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>>62832
This looks much better than the first version. Good job.

>>62832
I really wish I didn't find that as hot as I do.
One critique, I always find a scene with the two characters undressing to be sexy.
It's a good scene transition, it's sexy, and it allows for dialogue and crap.
Oh, and where are PB's nipples?

>>62835
anybody else agree that i should make a undressing scene.
AN EROTIC UNDRESSING SCENE?!
SAY "EYE"

>>62836
EYE

eye eye!

EYE, I tend to prefer more build up than just going straight into it.

>>62841
it should probably be a bit more drawn out - the pacing so far seems like you're just trying to "get it over with" if that makes sense.

This is your chance to tease your reader. Save the good stuff for last.

>>62841
>>62842
Agreed. and noted.
also, 2 people are already complaining about the idea...
right here >>/co/57744

it makes me straight up LOL, but i noticed my art style is abit horrid. anybody have a problem with the style/

>>62843
This, too.
Draw it out a bit. As it is right now, you seem to have too much dialogue. If you need, you could just draw everything out first and then add dialogue later, since you did say you were improvising with each panel.

Do as you like. As long as the characters are easily recognizable as their cartoon selves it's all good.

Just don't make it all as dark like that.

gahh i- thats it. i'm pissed off...
stupid computer didn't save the REAL finished product.

>>62852
This is Marcelline's coitus interuptus face.

"Ah... Marcelline... I think I'm gonna cum..."
>NOT YET! BLUHHH! HISSSS!
"Holy cow! Fine, jeez...
>Heh, thats right, ya weenie.

>>62854
I thought we also had the thought of having her threaten to go into bat mode?

drew this awhile back :3

>>62855
Yeah, but I like the HISS face (in my previous post) or the BLUH face (this pic).

>>62883
I think I like the "BLUH" face better.

whatever you do, just don't use this face. please don't.

>>62895
ahhh reverse psychology! excellent!
i shall!

>>62896
...what have I done

>>62897
hehe i'm just messing with you.
i'll do whatever i want.
and whatever YOU GUYS want.
so if a majority of you guys were to want Werewolf Marceline. you'd know i'd do it.

>>62898
how many pages have you completed? just the first two?

>"So, no shit dude," said Jake, excitedly,
Jake wouldn't swear >:(

>>62901
of course he wouldn't... he's a good puppy.

>>62900
...does this really have to be in every thread

>>62900
When I saw this, I refused to read it again.
I ended up reading it again.
Fuck.

better look out spiffy, I hear there's this anonymous dude on /co/ who aims to make a better adventure time porn comic than you.

and I ask... WHY

>>62898
anything?
marceline masturbating in a bathtub

>>62931
A little healthy competition never hurt anyone.

What about for the stripping scene there was one for Marceline and another one for Bubblegum, and these would illustrate how they act differently.
Like Bublegum would slowly take off her clothes and guide Finn's hand to her breast, while Marceline would just rip off Finn's clothes.

>>62934
yeah but he might just abandon the project if he tried.
i am to stay on this project.

BESIDES. If he plans on Doing it. i say by all means.
it doesn't really hurt me, i'm just doing this for fun. not to show off.

>>62937

>>62901

I was given a phrase to start out with by someone else when I wrote that. "So, No shit dude" was that phrase.

>>62960
The funny thing is I was told to write a story, nothing specific.

AND LOOK WHAT I CAME UP WITH

here guys... it's not the next page... but it'll keep you from biting your own balls off

>>62990
This picture creeps me the fuck out.

>>62990

the lumps.... my god......

Part 1

"So, no shit dude," said Jake, excitedly, "There I was playin' Fallout 3 last night on the couch. I was just mindin' my own business when suddenly Lady Rainicorn shows up. I was all 'Hey there baby, what're you doing here?' She said to me 'insert korean here'."

"What's that mean?" Finn interrupted. "You know I can't understand Lady Rainicorn"

"I doesn't really translate well." Jake said. "Anyways, she says that, and then she comes over and she totally starts sucking my dick."

"No way!"

"Yes way!"

