that was embarassingly unfunny

>>32688
So's your face

>>32688
this.

rainer wolfcastle wrote this comic. it has jokes.

Hatas gon hate.

Commencing Dump.

Not putting these in any particular order.

I think this pic was supposed to be an illustrated depiction of how Atrocitus would always be yelling at the "studio audeince" whenever there was a laugh track.

So the Fleeze has parents now. How shall it be worked into Murder Burger?

It won't, hopefully.
But if we must, it won't be some gay sappy bullshit like in the comics.
It'll be the typical sitcom scenario where the character's parents are visiting and the character is all anxious and pissed off because they hate their parents

Gonna start copypasting most of the material from the old thread in here.
Might be a bit jumbled, a bit of it was itself copied from another thread.
(Note, I am going to continue dumping images as well, so the images will most likely have nothing to do with the content posted)

ORIGINAL POST:

Hey /co/, me and some friends are contemplating on starting a webcomic, and we need to think of material. I know that some wise anons here thought up Murder Burger and there was talks about how awesome a Larfleeze/Atrocitus sitcom would be, and though I could just steal the idea with no worries due to anonimity, /co/ is too nice to take advantage of.
So, if no one minds could we use Murder Burger/related ideas for this webcomic?(if we actually work up the initiative to get it started ect.)

Needless to say, I never did work up the initiative to start it.

"Man, I fucking want a Lantern sitcom soo bad.
Lantern corps in everyday situations.
Larfleeze and Atrocitus would be the primary focus, with the rest of the lanterns would be supporting characters, good for an occasional laugh."


"Naturally.
It could follow this basic format:
Larfleeze is a greedy prick
Atrocitus get's pissed
Saint Walker gives the typical "Oh you guys"
Atrocitus punches Walker
Guy laughs
It would never get old."


"Just as long as it's funny and their Lantern Uniforms are seen under their real clothes, and they're like in a very small apartment in the middle of the Bronx!"


"Well, aside fom Atrocitus, who has to wear his Murder Burger uniform and Saint Walker who might wear a poncho or some hippy shit, no one else would wear regular clothes. Larfleeze wouldn't have a job, and he'd just mooch of Atrocitus. Pehaps Sinestro would be the manager at a rival food chain. I could see him in a tie..."


"That would work great.
Then an arc where Larfleeze has to GET A JOB DUN DUN DUUNNN to keep all of his stuff for a Crazy Tweest!"


"Sinestro could be have a classy as fuck restaurant and comes around to troll. Meanwhile, Mongul is trying to buy him out of the company.

Dammit /co/, you've got me seriously thinking about this."


"Also the super of their apartment who asks for rent is one of the guardians, who is a real dick. And Hal is the annoying guy who lives above them that's always really really loud."


" Oh and my final contribution to this idea: The leader of the Indigo Tribe is that one annoying lady the always goes through the drive through that no one can ever understand."

"Sinestro is the guy that owns the fast food joint across the street.

Yellow castle.
It has the strictest menu ever, all meat marinated in orphan fear."


""WHATDYAWANT LADY?"
"click clack click click click"
"MOTHER FUCK DAMMIT GET OUT OF MY FUCKING DRIVETHRU""


"Entire arc on Larfleeze trying multiple times to break into different houses of Blue Lanterns trying to find their rings."


"Episode Ideas?

Sinestro Hires Larlfleeze to steal the recipe for Murder Burgers. Despite the Red Lanterns efforts he succeeds, Sinestro is triumphant.

"Now just give me the recipe Larlfleeze."
"What?"
"The recipe, I paid you to get it."
"No. Its mine now."

Atrocitus [conclusion of 80s cartoon style] AHAHAHAAHAHAAHAH-NOW GET THE FUCK OUT OF MY STORE!"


" The way I figure this is, all of thse ideas need to get a drawfag treatment, and /co/ can collectively write and draw this webcomic."


"Larfleeze: I'm taking the TV to my room ok?
Hal: Well, actually I was planning on watching something toni
Larfleeze: I'm taking it, its mine now.
*canned laughter*"


""Would you care for a sample, sir?"
"I'll take it."
"Take just one, sir"
"ITS MINE, ALL MINE"
"Scene with Larfleeze wrestling with some grocer.""


"-Group is eating dinner-

Saint Walker: This salad is grea-
Atrocitus: SHUT UP AND EAT YOUR STEAK
*canned laughter*
Atrocitus: SHUT THE FUCK UP
*Atrocitus breathes heavily, clutching his knife and fork tight in his fists*
Hal: Larfleeze did you eat the cat?
Larfleeze: No.
*a cats leg hangs from his mouth, he sucks it in like a noodle*
*canned laughter*
Atrocitus: SHUT UP! SHUT THE FUCK UP!
*He vomits blood over the audience*"


"Here's another idea, I hope you like it:

Remember that incident about the lady who burned herself with the coffee and sued McDonalds? An entire episode, maybe a two-parter just around that.

They have to argue in front of the Guardians of Oa. The Litigants have their legal expenses paid for by the Foundation for Safer Restaurants (which has it's entire funds in the form of an endowment from Yellow Castle).

An obvious Stand-In for She-Hulk is Attrocitus's Lawyer, but not enough for copyright to be an issue.

"DOES SOMETHING LIKE THIS ALWAYS FUCKING HAPPEN WHEN SOMEONE TRIES TO SAY YOUR NAME?"
"You should see what it's like getting dressed in the morning."

