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146658 No. 146658
Marvel fapfic I wrote/drew. Any and all feedback appreciated. Starting with the Psylocke chapter (most recent).
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Wonder Woman 4/9
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Wonder Woman 5/9
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Wonder Woman 6/9
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Wonder Woman 7/9
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Wonder Woman 8/9
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Wonder Woman 10/13
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Wonder Woman 11/13
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Wonder Woman 13/13

Thoughts?
>> No. 149136
>>149135
>Thoughts?

You may want to experiment with different body types and using your own poses instead of picking them from other books. Recognizing a pose directly form another work can be very off-putting, and using characters with the exact same body types over and over can get boring. Plus, some people might prefer a different variety as well. Same for the stories.
>> No. 149137
If you're going to trace you could at least look for characters with an appropriate expression to trace. WW looks happy to be getting raped in a couple of those panels.
>> No. 149138
>>149137
Knowing Diana, she IS happy to be getting raped.
>> No. 149141
I'm more displeased by the over the top body type on Wonder Woman, than the apparent tracing to be honest.

I mean, if the story was about Wonder Woman getting her body modified to look more like a super exuberant sex goddess against her will or something like that, than it would be fine, great even if the story was well done. Otherwise its just kind of distracting, not to mention it just reinforces the argument that you can only draw(or trace if you want to go there) one body type.

I get, its just porn, but she is supposed to be the athletic warrior type, right?

I would have just gone with Chiang's version...but thats just my opinion
>> No. 149149
>>149135

No money shot?

People are giving you a lot of shit, so I'm gonna try to be brief. Regardless of everything else I liked it.

It is kind of odd that WW would be soft like that. You'd think she'd have a more athletic body.

but I can't be picky.
>> No. 149150
Do a Sue Storm one, OP.
With T'Challa, preferably
>> No. 149151
>>149149
>>149141
>>149136
>athletic body
Btw, don't listen to these /fit/fags. I for one like that MILFy curvy type of body. It's not canon, after all, it's a porn parody.
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>>149010
>>149012
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>> No. 149177
>>149151
Why bother drawing or tracing porn about a character if its not going to look anything like her?
>> No. 149180
>>149177
It's called referencing, and it is a common way to learn. However it is used too often here.
>> No. 149182
He is the Greg Land of pornography
>> No. 149183
>>149182

Isn't Greg Land already the Greg Land of pornography?
>> No. 149187
Greg Land would be the Greg Land of Pornogreg Land if Greg Land traced porn into porn. Instead, he's the Greg Land of Mighty Avengers land, and he's here to show you Spectrum's O-face.

Note she has the same O-face as about 7 other marvel heroines and at least 1 hero.
>>149180
Referencing != tracing
>> No. 149203
>>149141
>if the story was about Wonder Woman getting her body modified to look more like a super exuberant sex goddess against her will or something like that
Do we have a bimbofication or body modification in general thread?
>> No. 149209
>>149187
>Referencing != tracing
if you are Greg Land it is
>> No. 149210
>>149187
>Referencing != tracing

True, but in this case it looks like it might actually be copied freehand instead of simply traced. It's blatant swiping, but it's not 1:1. There's proportional differences.

Copying freehand still takes some degree of skill. So the guy's got that going for him, at least, even if the product isn't too appealing to me.
>> No. 149280
Much porn feature rape, but these comics are really rape-rapey. Like you get the impression that whoever draws this would do it in real life too, given the chance.
>> No. 149287
>>149280
Really? I don't get that vibe at all. These comics are about forcing someone to enjoy it.

I worry about the comics where someone is getting off on the other person disliking it. That's really rapey.

I guess the darksied one is more like that, but he's suppose to be a bad guy
>> No. 149348
>>149135
Needs more cum.
>> No. 149353
>>149203
lets just keep this terrible shit compressed into one convenient easily collapsable traced cess pool.
>> No. 149354
>>149353
...are you seriously trying to take some type of "high road" when dealing with porn?

Oh you
>> No. 149479
pff, i'd rather have traced stories than someone like zimmerman or smudge's art that looks exactly the same (and retarded faces, curves) all the time.

so thanks pegasus. your traces look better than a lot of shitty art out there.
>> No. 149488
>>149479
I'd rather go look at the work of the original artist he stole from than a shit tracing of them.
>> No. 149721
>>149135
damn
referencing/tracing whatever, you did not have to put in this much work for a porn comic but you did and I thank you.
I especially like
>>149021
's composition and how you repeat that later for more emphasis on another page.
And that panel of her hair being pulled is hotter than actually seeing Wonder Woman getting fucked.>>149135
Dude, whoever you are, keep making these and get someone to color and ink them and you'll be an Erotica Legend... or something
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>>149721
Thanks for all the positive feedback! Going to go ahead and finish up posting the rest of this chapter. Keep the comments coming!
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And that's the end of that chapter. Again, feel free to leave any comments/crit/questions! Thanks!
>> No. 150189
Hot enough, I can definitely get behind the mindbreak. But with WW you need some real bondage. Also you need to get these colored and inked, stat
>> No. 150941
Meh, I don't know just how much of it is traced or not, but yeah, this is still rather hot.

I would like to see a story about this though, the comic feels rushed, and I think that in a story there would be more of a chance to develop Wonder Woman's corruption, make it be a lot more interesting and sexy.
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