"Mathematical, bro!" exclaimed Finn, bumping fists with Jake. "Holy cow! I wish I could get so lucky. "

"What do you mean, man? You never... made it with a lady?" asked Jake, perplexed.

"Well, no." Finn said, somberly. "I haven't. Princes Bubblegum is a stuck-up hoo-ha. All she ever wants to talk about is MATH and SCIENCE." Finn let out a yell of frustration. "IT ISN'T FAIR. I'M 12 YEARS OLD, I should have gotten laid by now!"

"Huh. You know, bro, I think I can help you. Come on, let's go back to the house."

Jake the Dog and Finn the Human made their way back to their home, which is a tree or something. On the way, they battled a giant monster. But that isn't really important.

"Alright, dude, I think this'll do the trick." Said Jake. He produced a small vial of yellow liquid from under the sofa cushion. Finn stared in wonderment.

"What is it?"

"It's a potion I use on Lady Rainicorn whenever she's acting like a bitch. One drop of this and she's raring to go!"

"RHOMBUS!" Jake exclaimed, snatching the bottle from Jake and downing the entire serum.

"No! Finn! Don't!" Jake yelled in surprise, "You were supposed to give it to the Princess or whatever!"

"Jake, buddy... I don't feel so good..." Finn said weakly, massaging his stomach.

"Oh, no."

TO BE CONTINUED?

(Yes.)


Part 2

"Oh, man, Jake, I don't think I was supposed to drink that."

"No, duh, numbskull! I said it was for the girl!" Jake stated in a mix of despair and exasperation.

"I'm feeling kinda... hot..." Finn slurred, his tone changing.

"Oh no, Finn, you don't mean sexy hot, right? You mean like Volcano Man hot, right???" Jake said with increasing worry.

"No, Jake... I DO MEAN SEXY HOT!"

Finn jumped on to Jake's back and whipped off his own clothes, leaving only his hat on his head. Jake struggled against him, not wanting what was coming. Jake managed to overpower the sex-crazed Finn, and now had him pinned on the ground.

"I don't think you understand, Jake. I don't get fucked by the person who drinks the potion. I don't get fucked at all.

I FUCK."

By now, Jake's two-incher had grown to it's full length and was throbbing fit to burst. Jake could not wait any longer, and neither could Finn. Jake penetrated Finn's virgin bootyhole with gusto, and began pumping.

"Oh my gosh, Jake!" moaned Finn, "That feels so Algebraic!" Jake said nothing, and continued pounding. Being 12 years old, Finn did not have much of a wiener to speak of. Nonetheless, he began massaging the spot where a cock should be, crying out in pain and pure ecstasy while he did so. They went of for about 26 minutes, before Jake suddenly stopped.

"What's the matter, buddy?" Finn questioned, "You run out of juice so soon?"

"Naw, man. I just had a great idea! You remember my stretchy powers? The ones that make me grow huge?"

"...Yeah?" Finn answered cautiously.

Suddenly, Jake's two-inch-long cock expanded in Finn's ass. It grew and it grew and it grew. Finn began screaming, but not because he was in pain, but because his body was now being filled with Jake's beautiful genitalia. Jake continued to grow until his doggy lipstick was 300 feet long and as wide as a city block.

"Jake... You really are a true bro." Finn squeaked out, barely able to speak.

"Thanks, dude." Jake said, and smiled. He knew that now, Finn and himself were inseparable friends. Nothing could ever come between them. And with that heartwarming moment, Jake continued. Jake kept pumping and grunting, back and forth, in and out of Finn's backside, his doggy balls slapping on what was left of Finn's body.

"B-Bro. I think I'm about to come!" Exclaimed Finn. "Let's come together, as one! As true BROS!"

And they did. Jake released his load all inside Finn. So forcefully, in fact, that some came spurting out of his mouth. Jake's jizz flew so far, it even reached Lumpy Space, hitting the Lumpy Space Princess in the face.

Jake shrank down to his original size, and exited Finn. Finn's body has been wrecked beyond recognition by Jake's large phallus, and he now resembled a large pancake made out of flesh, with a boston creme filling.

