Why are we calling this Atrocitus and Larfleeze? It goes so much deeper than that.

ORIGINAL POST:

Hey /co/, me and some friends are contemplating on starting a webcomic, and we need to think of material. I know that some wise anons here thought up Murder Burger and there was talks about how awesome a Larfleeze/Atrocitus sitcom would be, and though I could just steal the idea with no worries due to anonimity, /co/ is too nice to take advantage of.
So, if no one minds could we use Murder Burger/related ideas for this webcomic?(if we actually work up the initiative to get it started ect.)

there should be an episode with Larfleeze eating Dex-Starr

>>16585
Cut that the fuck out. No vore in our awesome.

"Man, I fucking want a Lantern sitcom soo bad.
Lantern corps in everyday situations.
Larfleeze and Atrocitus would be the primary focus, with the rest of the lanterns would be supporting characters, good for an occasional laugh."


"Naturally.
It could follow this basic format:
Larfleeze is a greedy prick
Atrocitus get's pissed
Saint Walker gives the typical "Oh you guys"
Atrocitus punches Walker
Guy laughs
It would never get old."


"Just as long as it's funny and their Lantern Uniforms are seen under their real clothes, and they're like in a very small apartment in the middle of the Bronx!"


"Well, aside fom Atrocitus, who has to wear his Murder Burger uniform and Saint Walker who might wear a poncho or some hippy shit, no one else would wear regular clothes. Larfleeze wouldn't have a job, and he'd just mooch of Atrocitus. Pehaps Sinestro would be the manager at a rival food chain. I could see him in a tie..."


"That would work great.
Then an arc where Larfleeze has to GET A JOB DUN DUN DUUNNN to keep all of his stuff for a Crazy Tweest!"


"Sinestro could be have a classy as fuck restaurant and comes around to troll. Meanwhile, Mongul is trying to buy him out of the company.

Dammit /co/, you've got me seriously thinking about this."


"Also the super of their apartment who asks for rent is one of the guardians, who is a real dick. And Hal is the annoying guy who lives above them that's always really really loud."


" Oh and my final contribution to this idea: The leader of the Indigo Tribe is that one annoying lady the always goes through the drive through that no one can ever understand."

>>16586
it's an alf reference, genius.

"Sinestro is the guy that owns the fast food joint across the street.

Yellow castle.
It has the strictest menu ever, all meat marinated in orphan fear."


""WHATDYAWANT LADY?"
"click clack click click click"
"MOTHER FUCK DAMMIT GET OUT OF MY FUCKING DRIVETHRU""


"Entire arc on Larfleeze trying multiple times to break into different houses of Blue Lanterns trying to find their rings."


"Episode Ideas?

Sinestro Hires Larlfleeze to steal the recipe for Murder Burgers. Despite the Red Lanterns efforts he succeeds, Sinestro is triumphant.

"Now just give me the recipe Larlfleeze."
"What?"
"The recipe, I paid you to get it."
"No. Its mine now."

Atrocitus [conclusion of 80s cartoon style] AHAHAHAAHAHAAHAH-NOW GET THE FUCK OUT OF MY STORE!"


" The way I figure this is, all of thse ideas need to get a drawfag treatment, and /co/ can collectively write and draw this webcomic."


"Larfleeze: I'm taking the TV to my room ok?
Hal: Well, actually I was planning on watching something toni
Larfleeze: I'm taking it, its mine now.
*canned laughter*"


""Would you care for a sample, sir?"
"I'll take it."
"Take just one, sir"
"ITS MINE, ALL MINE"
"Scene with Larfleeze wrestling with some grocer.""


"-Group is eating dinner-

Saint Walker: This salad is grea-
Atrocitus: SHUT UP AND EAT YOUR STEAK
*canned laughter*
Atrocitus: SHUT THE FUCK UP
*Atrocitus breathes heavily, clutching his knife and fork tight in his fists*
Hal: Larfleeze did you eat the cat?
Larfleeze: No.
*a cats leg hangs from his mouth, he sucks it in like a noodle*
*canned laughter*
Atrocitus: SHUT UP! SHUT THE FUCK UP!
*He vomits blood over the audience*"


"Here's another idea, I hope you like it:

Remember that incident about the lady who burned herself with the coffee and sued McDonalds? An entire episode, maybe a two-parter just around that.

They have to argue in front of the Guardians of Oa. The Litigants have their legal expenses paid for by the Foundation for Safer Restaurants (which has it's entire funds in the form of an endowment from Yellow Castle).

An obvious Stand-In for She-Hulk is Attrocitus's Lawyer, but not enough for copyright to be an issue.

"DOES SOMETHING LIKE THIS ALWAYS FUCKING HAPPEN WHEN SOMEONE TRIES TO SAY YOUR NAME?"
"You should see what it's like getting dressed in the morning."

Attrocitus is naturally, the least sympathetic defendant EVER."

I guess I'll post some of the drawfaggotry that's been done already

Murder Burger's having some sort of promotion where the first 50 people to order a hamburger get TWO instead of just one.

So Larfleeze sends his construct corps over to make sure he gets all 50 spots.

But when he gets there, Guy's there ahead of him and he's going to take the first one!

So Larfleeze has to come up with a way to get Guy to move. And Guy doesn't even want the second burger, he's just seeing what he can get out of Larfleeze.

Ends with such a commotion being made that Atrocitus gets so mad he cancels the entire promotion.

"Larfleeze needs to get a job...

I found the perfect ending to the episode. Someone gives him an idea to sell some of the watches and jewelry he's stolen.

