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No. 151325
>>151151
It's good...at least it's very promising. It could be better if only because it feels like you're running through it almost. This happens then this then this, etc.
I think if you just establish her mood better at the start it'll get rid of most of that issue, the swing in her mood or her irrationality isn't pronounced enough for the tree fucking to be particularly believable, consdiering she didn't arrive there to 'get naughty'. Also the method of tree-fucking seems awfully convenient, but I can let that slide.
Keep it up though, stuff's good, as I say!
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