Man himself comes to help them. He fights Tempestress and her villain partner, and at the first time she sees him in action from a different side, and it fascinates her. About to lose, she tries seducing Cloud Man to buy herself some time. However, to her shock, he's the only person who's able to resist her charms – he explains that he just loves his wife too much. She realizes that her husband actually cares about her, and so, after that fight, Tempestress mysteriously disappears... maybe for good?
>> No. 50662
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50662
Also, a Beverly in work clothes
>> No. 50664
>>50662
I think that lipstick might be a little too much for Bev. I don't see her as that gaudy.
>> No. 50665
>>50661
I like that idea. It would be a good one-off Supermoms adventure, the saga of Cloud Woman, so to speak.
>> No. 50667
>>50665
A "two-off" adventure then. It's a two-part story
>> No. 50668
Plus4chan is revamping the boards system.

So, NEW PLUS4CHAN THREAD: https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t50664.html
>> No. 50670
New /co/ thread: http://boards.4chan.org/co/thread/61680904


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