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>>130133 Yeah, it's not set in any existing superhero universe, but I have an ongoing story serial about two siblings (one of whom is named Alex, in a deliberate nod towards the Pack) who discover that they get powers from acts of unprotected incest (at the start, they've been experimenting for a while but never under the conditions that would allow them to discover their powers. How that side of their relationship grew is developed gradually through flashbacks), and decide to become superheroes. I don't claim to be a great writer, but it's fun for me and some people seem to enjoy it.
The first part (currently out of 5) is at http://www.asstr.org/~AnonyMPC/RelativelyPowered001.html if you're interested (it's also mirrored on hentai-foundry if you prefer there)
>>130110 It does get a little purpley at times... of course, I tend to think mine's the opposite, too plain, so maybe I'm not one to talk, and I can see a little what the other anon about the characters seeming to be obsessed with "strength", with the comments of wanting to be dominated by him and considering other boys eunuchs and weaklings feels like it speaks to your own perception of the world, which is great, but it doesn't really match how I personally see the characters. Of course, in the end, its your story to tell.
The only other thing I'd suggest is that you do a lot of 'telling' why Julie loves Alex, when ideally you'd be showing her reacting to these qualities as they appear. I make the same mistake a lot, but when I do it, I do it from a first-person perspective, so you can excuse it as the person telling the story... when it's done third-person, it seems to stand out more, and in general gives the feeling of skipping over stuff rather than living through it. This being the first chapter, that may have been your intention, though... have the backstory appear but get it out of the way quickly so you can deal with the emotions of the main plot in a more visceral, live way.
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