"We did it, Jake... We really did it." whispered Finn. He had not much time left in the world. Jake recognized this, and moved in closer.

"Yeah, buddy. We did." Choked Jake, fighting back tears as the realization that Finn was going to die swept over him.

Finn raised his hand, and made a fist. Jake did the same, and bumped it against Finn's. And with that, Finn passed on.

Jake carried Finn's body to the backyard and gave him a proper burial. He then dropped to his knees and began weeping.

"Aww, buddy. I'll never forget you. Never ever. I'll always remember the times we spent together, and the moments we shared. And I will cherish them always."

Jake looked up to the night sky, and it was there Jake saw a shooting star. Jake smiled. He knew that now, Finn was in a better place. Somewhere where he could be recognized as a hero for the rest of eternity. He stood up, and turned around to go to his home.

Suddenly, the sound of rushing air filled the night sky. Jake whipped around, and saw the shooting star rushing towards him! He leaped out of the way, the falling object almost crushing him as it struck the ground with earth-shaking force. Jake looked up at the newly formed crater in amazement, and rushed down to the bottom to examine the celestial object.

"Woah, what the heck, man?!" exclaimed Jake. Inside the meteor stood an tall figure, clad in crimson red armor, emblazoned with a black letter "S," outlined in white. It wore an large insectoid helmet, with blazing green eyes, two beetle-like horns adorning the top. Around it's waist was a belt decorated with a star shape.

"The heavens call me!" Exclaimed the figure, "The earth calls me! The people call me! They call of me to defeat evil!"

"Listen to me, evildoers!" The being pointed to Jake. "I am a warrior of justice,

Kamen Rider...

Stronger!!"

Jake stood in awe of the figure, which, in turn, stared back at him.

"Who... What are you?! Why are you here?! You crushed my buddy Finn, you jerk!" Yelled Jake, his anger mounting.

"If you are not a friend of Justice, then you are an enemy of Humanity." Stated Kamen Rider Stronger.

"What?"

"Through your perverted actions, you have taken the life of an innocent child. After I lost someone precious to me, I made a promise to myself to protect the world from those who would harm others. You are a soulless monster, beyond retribution, and you must be destroyed!"

"Wait! I-" but Jake's words were cut short. Stronger struck the ground, and crackling bolts of electricity erupted from the ground below Jake, knocking him to his feet.

"ELECTRO FIRE"

"Wait, no! Please, I-" Jake's words were cut short. Kamen Rider Stronger has leapt forward, and delivered a painful chop with both hands to either side of Jake's neck. He kept his hands at Jake's sides.

"W-what... what are you..?"

"SUPER ELECTRON..." Stronger strained, "ULTRA CYCLONE!!!"

Rushing bolts of electricity raced from Stronger's arms, through Jake's body. Jake could feel himself being torn apart, piece by piece, atom by atom. The world around them rocked, and the earth itself began to vaporize around them.

Suddenly, a voice.

"Jake? Jake, is that you?"

"F-Finn?"

Jake looked around. He was no longer at his home. He was standing in a field of white grass. Finn was standing beside him.

"Finn! Buddy! I'm so hap-"

"No, Jake. Just no."

"What?"

"I can't forgive what you did to me. You killed me, Jake. Used me. Manipulated me for your own gain."

"No! Finn, buddy! This was an accident! You remem-"

"No, Jake. Don't speak. Ever again. Go."

"F-Finn..."

"GO."

"I- I'm sorry."

And with those words, Jake vanished.

Kamen Rider Stronger stood up, and looked to the stars.

"Today, justice has been served. Now, the innocent boy can rest peacefully. And yet, there is still work to be done. As long as there is evil in the world, there will always be the need for a warrior of justice. That is Kamen Rider's purpose. That is my purpose."

Stronger turned, and walked away from the crater.


THE END.

anybody want page 3? i have it done... and actually the new style is kinda fun! :)

>>63019
ooops forgot my trip.

>>63019
Yes, please!