So he is wearing the "merchant" trench and says
"wanna buy a watch"?
"Yeah sure"
"I got a bunch of em, Ten bucks" *pulls up his sleeve to reveal watches*
"ok" *pulls out ten bucks*
"MINE!"

Then he does it to atrocitus:
"Wanna buy a watch?"
"That's my coat"
"Ten bucks, got a large selection"
"That's my watch."
"So you gonna buy one or what?""


"That would still imply giving up the couch. He should be a garbage man. "I like my job. They pay me money to take things."
The stuff never reaches the dump."


"More Guy Gardner! He should order several pizzas sent to Atrocitus. And Larfleeze shows up and says he'll take care of it--and steals Atrocitus's wallet to pay for it. And just kills the pizza boy anyway. Cue blood vomit.

I still like Rage Burger better than Murder Burger, though. Can't we pull a Metalocalypse and have one be the comic name and one be the actual restaurant name?"


"Combine these two. but make Larfleeze Oliver.

"Please sir, can i have some more."
Atrocitus: No
"I won't ask again" *takes it from Atro*
A: RAAAAGE!!! VOMITS BLOOD
Larfleeze tries to take the vomit. Hands melt. "Hmm I seem to have found a difficulty""


" Larfleeze randomly comes into ownership of a limo. When Atroc tries to find out how he got it, he sees Larfleeze with a construct of a limo driver driving him through the drive thru in Rage Burger."


"There's need be an episode with a health inspector or food critic that goes to Murder Burger and Sinestro's restraurant (Fear Fries?) .

Of course Sinestro instills fear/Parallax in the inspector/critic to give him a good rating and shut down the Murder Burger.
Then Larfleeze comes in to save the day somehow because Murder Burger is his favourite.
Atrocitus is raging the fuck out throughout the episode.

Critic/inspector could be Guy."


"after sinestro fails, Larfleeze shows up at the end of the episode in a fake mustache & sombrero and introduces himself to Atrocitus as señor Healtho inspectoro"


"Some more good construct ideas would be great.
Larfleeze is walking a construct dog.
Atroc walks to Larfleeze and yells "WHOS DOG DID YOU KILL THIS TIME?"
And something else happens."


" Show the kitchen of Sinestro's rival restaurant run by Qwardians who are getting whipped and yelled at by Arkillo."


"Episode idea:
Hal comes to Murder Burger for lunch
Hal: Say, Atro, what's the secret of your meat?
Atrocitus: WE NEVER TELL AT MURDER BURGER! RAAAAARRRRL! Plus... you don't wanna know.

Enter Black Hand.
BH: Delivery Mr. Atrocitus!
He's standing next to what is clearly a casket."


"oh shit, that's perfect.
At the Maccas I work at, food for cop's is free.

So Guy's constantly stopping by, flashing his badge and grabbing free food (even off duty).

Seeing the same cop several times in a night pisses me off, I can imagine how Atrocitus would feel having to hand out free food."


"Oh, and for one episode Mongul takes over Yellow Castle, and is actually competent and gets customers, so Attrocitus and Larlfleeze (who is mad that he can't take people's money because MONGUL has it) figure out a way to get Sinestro back."








It should have a title along the lines of "Atrocitus n' Larfleeze", except on the title card, Larfleeze has X'd it out and written MINE, and then Atrocitus is saying "HEY, FUCK YOBLAAAAAARRRRHHHGGG"






"Now imagine if that Cop was GUY GARDNER."
"And this pisses Larfleeze off because he's never given free food."
"Thus has Larfleeze either dressing like a cop or ducking under the counter as he is using a construct of a cop to try to get food."


"Customer: "Can I get some ketchup"
Atrocitus: *Gives one packet* "HERE."
Customer: "Um, could I have some more?"
Atrocitus: *Vomits acid blood on customer* "AAARGH! HERE'S YOUR FUCKING KETCHUP!""


"Oh! Idea! IDEA!

Murder Burger's having some sort of promotion where the first 50 people to order a hamburger get TWO instead of just one.

So Larfleeze sends his construct corps over to make sure he gets all 50 spots.

But when he gets there, Guy's there ahead of him and he's going to take the first one!

So Larfleeze has to come up with a way to get Guy to move. And Guy doesn't even want the second burger, he's just seeing what he can get out of Larfleeze.

Ends with such a commotion being made that Atrocitus gets so mad he cancels the entire promotion."

Of course there'll be some inspired by the Advice lanterns.
"Park my car, take two spots"
"Larfleeze took two spots"
ect.

Some of the ideas I forgot to add because of Plus4Chan going down were the ones about Larfleeze's room. It has to be messy and full of other peoples' stuff.

Larfleeze should be in normal clothes at the beginning of some strips, and at the end, be wearing someone else's clothing.


Everything is now caught up.

>>10838677
*Cut to a scene Superman's apartment in Metropolis*

Supes: Krypto! I got a few presents for your birthday! Krypto?

*apartment windows light up*

Supes: OH MY GOD!

Some nice drawfaggotry by a poster of the name H.

Over in 4Chan /co/, there was a discussion of what Larfleeze (funny how seldom we call him "Agent Orange", isn't it?) ought to sound like. I recorded, fiddled around with and posted my own suggestion here:

http://www.bjorn-comic.com/temp/orange.wmv

People seemed to dig it, and someone asked me...

"I like it. Would you be willing to do Audio plays for Murder Burger?"

I agreed, but he never replied. I don't know if this audio play thing is something that's actually happening or if this is just something that anon was tossing out there, but hey, there it is.

>>16599
Really awesome, but just a tad too raspy in my opinion, else, it is complete awesome.