Attrocitus is naturally, the least sympathetic defendant EVER."

"Larfleeze needs to get a job...

I found the perfect ending to the episode. Someone gives him an idea to sell some of the watches and jewelry he's stolen.

So he is wearing the "merchant" trench and says
"wanna buy a watch"?
"Yeah sure"
"I got a bunch of em, Ten bucks" *pulls up his sleeve to reveal watches*
"ok" *pulls out ten bucks*
"MINE!"

Then he does it to atrocitus:
"Wanna buy a watch?"
"That's my coat"
"Ten bucks, got a large selection"
"That's my watch."
"So you gonna buy one or what?""


"That would still imply giving up the couch. He should be a garbage man. "I like my job. They pay me money to take things."
The stuff never reaches the dump."


"More Guy Gardner! He should order several pizzas sent to Atrocitus. And Larfleeze shows up and says he'll take care of it--and steals Atrocitus's wallet to pay for it. And just kills the pizza boy anyway. Cue blood vomit.

I still like Rage Burger better than Murder Burger, though. Can't we pull a Metalocalypse and have one be the comic name and one be the actual restaurant name?"


"Combine these two. but make Larfleeze Oliver.

"Please sir, can i have some more."
Atrocitus: No
"I won't ask again" *takes it from Atro*
A: RAAAAGE!!! VOMITS BLOOD
Larfleeze tries to take the vomit. Hands melt. "Hmm I seem to have found a difficulty""


" Larfleeze randomly comes into ownership of a limo. When Atroc tries to find out how he got it, he sees Larfleeze with a construct of a limo driver driving him through the drive thru in Rage Burger."


"There's need be an episode with a health inspector or food critic that goes to Murder Burger and Sinestro's restraurant (Fear Fries?) .

Of course Sinestro instills fear/Parallax in the inspector/critic to give him a good rating and shut down the Murder Burger.
Then Larfleeze comes in to save the day somehow because Murder Burger is his favourite.
Atrocitus is raging the fuck out throughout the episode.

Critic/inspector could be Guy."


"after sinestro fails, Larfleeze shows up at the end of the episode in a fake mustache & sombrero and introduces himself to Atrocitus as señor Healtho inspectoro"


"Some more good construct ideas would be great.
Larfleeze is walking a construct dog.
Atroc walks to Larfleeze and yells "WHOS DOG DID YOU KILL THIS TIME?"
And something else happens."


" Show the kitchen of Sinestro's rival restaurant run by Qwardians who are getting whipped and yelled at by Arkillo."


"Episode idea:
Hal comes to Murder Burger for lunch
Hal: Say, Atro, what's the secret of your meat?
Atrocitus: WE NEVER TELL AT MURDER BURGER! RAAAAARRRRL! Plus... you don't wanna know.

Enter Black Hand.
BH: Delivery Mr. Atrocitus!
He's standing next to what is clearly a casket."


"oh shit, that's perfect.
At the Maccas I work at, food for cop's is free.

So Guy's constantly stopping by, flashing his badge and grabbing free food (even off duty).

Seeing the same cop several times in a night pisses me off, I can imagine how Atrocitus would feel having to hand out free food."


"Oh, and for one episode Mongul takes over Yellow Castle, and is actually competent and gets customers, so Attrocitus and Larlfleeze (who is mad that he can't take people's money because MONGUL has it) figure out a way to get Sinestro back."




It should have a title along the lines of "Atrocitus n' Larfleeze", except on the title card, Larfleeze has X'd it out and written MINE, and then Atrocitus is saying "HEY, FUCK YOBLAAAAAARRRRHHHGGG"



"Now imagine if that Cop was GUY GARDNER."
"And this pisses Larfleeze off because he's never given free food."
"Thus has Larfleeze either dressing like a cop or ducking under the counter as he is using a construct of a cop to try to get food."


"Customer: "Can I get some ketchup"
Atrocitus: *Gives one packet* "HERE."
Customer: "Um, could I have some more?"
Atrocitus: *Vomits acid blood on customer* "AAARGH! HERE'S YOUR FUCKING KETCHUP!""


"Oh! Idea! IDEA!

Murder Burger's having some sort of promotion where the first 50 people to order a hamburger get TWO instead of just one.

So Larfleeze sends his construct corps over to make sure he gets all 50 spots.

But when he gets there, Guy's there ahead of him and he's going to take the first one!

So Larfleeze has to come up with a way to get Guy to move. And Guy doesn't even want the second burger, he's just seeing what he can get out of Larfleeze.

Ends with such a commotion being made that Atrocitus gets so mad he cancels the entire promotion."

new content dump which deals with events that are currently current.

>>45106

Saint Walker isn't catching any breaks.

Dammit, Shon.

This is mixed in with the rest of them.

Razer is the Squidward of the Murder Burger.

seems Razer has been informed of Larfleeze's antics.

Razer never catches a break.

New employees always getting shat on and all.

and Aya is a waitress at Guy's Warriors bar.

I have to say.
I don't like the constant rewrites by the people that werent around for the original.

>>45341
people are doing re-writes? Seriously?

All I've seen so far in the way of new content are add-ons to include characters from GL: TAS though.

>>45341

If I was you, I'd be glad people gave a crap about my work to make rewrites.

>>45446
>>45346
>>45341
rewrites mean people care and your ideas have merit but lack something in execution

taking rewrites personally means you'll never work as a writer