Awesome work so far! I'm diggin' the style (hey, it fits with the show) and the dialogue (also fitting to the show!). What makes this even better is both I and a friend were talking about the show and if it could ever fit into an SS scenario or pic etc. We both thought no (at least for the moment). Thanks for proving us wrong!

>>63019
Let's see it.

one question before i reveal...
which version does /co/ prefer? left or right?

>>63025
hey! it's fun being appreciated :3
and thats why i'm doing this... i want to feel appreciated for all my hard work xD

although i want to juggle my own life too, i will not abandon this project. just yet.
i have plenty instore for it.

>>62937
very wonderful suggestion! the next page will have that. don't worry. :)

it's gonna be Marcelines Turn to Play with Finn... except this time... it's happening, no flashback/imagination sequence going on.

>>63028>>63027>>63029

>>63027
It depends on what you're tying to do.
What exactly are we looking at?

>>63032
thats a secret.
but if you must know...
it's Finn holding his Blade

Alright Kiddies, here you go!
FEEDING TIME!!!

lol just playing, here ya go guys. enjoy.
((not much going on, just trying out the new style for THIS page, next page: oh ho ho))

>>63037
I really like the face on the tree.

>>63037
There's something bothering me about the dialogue in the 4th panel, but I can't think of an alternative...

opposite day

:3

>>63062
>dialogue
>4th Panel
There IS no dialogue on page 4

>>63099
I'm sure he is counting the first two and one, because they are so similar.

>>63037
Not bad so far, not bad at all. I got a laugh at Marceline layed out like a junkie.

>>63087
That is oddly cute as it is erotic.

>>63099
Sorry, meant the 5th panel.

>>63111
whats wrong with the dialogue?

>>63112
I can't place it...something just seems off about it. Like I said, I can't think of an alternative, so just keep it the way it is.

It's jsut a little bit too wordy, is all. Jake doesn't need to repeat requests for Finn to chillout quite that much. The "hoooo nooo you're not getting me twice in one day" bit could be cut down and replaced with a simple "heh heh"

>>63115
Yeah, now I see it.

>>63114>>63115
maybe i tried to hard on his character.
that i forgot what he was like...

here... let me try another set of dialogue.

Jake wouldn't swear >:[

>>63119
Get rid of the "uhhh, thanks dude" and keep the last panel as "THAT. Is why we stopped..." and it's good.

>>63123
why? thats how Finn Talks when he's confused.
rewatch Ricardio the heart guy, and you'll understand.

>>63125
OK, I see what you mean...
Still, change the last panel back. How's page 4 coming along?

>>63126
i got alittle side tracked thanks to a certain post in this party...
i ended up drawing a "Mini-INTERMISSION-comic"

>>63127
Interesting. I look forward to it.

>>63128
here it is.
to answer >>63120: Yes. Yes he would...

PAGE 3 ((ReDialouged))

page 3 latest version looks ok

>>63129
I read that in both of their voices.

sorry /co/ plus4chan, spending the day on 4chan's /co/ for inspiration, i'll catch you tomorrow!
or maybe later on tonight for a small treat!

>>63165
What sort of treat?

>>63166
nevermind. my family is over AGAIN!
no privacy in this goddamn house.

>>62832
>pop her bubble

Holy shit I tapped.

I'm loving this.

yes ladies and gentlemen... i am going there...

n-no!

>>63237
no what?

>>63236
you're crossing some lines here spiffy...

>>63129
didja know damon baird voices the manly minotaur?

>>63242
I thought it was Henry Rollins.

>>63242
*sigh* alright alright i'll drop the project.
jeez.

>>63242
sounds KINDA like Baird....

seems like no one liked my treat.... sad news indeed...

>>63244
besides, isn't it Penny who stole Finn's purity, and not the other way around?

also i fixed the size of this image
>>63011
for smaller screens

>>63247
yeah but at the end.
there was a HUGE implication
i mean come on... he turned into fucking Avenger and went on a rampage in search to extract Vengeance on Penny.

>>63249
the only thing I remember about that part is that penny inexplicably has a 12-gauge shotgun in her tent

>>63250
bullshit! i saw no such thing!