>>16600

Well, for me, I wanted to give him a really snarling, desperate-sounding voice, like a predatory animal slavering for food. A growl of hunger always at the back of his throat.

But that's just my approach.

Someone asked for a customer complaining about Dex-star's hair being in their burger. Sorry if the quality isn't the best, don't have a scanner.

>>16599
That was me, sorry about the lack of Reply, I was playing the TF2.

I don't know if it can actually be done. We'd have to get other VAs and stuff together, but I think we could at least manage a 5 or 6 minute short.

>>16603

Well, I'm currently working on a number of similar projects; I've got a serialized story I'm writing in chapters and doing sort of radio plays of. Getting different VAs for different parts, theme music, background noise, sound effects and all that. I'm actually quite enjoying it. The only difference here would be to have the original art to play alongside the audio, which is a super-easy thing if you use a program like Sony Vegas Pro.

>>16604

Actually, now that I think about it! Around two or so years ago, I recorded voice acting for a Sinestro character for Mugen :

http://dave-littler.livejournal.com/tag/green+lantern

Given the absurdly glacial pace that the development of that character, I don't think it's acually much further along now than it was then, but I still have the half-hour or so of Sinestro dialogue I did at the time, and which I still think is pretty decent.

needs more sexy awesome larfleeze

>>16606
That works really well. I think I can write up a few minutes of extended Sinestro-Larfleeze interaction in the next week or two.

I've never done something like this before, what's a yardstick rule for pages of script to length of audio? Like, a page every 45 seconds or so?

>>16608
There's a different kind of Larfleeze?

I got one. I got one.

Larfleeze walks in to MB only to discover Hal and Carol sitting in his spot.

Larfleeze: that spot in MINE

Carol: there are plenty of empty sits today, you can sit anywhere

zoom in on Larfleezes angry look, Larfleeze storms out of the restaurant.

Atrocitus: you'll be sorry.

a few days later, we see carol opening the door to her home

Carol: HAL!

Hal in bed with Larfleeze: I can explain!


also all this takes place in doomzulaverse

>>16612
>what's a yardstick rule for pages of script to length of audio? Like, a page every 45 seconds or so?

I think the screenplay ratio of one page per minute translates well to audio as well, all averaging out to that in the end after you cut for sound effects and action and whatnot.

"We need to get a nice pitch together and share this with DC. Something like, for an animated TV series called "Murder Burger". which follows Atrocitus an ill-tempered Restaurant Owner living in a very small apartment, who is trying to survive opening his own restaurant chain, accompanied by his greedy dick of a Roommate Larfleeze and their Optimistic yet whiny friend Saint Walker. Many other familiar characters will make appearances like Atrocitus's noisy neighbor Hal Jordan and his strict no-fun landlord Ganthet. Show follows these characters as they try to survive the world, and as Atrocitus tries to keep his restaurant successful against his competition, Sinestro, who is a very sleezy business man always after his formulas.

Hilarity Ensues."

panel 1: Atrocitus working grilling some patties

Panel 2: Sinestro over the counter

S: "hey red, I dropped in to check whether this dump is still running."

panel 3: sinestro leaning on the counter with atrocitus on the opposite side his mouth dripping with blood, we see the burgers left unattended.

S: "congratulations, you officially surpassed my expectations"

A: "order or get out"

panel 4: same scene except we now see larfleeze entering from the vent above the grill, Atrocitus's acid blood is taking it's toll on the counter.

S: "now is that any way to treat a customer"

A: "are you going to Order"

S: "I'll take a small Murder burger"

panel 5: Atrocitus turns around to discover all the patties have been stolen.

panel 6: BURNING BLOOD EVERYWHERE

Requires Larfleeze and Kilowog eating contest.

Murder Burger ends up out of stock.

This is nice. I support nice things.

I am proud to have been part of this creation.

I remember posting in the original topic--I love this idea. /co/, never change.

What about...Larfleeze tries to order a ridiculous amount of food and is kicked out. He and Atrocitus argue about whether he'll actually eat it all, and Atrocitus rages and kicks him out. He keeps coming back in various terrible disguises and gets kicked out every time, until the Flash comes and orders the exact same thing Larfleeze did. Atrocitus thinks he's Larfleeze after getting a better disguise and tries to kick Flash out until he sees Larfleeze standing outside, wearing those fake plastic glasses with a nose and moustache attached. Larfleeze waves and Atrocitus stares at him. The Flash complains about lousy service and leaves for Sinestro's restaurant. Atrocitus RAGES.

Larfleeze: "At least you still have me!"
Atrocitus: "FFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUU---"

>>16630
I love this one/

I got a mic and can lend my voice to any projects.

And I think it'd be funny if one whole plot were to focus around this incredibly shy Star Sapphire who was in love with Atroctius as she watches him from afar and tries to win his love by going up to the counter and ordering something. And EVERY TIME she gets distracted/stopped by Larfleeze or some other random lantern interrupting her.

>>16635

This'd work well with the 'overly creepy stalker' vibe that seemed to be the preferred personality during that Advice Lantern run on /co/. Really creep it up, and of course, Atrocious is oblivious to this all and she thinks the burning vomit that eats away at her face every time they meet is just their way of saying I love you (and hell, she's probably got a bottle of it in her freezer that she, uh... well, I'm sure you can imagine all sorts of possibilities with that)

I thought up an awesome way to combine the Health inspector/Yellow Castle and Sinestro owning a fancy restraunt ideas.
At the start of the series, Sinestro runs some super fucking suave fancy ass restraunt, and so he and Atrocitus have a kind of Squidward/Squilliam relationship going. Then after the whole health inspector fiasco, Alan Scott(The Health Inspector) shuts down Sinestro`s because Parallax is living in the kitchen. Sinestro is discredited, andnow has to open Yellow Castle.

>>16599
I like it, it sounds great.
And this is somewhat off topic, but am I the only one who could totally picture Larfleeze talking like Christopher Walken?

This along with
>>16593
Are some examples I suppose of how Larfleeze would just gain clothes.

Recommendation: No Doomzula. That's one of the more retarded things /co/ has created.

In fact, this should be confined to the DC Universe.

I'm dumping some of the other murder-burger related memes people made.

Star Sapphire:
Get job at Murder Burger, to pay for the chains you'll need

Guy Gardener:
Go to Murder Burger, hold up drive-thru

Saint Walker:
Pass out anti-acids, in Murder Burger

Indigo:
Order Murderburgers, give them out to people in line

Larfleeze:
See Saint Walker passing out anti-acids, take them all
That lady posion those burgers! Give them to me!

Atrocitus:
GODAMN IT GUY, ORDER YOUR FUCKING FOOD ALREADY

Contributing for my pal, Vorked Larfleeze.

>>16643
though i disagree, i do think this shoud be confined to the DCverse

someone had the idea of a background shot with gentleman ghost eating a meal with all of it falling out underneath him. and larfleeze is underneath him piling it into a bag.

>>16644
Panel 3 made me Rofl

>>16644
Pure awesome. Just needed some BLOOD SPEW.

For the record, I drew the OP.

saint walker is patiently waiting for his order to be called out. larfleeze takes advantage of this by sitting in the booth behind him and speaking through a Styrofoam cup saying, "number 52".

Saint casually walks up to the counter and asks. "Excuse me did you call number 52?"

Atrocitus turns around and in a fit of rage shouts "DID YOU HEAR ME CALL NUMBER 52?!?!" blood vomit flying everywhere as he does.

saint walker gets the message and goes back to his booth, which he had left his coat in, with his wallet and ring in the pocket.

of course by the time he gets back to his booth the coat is gone. a puzzled saint walker stands there scratching is head as larfleeze is casually strolling out of murder burger, coat over his arm and trying on his fancy new blue ring.

>>16651
Then you should be our artist!

>>16651
oh wow haha.

thats awesome.

>>16651
Awesome! You used my hawaiian shirt idea!

>>16650
Thanks, man, I would have actually drawn it, but my scanner's kinda wonky. I hope MS Paint will do.

some anon came up with an alternate to the "MINE MINE MINE" oath.

The light of day
The dark of night
These things belong to me by right!
A message to all you lantern swine!
STAY AWAY
EVERYTHING IS MINE!

>>16657
Doesn't really flow.

I just read some one else's post and if this ever evolves into a flash cartoon, I'd love to do some voices. I've already kind of bragged about it on various streams, but I an pretty good at voices.

I always read Atrocitus in Satan's(from South Park) voice
And if this actually turned into a flash cartoon, I'd shit myself in happiness.

>>16660
I see Larfleeze kind of talking like skeletor or cobra commander, I can do those.

i have an idea for a short.

Guy gardner is dicking around in murder burger abusing his cop discount and throwing burgers and shit at people.

Atro gets pissed off and grabs him by the jacket and throws him out in a fit of rage and blood vomit shouting "YOU AND YOUR GREEN LANTERN BUDDYS ARE NOT WELCOME HERE ANYMORE!!!!!!"

So later on in the day, John stewart decides he is a pit peckish and stops by murder burger for a quick bite. He eventually gets his turn to order and Atro responds "Sorry, we don't serve your kind here anymore(as a reference to kicking Guy out earlier)"

Johns face molds to an Atro like state and he immediate starts picking up chairs and trays and starts to throw them at the windows smashing everything in sight. during this time the view keeps switching from John to Atro both rageing in unison.

eventually John gets bored and just leaves in a murmur of "wouldn't get this kind of treatment at the yellow castle..."

finally the Atro looks around at the mess that once was his precious murder burger and one Saint Walker crawls out from under a broken table. "Hey, at least you still have your burgers right?" he says.
"I supposed you are right" Atro replies as he turns around to the grill as Larfleeze is just finishing off the last burger in the store.

"FFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU"

>>16589
Sinestro place is like Soup nazi place

>>16682
A bit ago, we decided it was going to be a fancy restaurant.

>>16732
But it could always end up as a fast food place.
>>16638

>>16732
"Ah, restaurants are a messy Business. Messy, messy, messy. Someday, someday, intelligent Beings will transcend restaurants... choose better places to eat... But for now the customers insist upon receiving their Orders."

>>16739
once again
>>16638

>>16608
We need a better drawn version of this.

>>16823
Such as this?

>>16829
Almost finished...

>>16836
Done.

>>16838
Oh wow.

>>16592
Needs to be drawn a better version of this

MINE!

FFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU WE NEEDED HIM!

I'm sure he is doing perfectly fine.

Sorry to disappoint Walker...

FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU

Ill give you 300 hamburgers and a blue lantern ring for his safe return.

Done!

OH U

>>16963
I see it now, my entire life I have felt nothing but hunger, horrible hunger possessing me driving me against my friends, my family, the universe.

I regret not the lives this thing made me take during all these years that I own it, nay, it owned me.

for death is a better alternative to the living hell I have been going through.

yet now with the blue light to guide me and the Orange to give me strength I can make this universe a better place for all of us.

come brother walker, we have hope to spread!

>>17021

>>17021
>>17022
That isn't how it would happen!

>>17036
yes it is, and then Atrocitus comes in

A: "well go spread your hope somewhere else, I just washed this floor"

then they both get arrested for possession

>>17021
I may have laughed at all of this if I didn't loathe this meme so much.

Crossovers!

>>17168
I dawww'd

needs a special episode where they go to comicon.

guy meets some hot cosplayers

larfleeze stumbles into a giant furry gathering

atrocitus findes himself in the twilight panel.

>>17176

Why is Larfleeze in the furry patch? Is it because he's particularly fuzzy? Or are we making a bad furry bash that goes over my head because I still don't see what's wrong with them?

Atrocitus in a Twilight panel would easily be the best pity genocide.

>>17206

because they are the most likely to gangbang him.

>>17176

Any Larfleeze idea that doesn't involve him at least getting swag is wrong.

>>17217
He steals all the swag, and kidnaps Geoff Johns.

>>17219
Which probably wouldn't bother Johns in the least

>>17217
how about a failed attempt to get swag.

>A: I have an order here for a Mr Geoff Johns, WHERE IS HE ghoughgprioiejhfjscdlkd

>guard: panel 2814

later

>A: YOU! do you know the way to panel 8942 or was it 363?... OH GOD I'M LOST AGAIN GHFEOWFDSHfdfuieuihfdsbyufge

>twitard: why would you need anyother panel besides twilight

>A: twiwhat?

>Twitad: well it's about this girl Bella who...

SOMEWHERE ELSE IN THE CON

>L: I was sure my burgers went through here.

>Furfag: that's the most amazing fursuit I ever saw

>L: I GAVE AT THE OFFICE, wait what?

>Furfag: what are you supposed to be some sort of boar or rat or a mixture of both?

>L: I AM LARFLEEZE, but you will refer to me as AGENT ORANGE

>Furfag: stop being so uptight, is sounds like you need a yiffing

>>17228
You forgot L's primary mission at Comic-Con. Visiting EVERY booth that gives out stuff.

Okay, VA guy, I'm sorry, I tried but I couldn't put together any extended Dialog using just Larfleeze and Sinestro. We need Atrocitus or at least Saint Walker to get more then a page going between them. I'll be posting a script soon, but it will make use of all the characters. If we can get volunteers, we might actually have one of the rare "/coc/ thread that actually creates something" threads.

>>17239
they have booths that give out stuff?

>>17250
They did at NYCC at least. Promotional Comics, thins like that.

OK. I have an idea. Lemme play this out for a second...
______________________________-

We see Sinestro and Arkillo standing outside a huge planet with an array around it. Sinestro speaks into the array's speaker system.

Sinestro: Soranik.

Computer: DEFENSE ENGAGED.

Sinestro: Arkillo. Stay here and guard Parallax. We mustn't let him out until we have a proper host.

Arkillo: Yes my lord.

Sinestro flies off. Arkillo stands at the energy shield for a second before a Green Light goes flying past him, somehow breaches through the controls and then proceeds to go onto planet Quard. Arkillo straightens up, holds out his hands and shouts...

Arkillo: SORDAN!... urrr... SORINAK... noo... uhhh...
___________________________

We cut to the planet surface where the green light hits the ground and we see Guy Gardner and Larfleeze standing in the middle of a patch of smoking earth.

Guy: Well here we are! Remulax 5! And all it's beautiful beaches!

Larfleeze: What a way for an intergalactic overlord to travel. With a lantern...

The two look around.

Guy: hmmm... this don't look like Remulax 5... maybe we took a wrong turn at Sun number 5.

Larfleeze's eyes widen as we see him observing a mountain of yellow lantern rings and power batteries.

Guy: And then a left turn at space sector 45677-

Larfleeze: IT'S MINE DO YOU HEAR ME!?

Larfleeze starts to pound Guy into the ground.

Larfleeze: DOWN DOWN DOWN! MINE MINE MINE!

Larfleeze looks at the rings with a wide grin then proceeds to swim through it.

Guy: ... what's with you?

Larfleeze: I'M RICH! I'M WEALTHY! I'M INDEPENDENT! I'M SOCIALLY SECURE!
_____________________________________

We cut to outside the planet as Arkillo is still guessing.

Arkillo: Uhhh... Sorfona? Uhhh... Sardonic?... Uhhh... Soranik?

*The shield lowers and he proceeds to enter*

>>17320
I like the concept of Larfleeze and Guy going on a (space) road-trip. Of course, the only reason Larfleeze would've agreed to go is so that he can get souvenirs from everywhere.

>>17379
more like, Larfleeze wanted to go get swag from new and exciting places, Guy joined because Larfleeze is a chick magnet.

Thought of one that would see Murder Burger having one of those fucking redonkulous lunch rushes, so theres a line going out the door.
Larfleeze comes to the end of the line, outraged that he can't have his burgers NOW!
Then it switches to Atrocitus behind the counter, and every time he turns around to take another order, Larfleeze is further and furthrt along the line, and everyone behind him is has been turned into a construct. He reaches the till, orders his food and takes it without paying. Then as Atrocitus looks up to tell Larfleeze how much the food costs, the restraunt is completely empty and the line is gone.

what about this, Bleez has a crush on Larfleeze.

a crush he is COMPLETELY OBLIVIOUS to.

>>17382

I already had an idea like a shy, passive and overly nice Star Sapphire loves Atroctius but is too shy to admit her feelings.

Every time she tries to do so she gets interrupted.

>>17386
>A: welcome to murder burger home or the murder burger how can I help you

>Star Sapphire: hi I guess you don't know me, which is completely fine because I only see you at work and I guess you're busy and everything but I want to ask you even though I'm not even of you're species but then I guess you are the last of yours and stuff like this isn't new, I mean just look at Kyle and Soranik and superman will you like to go....

>L bursts in front of her dressed in a uniform he stole from Hal: I AM CLEARLY A POLICE OFFICER GIVE ME FREE FOOD.

>>17389
Why did I read Larfleeze's line in Christopher Lloyd's voice?

>>17320

>Larfleeze with Daffy Duck's voice.

>>17440

I always read Larfleeze with a mashup of Dinobot and Cobra Commander.

>>17380
Are you sure he didn't tag along because Larfleeze is a guy magnet?
Everyone's gay for Larfleeze after all.

>>17522
subconsciously yes,

>>17522

>>17522
I think it would be better if he just tagged along without guy knowing, but found out halfway through, so he is just mooching off him the entire trip

>>16592

Oh god, can't breathe...

Please... please make this...

Hey VL, I have a hypothetical situation for you.
Lets say somehow a pitch is made for this, and your Bruce Campbell show idea, but they only let you put one on the air. Which one gets it?

>>17446
I've ALWAYS heard him in my mind as Gollum for some reason. I can totally see Daffy though.

New episode Idea.
Someone tricks Larfleeze into wanting their jobs.
He eventually realizes he's been duped, but then pulls a Tom Sawyer and makes them do it, except now he's talking their money.

Larfleeze needs to constantly mooch off of Klick Klock Nok Indigo girl. She knows she's getting screwed, but she just doesn't have the heart to turn him away.

Exerior shot of MURDERBURGER. Rear Profile of Random patron.
Interior shot. Patron walks up to counter. Atrocious is not in yet, Dex-Starr is tending.
Dude; Hey, can I, like, get a Murderburger? With fries?
DS; HISSSSSSSSSS*BLLLEAAUGH*
Dude; No, not a blood shake. Murderburger.
DS;MWREEEEOW*BBLLLLEAUGH*
Dude; Y'Know what, this place sucks.
LATER THAT DAY
Atrocious shows for his shift.
AT; DEX-STARR. HOW WAS BUSINESS?
DS; MREOW HISSSS*BLLLLEEEAUGH*
AT; NOTHING?! AT ALL?! **HHHHUUUURGH**
External shot. Windows splatter with acid blood. Last shot is Larfleeze running a burger stand out of the back of the murderburger, selling CONSTRUCT burgers that Look and taste like real burgers but dissapear after being eaten.

>>16652 Next panel shows "meanwhile, in universe 52" Same as the last panel, except everyone's wearing cowboy hats. You can't mention the number 52 without talking about the multiverse dude.

>>18062
L: Gimmie!
I: *Gives him burger*
L: Gimmie!
I: *Gives him purse*
L: Gimmie!
I: *Standing in bra and panties as she hads him her clothes*
L: Gimmie!
I: *Rolls Eyes*
Next panel them in bed together
L:Gimmie!
I: >:(

>>18063
they should turn people into costructs once eaten.

>>18070

>>18063
guy should pay with construct money

Just had an idea in a thread Vorked made on /co/.
Murder Burger is a sequel to Blackest Night.
Atrocitus gets out of space jail, and wants to start a legitimate business ect.
Y/N?

Also, The MB employees should have an oath.

>>18099
then what about all the others? they realized that only if they stay on the same planet they are strongest and can keep the universal damage down to a minimum, so they choose earth because that by some crazy math it is the closest to all the lanterns specifically, Cleaveland Ohio or any such place and just live together?

>>18101
This entire thread is on the subject of Atrocitus working at mcdonalds.
Do we really need logic?

>>18102
maybe you're right. still I love putting logic into things.

bump

I'm thinking about making a sort of radio sitcom commercial for this one with my friends, using lines from the first /co/ thread and here.

I haven't heard of any real American radio sitcom commercial, btw. I've only heard Just The five Of Us from Vice City, which was the inspiration for the thought.

>>18359
Who listens to the radio anymore?

>>18393
Folks without MP3 players like me.

>>18393
I do sometimes.
>>18395
What he said.

This needs serious bumping

This must be continued!

This is the most entertainment I've had on plus4chan in a long time. This needs to have some degree of "something that actually got done" or I think I might cry.

>>18100
I came up with this, it's meh, but I'm not very creative.

By greasy grills and dirty floors
We must serve all who come through the doors
Let those who hunger search no more
For that's what Murder Burger stands for!

>>17782
Have the redrawn version

>>18662
nice

There should be a running gag with other characters appearing in the background. I can imagine Sinistar standing in the line at Murder Burger repeating I AM SINISTAR. I HUNGER.

>>18662

Maybe it's just me being petty, but I thought it was funnier when Larfleeze accidentally had the money line.

>>18662
something is horribly wrong with larfleezes arm in the second panel

>>18665
I can't please anyone can I? -baaaw-

>>18665
But it doesn't make sense that way.

>>18061
I just realized that I wrote "talking their money"
I of course meant taking.

We need more artists for this.

Jordan, Carol, Walker and Indigo 1 go all to eat together. Indigo goes to order the food while the others grab a table. But when she`s going back, she hears the other people in the line about not having money, being late to work, etc. so she starts giving food away. When she returns to the table, there`s only 2 straws and a pack of ketchup... Which she gives to a guy with one leg in the next table.

I'm going to start posting some of the continuous Advice Lanterns here.

>>19106

>>19107

>>19108

>>19109

>>19110

>>19111

>>19112

>>19113

>>19114
And this one is a possible follow up, but kind of defeats the earlier two spots conflict.

>>19115

"Defeats,"or "makes better?"

>>19115
"Larfleeze's Car has one seat"

>>19127
Actually it does make better. Because Larfleeze WOULD take up two parking spots with a unicycle.

>>19151
He could park one car, and make a construct car to take the spot next to him just to be a dick.

>>19160

Herumphbump.

>>19186
see
>>16588

Here are some Murder Burger oaths some people came up with

In angry meals
In giveaway toys
No customer shall have his joys
Let customer service beware our might
GET THE FUCK OUT!

From bloody shakes
to fries uncooked
For better value, no where to look
For those with rage and hunger true
Come on down, we'll say, "fuck you."

With lukewarm fries and burger red
Flipped from a grill so weakly fed
Together with a cup of ice
We’ll combo you all
HERE IS YOUR PRICE!

With grease and grime
We serve this slime
A miserable day
we waste away
HEY FAGGOT YOU FORGOT TO PAY!

By greasy grills and dirty floors
We must serve who come through the doors
Let those who hunger search no more
EAT SHIT AND DIE

posting the latest Larfleeze pages for obvious reasons.

>>19190

Did any other comics ever come of this?

Someone linked me to this thread on /co/ so I thought I'd post this for you guys.

>>19541
Post Sinestro plz :3

Anyone have an archive of the original thread on /co/?

>>19186
Ya, they have a vegetarian option, it's:
GET THE FUCK OUT!!!

>>19543
Just came over from /co/ as well.

>>19548
So did I, noticed you guys where missing a bit o art.

I'm surprised I haven't posted this yet.

Where's the beef?
Get back in line
No one quits or can resign
Order or we'll break your spine
You might think you'll have it your way
Murder Burger says not today
I'm hatin' it!

themesong for the cop bar the GLs visit when Guys not flashing his badge for food, or watching Hal punch people for misdemeanors:


Making your way in the sector they gave
Takes all the will you've got;
Taking a break from GL corps duties
Sure would help a lot.
Wouldn't you like to get away?

Sometimes you want to go
Where all the poozers are the same,
And the oaths are never lame,
You want to be where you can see,
A spectrum that's all the same;
You want to be at Warriors(trademark brand name).

You want to go and say your Oath,
And drink liquor all the same;
You want to be at Warriors(trademark brand name).

Guy: Like it?
Hal: You're gonna get sued.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FD8ljNobUys

>>19565
HAHA

I redid one that I made earlier

Also posting with my trip now

My sketch is shitty and unfinished, but it is Murder Burger inspired.

Saint Walker and Larfleeze here would be roommates with Atrocitus.

>>19561
I support this Oath

As for the Every Corps has a restaurant and food court ideas, I'm going to motion for that to be ruled out right now.
I think Murderburger, The Yellow Lantern(Later Fear Fries) Warrior Pub, and the Blue Soup Kitchen is enough.
If we try to go for a "Restaurant per corps" gimmick, shit loses the originality it barely had to begin with, and it just feels like it's trying to shove too much in your face.

All we really need is the titular restaurant and the rival restaurant. A bar would be a good edition I think, even as a place where Atrocitus and Larfleeze go when MB closes, as well as an excuse for Guy to be a drunk asshole.

And we can still work in the roommate sitcom aspect.
Not every single comic would need to take place at Murder Burger. There is plenty of potential to show Atrocitus and Larfleeze's apartment and whatnot.

>>19587
How about the Star Sapphires have a Hawaiian Tropic Zone-type restaurant?

>>19595
more like a titty bar

I think the Indigo Tribe is more suited for a soup kitchen, or at least the main force behind it as they work in association with the Blue Lanterns and their farmer's market.

>>19595
How about a sex line?

"Oh baby, baby."

From /co/:

Murder Burger the musical.

Wherein whenever Atrocitus bursts into song the ground splits open and spits out lava-rage to go with his melodic raging, the Star Sapphires do a Moulin Rouge when they croon about love as the scenery turns pink and rose petals fall from the sky, and the Sinestro Corps do Springtime for Sinestro.
Among other things.
All this to promote their eating establishments to an unsuspecting public.


So what is Green Lantern, Blue Lantern, Indigo Tribe and Agent Orange? Green Lanterns doing rock n' roll, Blue Lanterns doing psychedelic rock, Indigo Tribe doing rap, and Agent Orange does rap too but sells his CDs?

>>19602
>Blue Lanterns doing psychedelic rock, Indigo Tribe doing rap, and Agent Orange does rap too but sells his CDs

Gawd no.

Blue Lanterns should do reggae, Indigo tribal chanting, and Larlfreeze...uh...I dunno, something smarmy and dirty like Tom Waits or Nick Cave.

Since the GLs have a bar, they should do some rockin drinking songs a la Dropkick Murphys (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=agro9miL3bA) lol "The Warrior's Code"

>>19609
>>19602
All I have to say is: Why?
This seems highly unecessesary and would only exceed in pushing the concept even further away from the original idea, something that has been done waaay too much already.

On the topic of the violets working at a strip club, I think I support the idea.

>>19609
Great, now I'm imagining Larfleeze singing Chocolate Jesus.

Two Moping Crew: "Grab a Lantern and mop..."
Two Rag Guys Crew: "Scrub the blood from the counter top."

Burger Machine Guy: "There is nothing so mean as my rage machine!"

Two Broom guys Crew: "With a slash and a gush"
Two Brush Guys Crew: "We'll puke more up for the rush"

Fine Tenor Atrocitus: "Before you open the door..."

Larfleeze pops up from a wastecan: "Give me MINE I want MORE!!"

Group, dancing - one crew looking at Lar: "When we've vivisected with that..."

Burger Machine Guy: "Start it over again!"
Fine Tenor Atrocitus: "Tell me are we mean?"
Crew: "At Murder Burger's we Scream!"

[ Fine Tenor Atrocitus nods, satisfied]

[Crew goes out to the parking lot to kick up their heels and dance, with various small murders and rioting]

All: "You deserve some HATE today! So get out and get the FUCK away! From MURDER BURGERS! MURDER BURGERS! MURDER BURGERS!"


Guy: Fuck this, I'm goin' to Arby's

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XKR1ScQUpcA

moar stuff from /co/

And now a sorta unrelated Larfleeze musical moment...


Sometimes when your needs have all been amplified
And there's something to grab
You wonder how you keep getting
Think of all the things that's really yours
And the lanterns you've earned
The greed in your heart is growing
You can fly, if you try leaving nothing behind
OA only knows what you might find

MINE - Everything you have it all is mine
You hold my ring on your hand
MINE - I keep it all because it is mine
It's mine, and it's so grand
And you can't win, BECAUSE IT'S MINE

I'm always trying to take your spirit
Making you my agent
You'll be mine forever
But there's another recruit right this moment
Claiming what I found
Looks like it's now or never
Out of the darkness you stumble into my light
Fighting orange things is your invite

MINE - Everything you have it all is mine
You hold my ring on your hand
MINE - I keep it all because it is mine
It's mine, and it's so grand
And you can't win, BECAUSE IT'S MINE

MINE - Everything you have it all is mine
You are my future and all I planned
MINE - I keep it all because it is mine
You hold my ring on your hand

MINE - Mine to keep all your stuff with me
Mine and everything I can see
Mine - 'cause there is a place in my Battery
And it's calling you to join with Larfleeze


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zLhp0US_Hj0

>>19627
you got a giggle out of me.

And now a sorta unrelated Atrocitus musical moment...

Take a little warp to the edge of sector 666
And he attacks
Where the Ysmault looms,
like a scabby bloom
As it shifts and cracks
Where secrets lie Abin Sur did find,
in the Inversion's cries
Hey GL, you know
you're never coming back
Past the magma, past the hate,
past the rage, past his corps
On a gathering storm comes
a tall demonic man
His rusty crimson face
With a red right hand


He'll crush you in his arms,
tell you your death is what he'll enjoy
He'll kill you with his blood
it melted through your field and face it did destroy
He'll reach inside your chest and make a hole,
Crush your heart like coal
Hey Jordan, you know you're
never ever coming back
He's a god, he's a madman,
he's a lantern, he's a grue dude
They're screaming his name
through this disappearing land
But he's ripping out your throat
With a red right hand


You ain't got no Rage?
He'll get you some
You ain't got no Ring? He'll get you one
You ain't got blood to project,
you feel like some respect
Well don't you worry Lantern,
cause here he comes
Through the sectors and the OA
and the borders and Korugar
A stain is cast wherever he stands
Spines of Green Lanterns in his
red right hand

(Organ solo)

You'll see that he's your nightmare,
you'll see him bleed when he screams
He'll appear out of nowhere but
he ain't shooting beams
You'll see him remove your head,
on a good day he's mean
And hey Gardner, I'm warning
you to take that ring off
He's a god, he's a madman,
he's a lantern, he's a grue dude
You're one disembowel dog
in his gastronomic plan
Designed and dissected by
his red right hand

(Organ solo)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kUlgN__Jrxk

Yay this is still going!

no musical numbers god dommit

>>19653
>no fun, dammit

There's no harm in expressing a few ideas that won't go anywhere. Chill.

No one on /co/ seems to be into Murder Burger at the moment

>>19654
>chill.
I just don't like hearing dumb ideas that won't go anywhere, posted beside good ideas that could potentially wishful thinking go somewhere.

>>18070 This one MUST be made. Drawfags, get to it!

This cannot be this low on the page. That is an outrage.

>>19694
wat

>>19694
what is this supposed to be the time traveling love child of Atrocitus and Larfleeze. does he appear in an episode?

my god, the reactions will be incredible.

>>19706

>>19706

I AM TRULY A COMEDIAN

>>19713
>>19711
wat?

>>19758

I'll admit, I got a good chuckle out of that.

>>19747
One thing.
I like that you incorporated the tie into Atrocitus' look, but as for giving Fleeze short sleeves, I think it works better with the idea someone had to have him wearing a hawaiian shirt over his regular suit.

I know in one of the threads for Murder Burger someone was asking about a logo for the restaurant and after 9000hrs in paint, I made this up. Of course it can be redone to look better. As I said it's just done in paint and I haven't slept in day.

>>19758
>>19747
Both are great. Love the style. NEED MORE.

Library Lass had an awesome script for a comic:
---------------------
Hal Jordan walks into Murder Burger

Atrocitus: Welcome to Murder Burger, Home of the Murder Burger, WHAT THE FUCK DO YOU WANT!
Hal: I'd like a hamboigah. ...Two! Two hamburgers!
Atrocitus looks suspicious.
Hal: No wai-
Atrocitus grabs Hal by the hair, it was actually Larfleeze in a mask.
Atrocitus: FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFF LARFLEEEEEEEZE!
---------------------

>>19694
Wait, who's this classy-ass dude?

>>19812
Atrocitus: Welcome to Murder Burger, Home of the Murder Burger, WHAT THE FUCK DO YOU WANT!
Hal: I'd like a hamboigah. ...Two! Two hamburgers!
Atrocitus looks suspicious.
Hal: No wai-
Atrocitus grabs Hal by the hair, it was actually Larfleeze in a mask.
Larfleeze Grabs Atrocitus's head, it is also actually Larfleeze. second Larfleeze pulls first Larfleeze's mask off. it is infect Atrocitus.

Chase ensues.